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Star Pokemon Episode 1: Attack of the Sith.

Morpher01

Bewear my power
Hello. Morpher here. For some reason, I wanted to make a Star Wars/Pokemon crossover. What are the odds, eh? It's based off Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic, which I seem to be obsessed with.

This might be rated PG-13, for violence, and some other things that I can't think of right now.

Here's the prologue.



Prologue:


In the years of the old Republic, an organization dedicated to good and peace, times were very hard. The Sith, another organization dedicated to evil and darkness, had weakened the Republic greatly during a bloody war that was still going on now.

There were very few ships left. One of the few that remained was floating past a backwater planet known as Taris.

The ship resembled a giant, metal Q-tip, with large, bladed appendages coming out the top and bottom of the ends. This ship was the Endar Spire, a ship carrying a crucial way to tip the tide of the war.

That way had a name. It's name was Bastila, and she was a female Light Side Jedi.

There were many soldiers on the ship, all of them dedicated to protecting Bastila. There were also several Jedi on board, a guarded escort for Bastila. Bastila was merely a Padawan, so it is hard to believe how one person, even a Jedi, could be so important.

The truth was, Bastila had a special gift that was rare, even among other Jedi. It was called Battle Meditation. If Bastila can concentrate hard enough, she can use this gift to give Republic soldiers courage, the strength to continue, even if outnumbered and outgunned. This also has an effect on the opposing side, making them lose their will to fight, become cowards.

Most Republic soldiers on the Endar Spire, however, were not ready. They were off in their own world, saying things like "mm-hmm" and "whatever" when asked something. To put in bluntly, they were daydreaming.

Despite the readiness, or lack thereof, of the soldiers, it is safe to assume that what happened next, nobody, not even the Jedi, was ready for.

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A sudden explosion on the Endar Spire's hull jarred many soldiers out of daydreams. They now remembered their duty, what they must do.

One of the few soldiers that did not daydream ran a warning through the portable communicators on every soldier.

"This is Carth Onasi," a male's voice said through many communicators. "The Sith are attacking the Endar Spire! Repeat: the Sith are attacking us!"

As if on cue, the door to the Endar Spire's docking bays burst open, and many men in golden, full-body armor with golden visors covering their faces marched out in single file.

The three Republic soldiers guarding the docking bays immediately snapped to attention. Each one pulled a red-and-white ball off his belt, then threw it.

"Go, Volbeat!" the first Republic solder cried.

A black, firefly-like creature with two antennea, a blue head, bug wings, stubby arms and legs, as well some sort of red neck ring appeared out of the first red/white ball.

"Go, Lapras!" cried the second Republic solder.

A blue, plesiosaur-like creature with a horn and what appeared to be a bumpy turtle shell on its back appeared from the second red/white ball.

"Go, Haunter!" cried the third and final Republic soldier.

A floating, devil-like head appeared along with a pair of clawed hands.

"Heh heh heh. Go, Metang!" cried one of the Sith soldiers.

A large, blue, metal creature that appeared to be a floating head with spikes on its back, two clawed metallic arms, and a pair of red eyes surrounded by blackness appeared, snapping its claws in a menacing fashion.

"Metang, use Shadow Storm! Show these Republic fools what it means to mess with the Sith!" cried the Sith soldier that had summoned the Metang.

The Metang obeyed, surrounding itself with black energy. It then spun around, creating a whirling mass of darkness. It then fired three black tornados at the Volbeat, Lapras, and Haunter that the Republic soldiers had summoned. Each one hit with devastating power, fainting each of the creatures.

The Sith soldier then pulled out a blaster, then shot each of the Republic soldiers, killing them all.

"Pathetic" the Sith soldier said as he put his gun away. "Come on, boys, let's go. The sooner we get Bastila, the sooner we get off duty."

"Yes, sir!" each of the other Sith soldiers responded.

They each went off, intent on obchieving their goal. That, and getting off duty.

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Well, what do you think?
 

~*Myuu the Ryuu*~

The epitome of grace
i dunno... seems good, except it's a tad too short...
 
I think the description is decent. I only noticed one punctuation error throughout the whole thing. I think this one fic that could make it. Why? Read this: http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?t=100832

You'll see why yours is better. PMMB was just too ignorant to fix pointed out errors, recognize crit, and even have his fic make sense. I mean, come on, what particular reason did the Champion have to cut off the Rocket Grunt's hand and pin it to a tree? He just went on with his fic, prolly thinking 'I'll be popular!' He didn't even know what he wrote, he just kept making up excuses for Renegade's pummelings.

Anyways, back to the Prolouge. It was a little short, I admit, and a little bit rushed as well. Fix that. Add more description. About Shadow Storm... it's more of a purple and black twister with intense gales. Where are the lightsabers? Thiss iz nawt cumpleet withoute litesaburs!lol1!111!!


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Do continue. Unless I see this sucks, you have my encouragement. C ya.
 

Seijiro Mafuné

Diogomainardista!
Okay... it was fine, but description was a bit lacking. Funny, though, even if Sith would be more serious than that. As KotOR fan, I like it.

Is it gonna star Revan and co.?
 

Morpher01

Bewear my power
XD001emerald: Short, yes, but does anyone here believe the expression "short but sweet"? That's what this is. Chapter 1's gonna be longer.

Dark Knight Jorro: Yeah, I saw that. Why in the world was PMMB giving a Mew a lightsaber, when it clearly doesn't need one? And how did the guy owning Mew get Mew in the first place?

But, yeah, it was short. Probably rushed, too. Also, don't worry, lightsabers will appear here in chapter 1. Yeah, Shadow Storm looks like a purple-and-black tornado, not just black.

Seijiro Mafuné: I just found out something....I could copy/paste your name, and it would keep the accent mark! Yippeee!

Anyway, yes it was short, and, yes, it did lack in description. Description isn't one of my best areas, though. Unfortunately, this won't involve Revan, but it will involve the other ones that Revan teams up with (HK-47, Juhani, etc.).

Chapter 1 will come in a couple of days, mainly because my brain's too drained to think of anything.
 
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