The Dragon Riders (a dragon pokemon adventure)

[Baam]

Plot


There once was a time where humans and dragon pokemon lived in peace about 2000 years ago that changed when a pokemon called Salamence killed a human on purpose just because he tripped and bumped into him the humans were furious and hunted for the Salamence.One human called Rikou did not want to hunt the pokemon so they banished him from the lands.Rikou soon found a cave full of dragon pokemon and they welcomed him as a freind.There at the back was Salamence.A month passed and it turned to Winter and the cave started to freeze.Rikou turned ill and the pokemon started to leave to find warm shelter for the winter.Salamence stayed with him though.Through the winter.Then it turned to spring and the pokemon came back.Rikou felt better and the remembered the humans who kicked him out of there lands he plotted his revenge.Soon he attacked the Lands with the dragon pokemon.The Lands were destroyed people fled for there lives.1o years later Rikou died of an unkown illness but his evil deed was writen down in history.1990 years later and there are people trying to do the same.Like a team called The Rouges they are a group of people lead by a person called Aero who try to control dragon s to take over the world.But a group of kids who call them selves The Dragon Riders are trying to stop them.

we will travel to all the regions to stop the enemy so be ready

Sign up sheet


Name: (just your first name is needed)
Age: (11-14)
Gender: (male or female simple)
Region: (where you come from simple)
Description: (at least 3 lines descripe what he/she wears as well)
History: (a background to your character try to get about 3 lines)
Pokemon: (has to be dragon pokemon)
Pokemon's namethats simple you know what to do)
Difference: (any difference about the pokemon)


Heres mine

Name:Ashleigh
Age:11
Gender:Male
Region:Kanto
Description:Ashleigh has blonde spikey hair with a touch of red on the bottom he has blus eyes but when he gets angry his eyes turn dark red for some unknown reason.He wears a black jacket with a red shirt underneath it sometimes he wears a red cap.He wears black trousers with a stripe of red going down it.He wears black trainers with white laces.
History:Ashleigh was born in Kanto but was left alone in route 2 and was found by a couple out for a walk and they took himm to there cottage.They also had a pokemon garden where pokemon came to stay Ashleigh befreinded a baby bagon and together they grew up. When Ashleigh was 10 the bagon had evolved into a shelgon and was close to evolving to a Salamance and he started reading the history of dragon pokemon he discovered about Rikou and was filled with rage.The the tv came on Ashleigh watched as a news flash said a group called The Rouges wanted to tak over the world with dragon pokemon.Ashleigh was very angry and went to bed.A year passed and he forgot about it because the Shelgon had evolved into a Salamance.He then decided to go on a adventure.
Pokemon:Salamance
Pokemons name:Alfie
Difference:Alfie has a green cloth round his neck.Ashleigh gave to him as a present for his evoloution to a Salamance.

 

[Lady Myuu]

Well I told Psychic I would get it so here I am.

First of, just by glancing at your plot. I am not even sure you wrote it in a word program or just in the reply box. The first sentence gives a lot of the plot but the issue is, its a run on sentence with out much detail. Its a very confusing thing and jumbled.

How could the humans banish rikou? Why did they think a pokemon would willingly hunt another for a human revenge but not their own?

After all Rikou went through, he just died of some random illness? But isn't he a bit more then just a normal pokemon?

.1990 years later and there are people trying to do the same.Like a team called The Rouges they are a group of people lead by a person called Aero who try to control dragon s to take over the world.But a group of kids who call them selves The Dragon Riders are trying to stop them.

Oook, why is team Rouges trying to do the same? Same what? Get revenge on humans? Or hunt pokemon? Who are they, why do they do this, what is their reasoning? Where did they come from?

If this is your villains then you need to explain a lot more detail then you have, there is a lot of importent infomation that you should have put into this, such as how they plan to take over the world, why they want too, who they are and where they came from, even if its a somewhat mystery, you can build it up a bit more. As well as explain about this Aero.



Who are these kids? How did they become this group? Why are they called dragon riders?

Who would willingly let their kids fight such a dangerous battle. Where and why did they come together and name themselves, there is just so many pieces of this puzzle missing. You explain the whole plot in a single run on sentence paragraph.


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