Forgive the delayed reply; I've been distracted by a number of things off-internet (like preparing for my brother's wedding. Eep!).
#Chimecho#: Thanks for applying as a mentor--it's nice to know people are still interested. Unfortunately, I don't think you're quite qualified to be a comprehensive mentor. A comprehensive mentor needs to be experienced in all aspects of story-writing, and although you have decent skills, I'm afraid your stories indicate that your own knowledge doesn't hit the mark, particularly in terms of characterisation. In addition, a mentor needs to be critical in their reading, and your reviews show very little critiquing with regards to aspects other than grammar, even when such criticism is needed in other areas.
That said, you have shown a good grasp of the smaller details such as grammar and to a certain extent language, and I seriously considered offering you a place as a grammar mentor instead. However, there were a number of times in which your corrections weren't always necessary; not only should a mentor be aware of the author's possible desired meanings in their word and grammar use, they should also be capable of explaining in more detail and giving the author several alternatives to best fit what they are trying to portray. Also, a mentor should always be on alert to critique the work they're reading, and there were a number of times when you seemed to forgo criticism even when a story needed it.
I'm sorry, but for now I must
reject you. You do have a lot of potential, however, so perhaps after you've given yourself a few months to further extend your own ability and knowledge, you might like reapply.
TPJerematic: A brief plot summary would be nice, if you could edit one in, but otherwise, added to the list. Good luck!
Torpoleon: Added! Thanks!
fishyfool: Done and done. G'luck!
DanChimchar: Honestly? That doesn't clear things up at all. I may not have been clear myself, and if not then I'm sorry, but please see this note from the first post:
IMPORTANT NOTE: Under the 'mentor needed' section, people have been saying what areas they're weak in, in terms of writing. To be honest, this isn't helpful; in fact, usually it ends up being so vague that I'm not sure what kind of mentor the applicant needs. The only thing you need to say to answer this section is 'comprehensive mentor' or 'character mentor' or whatever kind of mentor you want; I don't need a list of ways in which you need help, and really, it's probably harder for you to write that than three or four words. You should know better than I what kind of help you need, and you'll be able to discuss it in detail with your mentor later; please, don't rely on me to try and read your mind.
Really, you should already know this if you read the rules, and it should be self-explanatory. All I need is two little words to know which mentor you want. There's a list of the mentors and what they do in the first post if you're unsure.
Also, I've already stated that I'm not a mentor; I don't have a whole lot of time to beta someone on a regular basis. So I'm sorry, but I can't help you in that regard.
Brando95: Added to the list. Thanks!