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the ADVENTURES OF ASH AND HIS BEST FRIEND JARED!!!!!

Discussion in 'Fan-Comics' started by Blazeing Man, Jun 3, 2012.

  1. Blazeing Man

    Blazeing Man proffesional artist

    I did not have anything too do so i made a sprite comic !!!
    I spent a long time on it.

    It is called the adventures of ash and his best firend Jared. Jared is a character I made up, he is very cool. They fight evil doers and also eat ice cream.
    [​IMG]

    please give comecnt sand critiscems but dont be to mean :)
     
  2. Blazeing Man

    Blazeing Man proffesional artist

    hello aain! sorry for the double post but i made another episode of the comic.
    [​IMG]
    Also i meant to put some text at the bottom of the last panel.
    It was supposed to say "BUT WILL HE?FIND OUT NEXT TIME ON ASH AND JARED'S ADVENTURE TO SAVE PIKACHU!"
     
  3. TeamRocketGrunt

    TeamRocketGrunt WobbWobbWobb Wobrudo

    Interesting and great, but fix up your grammar please.
     
  4. Tyranitarquake

    Tyranitarquake HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAX!!!

    If you made those panels yourself, then it's good. Just fix up the SPG and make the story a little less cheesy. :)
     
  5. Blazeing Man

    Blazeing Man proffesional artist

    what is a spg?
    also don't worry about it being cheesy because there is going to be a bIG TWIST in the next comic.

    and as for the grammar problem, i am going to have my uncle proofread the next, comic.
     
  6. Blazeing Man

    Blazeing Man proffesional artist

    Sorry again for making a double post again but I made another comic!!
    Also there is not a twist yet, that is coming later because of a plan i am thinking.
    [​IMG]
     
  7. Skytorn

    Skytorn Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ вuttєrflч!

    It's quite good so far. The only problems I can see is your grammar. When people type like that it makes me want to drive my head into a wall. Also, the plot. It's interesting to say, but people usually don't become best friends in their first actual conversation with each other.

    But good try so far.
     
  8. Blazeing Man

    Blazeing Man proffesional artist

    i am sorry for the grammar since i am only in the third grade.
    i made a pre-kwell comic to reveal why ash and jared became best freinds.
    [​IMG]
    like the comic said i am very busy with stuff so i might not make new comics as commonly as before!
    i will try to make one in the mane storey befor tommorow though.
     
  9. Skytorn

    Skytorn Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ вuttєrflч!

    Hmmmm... good attempt. But still seems a little too sudden to be best friends. Oh well, your comic, you do what you like. I will keep checking this out.
     
  10. Blazeing Man

    Blazeing Man proffesional artist

    i have been workeng for at least an hour on this next comic and also on the secret plan for my awesome comic.
    [​IMG]
    i found out how to do sum proffesinal looking specail efects so that means there will be even more action seens.
     
  11. Skytorn

    Skytorn Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ вuttєrflч!

    First of all, I like the effect you used for Fire Blast. ^_^

    Second, I can see that you're using MS Paint for this comic. It's not the best art studio ever, so I would recommend downloading something like Photoshop, Gimp or Paint.net. Photoshop is the best option but Gimp and P.n are free. It'll help. I can send you a comic from Gimp to show what it can do.
     
  12. Blazeing Man

    Blazeing Man proffesional artist

    i have heard many good things about the gimp but my mom doesnet let me download thngs in case there naked ladies.
    i will half to ask her about that.

    also, i have a comic now and VREY SOON there will be a SOOPER DOOPER SPEICAL EDITON!
    [​IMG]
     
  13. Jimmy_the_pokymon_master

    Jimmy_the_pokymon_master Pokeymon master

    I do not like dis comik. sorry
     
  14. Skytorn

    Skytorn Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ вuttєrflч!

    NAKED LADIES!? ARE YOU SAYING YOU'RE WORRIED THAT PORN IS ON GIMP!?

    No way. There isn't any pornography on Gimp, unless if you like go searching for an image or something. But there is no way there'll be anything inappropriate in that art studio.
     
  15. this **** is so cash dude you should sell it to nintendo so they can give you a hundren dollarbucks
     
  16. Sweet May

    Sweet May o.o

    Talk to your mother on how you want to enhance your sprite comic abilities with this cool program called GIMP and get her help on downloading it. It's 100% safe for work, I assure you.

    I'm not a master at comics but you might want to explain how some situations happen? How did the Team Rocket grunt get Pikachu? Did Ash and Jared turn around for a second and suddenly this bad guy has an electric type hostage? Infernape probably hasn't met Ash entirely so why the sudden rage? Also wouldn't using an attack on the Zubats fry Ash, Pidgeot and Jared too? Maybe you could be a bit more careful with the story and plan it out first before just jumping from one scene to another in 3 panels.

    I understand you were bored or had a lot of free time but that doesn't mean you can just pull out something like this without planning it out carefully. The grammar and spelling could use more work. Age doesn't entirely matter here as you can use a bunch of spell check programs or ask anyone older or brighter to proof-read your dialogue/sentences. If you can fix both of that, your story might be a bit more enjoyable. ;D Good luck with the future updates.
     
  17. ...sometimes i post bad things...
     
    Last edited: Apr 3, 2013
  18. Jb

    Jb Tsun in the streets

    This is the best comic I have read all in forever.
     
  19. Zibdas

    Zibdas not bad

    Don't listen to these people (except Jb). This is the best comic ever.
     
  20. SugarFreeJazz

    SugarFreeJazz not present

    I hope the Pikachu is okay!
     

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