the book of manners with your host jim

[nattydbzmaster]

i know i quit lots of comic but ill try not to quit this 1

info
this is a comidy comic obout manners
this comic does not not continue between episodes

comic
treat others like you would treat yourself

specials
chanukah

new

Spoiler: be warned it may contain spiolers

chanukah speicial

secrets

Spoiler: secret 1

every episode the grasss changes

Spoiler: secret 2

in the chanukah speicial sallys hitmontop has lipstick

help me
plz criticize so i can improve my comic
give me examples of manners so i can make more episodes

credits
pokemon elite 2000
new001
and you for posting in my comic

 

[nimp]

haha i get it
very funny

 

[Charizard Champion#06]

He got told by his Mom to not kill somebody so he did. Not that funny... You need to work on your humour...
It's also a bit blurry.

 

[Blaze Dragon]

Put lines to your speech bubbles
Make your speech bubbles tails thinner
Your grammar hurts
First of all, start sentences with a CAPITALIZED word, and CAPITALIZE the names
-Panel 1: "I´m" not "im", "Kenny" is a name so it goes CAPITALIZED
-Panel 2: "Jim" is a name also, so it goes CAPITALIZED too
-Panel 3: Point = Next word CAPITALIZED
-Panel 7: Again, "I´m" not "im"
And finally, the joke is weak

 

[nattydbzmaster]

Charizard Champion#06: his mom said to treat other people how you would treat yourself thats why he stabed himself first
Blaze Dragon: thanks ill work on that


heres a special
chanuka special

 

[Nixx]

What the ****? Hanukkah is in like, a month. Also you spelled dreidel and penguins wrong. Also Your word boxes and grammar suck. Also what the **** happened in the end there.

 

[Ophie]

I think Willy was caught by a Machamp passing by. Also, "watch" was spelled wrong.

 

[nattydbzmaster]

hey im jewish i think i know how to spell dreidel... hey wait i did spell it wrong sorry and ophie is right machamp just passed by and saw that willy got hit by hitmontop so he jumped and caught him and thanks for critisizing it helps me know what to work on and can somone plz give me an example of manners so i can have more ideas for the comic

 

[Charizard Champion#06]

Why is the Pichu guy saying "adababa ooooo"? What's an adababa?
Ok, now I get episode 1, before I didn't see the blood because I was looking at that thing that looks like a pill in his hand. Is that supposed to be a knife?
And one more thing is that you didn't listen to a word Blaze Dragon said.

I liked the second comic a bit more because of the idea of Hitmontops being dreidels (even though I'm catholic), and I also liked how they actually look like they're spinning.

 

[nattydbzmaster]

if you looked at pannel 1 where it shows all the characters you would understand the one in the pickachu costume(willy)is a baby and thanks for enjoying the comic also whats catholic and again can someone give me an example of manners so i can have an idea for the next episode

 

[Charizard Champion#06]

You could of said "goo-goo ga-ga" or something more obvious.

Catholic is my religion, and don't talk with your mouth full?

 

[nattydbzmaster]

your right but did you like the comic