the adventures of Fred the houndour

[Munchlax-Man]

Comics:
issue1
issue1improved
Most recent comic: (issue 1 improved)

fan art:
rule the world (by ???)
Most Recent fan art: (by ???)

 

[Magical Trevor]

well your gonna get alot of critisizim. not from me but from other people.

I like it and it's funny and all but people wll crit about this

Backround=two tone
Houndoom's owner= just a guy drawn on MS paint
Speech bubbles= totaly bad. I like it but the speech bubbles need some work

 

[Joe Vega #4]

Mutten was right on the dot. Mistakes are littered across the comic, and surely you could make better backgrounds than that. Not the least bit funny.

 

[Mega]

Bad speech bubbles. the guy is badly drawn. It's not funny.

 

[Munchlax-Man]

i've improved issue 1

 

[Matt`]

All I see is that you made the person skinnier, and tried to make the speech bubbles better.
The speech bubbles are still messed up. Use the circle or circular rectangle tool on MS paint to make the speech bubbles, and try to leave space so that the words don't get cut off.
I don't see much humor.
The majority of your comic says "Don't steal this!!!1!" which isn't necessary. I'm going to be brutally honest, but I don’t think anyone would want to steal that.

 

[OmegaDragon]

The guy is horribly drawn. I suggest you get an official trainer sprite as the person instead of some thing drawn on MS paint. Also, use the square or circle tool for speech bubbles.

 

[Magical Trevor]

Well Fd looks bit better but really try an dget a sprite for him

 

[ForeverFlame]

I'm going to be truthful.
You didn't put much work into this.
Everything needs more shading, so they don't look like drawings.
You need to use default speechbubbles, instead of your own.
Try to THINK about the humor instead of just writing down whatever.
I like your first try better than your second try. The speechbubbles are the most important thing about a comic. I care more about the bubbles than the size of Fred's owner.

I'll give it 4/10.
I took off points because:
1. Look at the bottom of Panel Three. There's an extra piece hanging on.
2. Flat Backrounds.
3. Messy Speechbubbles.
4. No expressions.
5. Look at the tree on Panel One. There are no brown spots.
6. The 'Do Not Steal' thing at the end.

That was a truthful rating by ForeverFlame. If you want me to re-rate later comics, just PM me.

 

[Joe Vega #4]

Your new comic is no better. Why do we care about Fred's slimness, exactly?

And did you just give yourself FanArt?

 

[Electrode]

I know ypur going to hate me after this because I'm not ewaly gonna crit:

this realy isn't good did you even read the do's and donts of making a comic

and ofcourse your first comic backround is sky and grass no shading in that comic besides houndor who you didn't shade

I recomend going to fan sprites and become a good spriter before you make a sprite comic or request from a shop

well atleast the backround doesn't burn your eyes too much

all in all and no offence its a bad comic but don't get down just become a better spriter and backroung maker nd you'll be great

 

[MochiShroom]

Your comic.. REALLY needs some work. Basically all the mistakes have been pointed out in previous posts, but if you use official game backgrounds and a person sprite, it would improve. Also, I reccomend using better speech bubbles and some real humor. No offense, but maybe you should consider making a new comic because I don't see this one going anywhere good. I believe that you can try a little harder!