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Tainted Perfection - Stepping out of the comfort zone

Lady Myuu

Damsel mostly Stressed.
NOTE: This fic idea and theories are written out of pure fun. They do not always reflect my real beliefs in life, death and a higher power. I write things like this for fun and not all of it reflects my personal opinion. Keep an open mind people… I’m going to dive deep.


I am stepping outside of my usually writing comfort zone and wanting to dive deeper....

Well, I’ve been thinking lately, and looking at my fic’s I have running around making a mess as usual. Simple stories with simple goals to them, as awhile back I told myself I should try and aim for completing a simple fic instead of writing a huge chaptered one which would rarely get updated and as the story goes along it changes as it goes.

I wanted to write stories that I had a set outline either in my head or on paper. Something I could do easily within a year or so. Course its taking me awhile just to finish one simple five chaptered story (which I found out to be hard to write as you gotta cram a lot of stuff into one chapter) and starting another one, which isn’t as long but six chapters instead of five.

I have enjoyed developing the pokemon world from different versions of it. Such as the old western version for into my woods while taking a view from the pokemon games and how the birth of mewtwo was done, how they decided that mew should carry him instead of actually just cloning. But so both of these were based of the pokemon world as we know it, mostly from the games and show though I don’t want the show anymore, the pokemon world is pretty unique in some ways and always leaves open ended ways for people to draw there own conclusions.

I want to write a story using the legendry pokemon not as we know them, not with the personalities all ready labeled on them by the show or the games(though some game elements play in still). I would like to add the basic idea of each legendry being a sort of ‘god’ as many see them. Using things such as the Egyptian mythology and Greek, each are designed with certain abilities and feelings, jobs to do and grudges to hold, each has a certain duty and a book of rules to follow by to keep the world from well, falling apart.

But this story would focus mainly on certain legendaries fallen victim to the ‘sins’ they created for man kind. These sins were made as a way to judge mankind to keep them from becoming to superior or ruthless. Last thing the pokemon gods want is mankind to outdo them. But what happens when the legendaries don’t follow their own set of rules?

In this story idea the world id balanced in a certain way which each legendry has a key role that plays a part in which if messed with could throw the whole world off balance into which time, life, death and space itself would start to break.

While some of the legendaries have miner roles compared to others, such as the legendry beasts and birds, to which if they were messed with it could be repaired rather quickly but ones such as Ho-oh, Lugia, Rayquaza (and his lesser powered siblings) and Mew it would be disastrous.

I want to use my own ideas for each legendry in this story, while some elements remain the same as towns and cities names may not change, leaving the human world as we know it in the pokemon world, but the whole foundation of pokemon to my own imagination and not relying on the key facts in the show or games to influence my ideas to which the legendaries would take the roles.

I want to indicate each role and let you know exactly what I think. Hopefully I wont miss any legendary.

God/goddess: Mew
Role: Purity/life
Explanation of role: Mew is life itself, she is the living and will always be the living. She is not affected by mortal attacks, while they harm the flesh she takes it can not harm herself, it is believed she can not die, because life is not death and is not affected by it. She is also believed to be perfect in everyway, she has never been tainted and can never be tainted.
Status of power: She is of the first four
Creation: She created all life on the planet, from insects, fish, pokemon and man.

God/goddess: Ho-oh
Role: Balancer
Explanation of role: She keeps everything in check with all the legends, she also assumes the role of the grim reaper but is not death. She just leads the souls to their eternal dwelling. When she flies and the sparkles of ‘light’ seem to be behind her, it is truly the souls of the world who are being taken to the dwellings. Note that time does not affect one that is dead, thus while it seems forever before Ho-oh takes the souls to where they belong, to them it is seconds.
Status of power: One of the first four
Creation: she created the miner gods; the legendry beasts/ created the land on the earth.

God/goddess: Lugia
Role: Peace keeper
Explanation of role: He keeps the peace between the legendaries, as quarrels tend to break out over silly matters. When one is immortal sometimes it is amusing to start squabbles. But the peace keeper gets annoyed and will use his abilities to cool the angry hearts and deal with matters accordingly.
Status of power: One of the first four
Creation: The oceans and large bodies of water/ legendry birds

God/goddess: Rayquaza
Role: Elemental keeper
Explanation of role: He keeps his two younger siblings (Groudon and Kyogre) from arguing, as he is their keeper and the keeper of all elemental legendry, meaning mess with the elemental balance and he will destroy the cause.
Status of power: One of the first four.
Creation: Groudon and Kyrogre/air





Lost God:

God/goddess: Deoxys
Role: Space
Explanation of role: He keeps space from collapsing on itself. Simple enough.
Status of power: Unknown, it is originally thought he was a fifth of the first four but now it is unsure if he is not the creator of them
Creation: Space/galaxies/Rukario

Miner Gods:

God/goddess: Moltres
Role: Keeper of fire
Explanation of role: Moltres is the living representation of Fire. As long as Moltres is a goddess, forever will the flames burn.
Status of power: Miner goddess
Created by: Lugia

God/goddess: Articuno
Role: Keeper of ice/water living representation of this element. As long as she lives the
Explanation of role: As long as she lives the waters of earth will flow and the ice will always be strong.
Status of power: Miner goddesss
Created by: Lugia

God/goddess: Zapdos
Role: Keeper of lightening
Explanation of role: Living representation of the power of lightening. As long as she is a goddess the sky will always be lit up with its might.
Status of power: miner god
Created by: Lugia


God/goddess: Entei
Role: none/use to share with moltres
Explanation of role: A god that has no true duty but to run and be free, ever since he fought with his brothers his purpose was removed by lugia and he was cursed to forever want to run and be free, to never stop more then a few days.
Status of power: miner god
Created by: Ho-oh


God/goddess: Suicune
Role: None/use to share with articuno
Explanation of role: A god that has no true duty but to run and be free, ever since he fought with his brothers his purpose was removed by lugia and he was cursed to forever want to run and be free, to never stop more then a few days.
Status of power: Miner god
Created by: Ho-oh

God/goddess: Raikou
Role: None/use to share with Zapdos
Explanation of role: A god that has no true duty but to run and be free, ever since he fought with his brothers his purpose was removed by lugia and he was cursed to forever want to run and be free, to never stop more then a few days.
Status of power: Miner god
Created by: Ho-oh


God/goddess: Groudon
Role: Protector of land
Explanation of role: He makes sure that the ocean doesn’t take up more then its fair share of the world.
Status of power: miner god
Created by: Rayquaza


God/goddess: Kyogre
Role: He makes sure that the land doesn’t take up more then its fair share of the world
Explanation of role:
Status of power: miner god
Created by: Rayquaza



God/goddess: Celebi
Role: Controls the flow of time
Explanation of role: Celebi while can’t deractly affect time can flow it to which it wont tangle or mix up. To where the future is always the future and the past is the past and present the present. He is everything in time at once and at the same time he is always here and now.
Status of power: miner god
Created by: Created by the first four legendry because time was out of control.


God/goddess: Jerachi
Role: Representation of wishes.
Explanation of role: Created from well… wishing and longings. A god filled with the hopes and dreams of the world. Born from these pure feelings of hope and wish jerachi is a granter of hope, sleeps for a thousand years to recharge by collecting wishes from the world.
Status of power: miner god
Created by: The wishes of life



God/goddess: Regirock/Regice/registeel
Role: Earth’s emotions
Explanation of role: They feel and react to the earth, they are the earth in a way and feel what it feels. They know when something is wrong with it and know when something is going to be wrong.
Status of power: miner god
Created by: The earth, it is not sure how this accured

God/goddess: Latios
Role: Unknown
Explanation of role: Unknown
Status of power: miner god
Created by: Created from the lost emotions of Kyogre. He is what is left of the sibling’s love that the water god once had for its brother Groudon.

God/goddess: Latias
Role: unknown
Explanation of role: unknown
Status of power: Miner god.
Created by: Created from the lost emotions of Groudon. She is what is left of this sibling’s love for its brother, kyogre.


God/goddess: Rukario (because I’m weird and like the R more then L :D)
Role: guardian of humans
Explanation of role: The role is to protect humanity, as it seems that pokemon life is naturally protected as they are the legends chosen species, Rukario has taken the role of guardian of man because it did not like the slaughter that man received for the smelliest of mistakes.
Status of power: miner God
Created by: Deoxys (unknown why)

God/goddess: Mewtwo
Role: None
Explanation of role: Because he is not seen as a god though he is immortal, he was not given a role.
Status of power: Lower then a god
Created by: Mew, through a forced birthing, is the son of mew


Each legend has a certain history attached to it and as you can see a role. While most of these will be playing miner roles in the story there are five and a half main characters.

Latios, Latias, Mew, Rukario and Mewtwo. The roles they play go along a storyline of a sin commited by a legend that begins to destroy the earth. As this accures hell is opened up so that the beings from it may enter.

Thus enter a god that has been forgotten…

Death.

While the god of death has neither true pokemon name nor human he/she is a god of sin and well death. As the gods in the mortal world designed sin as a sort of guidance for man, as they got tired of man growing too powerful thus made certain rules that they should follow or else they will go to death.

Death designed these sins and allowed the gods to use them, a contract was established to keep death and his minions out of the mortal world… but who knew that the legends themselves were able to be affected by these ‘seven deadly sins’

Seems that was a miner loophole. It shouldn’t have any affect, the gods are good and great all powerful beings… how could they be affected by

Wrath
Greed
Gluttony
Envy
Sloth
Pride

…Lust?


But the again, we don’t know everything about the pokemon world now do we? What kind of rules that bend time, what kind of regulations that the gods must follow. Who knew when they set up a mouse trap for humans, they too would get there tails caught in it?

What happens when gods’ are the ones to screw up? Where does a god go to ask for forgiveness… when there is no one ‘higher up’ to ask?



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This story will be pretty long, as it will dive into the meaning of right and wrong, opinions on why people think differently. How the world itself is nothing but a big fat theory. Then again perhaps its not, perhaps there is a reason for why everything is as it seems.
The story will follow the course of different deadly sins; Wrath, Lust and Envy. While there will be two characters trying to figure out what the answer is and why the world is falling apart. By no means are these two perfect, more like just young enough to not be brainwashed by themselves, which does happen.

I am guessing this fic would take about twenty chapters all together from beginning to end, perhaps just ten if I make the chapters long enough. I will be updating this with some writing from it, probably a prologue.

I always wanted to write a fic with alot of dark meanings, troubles and problems accuring because of the mistakes of all powerful beings. I wanted to give the pokegods more of a role in the world and an actual rule to it, perhaps to try and balance it all out...

Rukario
Mew
Mewtwo
Latios
Latias

and perhaps a bit of Celebi

will be playing very very very improtant roles that I hope will make peopel think.

This fic won’t be coming out anytime soon either, perhaps after this summer during my senior year. Before I go off to college and get busy, leave my mark on sppf perhaps. I want to finish my other two fics anyway.

I want to know what people think of the idea of applying something actually a bit biblical such as the deadly sins to pokemon gods, how the gods are represented and how little of mankind is involved in this story at all.

Main theme: Right and wrong, forgiveness, the theory of a sin, exploration of life after death, exploration of a true savoir and true sacrifice. The relationships of all powerful beings and the mistakes and judgments others make out of nothing more then idiotsy and hatred.

I plan on researching more about multigod mythologies and religions, applying some other mixtures of single god religions and some things will also be things I do believe in. While it will ALL be fiction, some of the morals may not be but the story in general is fiction.


This story will probably be called…

Tainted Perfection

Because it sounds cool.


Note to my readers: Why am I writing all this crud instead of my other fics? BECAUSE MY DAD HAS NOT GOTTEN THE COMPUTER FIXED THAT HAS THEM ON THEM…. *cries* Oh IMW how I have forsaken the with vessels… wait…

Another note: to those I haev talked to about the plot all ready. PLEASE DO NOT GIVE AWAY ANYTHING I HAVE NOT GIVEN AWAY IN THIS THREAD. NO SPOILERS.


Tainted Perfection coming this september/october 2006
 

PDL

disenchanted
I want to write a story using the legendry pokemon not as we know them, not with the personalities all ready labeled on them by the show or the games(though some game elements play in still). I would like to add the basic idea of each legendry being a sort of ‘god’ as many see them. Using things such as the Egyptian mythology and Greek, each are designed with certain abilities and feelings, jobs to do and grudges to hold, each has a certain duty and a book of rules to follow by to keep the world from well, falling apart.

I'm going to be kinda honest with you here...

That idea isn't original at all. At least in pokemon fanfiction. Nearly every portrayal of legendary pokemon in fics usually depect them as supreme beings.

Frankly, this annoys the **** out of me. As it further adds to the glorification of a "chosen" few pokemon when there are literally mulitudes to choose from.

Plus you gotta learn more about Mythology before you create your own. Greek and Egyptian are good places to start, but the world is filled with all kinds of cultures with all kinds of mythology.

EDIT: the correct spelling is "Minor", not "Miner"

and "demi-god" is the term used for a being who has only some of the qualites of an immortal being, and the qualities of a mortal as well.
 
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Bay

YEAHHHHHHH
This seems to be a very good idea Lady Myuu. I remember before some of the members here were talking about if religion should be in fics. I always liked studying Greek and Roman mythology.

I was thinking of doing almost the same thing you were doing, but it won't really be some short of biblical stories. I am still thinking of doing a pokemon fanfiction story based off from "The Da Vinci Code" and maybe put a little Mew is god reference, the religion based off of that theory, etc. For now I am going to try to finish that book and research some religions a little bit more before I decide to do that project.

Well, this sounds like an ambitious project, but I think you can pull it off. Wish the best of luck!

;134;~Good night, and good luck~
 

Lady Myuu

Damsel mostly Stressed.
From what I've seen, people tend to relate the pokemon gods towards what is presented in the anime or games, course they always give them a little quirk that makes them unique. I wanted to step away from things related to the anime and games, thats what I really meant. I'm not saying I'm 100% original or anything >> just wanting to step away from what I usually do.


I have done research in roman, greek and egyption mythology as they intrest me the most and the most common refeared to. but I am a bit rusty on my knowladge of it. Though I don't see why in the end it should matter, I just wanted it for ideas, wasn't going to base the whole system on it.

Frankly, this annoys the **** out of me. As it further adds to the glorification of a "chosen" few pokemon when there are literally mulitudes to choose from.

... wha?

EDIT: the correct spelling is "Minor", not "Miner"

and "demi-god" is the term used for a being who has only some of the qualites of an immortal being, and the qualities of a mortal as well

meh, live and learn. No one's a perfect speller.... well my sis is.

and they don't have the quilities of a mortal being so they would not be classed as a demi-god. They are just not as powerful as the four (or five) original. they were created probably by the gods or by other means. Though jerachi may be a demi.

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I was thinking of doing almost the same thing you were doing, but it won't really be some short of biblical stories. I am still thinking of doing a pokemon fanfiction story based off from "The Da Vinci Code" and maybe put a little Mew is god reference, the religion based off of that theory, etc. For now I am going to try to finish that book and research some religions a little bit more before I decide to do that project.

I never liked The Da Vinci Code. Good book, but its 'historic fact' isn't researched enough that its filled with plotholes XD good book though... maybe you can pull it off better because you wont be using real historic fact and mixing it with fiction in a way where you can't tell the difference?

Good luck at that too.
 

katiekitten

The Compromise
I really like this idea, Myuu! You are going farther into it then the anime and games, which is very nice, and correcting the mistake to make the legendaries weak enough to capture. Which is very nice since I never agreed with it.

My only quirk expands a little on what PDL said: All of the legend gods are there by creation. Why not make one or two beings that have become gods, and were not gods already? Just a sugestion, a few gods that, as they were once mortal, control some of the more... sensitive things to do with the creatures of the earth?
 

PDL

disenchanted
katiekitten said:
I really like this idea, Myuu! You are going farther into it then the anime and games, which is very nice, and correcting the mistake to make the legendaries weak enough to capture. Which is very nice since I never agreed with it.

mistake? how the hell does the canon make mistakes when it comes to the universe they created?

that's kinda... dumb.

they can decide how powerful or how weak their characters are. Of course, we can as well within the fandom, but we can't actually say that the offical source is "wrong" or a "mistake".

My only quirk expands a little on what PDL said: All of the legend gods are there by creation. Why not make one or two beings that have become gods, and were not gods already? Just a sugestion, a few gods that, as they were once mortal, control some of the more... sensitive things to do with the creatures of the earth?

Indeed, it's rather boring just to have every legendary around since the beginning of time, every mythology has it's drama, heck, the Greek and Egyptian mythologies your looking into has loads of conflict between the gods and such, expand upon this with Pokemon.
 

Lady Myuu

Damsel mostly Stressed.
Katiekitten: I am only using a little bit of the game info and none of the anime XD not correcting any mistakes just making my own instead << >>

Not all the legends were there by creation. They just always were. Like the main four/five. Ho-oh, Lugia, Mew, Rayquaza and Deoxys were all there before time even began, actually the only thing that existed then was space but it was empty and nothing, as Deoxys allowed it to colapse on itself. I'll be writing up a history of the creation of everything so people can understand it a bit better.

So yeah, the five main gods were never actaully created, they were just... always there. Its kind of odd to think about but then again if they are gods and we are mortal, how the heck are we suppose to understand it XD

Now to the real question: ... well there are some things about it that I can't expose as they have to do with the plot. As it is a major thing about the story.

But otherwise no, I dislike the idea of mortals becoming gods. Because the meaning of 'god' pretty much is a being higher in intellegent, power and well just a holy all mighty thing that no mortal could ever be... its something better then us.

Or so it seems. Plus I doubt any god would allow a mortal to take on such a role unless there was a very good reason.

Tis why Mewtwo isn't a god, even though he is apart of mew. Mew gave birth to mewtwo, it is unsure of how or why she did, how a god could be apart of such a thing. But she never broke her purity to recieve mewtwo thus it was not a true problem... other then teh fact Mewtwo seemed to have stronger powers then mew (but not godly abilities liek creating life out of thought) He wasn't allowed God status because to the legends, he wasn't created for that purpose. Each minor god was created for a certian purpose and while very immortal and godly are just not as powerful as the orignal five.

But Mewtwo wasnt planned nor given a purpose. Much like the latis but they are respected for different reasons. They are more natural then Mewtwo.

meh it goes alot deeper. I plan on writing a short summary for the creation story anyway.


Indeed, it's rather boring just to have every legendary around since the beginning of time, every mythology has it's drama, heck, the Greek and Egyptian mythologies your looking into has loads of conflict between the gods and such, expand upon this with Pokemon.

If you read the character sheets, you wuold see that the minor gods were created after time began to flow. It was teh first five that were always there. As I don't believe somethign can come from nothing, thus there either had to be something always there or just nothing at all and were not really here... wtf... o_O meh ramblnig.

Anyway, there is stories and personalities for each character, right nwo alot of it is very sketchy, but there is a history to the minor gods and even the major. Its just not exposed to you all yet.

Take Groudon and Kyogre, there always fighting over land/ocean, always wanting to take over each others domains. Thats just a simple summary of what is really happening.

Mew may be life, but she is also purity, thus she can't experince some things that we do because she shouldn't become to knowing about such things.

Ho-oh is fazed between time and death, as she leads teh souls to the resting, which is beyong time itself. She isn't affected by the mortal plains attacks and can not be harmed that way, but she also can not affect the mortal world until the mortals are dead and no longer apart of time.

The regis... are amazing to me, as they are connected to the earth, alwasy moving with it, apart of it. They are like the soul for it, apart of it forever, as long as the earth moves, they move. They are not truely conciounce beings, but are always alert...


Jerachi is a bit of the anime I guess, only awake every thousand years. But he needs to sleep for this long because of the fact that wishes have to be true, not just 'I wish for a new car' its a matter of the heart, which are not wished for as often as they used too. Jerachi doesn't eat and exist the same way the other legends do, more of a demi-god as you said, he has to survive off mortals hopes and dreams, always sleeping... until he has enough energy to awaken and answer someone's wish like a genie.

legendry birds and beasts are a bit simpler, but they are living representations of the elements, they don't have alot of feeling... yet.

celebi s a bit ofa cook, as he is always everywhere and nowhere at once he tends to get lost... in his own head.

there is quite a bit to each legend which makes them unique from each other, some more then others while in the end they all have a sort of code they must follow for complete balance... this story is about that balance breaking.

So you want them interacting nad having all sort of crap going on like in other mythologies? :p well thats pretty much what is about to happen to them all.
 
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katiekitten

The Compromise
mistake? how the hell does the canon make mistakes when it comes to the universe they created?

that's kinda... dumb.

they can decide how powerful or how weak their characters are. Of course, we can as well within the fandom, but we can't actually say that the offical source is "wrong" or a "mistake".

Meh, my opinion. I seriously disagree with it, and in my opinion they made a mistake when they decided that. I personally don't go with the anime that much, because the shows stopped here at the pokemon league, and the movies stopped at the fourth. So I have to improvise. XD

Myuu, that's fine. :) I don't mind.
 

Dragonfree

Just me
For the record, it's Jirachi, not Jerachi. Sorry, had to point that out. I hate misspelled Pokémon names.

Anyway, it sounds like it could be good and could be bad. If you can do it well enough, it should be interesting, and judging from what I've seen of your work, that shouldn't be a problem... so go for it, I guess.
 
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