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Prologue
steelix and crystal onix were in a large grey cave. Crystal onix's shining body was like a light in the darkness. Steelix looked at his mate. She was so beautiful, a crystaline body made of diamond. It reflected any tiny bit of light that entered the cave. Steelix was almost as handsome. He a had pure silver body, dull grey. Some parts of his agile body were mercury, and the large metallic rocks that made up his body were up to 1 metre each! And there were ten rocks currently making up his body.
"How are the eggs?" he asked his mate. Crystal onix looked at him with love and at the shinning crystal eggs that lay beside her.
"They're fine" she replied. "oh, look, this one is hatching!"
Steelix, got up and looked, indeed, a tiny onix came out. It carcked the crystal egg open and slithered out. From top to middle, he was stone, bottom wards, he was crystal. He was an interesting combination. the rocks that formed the upper part of his body were harder than diamond and yet so silky while the crystals thet made up the bottom half were rough and as strong as the rock on a normal onix. It looked so precious, the way it slithered so delicately. Steelix smiled. "My child".
Then, out of nowhere, Giovanni came in, team rocket helicopters were everywhere. He laughed evilly as he's persian purred with success. Giovanni was a tall, well dressed man with short dark brown hair in a nice french cut.
"Run with the eggs, i'll protect you!" steelix yelled and did a rock throw at Giovanni. He simply laughed.
"Foolish creature," he spat on the ground in disgust, the rocks simply were destroyed by a lazer from one of the helicopters. They tied the steelix up in electrical wire that had spikes.
"Where is the female!?" Giovanni swore angrily, Jessie, a long purple haired girl, and James, a short purple haired boy, came out of a helicopter.
"sir, we'll get them for you!" and ran down the cave. Crystal onix was moving as fast as she could to a nearby pond, the eggs were in her curled tail. Jessie and James stepped in her way.
"Go dustox, sleeping power!" Jessie screamed like a blood thirsty maniac. Crystal onix was desperate, then her new born half-breed baby came to her rescue and did a dooms day ray! Jessie, James and dustox were blasted back and became unconscious. But the ray also destryed all the other eggs but one...
Crystal onix was captured by te helicopters (Giovanni didnt trust Jessie and James) but the half-breed and the egg rolled into the water unnoticed...
okay, please comment on this to help me improve, please don't be too harsh and also, gimme ideas fro the 1st chapter. thanx y'all who comment.
Prologue
steelix and crystal onix were in a large grey cave. Crystal onix's shining body was like a light in the darkness. Steelix looked at his mate. She was so beautiful, a crystaline body made of diamond. It reflected any tiny bit of light that entered the cave. Steelix was almost as handsome. He a had pure silver body, dull grey. Some parts of his agile body were mercury, and the large metallic rocks that made up his body were up to 1 metre each! And there were ten rocks currently making up his body.
"How are the eggs?" he asked his mate. Crystal onix looked at him with love and at the shinning crystal eggs that lay beside her.
"They're fine" she replied. "oh, look, this one is hatching!"
Steelix, got up and looked, indeed, a tiny onix came out. It carcked the crystal egg open and slithered out. From top to middle, he was stone, bottom wards, he was crystal. He was an interesting combination. the rocks that formed the upper part of his body were harder than diamond and yet so silky while the crystals thet made up the bottom half were rough and as strong as the rock on a normal onix. It looked so precious, the way it slithered so delicately. Steelix smiled. "My child".
Then, out of nowhere, Giovanni came in, team rocket helicopters were everywhere. He laughed evilly as he's persian purred with success. Giovanni was a tall, well dressed man with short dark brown hair in a nice french cut.
"Run with the eggs, i'll protect you!" steelix yelled and did a rock throw at Giovanni. He simply laughed.
"Foolish creature," he spat on the ground in disgust, the rocks simply were destroyed by a lazer from one of the helicopters. They tied the steelix up in electrical wire that had spikes.
"Where is the female!?" Giovanni swore angrily, Jessie, a long purple haired girl, and James, a short purple haired boy, came out of a helicopter.
"sir, we'll get them for you!" and ran down the cave. Crystal onix was moving as fast as she could to a nearby pond, the eggs were in her curled tail. Jessie and James stepped in her way.
"Go dustox, sleeping power!" Jessie screamed like a blood thirsty maniac. Crystal onix was desperate, then her new born half-breed baby came to her rescue and did a dooms day ray! Jessie, James and dustox were blasted back and became unconscious. But the ray also destryed all the other eggs but one...
Crystal onix was captured by te helicopters (Giovanni didnt trust Jessie and James) but the half-breed and the egg rolled into the water unnoticed...
okay, please comment on this to help me improve, please don't be too harsh and also, gimme ideas fro the 1st chapter. thanx y'all who comment.
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