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the ADVENTURES OF ASH AND HIS BEST FRIEND JARED!!!!!

Blazeing Man

proffesional artist
I did not have anything too do so i made a sprite comic !!!
I spent a long time on it.

It is called the adventures of ash and his best firend Jared. Jared is a character I made up, he is very cool. They fight evil doers and also eat ice cream.
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please give comecnt sand critiscems but dont be to mean :)
 

Blazeing Man

proffesional artist
hello aain! sorry for the double post but i made another episode of the comic.
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Also i meant to put some text at the bottom of the last panel.
It was supposed to say "BUT WILL HE?FIND OUT NEXT TIME ON ASH AND JARED'S ADVENTURE TO SAVE PIKACHU!"
 

Tyranitarquake

HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAX!!!
If you made those panels yourself, then it's good. Just fix up the SPG and make the story a little less cheesy. :)
 

Blazeing Man

proffesional artist
If you made those panels yourself, then it's good. Just fix up the SPG and make the story a little less cheesy. :)
what is a spg?
also don't worry about it being cheesy because there is going to be a bIG TWIST in the next comic.

and as for the grammar problem, i am going to have my uncle proofread the next, comic.
 

Blazeing Man

proffesional artist
Sorry again for making a double post again but I made another comic!!
Also there is not a twist yet, that is coming later because of a plan i am thinking.
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Skytorn

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It's quite good so far. The only problems I can see is your grammar. When people type like that it makes me want to drive my head into a wall. Also, the plot. It's interesting to say, but people usually don't become best friends in their first actual conversation with each other.

But good try so far.
 

Blazeing Man

proffesional artist
It's quite good so far. The only problems I can see is your grammar. When people type like that it makes me want to drive my head into a wall. Also, the plot. It's interesting to say, but people usually don't become best friends in their first actual conversation with each other.

But good try so far.

i am sorry for the grammar since i am only in the third grade.
i made a pre-kwell comic to reveal why ash and jared became best freinds.
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like the comic said i am very busy with stuff so i might not make new comics as commonly as before!
i will try to make one in the mane storey befor tommorow though.
 

Skytorn

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Hmmmm... good attempt. But still seems a little too sudden to be best friends. Oh well, your comic, you do what you like. I will keep checking this out.
 

Blazeing Man

proffesional artist
i have been workeng for at least an hour on this next comic and also on the secret plan for my awesome comic.
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i found out how to do sum proffesinal looking specail efects so that means there will be even more action seens.
 

Skytorn

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First of all, I like the effect you used for Fire Blast. ^_^

Second, I can see that you're using MS Paint for this comic. It's not the best art studio ever, so I would recommend downloading something like Photoshop, Gimp or Paint.net. Photoshop is the best option but Gimp and P.n are free. It'll help. I can send you a comic from Gimp to show what it can do.
 

Blazeing Man

proffesional artist
First of all, I like the effect you used for Fire Blast. ^_^

Second, I can see that you're using MS Paint for this comic. It's not the best art studio ever, so I would recommend downloading something like Photoshop, Gimp or Paint.net. Photoshop is the best option but Gimp and P.n are free. It'll help. I can send you a comic from Gimp to show what it can do.

i have heard many good things about the gimp but my mom doesnet let me download thngs in case there naked ladies.
i will half to ask her about that.

also, i have a comic now and VREY SOON there will be a SOOPER DOOPER SPEICAL EDITON!
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Skytorn

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NAKED LADIES!? ARE YOU SAYING YOU'RE WORRIED THAT PORN IS ON GIMP!?

No way. There isn't any pornography on Gimp, unless if you like go searching for an image or something. But there is no way there'll be anything inappropriate in that art studio.
 
Talk to your mother on how you want to enhance your sprite comic abilities with this cool program called GIMP and get her help on downloading it. It's 100% safe for work, I assure you.

I'm not a master at comics but you might want to explain how some situations happen? How did the Team Rocket grunt get Pikachu? Did Ash and Jared turn around for a second and suddenly this bad guy has an electric type hostage? Infernape probably hasn't met Ash entirely so why the sudden rage? Also wouldn't using an attack on the Zubats fry Ash, Pidgeot and Jared too? Maybe you could be a bit more careful with the story and plan it out first before just jumping from one scene to another in 3 panels.

I understand you were bored or had a lot of free time but that doesn't mean you can just pull out something like this without planning it out carefully. The grammar and spelling could use more work. Age doesn't entirely matter here as you can use a bunch of spell check programs or ask anyone older or brighter to proof-read your dialogue/sentences. If you can fix both of that, your story might be a bit more enjoyable. ;D Good luck with the future updates.
 

Zibdas

not bad
Don't listen to these people (except Jb). This is the best comic ever.
 
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