Team Rocket: The Unremitting Strife

[Clockworkz]

This is a comic-ization of my fan-fac form a while ago. This is all done in MSPaint (black and white only, no less), by the way. Please read, comment, and enjoy.

Character Profiles
Kazuma
Shinji
**Soon to be updated with more characters**

Pages
Prologue
1-1
1-2
Chapter 1 Conclusion
Chapter 2 Intro Page
2-1 **NEW**

Latest Update:

Notes: A REAL update! Omg. Getting a bit better with this whole freehand business. ^_^

 

[Fred]

I dont read hand drawn comic's most the time but this look's good I'll keep reading.

 

[Inukie]

This is cool! Forgive the noobish statement, anyway, the plot sounds auesome. It also get to the action fast, a high point.
Lastly, the style of drawing is great, thejapanese characterson the pokecenter are a neat touch
The only thing I can find to critque with it is the speech boxes. They coulld stand to be a bit bigger, the text as well. Its a reasonable size, but a bit straining if theres going to be a lot of it.

 

[Clockworkz]

Gotcha. I only have limited space with which to work the text-boxes in, though.
I'll see what I can do. Several area already done; I'm just waiting before I post them. I wanna see if this gets attention firstly =P

Thanksgiving is now, so I'll post the next one up either tonight or tomorrow.
Thanks for the replies!

 

[Wesheg]

Hand Drawn Comics Make my eyes Burn, But you should still make them if you think people are going to look at it.

I don't see many thing wrong with it though.

 

[Clockworkz]

Heh heh ^^;
I could never understand the whole "lol sprite comix" trend. I just think it's unoriginal and exemplifies little to no skill or thought.
Besides; the way I see it, the anount of effort spent on a comic co-relates to how good it is. It would help to explain why sprite comics are less than great, most of the time. =\

 

[Clockworkz]

Updated the page with Character Profiles, which will be updated as the comic goes on.
^_^

 

[eevee-me]

Brilliant I love hand drawn comics and I really hope you can keep up the quality of this

 

[EmberGryphon]

I waaaay prefer hand-drawn to sprited- sprite comics need to be really, really good for me to really get into them.

That said. x3

I've been waiting for someone to write a fic or comic (that isn't a poorly-done sprite comic and doesn't die after two pages) about an original Team Rocket member, and I finally found one. ^_^ The character himself is a pretty unexplored demographic- older gamer who lives with his mom and isn't trying to be a pokemon master. x3 I haveta suggest that you try and work the frames to fill up more of the page, though- there's a lot of white around there, and the frames could be larger and look a smidge less cramped.

But yeah, I'll follow it. ^_^ It'll be interesting to see where it goes.

 

[Clockworkz]

Well, I can tell you one thing; none of the main characters ever BECOMES a Rocket member. But it IS about centered around Team Rocket, and a personal vendetta against them.
^_^
Thanks velly, velly much! =P

 

[Clockworkz]

Character list and comic updated!
Enjoy~

 

[Wesheg]

Oh Yay!
A new Episode.
I Think It Sounds Interesting Now Since you have finnaly done an episode!

 

[EmberGryphon]

...Ah, well. As long as Team Rocket's a central part... 'cause they're neat. Their evil plans involve self-benefit, as opposed to drowning themselves, or expanding the land for some reason, like -some- evil organizations. xD

And hey, a new page! I couldn't really tell you were drunk except for the second panel... his face looks a little lopsided. ^^() I love the third panel, though. Very dramatic.

Shinji seems to be a neat character- I'm sure I'll get used to the stubble. Although the shiny hair could be toned down a smidge, or the shine could conform better to the contour of the hair itself.

So yay. I need to write shorter comments. >_>

 

[Clockworkz]

No, please do keep them long. The more I have to work with, the more I can improve ^^
Thank you~

 

[Infinity]

You know over AIM you got me to admit I like it. I know you can do a lot better, clock and I know you and I will be competing for air time when Innocence Gone is out.

I wish you good luck both as a student of you and a friendly rival.

Keep it up, there is much success lying over the horizon for you.

In other words the plot will be awesome :3

 

[Clockworkz]

Looks like we need an update.
Here ya go!
Enjoy~

 

[Hyuu]

Another hand-drawn one (Just saw "Broken Waffles" ^^) and another good hand-drawn one at that. Your style really attends to details. The plot also seems to be fast-paced and filled with action, so I'll definately be coming back.

 

[Clockworkz]

Small update with Chapter 1 Conclusion.
Enjoy.

 

[Shizuru]

^_^ I'm still amazed at your mouse skills @_@ And the hands are so well drawn *_*

Story continues to be exciting and fast-paced. Yay for revenge time XD

 

[EmberGryphon]

Using something other than MS Paint is always an improvement.

I agree with Shizuru- your hands are very good. ^_^ And I love all the emotion your character shows. :3 In this page and the last one- I missed commenting on that one because you update so fast~

Can't wait to see where it goes!