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Super Smash Bros. Recreation

Should I add Ditto and Toadette cast members?

  • Yes, both!

    Votes: 3 37.5%

  • Just Toadette!

    Votes: 3 37.5%

  • Just Ditto!

    Votes: 1 12.5%

  • Neither!

    Votes: 1 12.5%
  • Total voters
    8
  • Poll closed .
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blueaquadog

Elect./water master
This is my third comic. My others ended due to laziness but this one I think I have a feeling I'll keep up with. I tried hard so tell me what you think. I'll take constructive criticism and praise but none of "Your comic sucks" or "Your comic rocks!". I want more detail than that. Also, none of this "lik OMG, I luv ur comix." I just plain out hate that. Well enjoy my story on Super Smash Bros. Recreation.

Comic Episodes
{001} http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v609/blueaquadog/SSMBintro.png
{002} http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v609/blueaquadog/SSBM2.png
{003} http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v609/blueaquadog/SSMB3.png
Fan Stuff
None
Credit;
Sprites: http://sprites.fireball20xl.com/NSA/HTML/Other/ssbm.htm
Pichu:Trick-or-treater
Bowser:Zach "Zin" Furr
Zelda: Semi Juggalo
Nana: Giga-Guy
Mushroom Castle:Cary "Omega" Frank
Wispy Woods:Jack
M&L Battlefield: Joshr 691
Master Hand:Kenju The Echinda
Emoctions:Zach "Zin" Furr
Peach:ZinDinTimeYum
Fox and Falco:qwerty1080
Yoshi:ZinDinTimeYum
 
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blueguy

used Metronome!
Very very cool! I'd love to see where this goes.

You really need to brush up on your grammar though in places. Though it's not terrible, there are quite a few minor errors.
 
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Fatal

Banned
I am looking to see the rest! But like blueguy said, a few spelling errors...
 
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Davis the Gamer

Banned
Hmm..well...
Most of the sprites were customly made. I think you should give presist credit.
TUP. Text under pannels. Makes this more of a Sprite Fic. which is bad. Use Text Bubbles. They don't have to be all fancy, but they are better than TUP.
Some small Spelling & grammar problems.
Not original, but if you fix some of the problems, it can be good.
 
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blueaquadog

Elect./water master
blueguy said:
Very very cool! I'd love to see where this goes.

You really need to brush up on your grammar though in places. Though it's not terrible, there are quite a few minor errors.
Click to expand...

Thanks, I'll try to fix them in the next comic.

clammyshazam! said:
I am looking to see the rest! But like blueguy said, a few spelling errors...
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Thanks, I'm glad you like it.

David PKMN Master said:
Hmm..well...
Most of the sprites were customly made. I think you should give presist credit.
TUP. Text under pannels. Makes this more of a Sprite Fic. which is bad. Use Text Bubbles. They don't have to be all fancy, but they are better than TUP.
Some small Spelling & grammar problems.
Not original, but if you fix some of the problems, it can be good.
Click to expand...

I think I'll give the credit to each individual soon. As for the speech bubbles, I'll try it in the next comic. If it looks bad I won't use them again. (I'll let you guys decide this.) For the grammar, next time I'll pay closer attention.

I'll have the next comic in tomorrow. Thanks for the reviews. Also, if you could, please rate it 1 to 10.
 
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Davis the Gamer

Banned
as of now, 6/10.
 
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blueaquadog

Elect./water master
Davis PKMN Master said:
as of now, 6/10.
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Thanks, I hope it goes higher by times go by. Also, its nice to see that you didn't leave. If anyone flames anyone here I'll stop it.
 
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Beco

Beware...
Did not see this comic before :p
Now lets see...
It's ok. Sprites look really good. No textbubbles but the heads in the textboxes are ok. Want to see more of this.
 
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blueaquadog

Elect./water master
Beco said:
Did not see this comic before :p
Now lets see...
It's ok. Sprites look really good. No textbubbles but the heads in the textboxes are ok. Want to see more of this.
Click to expand...

I had a hard time with text bubbles and it was too hard so I just deleted it and I'm going to create it again later. It will be done before tonight. I will also do bios on the four I featured and a couple side characters. (King Boo, Toadette, and etc.)
 
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Quackers

Draw.
Ok, this comic isn't to bad, but it has some downfalls.

First, TUP text is ok, but I noticed some things wrong with it along with my preferation to speech bubbles. If your going to use the TUP text, make sure that you put your characters face in the same place each time. I noticed that in first pannel, second row, Pichu's head was nowhere near the lind to show the end of the pannel. On the same row, final pannel, his head was overlapping with the edge of the text box. I would suggest making a sheet with each character's head in the same place on the text box to paste on the side so they will all match up nicely. On the last pannel, last row, when Princess Zelda is speeking, the bottom lind of her box doesn't line up the whole way.

For grammer, its not to bad, but some things stuck out. On the second line, first pannel, it should be, "Don't froget that your also the dumbest one," instead of, "Don't froget your the dumbest one also." A hold is also two words, not one, like it was in the final pannel. You should also varry your sentences more. Most of the intros were, "I'm _____, the _____ one," with "Don't froget, your _____ _____ _____ _____."

This comic has the potential to become good, so I'll wait to see where this goes and will give a crit like this every 10 comics if you would like.
 
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blueaquadog

Elect./water master
Thank you. That was very helpful. I did notice they were the same and I hated that part ecspecially. I would like it if you did this every ten comics. I will focus on the placement pn the head images from now on. I know I said I would try the speach bubbles but I mess them up badly.
 
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Quackers

Draw.
Hey, its what I do. Follow my advice and this could go from a ok comic to a great comic.
 
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Beco

Beware...
It's a bit confusing. I don't really see what happened...
I hope the next one's better.
Good luck
 
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blueaquadog

Elect./water master
Toadette thoought that Toadsworth was being kidnapped but Toadsworth, King Boo, and the two Boos were trick or treaters. Then Zelda and Bowser went to trick them and it ended up that it wasn't Bowser but Giga Bowser. (Two different characters.)
 
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Beco

Beware...
Oh, now I get it :p
It's ok, maybe it's just to difficult to show in a comic, (or I'm just stupid :p)
Anyway, can't wait for the next one...
 
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blueaquadog

Elect./water master
THe next one will be later today or tomorrow.

Edit: Also, on the poll, if a new cast member comes they won't fight they just stand there and encourage. Toadette will always be there but if she loses then she won't be in every comic.
 
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blueaquadog

Elect./water master
Sorry for double posting. (I deleted the post before this.) I'm just posting to say I was busy today so I'll make the comic tomorrow. It will feature speech bubbles and be about the poll. Also I'm making Trainer eyes cards for the cast. Ditto and Toadette will be included.
 
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Nick Mckenzie

dddddddddddddddddddd
Kinda weird.
1. Not really any plot.
2. I dunno...
This is pretty good. Not much to talk about.
 
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