In the future, can you post regular size? I don’t care to squint at my computer. You should also run it through a spell check. I’m fine with the fangs stuck in his collar, but how he managed to rip off, clean out, and put on another pokemon’s claws is a bit of a stretch. Also the collar’s color is inconsistent, if you’re saying it’s now red instead of blue because it’s supposed to be blood stained, blood stain is more of a brown color. Ripped his brother’s head off, might be overkill as well, perhaps tore open his jugular would be more accurate. Of course, this RPG is open to all ages, so try not to be too graphic. Actually I’m surprised the police didn’t just put them all down on the spot given the circumstances, and that even if they didn’t that the collar wasn’t taken away to aid in his rehabilitation.
Okay, I fixed the text, made it less graphic, took away the collar and claws, and spell-checked it.
Mind you, the Pokemon who he was taking his prizes from were all dead. So even if it was difficult, he did it to show his strength.
Also, Bone is trying not to be violent anymore...but it would be wise if whoever adopted him kept him away from Saffron City. Really, he's going through healing.
If I need to fix anything else, I'll gladly oblige.