well this is my fan fc reveiw it use constructive critisisim and no bashing or flmaing please I tried hard.
Tales of a Japanese Wizard
A Harry Potter Fan Fic
Book one:
The Muggle-Guardian
(Revised no really I swear Yami Ryu Really)
Chapter One: Nonsense Letters
St.Jero’s orphanage was a nice little home-like building located were route 85 and 86 cross. Their play ground was a nice one indeed it had just gotten new swings and the slide was perfection, on the top of the building was a bell a churchlike bell managed by a nun named Laura she was an American girl from New York City. It was 7:59 and 45 seconds nearly time for her to ring the bell which will awaken all the children.
RING, RING ,RING the bell echoed through the cute little halls. On one side of the halls was were the older boys (presumably 9-12) stayed the boys were just like any other pre-teenage boys girl crazy and in their I-don’t-care phase which gave the nuns a hard time. A young boy with marvelous jet-black hair and stunning black eyes awoke with a yawn he rubbed his eyes. Not all the boys were awake some were up last night spying on the girls they got caught and beaten of course.
Left to the young boys who by the way is named Kyu Yamasaki was another bed of a boy who 7 months older he had black hair but unlike Kyu’s hair which was shoulder length his was short and spiky, the boy was snoring loudly How could he snore? a bell with the noise equivalent of a jet just wrung three times nothing can wake you up, eh Shako thought Kyu as he shook the boy.
To the right of his bed was another friend of his, Kai a boy who was already awake he had square shaped glasses and his hair was a beautiful shade of brownish yellow.
“Is Shako awake yet” asked Kai stretching his arms and yawning.
“Yeah he’s just waking , lets go brush our teeth so we can beat the rush” said Kyu stretching his arms and yawning also.
Kyu, Kai and Shako walked to the bathroom grabbed their brushes and brushed, after doing so they walked downstairs to the dining table were they all sat together. Shako told them about a dream he had last night.
“ Well I was walking to this castle” he explained thematically “it looked sort of Irishy/British it was next to two lakes that flowed into each other one was above the other so there was a waterfall that was between them well any ways I tried walking into it but before I could there were all these hooded figures flying around everywhere, they had a sort of coldness to them whatever they passed died when they came to me they sucked everything out it felt like I’d never be cheerful again then one lifted its hood to reveal its face but it wasn’t a face it was just lips it swooped down to suck out my soul then I remembered something else you know what I’m talking about the moment we were orphaned-”
“But how can you remember it all we know is that our parents knew each other and when Shako was born all our moms loved him but mine and Kai’s mom wanted one for them selves then Kai was born 3 months after, 4 months after that my mom had me, after having me there was a huge fire our parents died, during this party our parents were throwing ,the fire fighters came Kai almost didn’t make it he inhaled to much gas we don’t remember anything” Kyu muttered under his breath to his friends.
“Well it was just a dream wasn’t it”? asked Kai
“I guess-but……… it seemed so real it I don know” Shako blabbered uncertainly.
Kyu ate his eggs slowly, thinking about their parents always made Kyu sad, the fact that all he had to remember them was the burnt picture under his clothes, he walked to the garbage and threw his plate away.
Two girls with long wavy hair who looked very attractive walked to Kyu and Kai they were named Hakura and Hinata they were twins.
“Hi Kyu” said Hinata nervously she blinked her beautiful blue eyes.
“Er.. hi” replied Kyu nervously, he felt his face go hot Of all the times……… you have to blush know you moron thought kyu almost scolding him self but he remembered Hinata was standing in front of him.
But she merely laughed she had small thin lips, she then walked away her sister was about to follow her but she turned to Kai.
“Bye” she said she then kissed him on the cheeks quickly and ran off.
Kai was blushing like hell his face was so red it could compete with mars.
“I think I’m going to cry” he said sounding like he was going to cry.
“She digs you man” said Kyu chuckling and punching him on the shoulders.
“Well if you and Hinata were any shyer when one or the other were around you’d go unconscious” said Kai sarcastically.
They walked back to the boys room and told Shako everything.
“Really!?” asked Shako awed “those are the two hottest girls in the orphanage”
“Don’t you think we now that”? asked Kai in a dreamy voice.
“Hakura kissed him on the cheek” Kyu explained to Shako.
“Really, How’d it go”? asked Shako eagerly.
“Hey why don’t we go outside” asked Kai trying to change the subject.
“Great idea we’ll announce it on the playground” said Kyu sarcastically.
“Shut up” said Kai chuckling.
When they got to the playground they were talking about one guy asking a girl out.
“Why do they have to travel in packs how are you supposed to get one of them to go out with you if she’s surrounded by her giggling friends” whined kyu.
“We’ll never know kyu we’ll never know” said Kai.
“I NEED KYU YAMASAKI KAI HYUONO AND SHAKO TSUICHI, THAT IS ALL” said nun Kiko the head of messages and adoption papers its easy to guess what the boys had their mind set on.
While the boys were walking inside they were stopped by a boy who had neatly combed black hair and his posse: a girl who resembled a crow she had big round glasses and she was always giggling and two gorilla like boys who instead of talking or laughing grunted.
“I hear you geeks talked to Hakura and Hinata” he snarled at them.
Shako stepped up to him and smirked.
“So what” said Shako coolly.
The two humongous boys raised their fists.
“Put your hand down you idiots” the boy named Takoa growled at them.
“Well don’t, their mine you monkeys” Takoa growled to Shako through clenched teeth.
“O.K, Fine do what you want we have to be somewhere” said Kai earnestly as if he didn’t care.
“KAI, we can’t let this moron take them” said kyu scolding Kai “so which one do you like anyway” said Kyu
“Hakura” said Takoa his face was red very red you could hardly see his eyes.
“Well that’s to bad because she kissed Kai so ha”! said Shako laughing.
They saw Takoa’s face go hot he obviously couldn’t stand these words his fists were clenched as hard as he could clench them he raised his fist and punched Kai on the nose.
“ah”!! Kai screamed holding his nose.
Kyu the punched Takoa on the stomach, he howled with pain.
The two boys raised their fists again.
“STAND BACK YOU DAMN BUFFONS” screamed Takoa.
“Your gonna pay for that one day mark my
words” said Takoa to the boys then he and his posse walked off.
“Lets go”! said Kai eagerly.
They walked into the building then took a left and went into Kiko’s office.
“Oh” said Kiko she jumped “Boys you scared me well any way sorry we have to rush this but I have to be somewhere anyways we have three letters all of them are for you three its from a boarding school called Yoshiros here why don’t you read them I‘ll be back In 12:00 Don‘t go anywhere without my approval” said Kiko emphasizing the “anywhere” handing out the letters.
Kyu tore his letter open:
Yoshiro’s School
Of
Witchcraft
And
Wizardry

Dear Mr. Yamasaki
We are proud to inform you that you’ve been accepted into Yoshiros School we know all about the fact that your Muggle born and you have no idea of our world we will have a teacher meet you in 11:20 Am today, the nuns think that this is just some ordinary boarding school please do not point this out to them.
Sincerely
Tiko Akamaru
Head of Letters
Kyu read the letter over and over he couldn’t believe this seriously magic it did sound farfetched it could be someone’s idea of a joke or it could be true said a tiny voice in his head no it can’t witches and wizards don’t exist he thought it’s never been proven that their not said the voice.
“I just can’t believe the wizard part I mean its just weird isn’t it”? asked Shako uncertainly when they were sitting on the bed, it was safe no one was gonna come inside on this beautiful of a day.
“We’ll have to wait for that won’t we”? said Kyu looking at the clock it was 10:45.
Five minutes passed.
Then ten.
It soon turned to 20
Then 30.
Then 40
RING, someone was at the door…………
Tales of a Japanese Wizard
A Harry Potter Fan Fic
Book one:
The Muggle-Guardian
(Revised no really I swear Yami Ryu Really)
Chapter One: Nonsense Letters
St.Jero’s orphanage was a nice little home-like building located were route 85 and 86 cross. Their play ground was a nice one indeed it had just gotten new swings and the slide was perfection, on the top of the building was a bell a churchlike bell managed by a nun named Laura she was an American girl from New York City. It was 7:59 and 45 seconds nearly time for her to ring the bell which will awaken all the children.
RING, RING ,RING the bell echoed through the cute little halls. On one side of the halls was were the older boys (presumably 9-12) stayed the boys were just like any other pre-teenage boys girl crazy and in their I-don’t-care phase which gave the nuns a hard time. A young boy with marvelous jet-black hair and stunning black eyes awoke with a yawn he rubbed his eyes. Not all the boys were awake some were up last night spying on the girls they got caught and beaten of course.
Left to the young boys who by the way is named Kyu Yamasaki was another bed of a boy who 7 months older he had black hair but unlike Kyu’s hair which was shoulder length his was short and spiky, the boy was snoring loudly How could he snore? a bell with the noise equivalent of a jet just wrung three times nothing can wake you up, eh Shako thought Kyu as he shook the boy.
To the right of his bed was another friend of his, Kai a boy who was already awake he had square shaped glasses and his hair was a beautiful shade of brownish yellow.
“Is Shako awake yet” asked Kai stretching his arms and yawning.
“Yeah he’s just waking , lets go brush our teeth so we can beat the rush” said Kyu stretching his arms and yawning also.
Kyu, Kai and Shako walked to the bathroom grabbed their brushes and brushed, after doing so they walked downstairs to the dining table were they all sat together. Shako told them about a dream he had last night.
“ Well I was walking to this castle” he explained thematically “it looked sort of Irishy/British it was next to two lakes that flowed into each other one was above the other so there was a waterfall that was between them well any ways I tried walking into it but before I could there were all these hooded figures flying around everywhere, they had a sort of coldness to them whatever they passed died when they came to me they sucked everything out it felt like I’d never be cheerful again then one lifted its hood to reveal its face but it wasn’t a face it was just lips it swooped down to suck out my soul then I remembered something else you know what I’m talking about the moment we were orphaned-”
“But how can you remember it all we know is that our parents knew each other and when Shako was born all our moms loved him but mine and Kai’s mom wanted one for them selves then Kai was born 3 months after, 4 months after that my mom had me, after having me there was a huge fire our parents died, during this party our parents were throwing ,the fire fighters came Kai almost didn’t make it he inhaled to much gas we don’t remember anything” Kyu muttered under his breath to his friends.
“Well it was just a dream wasn’t it”? asked Kai
“I guess-but……… it seemed so real it I don know” Shako blabbered uncertainly.
Kyu ate his eggs slowly, thinking about their parents always made Kyu sad, the fact that all he had to remember them was the burnt picture under his clothes, he walked to the garbage and threw his plate away.
Two girls with long wavy hair who looked very attractive walked to Kyu and Kai they were named Hakura and Hinata they were twins.
“Hi Kyu” said Hinata nervously she blinked her beautiful blue eyes.
“Er.. hi” replied Kyu nervously, he felt his face go hot Of all the times……… you have to blush know you moron thought kyu almost scolding him self but he remembered Hinata was standing in front of him.
But she merely laughed she had small thin lips, she then walked away her sister was about to follow her but she turned to Kai.
“Bye” she said she then kissed him on the cheeks quickly and ran off.
Kai was blushing like hell his face was so red it could compete with mars.
“I think I’m going to cry” he said sounding like he was going to cry.
“She digs you man” said Kyu chuckling and punching him on the shoulders.
“Well if you and Hinata were any shyer when one or the other were around you’d go unconscious” said Kai sarcastically.
They walked back to the boys room and told Shako everything.
“Really!?” asked Shako awed “those are the two hottest girls in the orphanage”
“Don’t you think we now that”? asked Kai in a dreamy voice.
“Hakura kissed him on the cheek” Kyu explained to Shako.
“Really, How’d it go”? asked Shako eagerly.
“Hey why don’t we go outside” asked Kai trying to change the subject.
“Great idea we’ll announce it on the playground” said Kyu sarcastically.
“Shut up” said Kai chuckling.
When they got to the playground they were talking about one guy asking a girl out.
“Why do they have to travel in packs how are you supposed to get one of them to go out with you if she’s surrounded by her giggling friends” whined kyu.
“We’ll never know kyu we’ll never know” said Kai.
“I NEED KYU YAMASAKI KAI HYUONO AND SHAKO TSUICHI, THAT IS ALL” said nun Kiko the head of messages and adoption papers its easy to guess what the boys had their mind set on.
While the boys were walking inside they were stopped by a boy who had neatly combed black hair and his posse: a girl who resembled a crow she had big round glasses and she was always giggling and two gorilla like boys who instead of talking or laughing grunted.
“I hear you geeks talked to Hakura and Hinata” he snarled at them.
Shako stepped up to him and smirked.
“So what” said Shako coolly.
The two humongous boys raised their fists.
“Put your hand down you idiots” the boy named Takoa growled at them.
“Well don’t, their mine you monkeys” Takoa growled to Shako through clenched teeth.
“O.K, Fine do what you want we have to be somewhere” said Kai earnestly as if he didn’t care.
“KAI, we can’t let this moron take them” said kyu scolding Kai “so which one do you like anyway” said Kyu
“Hakura” said Takoa his face was red very red you could hardly see his eyes.
“Well that’s to bad because she kissed Kai so ha”! said Shako laughing.
They saw Takoa’s face go hot he obviously couldn’t stand these words his fists were clenched as hard as he could clench them he raised his fist and punched Kai on the nose.
“ah”!! Kai screamed holding his nose.
Kyu the punched Takoa on the stomach, he howled with pain.
The two boys raised their fists again.
“STAND BACK YOU DAMN BUFFONS” screamed Takoa.
“Your gonna pay for that one day mark my
words” said Takoa to the boys then he and his posse walked off.
“Lets go”! said Kai eagerly.
They walked into the building then took a left and went into Kiko’s office.
“Oh” said Kiko she jumped “Boys you scared me well any way sorry we have to rush this but I have to be somewhere anyways we have three letters all of them are for you three its from a boarding school called Yoshiros here why don’t you read them I‘ll be back In 12:00 Don‘t go anywhere without my approval” said Kiko emphasizing the “anywhere” handing out the letters.
Kyu tore his letter open:
Yoshiro’s School
Of
Witchcraft
And
Wizardry

Dear Mr. Yamasaki
We are proud to inform you that you’ve been accepted into Yoshiros School we know all about the fact that your Muggle born and you have no idea of our world we will have a teacher meet you in 11:20 Am today, the nuns think that this is just some ordinary boarding school please do not point this out to them.
Sincerely
Tiko Akamaru
Head of Letters
Kyu read the letter over and over he couldn’t believe this seriously magic it did sound farfetched it could be someone’s idea of a joke or it could be true said a tiny voice in his head no it can’t witches and wizards don’t exist he thought it’s never been proven that their not said the voice.
“I just can’t believe the wizard part I mean its just weird isn’t it”? asked Shako uncertainly when they were sitting on the bed, it was safe no one was gonna come inside on this beautiful of a day.
“We’ll have to wait for that won’t we”? said Kyu looking at the clock it was 10:45.
Five minutes passed.
Then ten.
It soon turned to 20
Then 30.
Then 40
RING, someone was at the door…………
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