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1. You spelled "Urgent" wrong in the first episode.
2. You give no reason why Link, Fox, Marth, and Pikachu decided to jump down on the battlefield which is for some strange reason seems to be conveniently located in the outskirts of the mountains from the Mario series...
3. Why do the characters make unneeded random noises every panel? "YAK! URGH! ROFLDOGS"... * I added the last one*
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I would list more but I'm too lazy...
Just work on Plot building and a back-story... oh and some grammar.
1. You spelled "Urgent" wrong in the first episode.
2. You give no reason why Link, Fox, Marth, and Pikachu decided to jump down on the battlefield which is for some strange reason seems to be conveniently located in the outskirts of the mountains from the Mario series...
3. Why do the characters make unneeded random noises every panel? "YAK! URGH! ROFLDOGS"... * I added the last one*
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I would list more but I'm too lazy...
Just work on Plot building and a back-story... oh and some grammar.
dude, OmegaDragon just started one after you, and his first episode looks better than all of these. I suggest working more on backgrounds, grammar, spelling, getting sprites that match together (those just look horrible in the same COMIC, let alone the same PANEL), and removing your urge to use sound effects in every panel.
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Narutopie
Guest
Sorry about that, anyway i made another one
http://img134.imageshack.us/img134/4923/comic61vd.png
http://img134.imageshack.us/img134/4923/comic61vd.png
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Narutopie
Guest
pichu is pikachu's slave
Pikachu told him to find evil people to destroy marth and link
i made it up
i put it there, what goes goes
to make pikachu GOOD again
Pikachu told him to find evil people to destroy marth and link
i made it up
i put it there, what goes goes
to make pikachu GOOD again
... it's times like this I wish there was a ZERO STAR option (represented by a blank star-outline, so it can be seen, of course). look, just because comics are pictures doesn't mean they're meant for all action. you need to explain stuff that goes on IN the comic, instead of when people ask (which WILL happen when you don't). comics have SPEECH; they need DIALOGUE (di = two or more, as in people, logue = speech). without those, the comic's a bust. look, just 'cause I don't make comics doesn't mean I don't know how they work. people want more than just action. they want a plot. an endless battle scene doesn't cut it.
I suggest you stop where you are. practice at home - without showcasing it here - until you can make it look at LEAST as good as an average comic. then, show it to your friends; see if they can follow along without you telling them anything. if they can, show other people, just in case your friends are biased towards you. if they still can, THEN you're ready to make it here.
I suggest you stop where you are. practice at home - without showcasing it here - until you can make it look at LEAST as good as an average comic. then, show it to your friends; see if they can follow along without you telling them anything. if they can, show other people, just in case your friends are biased towards you. if they still can, THEN you're ready to make it here.
Whoa! Critics are not afraid to speak the truth! But anyways let me add in, I like the comic based on the fact that it's SSBM, but lets not get ahead of ourselves, The comics blury-ish which makes it look low quality, wheres the story line? Do you have a Prolouge or Intro! The Text bubbles SUCK! I'm sorry but it looks like you put text bubbles after everything was finished & was scared they would take up to much space. Just put the arrows, cuz Pikachus bubble blinds me & If thats marth, Then his text is fat and kinda hard to read, overal I'd give it a 2 out of five, but like NEO G said...ya gotta plan it out first!
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Narutopie
Guest
the story line is that pikachu is about to destroy every SSBM stage and people!
two words. MOREEFFFORT PLZ.Narutopie said:the story line is that pikachu is about to destroy every SSBM stage and people!
the comic shows absolutely no cause for anything, LEAST OF ALL that pikachu. work things out. don't do this on the spot. take the advice from my last post. you can NOT expect an audience for this the way it is.
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Narutopie
Guest
i had to edit the Pikachu running stances
so his eyes were red and he looked mad, same with walking i had to make him frown
Well in the next comic i will try to put more effort in
so his eyes were red and he looked mad, same with walking i had to make him frown
Well in the next comic i will try to put more effort in
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Narutopie
Guest
dude, people just use them free of charge
like i have a quote i made
3% of the comic makers give credit when using sprites, if you're one of the 97% who does not give credit put this in your signature!
nah, nah, i'm just fooling
yeah in meh next few comics...
like i have a quote i made
3% of the comic makers give credit when using sprites, if you're one of the 97% who does not give credit put this in your signature!
nah, nah, i'm just fooling
yeah in meh next few comics...
OmegaDragon
guess whos back?
Actually, the people that made most of the sprites your using asked to give credit when you use them.
IT'S BLURRY 'CAUSE IT'S TOO BIG FOR THE WINDOW. WILL PEOPLE PLEASE LEARN HOW THE RESIZE BUTTON WORKS??? hover your mouse over the pic, and click the button that appears in the lower-right corner. sheesh. and yeah. there's no excuse for not giving credit where credit is due.
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Narutopie
Guest
oh... i keep using jpg, i will use PNG next time
jigglyskitt
SNEAK ATTACK
this whole comic just really isn't very good. There is no sign of any backstory whatsoever, just one day Pikachu, Link, Fox, and Marth were at the battlefield for no reason, and Fox was all "OMG ENEMIES." there is hardly any dialogue, and it's hard to tell what the hell is going on. Try harder.