Team Aqua, the big comic!

[Jetx]

OMg th1z iz l1k3 mY f1rzT comik!!11!!!111

Okay, if you could read that it could help ya reply to this thing. I dunno how many n00bs have posted that and meant that. Anyway I did this on paint and it ain't great, I don't think so anyway. So hopefully it will get good... *_*;

Okay, it went blurry with imageshack so I did an attachment on breloom woods, and now I'm using tiny pic! X_X;;:

Current episodes:
Chap 1: Maxie vs Archie
Ep 1: Little protection...
Ep 2: L1ek uh-0h!
Ep 3: Ditto translation
Ep 4: We conquered the league, at a price...
Ep 5: Magma army, it's breedin' time!
Ep 6: In the aqua pyramid, a blood-thirsty battle begins!
Chap 2: A new beginning.
Ep 7: i don't wanna be random no more!
Ep 8: A new home
Ep 9: Aqua pyramid of magma!
Ep 10: A second hand win!
Ep 11: Messing around with BAD toys
Ep 12: A dummy of a different kind!
Ep 13: Overfeeding.
Ep 14: I'M MELTING!
Ep 15: Team Aqua takes it oo far.

Fan stuff:
Team aqua man by Mutten641
Sprite By Chikorita III (he read it on breloom woods)
Sprite 2 By by Chikorita III
Please make my day and be a decent fan.

Most recent:
http://i2.*******.com/t5nerl.png

 

[Guitar dude bill]

Welll it's okay but it isn't a proper comic. Read the stickies to find out how to make a comic.

 

[Jetx]

Which one? I don't see one saying I'm doing something wrong. >:-(

I read an amount of them all, I have alot of spair time on my hands this week, time to read all, as I did. Or do I need to go back to hospital and have my brain tested?

 

[Blackbelt Jackie]

Hey, it's off to a good start. For one done on paint that is.

It hs good suspence, but maybe you could explain more about how they got to Maxie. Or are you hiding that for a future episode? I think it's pretty good, I laughed when the team aqua got a fright when that grunt came in and Maxie fell off. LOL.

It could use some improvement but, you, being new, using paint and with your injury (whatever that was) did a pretty good job.

Blingin G, don't come to forums like comics just cos your friend does, I've never seen you do a comic, yet you claim you have read all the stickies? I can't say i have. :X

 

[Guitar dude bill]

Hey, it's off to a good start. For one done on paint that is.

It hs good suspence, but maybe you could explain more about how they got to Maxie. Or are you hiding that for a future episode? I think it's pretty good, I laughed when the team aqua got a fright when that grunt came in and Maxie fell off. LOL.

It could use some improvement but, you, being new, using paint and with your injury (whatever that was) did a pretty good job.

Blingin G, don't come to forums like comics just cos your friend does, I've never seen you do a comic, yet you claim you have read all the stickies? I can't say i have. :X

I haven't read it. But it tells you how you add stuff. And comics are meant to have those speech bubbles. I've read a couple of comics before. But never finished them.

 

[Blackbelt Jackie]

They don't have too, they can have things at the bottom, but I can't say I've ever seen one with stuff at the side... But I don't think anything is wrong with it.

 

[Magical Trevor]

For A comic without speech bubbles I like it because some how even though it's pretty basic you've made the comic enjoyable.

 

[Jetx]

Sorry, but I deleted ep 1 with ep 2. So from now on ep 2 is ep 1.

 

[Magical Trevor]

Sorry, but I deleted ep 1 with ep 2. So from now on ep 2 is ep 1.

that's alright just re post episode 1. And episode 2 is much better. Lot's more detail.

 

[Jetx]

I'm redoing chapter 1, as two different episodes. Making comics is fun!

EDIT: part 1 done!

 

[zeppelin]

tis ot bad needs humor

 

[Jetx]

It gets humor in ep 2, which I'm writing now, I'm still introducing, it's not funny yet. I may decide that I don't want it to be comedy, I may just insert the odd joke here and there...

 

[Neopolis]

Where did you get the Charmeleon sprite from? Mysterious Dungeon?Or custom?

Either way... Some critique.

Work on the graphics ,mainly the special effects, spelling, and TEXT-UNDER-PANEL SUCKS (actually it's text next to panel here >_>)

 

[Dafearo(svensk)]

I don't get the plot, bad special effects and... well...

It could use some improvement but, you, being new,1. using paint and with2. your injury (whatever that was) did a pretty good job.

Blingin G,3. don't come to forums like comics just cos your friend does, 4.I've never seen you do a comic, yet you claim you have read all the stickies? I can't say i have. :X

1. Using paint is a BAD excuse! Paint is the most used program here.
2. Having an injury shouldn't affect his comix, unless it was in the brain or the eyes.
3. You can come to any place you want on serebiiforums.
4. Have YOU ever made a comic?

 

[Blackbelt Jackie]

I don't get the plot, bad special effects and... well...



1.1. Using paint is a BAD excuse! Paint is the most used program here.
2.2. Having an injury shouldn't affect his comix, unless it was in the brain or the eyes.
3. 3. You can come to any place you want on serebiiforums.
4. 4. Have YOU ever made a comic?

Could you review the comic rather than my review of it. Okay, I'll do what you did,

1. Paint is the hardest program to make comics on.
2. It could make him weak, or it could distract him, I've had surgery before.
3. I noticed that Bling is Jetx's friend. He barely ever posts here, and his friend makes a fic, hey presto he's a regular!
4. No, so i didn't read the stickies, he claims he did, why would he if he doesn't even come here often and hasn't got a comic?

Don't bother quoting this, unless you wanna start a flame war. -_-

Man, you seem to read reviews more than the actual comic. Oh well, here's my ep 1 review:

It was interesting, more detailed than the previous.
The cage was a bit cheap.
I look forward to seeing whether or not this becomes a comedy... l_l;

 

[Jetx]

Thaks Blackbelt Jackie for defending me. And please shut up Dafearo(svensk).
Neopolis i'd like to say that I dunno how to get speech bubbles. Anyway I've nearly finished chapter two.

I've just come back from an emergancy operation at the hospital, and am still in pain. Please don't annoy me.

Yes i am in alot of pain, and it is distracting me, and yes, you did annoy me. Sure, sure I read the stickies and can take crit, but critting my fan's crit is plain dumb. Nearly flaming both of us.

The part of my body that is injured is personal, thank you.

PS: The charmeleon is a MD sprite

 

[Dafearo(svensk)]

The oddish looks a bit odd b'cause you forgot to recolor it totally...(hey, that was wierd: oddish>odd...hm...)

 

[Magical Trevor]

Sorry to double post but ya you fixed it all so it makes sense

 

[Jetx]

lol

The oddish looks a bit odd b'cause you forgot to recolor it totally...(hey, that was wierd: oddish>odd...hm...)

Sorry, but are you looking at my thread?
And you didn't double post, how come everything has gone wierd.

Oh, next chapter nearly up.

 

[Dafearo(svensk)]

Sorry, but are you looking at my thread?

Umm... Yea....?