The Adventures of Bob(yes bob)

[Dork]

Meet bob, an idiot the age of 13 about to get his 1st Pokemon with his friend Brandon(not brendan). Yes it a journey comic but don't judge it based on that.

Bob & Brandon
Chapter 1-http://photobucket.com/albums/e267/Dorkbob/?action=view&current=bob1.png
Chapter 2-http://i41.photobucket.com/albums/e267/Dorkbob/bob2.png

 

[Controller of Flames]

You didn't bother sditing anyones trainer sprites, you started in Littleroot,you trainer sprites look fuzzy.

YOU USED TEXT UNDER PANNELS! I really do hate these thing, I suggest you use speech bubbles. You might as well just show the text because nobody is going to look at your pannels while you have those things. Then it's not a comic you say? Well text under pannels doesn't really make it a comic either.

 

[Magical Trevor]

You've done a good job so far. I like how you used Azuril as a starter instead of the proper starters.

 

[Dork]

I will work on it but hey, its my first comic. That is not criticism that is being rude. Thank you to whom gave me a complament, and finally yes I need to fix the sheech box thing. Some advice to a certain person, be helpful but draw a line. I just need to know things neede to be improved.

 

[Blitzman]

1.no custom people
2.to random
3.to short
4. to origanal
5.makes no sence...first panel i have no idea what is going on ..a woman comes out and said i hope you do good on your journey WTH?
6.you should start with more than one comic at the start with like 3 or 4

Try make costom made people..it will make all the diffrence....try makeing things less random like try makeing more things happen....always recall that when you get insults it will help you work harder and remember that no comic is perfect.

 

[Neopolis]

4. to origanal

Too ORIGINAL?

What the hell? A comic can never be too original. I think you mean unoriginal...

And Dork, that IS criticism. It's not being rude, but hey, not all criticism is "OMGTHIXROX".

 

[jellsprout]

-There is no movement in the comic. Bob is standing outside, then suddenly he is inside the lab and after that suddenly he is beginning a fight outside. Don't be lazy and make more panels that include him walking, actually picking a starter and where Bob and Brandon agree to fight without already having their pokemon out.
-Do something original. Your character picking a starter and fighting his rival in the first few comics is not original.
-Text under pannels is bad. Use speech bubbles.
-Why would we care why you picked Mudkip as Brandon's starter? And if you picked it as Brandon's starter, why haven't you picked something like an Aron? Don't say that Aron isn't a starter, because Azuril isn't one either.

And one last thing. Accept critisism, unless you want to remain a crappy comic maker and want to turn this thread into a flame war.
And it doesn't matter that you know that journey comics aren't apreciated. If you know that, why do you make one?

 

[Dork]

I do have some custom people about to show up and sorry I just have been in a luguberious mood lately. I will have running and a lot of of things next chapter. I will work on the text. If it is too Original than SORRY! thanks otherwse and I will have to make a lot of changes. Expect the next chapter this weekend

 

[Blitzman]

I ment it is to original because it is like the game..it starts out like this...."the main dude goes in a lab get his starter then the rival battle starts"..try doing something diffrent and unique.if that is not original..than what is?

 

[Pokefan26]

I will work on it but hey, its my first comic. That is not criticism that is being rude. Thank you to whom gave me a complament, and finally yes I need to fix the sheech box thing. Some advice to a certain person, be helpful but draw a line. I just need to know things neede to be improved.

Don't make excuses of your age or experience so people won't be rude to you.You need to have a decent comic. And critizism is critizism.

 

[Carpetted!]

And critizism is critizism.

Criticism.
I don't like text under panels. They bug me. It's boring and uninteresting, not to mention cliche. The joke is not funny. Journey comics make me yawn. Bob is my least favorite name... yeah I'm getting off topic.

 

[Iron_Mew]

WTH? That's to random even for me! But the spritey thingy itself wasn't to bad IMO.
Overall Rating: Mooo.

 

[Neopolis]

I ment it is to original because it is like the game..it starts out like this...."the main dude goes in a lab get his starter then the rival battle starts"..try doing something diffrent and unique.if that is not original..than what is?

Do you know what "Original" means? Original = Unique and different. What he did is not original.

 

[Blitzman]

Do you know what "Original" means? Original = Unique and different. What he did is not original.

....Original = Unique oh i though just the oposite.

 

[Dork]

Just so people know, these comics are meant to be random, not funny. Whoever said it is same place next comic I promise to make a new place (However lazily put together it was). When I say I'm lazy, I mean it(That is why I shortened it even though people will be mad.I MADE SPEECH BUBBLE/SQUARE THINGIES!
Anyway here it is-http://i41.photobucket.com/albums/e267/Dorkbob/bob2.png

 

[Blitzman]

wohhoho dude..you put the speech bubbles at the top of the panel if you want them to talk first....uh..people...please say this to him the right way I am a bad explaner.

 

[Neopolis]

WHATS UP WITH ALL THE CAPITAL LETTERS? ARE THEY ALL YELLING? AND WHY THE HUGE FONT? AND WHY DO YOU SHOW-- *coughs* And why do you show the whole city each panel while stuff only happens at the bottom.

 

[Dork]

I said it was... what was the word? Oh well. I'm so sorry the comic is bad. I know it needs to be improved a lot and I will try not to be so lazy.
I just got back from a short vacation, so I haven't had a chance to work on the comic. And they are not yelling(most of the time), but at least I didn't put(much)text under the panels. WILL IMPROVE THE COMIC