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The Chronicles of a Hero

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Beco

Beware...
And finally, here it is, my newest comic.

Episodes
Episode 1: Dawn of a Hero
Part 1
Part 2
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Info
What's what???
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Credit
I will have to thank avatar, for most of the basics for the used overworld sprites.
I will have to thank coronis, for e few basics for the used trainersprites.
And for all those I forgot to thank now...
 
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Fatal

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Hm... that was one of the worst comics I've ever read in my life.

Seriously, did you even write the story beforehand, or just made up some crappy dialogue as you went along...?

Horrible imo. It takes a lot more effort than this to have a successful comic.

-Fatal
 

blueguy

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Mattthegreat995 said:
Wow, youre either very constructive or your just plain flaming BEco.

This is good Beco- sprites, speech bubbles , maps. Good work.

And Fatal: Put your mouth where youre words are-mkae a comic then.

Fatal was a bit... fatal in bluntness, but that post wasn't actually a flame (though it certainly was close). Sure, it was a bit rude, but it was honesty. Matt, I believe you're reacting a bit too offensively towards Fatal, and I believe that you're giving Beco too much praise. Also, you don't have to have a comic in order to assess whether or not one is of low quality or not.

Please, please, please don't make such large panels, and please, please PLEASE space them! >_< This comic is very clichéed, but at least it isn't as much as your other comics are... The grammar and dialogue is atrocious. The effects, for example the eighth panel, are quite bad too... And the title? >_< *cliché-o-meter explodes* I suppose I'll read on, but you need some major work. You've improved a bit since I've last seen your comics, I'll admit, but you're still barely average.
 
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May's brother

Now to the Maxtreme!
Fatal is an idiot

Beco has already made two succesful comics that are still running, obviously, you don't know your comics!

Anyway, like i said on my forums, this is a great comic!
 

blueguy

used Metronome!
May's brother said:
Fatal is an idiot

Beco has already made two succesful comics that are still running, obviously, you don't know your comics!

Anyway, like i said on my forums, this is a great comic!

Fatal is NOT an idiot. By insulting people on behalf of Beco, you're only doing him and yourself an injustice. The fact that Beco has made two comics that are "still running", does not assure that they are good, or that he is a good author. We could call many of Beco's fans "idiots" (though that is a bit harsh) because they blindly follow his comics without a word of criticism, spamming as they go. And as for "success", do you measure it by quality, or by the number of people that post one-liners in his threads? *raises eyebrow*
 
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Magical Trevor

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well i saw the banner in your sig and I've been looking forar to this comic and now it's finally up. I wasn't sure what the pot is after seeing the first comic maybe do an intro? oh and YAY speech bubbles
 

Beco

Beware...
Looks up...
Thanks all for posting, but please do not turn this thing in a flamewar thread.

And I have to admit that Fatal's right about a few things, the dialogue was made up while I made the comic, looks like I will have to work harder on the conversations.
And I will try to make the panels a bit smaller without losing to much space for speechbubbles and details...
And about the intro, I wanted to start this comic with a lot of mystery, everything will become clear in the next parts of epi 1.
 

Neopolis

Battle Pyramid Champion
At least it's better and less cliché'd then the Pokémon Journey, which I personally hated... But it still needs plenty of work. Especially on spelling and special effects. And on cliché-ness
 

extremegunner

Hyper Coordinator
This may not be too good, however there are alot more worse ones out there. If this was the worse one you've seen, you ain't see nothing yet. You'll be amazed by the thrashy stuff that lurks around here. A cliche start(along with alot of other cliche things), but i doubt there are many out there with unique start as well. Needs to work on your grammar.
 

Beco

Beware...
Thanks for the comments, I will work harder to avoid the cliché...

Maybe you'll like this part more.

Episode 1: Part 2

Oh, and Blueguy, for this episode I first tried to make the screens smaller, but I ended up making it in the regular size so that my speechbubbles won't cover up half the panel...
 
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blueguy

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Beco said:
Thanks for the comments, I will work harder to avoid the cliché...

Maybe you'll like this part more.

Episode 1: Part 2

Oh, and Blueguy, for this episode I first tried to make the screens smaller, but I ended up making it in the regular size so that my speechbubbles won't cover up half the panel...

That's a really, really poor excuse. There was no reason why you couldn't space it, at least. As for smaller panels, there are many in which there is tons of dead space. I don't think you have a sufficient reason (aside from laziness) for that, either. The dialogue in this edition is just as flawed and clunky as it was in Part 1. The effects are still just as bad (a.k.a. the alarm clock). Try not to put things in your comic that don't look like they would be part of the game. And I think that this only pushed the cliché-o-meter higher, what with a "mysterious disappearance" and the protagonist dreaming of said "mysterious disapperance". At least your title-screen isn't as ugly as your other comics'.
 

Anton_91

Comic Trainer!
Looking good so far. :) Still, it's not much yet and I have no clue where this comic is going and what it'll be about but i wish you good luck and even if I'll never write here, I am reading it.

Keep up the good work.
 
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Magical Trevor

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well comic 2 explanes more but I can't see the plot yet
 

Beco

Beware...
The plot will be seen in a later part of episode 1, this episode is more like a intro episode. But don't worry, I have a plot that I think you will like...
 

blueguy

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mutten641 said:
well comic 2 explanes more but I can't see the plot yet

-_- *a-HEM* If you don't have anything relevant (or something that actually ADDS to the conversation) to say, don't post at all. Your spam is really getting on my nerves...

Mutanton_91 said:
Looking good so far. :) Still, it's not much yet and I have no clue where this comic is going and what it'll be about but i wish you good luck and even if I'll never write here, I am reading it.

Keep up the good work.

Another generic post, which does nothing but praise Beco. If you all really like him as an author, then give him advice and honest opinions about how he can improve. Otherwise, he'll keep on coming up with the same old stuff, which isn't necessarily a good thing.

I would like to ask that anyone posting a "comment" make it longer than a sentence, and make it relevant. If you're feeling daring you could even add a tiny bit of criticism, because no matter what you say, this comic isn't perfect or even close yet.

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Beco said:
The plot will be seen in a later part of episode 1, this episode is more like a intro episode. But don't worry, I have a plot that I think you will like...

Beco, we've been down this spammy road before, and remember what happened? It got two of your threads closed. I would hate to see this one closed, as well. By answering these posts you are promoting spam, by not only acknowledging it, but by doing it yourself. Please stop. Also, Beco, I believe it would do you good to acknowledge my review, because I am one of the few here who isn't a yesman.

EDIT 2 - My posts have been alleged "flaming" and "spamming", which is false if they are actually read in their entirety.
 
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Fatal

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And Fatal: Put your mouth where youre words are-mkae a comic then

Er... that was the whole reason I commented on this one. I am making a comic, with custom sprites, overworlds, etc, and a few people are helping me make it. I had already written the first 15 episodes before I even thought about any of the artwork, etc.
I wasn't trying to flame anyone. I was just being honest, and I could easily tell that he didn't write the comic's storyline in a word document beforehand.

As for my comic, banner can be seen here.

Oh, and blueguy, you are flaming. ;)

-Fatal
 
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Magical Trevor

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blueguy said:
-_- *a-HEM* If you don't have anything relevant (or something that actually ADDS to the conversation) to say, don't post at all. Your spam is really getting on my nerves...



Another generic post, which does nothing but praise Beco. If you all really like him as an author, then give him advice and honest opinions about how he can improve. Otherwise, he'll keep on coming up with the same old stuff, which isn't necessarily a good thing.

I would like to ask that anyone posting a "comment" make it longer than a sentence, and make it relevant. If you're feeling daring you could even add a tiny bit of criticism, because no matter what you say, this comic isn't perfect or even close yet.

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Beco, we've been down this spammy road before, and remember what happened? It got two of your threads closed. I would hate to see this one closed, as well. By answering these posts you are promoting spam, by not only acknowledging it, but by doing it yourself. Please stop. Also, Beco, I believe it would do you good to acknowledge my review, because I am one of the few here who isn't a yesman.
aww as if I care if the spam is getting on your nerves. your acctually spamming by replying to that ad I'm spamming sayaing this but sheesh no need to get all angry I was just asking about the plot.
 
k, everyone who posted in this thread are retarded besides Beco, who is actually trying to make a comic, and all this spam is gonna lead to the locking.

Blueguy, I appresiate you trying to help & all. Really. But accusing others to stop their comments when you get equally the same ammount of coments like this is.....yeah, you can't force people to post to the best of their abilities. If we could, I'd of done it a month ago.

Fatal, so? I never use word programs to write up my comics. Does that mean that I fail? No. Do I have a plot in my head? Yes. Can I make up a pretty good joke each comic? Most of the time, yes. But we're talking Seriousness here. I've got a serious comic of my own. I get every issue planned in my head. I only use the typing programs to spellcheck. Does that make my comics suck? Heck no.

Fanbase, We all know you love Beco's comics. But elaborate plz.

and lastly Beco. THY BIG PANNELS OF CONFUSION. Seriously man, shrink the pannels. When that ghost thing came to kill the boy's father, the effect work is majorly bumer. If I could do Goth Guy's evil border of death, then I'm sure you can do the effects on the door. The dog/Flea thing was pretty good. Predictable, but good.
 
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