I'll just point out the following from the fanfic rules:Nice fanfiction.
So basically - extend the review! Say why you liked it or thought it nice and so forth, so it doesn't come off as a generic review.11) The following posts are considered SPAM and will get you into trouble with the Mods:
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That 'Asked' should be 'asked' - no need for the capital there.“What are you waiting for?” Asked Sam.
Several minutes later Matt and Sam stood in front of the doors
Several minutes later, Sam and Matt sat down at a table
A few minutes later Sara came over.
These were all in the opening part of the story and hence seemed to be rather repetitive - you could try changing one or two of them, I suggest.They got there several minutes later and grabbed three chairs
This sounded a little bit odd given the structure of the sentence (mainly with the interruption to tell us he was 'a graying stereotypical scientist-professor' before going back to the sentence - it seems a bit oddly worded too). Maybe remove the bit mentioned and make a new sentence out of it to describe some more about this professor so we have more of an idea what made him look so stereotypical?Then they settled in and listened to the teacher, a graying, stereotypical scientist-professor, speak.
'Of' doesn't need the capitalisation there.only got halfway through the chapter before the harsh Brrrrring! Of the bell sent all the students hurrying to their next classes.