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Hey, this is my first time so please tell me what you think
Well, I decided to make the first chapter longer cause m mom usually throws away anything that i write on
~~~~~~Chapter 1:The Journey Begins~~~~~~
Silver Luire gazed out her window as the Sun began to rise above the horizon. Her silver hair lay around her shoulders and glowed orange as she absentmindedly patted her Umbreon nestled in her lap. Her Espeon was curled up on her pillow beside her as the Sun cast its warm glow on her silk tank top and matching silk skirt. Her Umbreon began to open its eyes and raised his head to look at his trainer.
Silver gazed at the horizon and stood up. She walked over to her closet in to her rented room and grabbed her pack. It was filled with antidotes, potions, pokeballs, and extra clothing for her. The Espeon raised its head sleepily and mewed at the sight of her trainer.
"Come on Espeon, Umbreon. We need to go." said Silver. Espeon jumped off the bed and landed gracefully beside Umbreon.
<Where will we head to first?> the Espeon quietly asked her trainer.
"To Cerulean, I promised Bill I would visit him." Silver replied to her pokemon.
Silver could talk to any pokemon, it was an amazing ability she posessed, though only pokemon knew it. Silver had tried her best to find out how she got these powers by asking Espeon and Umbreon who refused to answer her demand. All Silver knew was that she was found in the deepest most inner chamber in the Whirl Islands by Bill the Pokemaniac. Her injuries were so serious, she was sent to Kanto for medical treatment. And here she stood after 2 years of recovering, she was ready to find out who she really was. Bill still talked to her and had told her that Espeon and Unbreon were found defending her and took some convincing to let him carry her to the Poke Center.
Twenty minutes later, Silver, Umbreon and Espeon stepped into the cool misty air. Silver began to head East toward the gate to Saffron after she bought some items at the Celadon Mall. Silver passed the Celadon Mansion and decided to give the nice old lady a visit before she left. The old lady looked up and smiled pleasently as Silver entered the mansion.
"Ah, so you are leaving my child?" the nice lady questioned.
Silver nodded and smiled at the lady. She had always loved the lady because she was her only company who visited other than Bill.
<Yo, its the old lady! What's up?> Umbreon pranced.
Silver raised an eyebrow at Umbreon as Espeon sweatdropped. The old lady shuffled inside her bag until she brought out a yellow and black pokeball.
"Here, Dearie. Remember the Lapras I told you my parents gave me when I was young? Well, this is her child. And, to make her more special ..." the old lady said as she released the pokemon who materialized into a beautiful purple Lapras. Silver eyes widened in the site of the shiny pokemon.
"... she's a shiny." the lady pleasantly told her. " She will help you make it to the Whirl Islands and she will obey you nomatter what."
The old lady recalled the Lapras and handed Silver the pokeball and Umbreon began to prance around in joy.
<Whoohoo! The old hag is worth somehting after all!> he said as Espeon bonked him on the head and sweatdropped.
Sheessh, he's never seroius.thought Espeon.
Leaving the mansion in high spirits later that afternoon, Silver and her pokemon left Celadon to come across a large grass feild, only to end up in battle with a camper trainer. The trainer summoned a Cacturne and Silver decided to use Umbreon for the battle.
"Cacturne, use Pin Missile" the trainer ordered his pokemon.
"Umbreon, use Quick Attack to avoid his Pin Missile." Silver told Umbreon.
<Yeah, time to lose you overgrown cactus! Take this!> Umbreon mocked as he hit the
Cacturne.
"Umbreon, stop fooling around and use Pursuit!" Silver yelled.
<Uhhuuhhu, it's my birthday, uhuh, it's my birth ...> Umbreon chanted without hearing Silver until he was interrupted by the Cacturne using Faint Attack.
"Umbreon, use Moonlight!" Silver told him as Espeon shaked her head in embarrasment
beside her.
A moon appeared before Umbreon and glitter fell from it onto Umbreon healing all his wounds to nothing more than a scratch. Umbreon then charged and performed the Iron Tail that Silver ordered. Then the Cacturne lay still, defeated by Umbreon.
<Yeah! I won! I won! I won! Uhhuh, uhhuh, uhhuh!> Umbreon chanted happily as Espeon and Silver sweatdropped.
<Yes, the group idoit managed to accomplish something other than eating, talking, and sleeping.> Espeon critisized.
<Uhhuh, I am an idoit, uhhuh, uhh ...> Umbreon continued to cant until he stopped and placed his black paw under his chin, trying with his slow mind to realize what Espeon said as Silver Sweatdropped again.
Later that day, as Silver, Espeon, and the thinking Umbreon began to go to sleep, Umbreon suddenly hit Espeon on the head.
Rubbing her head with her purple paw, she looked at him and asked<What was that for?>
<You insulted me earlier.> answered Umbreon as Espeon sweatdropped at his timing to
realize what she meant.
Silver chuckled and told them to sleep for they would be arriving in Saffron the next day.
The Sun shone dimly through the green canopy of trees to where Silver and her two pokemon lay. Silver's eyes opened to first pay attention to the collars that Umbreon and Espeon wore. They were made specially for the two pokemon, Espeon's being purple with a red diamond on the front plus a purple tag with a message inscribed in red letters, Umbreon's was black with golden rings and had a black tag that contained, in golden letters, the same message as Espeon's, "To my dear ,Silver Luire". It was odd that even though it was an important part of where Silver came from, she rarely noticed it. After waking up Espeon, and trying very hard to wake up Umbreon, the group ate and cleaned up camp to leave for Saffron. After defeating many trainer's which strecthed the time till their arrival at Saffron, they finally reached the guardhouse to Saffron. Saffron wasn't very bustling and many men wearing black uniforms with large red 'R's on the front were in alleyways everywhere.
Well, I decided to make the first chapter longer cause m mom usually throws away anything that i write on
~~~~~~Chapter 1:The Journey Begins~~~~~~
Silver Luire gazed out her window as the Sun began to rise above the horizon. Her silver hair lay around her shoulders and glowed orange as she absentmindedly patted her Umbreon nestled in her lap. Her Espeon was curled up on her pillow beside her as the Sun cast its warm glow on her silk tank top and matching silk skirt. Her Umbreon began to open its eyes and raised his head to look at his trainer.
She looked down at him and smiled, "Today, we leave for our journey Umbreon. Today we will start to find out who I am."
Silver gazed at the horizon and stood up. She walked over to her closet in to her rented room and grabbed her pack. It was filled with antidotes, potions, pokeballs, and extra clothing for her. The Espeon raised its head sleepily and mewed at the sight of her trainer.
"Come on Espeon, Umbreon. We need to go." said Silver. Espeon jumped off the bed and landed gracefully beside Umbreon.
<Where will we head to first?> the Espeon quietly asked her trainer.
"To Cerulean, I promised Bill I would visit him." Silver replied to her pokemon.
Silver could talk to any pokemon, it was an amazing ability she posessed, though only pokemon knew it. Silver had tried her best to find out how she got these powers by asking Espeon and Umbreon who refused to answer her demand. All Silver knew was that she was found in the deepest most inner chamber in the Whirl Islands by Bill the Pokemaniac. Her injuries were so serious, she was sent to Kanto for medical treatment. And here she stood after 2 years of recovering, she was ready to find out who she really was. Bill still talked to her and had told her that Espeon and Unbreon were found defending her and took some convincing to let him carry her to the Poke Center.
Twenty minutes later, Silver, Umbreon and Espeon stepped into the cool misty air. Silver began to head East toward the gate to Saffron after she bought some items at the Celadon Mall. Silver passed the Celadon Mansion and decided to give the nice old lady a visit before she left. The old lady looked up and smiled pleasently as Silver entered the mansion.
"Ah, so you are leaving my child?" the nice lady questioned.
Silver nodded and smiled at the lady. She had always loved the lady because she was her only company who visited other than Bill.
<Yo, its the old lady! What's up?> Umbreon pranced.
Silver raised an eyebrow at Umbreon as Espeon sweatdropped. The old lady shuffled inside her bag until she brought out a yellow and black pokeball.
"Here, Dearie. Remember the Lapras I told you my parents gave me when I was young? Well, this is her child. And, to make her more special ..." the old lady said as she released the pokemon who materialized into a beautiful purple Lapras. Silver eyes widened in the site of the shiny pokemon.
"... she's a shiny." the lady pleasantly told her. " She will help you make it to the Whirl Islands and she will obey you nomatter what."
The old lady recalled the Lapras and handed Silver the pokeball and Umbreon began to prance around in joy.
<Whoohoo! The old hag is worth somehting after all!> he said as Espeon bonked him on the head and sweatdropped.
Sheessh, he's never seroius.thought Espeon.
Leaving the mansion in high spirits later that afternoon, Silver and her pokemon left Celadon to come across a large grass feild, only to end up in battle with a camper trainer. The trainer summoned a Cacturne and Silver decided to use Umbreon for the battle.
"Cacturne, use Pin Missile" the trainer ordered his pokemon.
"Umbreon, use Quick Attack to avoid his Pin Missile." Silver told Umbreon.
<Yeah, time to lose you overgrown cactus! Take this!> Umbreon mocked as he hit the
Cacturne.
"Umbreon, stop fooling around and use Pursuit!" Silver yelled.
<Uhhuuhhu, it's my birthday, uhuh, it's my birth ...> Umbreon chanted without hearing Silver until he was interrupted by the Cacturne using Faint Attack.
"Umbreon, use Moonlight!" Silver told him as Espeon shaked her head in embarrasment
beside her.
A moon appeared before Umbreon and glitter fell from it onto Umbreon healing all his wounds to nothing more than a scratch. Umbreon then charged and performed the Iron Tail that Silver ordered. Then the Cacturne lay still, defeated by Umbreon.
<Yeah! I won! I won! I won! Uhhuh, uhhuh, uhhuh!> Umbreon chanted happily as Espeon and Silver sweatdropped.
<Yes, the group idoit managed to accomplish something other than eating, talking, and sleeping.> Espeon critisized.
<Uhhuh, I am an idoit, uhhuh, uhh ...> Umbreon continued to cant until he stopped and placed his black paw under his chin, trying with his slow mind to realize what Espeon said as Silver Sweatdropped again.
Later that day, as Silver, Espeon, and the thinking Umbreon began to go to sleep, Umbreon suddenly hit Espeon on the head.
Rubbing her head with her purple paw, she looked at him and asked<What was that for?>
<You insulted me earlier.> answered Umbreon as Espeon sweatdropped at his timing to
realize what she meant.
Silver chuckled and told them to sleep for they would be arriving in Saffron the next day.
The Sun shone dimly through the green canopy of trees to where Silver and her two pokemon lay. Silver's eyes opened to first pay attention to the collars that Umbreon and Espeon wore. They were made specially for the two pokemon, Espeon's being purple with a red diamond on the front plus a purple tag with a message inscribed in red letters, Umbreon's was black with golden rings and had a black tag that contained, in golden letters, the same message as Espeon's, "To my dear ,Silver Luire". It was odd that even though it was an important part of where Silver came from, she rarely noticed it. After waking up Espeon, and trying very hard to wake up Umbreon, the group ate and cleaned up camp to leave for Saffron. After defeating many trainer's which strecthed the time till their arrival at Saffron, they finally reached the guardhouse to Saffron. Saffron wasn't very bustling and many men wearing black uniforms with large red 'R's on the front were in alleyways everywhere.
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I like it a lot, 8.7/10 so far.