>> why is everyone stealing my 'have a nice day line' ;; stop emulating me. One me is enough.
To point out what hasn't been pointed out: Three lines, does not a fic make. ANNOYING EYE HURTING SMILIES, does not a fic make. But seeing as you praised a rule breaking script fic, and created this trite, I'm betting, your talent, whatever there is, does not a fic make either.
What, was it too hard to write out the pokemon names? Did you think it'd make you look cooler having people know you wasted a small ammount of time figuring out the pokemon's numbers for the smily code? Well it didn't and no one's impressed. Atleast the scripter actually wrote the species name of the pokemon, instead of using smilies.
Where is the plot? The depth the characters, what, are Luke and Klark female? Male? Both? Niether? BLOBS OF SPEAKING JELLO? WHAT!?
Oh their teams are raised quite well. LEGENDARIES. GASP. EGADS. Some of the most powerfull titans of the face of the earth, caught by two Mary Sue characters, that probably think 2+2 equals pie. As in the stuff you eat, not the greek meaning of the word or whatever.
Even if this was following the rules, it would still be lame, tacky and unoriginal. It'd also have absolutely no appeal or plot, or anything else to make it anything but one more very bad, tasteless trainer fics that help provide bad names to other trainer fics or newbies trying to write one.