The First PokeWar 1948

[Mewdio]

Chapter I - The War Starts!

The Sun rises far away from Kanto, Johto, Orre, Hoenn, and the islands surrounding. Thousands of miles to the east, over an ocean is a large region called Mushwatzia the great dictator Kougle Van Korn speaks to his people to extend his great land that he calls Mushwatzia.

“Baporista floesder shnaple houve grounhu cerwatz horgishwats morg hu dasgi fi houdonshits ich li hogre Sevii Islands!” It was then clear to the people of his people that he was going to strike the Sevii Islands, the crowd roared in applause as he declared his plans. The crowd then were quiet as he continued, “Hogen huetwa morg fi Kanto, mo Johto, mo Hoenn, mo Orre!” It was then clear what his next plans would be, to attack the surrounding regions.

Days later, his army prepared for the campaign against the Sevii Islands. The ships were cleaned, the bombs produced, the planes readied, the artillery scrubbed, the guns cleaned, the airships inflated, and the men trained. More than anything though the Pokemon were trained harshly and disciplined for war, they each were to use their abilities to fight the enemy Pokemon or Human! Some were even trained to use guns. Van Korn could see his legions of humans and pokemon marching in legions, he was pleased with them as he held a Delacatty in his arms and stroked a Persian next to him.

Van Korns palace was decorated with gold and silver, heads of Stantler were mounted, his servants served him, he had a large stable with Ponyta and Rapidash. He looked at his army and his land of Mushwatzia. It thrived, the people had pride, the hills ran wild with pokemon. But this great land held a bad secret, to thrive like this they abuse pokemon and don’t give them care, they do strange experiments, force labor on human and pokemon slaves, it was horrible. The great man that Kougle Van Korn was thought to be, was not true, he was a careless and greedy man that wanted everything for himself and so he wanted to conquer these new lands for himself, for the money, fame, and all his new land. He also was an evil man and cared for nothing!

Van Korn then ordered the ships and airships to set out. Just a month later they arrived miles away from the Sevii Islands and awaited the final order to attack. While they awaited word from Van Korn they sent several scouts to find an enemy target Water pokemon scouted the waters and Flying pokemon scouted the skies with their trainers. There was no sign of a military in the Islands, but a few Pokemon Rangers. The targets of choice would be a radio/Pokemon center on One Island and a battle tower on Seven Island, all they had to do was wait for Van Korn’s orders.

Van Korns orders later came to attack the targets. Admiral Swintz then ordered bombs to be dropped over the targets. The Radio/Pokemon Center was crushed, the Battle Tower collapsed and the locals were horrified. Admiral Swintz then ordered a ground assult. Several Lapras carried men to the shores of all the Sevii Islands. Growlithes owned by the Officer Jennys fired several flamethrowers, doing little damage to the approaching army. Then all the Lapras arrived on the beaches. The men and their pokemon destroyed all they saw. All the locals released their pokemon into battle, and fought for their lives. They were no match for the combination of guns, pokemon, and numbers. The men advanced deep into each Island. Guns, bullets, attacks, and explosions could be heard as the locals and their pokemon fought till the death. Soon the Battle for the Sevii Islands would be near the end as the last of the inhabitants pulled the last attacks and fought in the Last Stand of Mt. Ember.

Chapter 2 is now complete!

 

[not_awake]

It's an interesting idea, but it seems to be lacking something stylistically. The general ideas come through but without a real sense of emotion or eventfulness. Let's take the bombing of the Sevii Islands for example.

Admiral Swintz then ordered bombs to be dropped over the targets. The Radio/Pokemon Center was crushed, the Battle Tower collapsed and the locals were horrified.

Here we know what happened, but not how. You could, for example, describe the airships that dropped the bombs or how the people reacted as it occurred. Detail the panic and fear that was felt by the islanders. Maybe this would be told better from the perspective of a survivor of the bombing or from the viewpoint of a reluctant pilot. The readers need someone that they can relate to in order to make it more than just an event.

My advice is to keep your grand scheme, the invasion and war, but find a way to reveal it as it would happen to a person.

 

[Mewdio]

Chapter II - Kanto Prepares

The fire burned on the Islands, woman and children were dead and slaughtered on the streets, many were enslaved, their pokemon were skinned and some even eaten. It was a grousome site, but not for the invaders that did it. The last of the people on Mt. Ember were taken prisoner and executed. The Mushwatzians lost very few men and pokemon. The Mushwatzians took control of the area and made several bases there, the air ships landed, the ships docked, and the troops made base there.

In some places, of the coast of Kanto the smoke could be seen during the sunrise. All of Kanto was in horror, they were afraid, and so they had to prepare for the great war that was about to happen. The army was small and unprepared for something like this. It seemed almost hopeless to defend themselves. They would have to work fast inorder to prepare for this. The President of Kanto then spoke...

"Today our friends in the Sevii Islands had a tragety, a large powerful army from across the sea burned the islands and killed many. I must tell all of you to train your pokemon and get your weapons. Our army is small and I may have to draft many of you into our army, navy, and air force," the crowd was silent, all televisions in Kanto were tuned to his speech, "Now we must go quicky and defend ourselves from the evil across the sea!"

On Cinnabar island a sixteen-year-old named Grix just finished listening to the speech on his radio. The recruitors for the military had arrived on the island looking for fresh recruits. Grix wanted to fight so badly, he would be perfect for the force, he had a very powerful pokemon, a Dragonite. He then walked over to the Recruitors.

"You look like a tough young man, you could make a nice soldier in the Army of Kanto, just tell me your name and age and pokemon and I'll let you join," Said a nice man in uniform.

"Well my name is Grix Tyram, I am sixteen-years-old, and I have one pokemon, a Dragonite!" Grix said proudly while soluting.

A look of disappointment came across the mans face, "I'm sorry, Grix I personally think that you would make a great soldier, you do have a very strong pokemon, but you're just too young, Okay?"

"But Sir! I can fight, you need all the soldiers you could get. I am no different than an eighteen-year-old!" Grix complained, he just wanted to fight so badly, but he couldn't, oh how sad he was, "Please I beg you sir I want to fight for my region, please!"

"No, I cant I could be discharged for letting you in, son. I want to, but I can't. I'm so, so sorry," the man would not let him in.

Grix, in his frusturation walked along the beach, kicking and crying. He then stopped noticing something on the beach, it looked like a body. "SIR!!! Come Here! I need you to see this."

"What now!" the man and a few troops walked to Grix, but stopped, noticing the body, then they walked over to it. It was a Nurse Joy, she was still alive, with bullet wounds, bruses, large burns, electric sparks could even be seen.

"A, a, a, army with battle ships, a, ai, air, air ships, planes, and th, thousands of men and pokemon," She could barely speak, hel, help." She then just died.

"Write that down and get that to the president immediantly, NOW!" the man commanded to a soldier, "Thanks son, but you are still not in, but thanks for your help." All the men then left for the training camp.

Meanwhile, the airships were loaded with planes and ready to head for the mainland. The battle ships were refueled and ready to assult the coast. The order from Van Korn came to Admiral Swints to assult the Kanto mainland. Hours after the order the army left for Kanto.

In Mushwatzia Kougle Van Korn gave a speach, "Korishwat Hawshwin Hu Kory ishwout Sevii Islands!" The people cheered at the words that the Sevii Islands were under control, "Baporista floesder shnaple houve mo Kanto, huvenfi mo, kor Sediant Swints!" The people cheered at his plans to conquer the mainland.

On Cinnabar Grix looked out his window, it was cloudy and the Navy of Kanto was sailing ships in the sea by his house, planes from the airforce were flying, Tanks were running in the street, Men and their pokemon were patroling the area. He looked out another window and could see large battleships of the enemy, further away he could see airships coming. There was an unsure future.

The battleships then fired on it's first target, Cinnibar. Fighting pokemon were loading the guns carrying shells and fireing on target. Cinnibar was being hit badly. People were screaming, houses were being destroyed, shells exploded, people ran out of the houses. Grix ran to his parents, to learn that their room was hit by a shell. Both his parents were badly wounded. Explosions and chaos made it hard for everyone, another shell hit the house causing Grix to fall on the floor, with alot of frag, and shrapnel in his gut. He was now wounded and limping. He then had to get back up, he realeased his Dragonite. Grix and Dragonite quickly dragged the parents out of of the house through a hole created by an explosion, to a field hospital.

They treated the parents but not Grix's leg. Grix had to walk away from them. The ships of Kanto were firing across the water at the Mushwatzians, doing little damage to them, as they took many losses instead. Soon the airships were near, overhead, out of range, too high to fire at. Several fighters came from the airships hanger. The fighters came low and released several bombs. Several men from Kanto were lost, they had to fire into the air, hitting very few times. Machine gunners hit one of them and damaged it causing it to crash near the field hospital, it was much too close for Grix to take.

Grix then grabbed a helmet that fell on the ground and put it on, then he grabbed a Thomsan(tommy gun) that fell on the ground. He quickly jumped on his Dragonite and flew into the air.

"Come back here, NOW!" yelled a Commander, "THATS AN ORDER!"

"NO! You cant stop me!" yelled Grix as he was flying into the air, "I must fight for Kanto" He then flew up high, and the fighters started to fire at him and Dragonite. "Dragonite, use Thunderbolt!" Dragonite attacked the planes that were flying around it, but the planes kept flying. The planes fired machine guns at Grix and Dragonite. "Dragonite, trie to dodge the attackeds!" Dragonite then flew faster and dodged the planes fire. "Use Hyper Beam!" Dragonite realeased a powerful attack on one of the planes causing it to go down. While Dragonite tried to catch it's breath, Grix used the Thomson and shot at the planes, one lucky shot hit the cockpit and killed the pilot. "Okay, use Hydropump all around us!" Dragonite then released a powerful jet of water all around causing the planes to have to go back and repair. They then went on the ground again, to see that soldiers were being transported by Lapras, and Tanks by large transports.

"You actually beat those loserss, son," the Commander said, "Go and get em'!"

"Dragonite return!" Dragonite then returned. Many of the friendly forces fired at the enemys on the lapras, tanks fired into the water, pokemon through attacks at the lapras, and the men fired the guns at the other men, few shells were fired by the Mushwatzians anymore. The Kanto Army had the atvantage, they had a clear shot at the enemy, bringing several of the Lapras down. But then, when they thought victory would stop the advancing enemy, an unexpected thing happened. Paratroopers came from the Airships above and assulted from above. They landed on the ground and started to fire and attack. They landed everywhere, bullets were flying at everyone, the chaos started again.

Grix shot at the enemys with his Thomson, killing a few of them. Grix then ran out of ammo and had to run away from the enemy until he could find more ammo. Just then the real battle started, more like a masacre, the lapras and transports reached shore then more paratroopers landed. The enemy had too much firepower. Grix got too tired to move on his wounded leg, it was bleeding badly now and another soldier dragged him on boared a ferry that left for Pallet Town. He was then able to reload and fire his gun at the enemies that were advancing to it, he then was taken to a first aid center on the ferry to get his leg treated. The ferry shook as shells exploded around it. It soon stopped and the enemy stopped firing, but they still made a base on the island to prepare for the next assult, it was a battle lost for Kanto.

Chapter 3 is soon to come. Just give me suggestions for next chapter! Thanks






I NEED YOU TO POST THE SUGGESTIONS IF I'M GONNA WRITE CH 3, and thats when it's suppose get good! so post those ideas!

 

[Mewdio]

OK, I desperately need suggestions if I'm gonna write chapter 3


So come on give me ideas!

 

[Mewdio]

OK, I desperately need suggestions if I'm gonna write chapter 3


So come on give me ideas!

No ideas from you I'll just write this on my own then
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Chapter 3 - Mainland Attack

Cinnabar was lost by Kanto. It was a last defense before the Kanto mainland, the Mushwatzians seemed like an unstoppable force. The streets of the island city were chipped and cracked by bullets and explosives, and littered with dead bodies, human and pokemon alike mostly losses from Kanto. Buildings were now ruins and piles of rubble. Tanks and Artillery from Kanto were now nothing but scrap metal. The Mushwatians looted the houses and took valuables to their liking, they killed prisoners and wounded left behind, then they built a forward command center there. They also effortlessly took the Seafoam Islands and used the caves to their advantage. More and more troops were transported to the islands every minute, and more Mushwatzians arrived strait from home. The Army of Kanto would have to work quickly if they were going to save themselves.

On the ferry that departed from Cinnabar, Grix was have his badly shrapnel wounded leg treated. His leg was still able to move, so they bandaged it and made Grix get up for another patient. The small hospital was crowded with the wounded, and the doctors that treated them. Grix stopped by his parents to say a few encouraging words to them.

"Mom, Dad," He said, "Are you okay, what will happen to you?"

"I'm proud of you son, you saved us," the father said, "We will have to be taken to a better hospital once we get to mainland."

"Go kill the enemy, go and get them!" The mother struggled to talk, "Go son for us and for Kanto!"

"Okay I will," Grix said. A deep sadness went through him as he looked at them wounded. He then walked on, but stopped at the sight of a rare pokemon standing beside it's wounded trainer, Grix walked over to it. It was a Mightyena, native to Hoenn.

"I saw you defeat the planes," the wounded trainer said in his hospital bed, "Your Dragonite is very strong." His mightyena looked up at Grix.

Grix started to stroke the mightyena and said, "I see you have a mightyena, I never seen one before, where did you get it?"

"I am a diplomat from Hoenn, I wanted to see what was going on here, but little did I know that I would be in the battle zone," the trainer
said, "Mightyena seems to like you, I trust you. You see my bleeding will never stop, and I need you to take care of Mightyena for me. I trust you, Mightyena has no where to go in Kanto, he has no way of getting to Hoenn."

"I can do that for you, I'm sorry for you dieing," Grix said, "I promise to take good care of him for you."

"If only I could tell Hoenn, They could of helped, but I will soon die. Thank you for everything," the trainer said, "I hope they could help in the future, so go now and fight for all of us, best of luck."

Grix then left for the deck. By then, the coast could be seen through the fog. Several men were patrolling the beach. Several walls of sandbags were set up, behind them was machine guns and artillery. Electric pokemon were also ready to zap the lapras that were probably going to transport the Mushwatzian ground forces. Fire pokemon were ready to blast flames at planes that would be bombing, or firing at the ground. Anti-aircraft guns were also ready for the enemys attacks from above. They were completely ready for the next attack by the Mushwatzians. The ferry finally arrived; it was greeted by several soldiers. All the people then left the ferry. It seemed strange that Grix was walking side by side with Mightyena, especially that someone he never met before trusted him with his Mightyena. Little did grix relize he still had a gun strapped to his back and was wearing a helmet, and so he was stared at because he didn't have any uniform.

"I have permission to let you in!" the recruitor that let him down said, "Even if you're not eighteen, they saw you fight the planes and kill the enemy, just go over there and your in, we won't have any training for you we need to speed our process were getting desperate for men and time. But I know that you're well trained already so that will be no problem, Good Luck!"

"YES SIR!" yelled Grix proudly, saluting. Then he walked where the man told him to go, through a thin forest to the outskirts of Pallet Town where several tents were, and a sign that said "NEW RECRUITS HERE."

"What is your name?" a man said, "Are you that Grix everyone’s been talking about?"

"Yeah I am," said Grix, "I mean Yes Sir!"

"Than we already have your uniform, “the man said handing him the uniform. The uniform was green with Grix Tyram and then Army of Kanto over the breast pockets. "I just need your trainer card."

Grix handed him his trainer card.

"OK, here is your new identification, Mightyena seems to not be registered, but we could do that later,"the man said. The man then handed Grix a Kanto Military Card and Trainer card attached to a chain, "Just put that around your neck or keep it anywhere on you, that is your identity." Then the man gave bands to put on Dragonite's, and Mightyenas legs.

"Thanks!" said Grix put his stuff on.

"This is your utility belt, your pack, your canteen, your spare ammo, your grenades, and you have your gun and your helmet already!" the man said giving him his stuff. Grix then put it on. The bands for the Pokemon said the name of the pokemon, summary, and trainer, they were probably for military pokemon.

Grix then moved on into the camp.

Meanwhile the Mushwatzians were planning the next coastal attack, "Korgi Houg dres swone," Admiral Swints was planning with his men, the next coastal attack. It was planned that it would be a larger battle and they would take more prisoners so that they could use them as hostages. More naval and sky combat would be required for the battle, at three-o'clock in the morning they would attack.

Back at the camp the sun sets and Grix sleeps in a tent with recruits that were older than him. The men in his squad were Buffy, Rex, Tom, Jerry, and the leader, John.

"Lights out at twenty our time!" John said, "I expect the best out of you boys, you may be new recruits without training, but you are all skilled soldiers! right, RIGHT!"

"Yes Sir" the whole squad said.

They would talk about random things until eight when John turned the lamps off.




It was two-thirty in the morning. It was dark and peaceful, very few were still patroling. Yet that silence was broken at a loud sound in the camp, not an explosion, a siren. All the lights came on and everyone got up in their confusion.

"What the hell is happening out here?" yelled John.

"Battleships and Airships coming to Viridian City," yelled a lieutenant.

"Everyone follow me!" yelled John, "Let's get to a vehicle!"

Everyone followed him to a caravan of trucks and tanks, they all then boarded a truck. Alot was stirring in the foggy morning and there was alot of confusion. Soon the caravan of hundreds of men left for Viridian. The caravan went very fast and arrived in just minutes.

Thousands of men and pokemon were ready at the shores to fire. Commands were being barked and the Mushwatzians could be seen coming by lapras.

"Fire the big guns!" ordered a commander. Several sailors on battleships manned the cannons and fired at the coming enemy ships. The enemy then returned fire. Then several bombs fell from the sky unexpectively from hovering airships made invisible by the night sky. Then several fighters came low and struck with their bombs and guns. Soon the Kanto battle ships were firing upward at the planes, and the forces on the shore were conserving ammunition. Some of the planes came in and fired at ground targets. The fire Pokemon and Anti-Aircraft guns soon made quick work of them. Soon bombs dropped from the dark sky, from the airships that were out of range. The Kanto ships soon became useless when torpedoes came and destroyed the hulls of the ships.

While that battle was happening on the shore the lapras of the enemy were transporting men in the dark of night when they were invisible by the darkness and could sneak up on the Kanto force. Ten-Thousand enemies were riding on lapras and artillery transport boats. Soon the planes disappeared in the dusk and the burning ships lighted the harbor with the fire, Kanto lost it's navy but not it's infantry. Kanto watched for any sign of the enemy coming. Soon they could be seen on the lapras and were fired upon. this is where the big battle started. Artillery fired from the shores loud booms could be heard as flashes of light came frome the guns, it was loud and the shells exploded on the water, taking out alot of the lapras. Soon the enemy battleships fired the big guns and gave the thousands of me on lapras cover. Shells exploded on the shore and took out several of the Kanto forces. It was chaos for all the men on the shore as loud booms and fiery explosions came near and killed soldiers. Soon the lapras got in gun range and fired at the Kanto forces and Kanto returned fire.

"Stand your ground you JTs," Barked John.

Grix kept firing into the chaos as shells flew by his head and large explosions threw him off balance occasionally. He and his squad members just fired at the enemy without aiming. Soon one of them was killed, Jerry was killed and the squad couldn't focus until John barked his orders. Then they kept firing at the enemy. Soon the enemy could be seen through the fire and smoke, just feet away. Grix threw a grenade, over the sandbags, at one of the lapras and it exploded before it hit the water with perfect accuracy causing shrapnel to injure the enemy, soon they recovered and returned fire to the squad. Several bullets flew towards the squad and soon everyone ran leaving just Grix and John. They had to take cover away from the danger and the enemies then jumped onto shore. Grix put his Thomson over the sandbags and started firing. Several men died all around him as bullets flew and shells exploded, making shockwaves. Grix then reloaded and bravely ran out of his protected area, firing his gun at the enemy. The enemy returned fire and started to fire alot of rounds at him as he passed. Grix then ran out of ammo and threw a final grenade and retreated into town.

Chapter 4 coming soon- I need suggestions

 

[qwerqwer]

Work seriously on spelling grammar and detail. just saying he threw a grenade or ran out or fired randomly doesn't mean anything. say something like he bravely jumped up, his hand propelling a grenn grenade forward toward the unseen enemy with great force and accuracy. And spell better. write it in word, not in the reply box. and use spell check but also proofread. It's the technical mistakes that make your fic seem bad. Fix these and you have a very exciting story. i'm looking forward to progress and DONT GIVE UP!!!!!!

 

[Mewdio]

OK I'm fixing this right now. Using word is a wonderful suggestion for the next
chapter. Thanks.

But I need some content suggestions also to make it really exciting.

 

[qwerqwer]

How bout some RPG's?
and more info and the evil dictator

 

[Mewdio]

Chapter 4 - The Smartness of Swintz


Grix runs into town as the enemy fire at him almost hitting him rapidly. He only had a few rounds of ammo left. As he ran orange flashes of lights in the forms of bullets flew by his feet as he ran and made the ground up ahead and even under him chip and the ground flew up into the air as the bullets collided with the ground. Grix then quickly dove into an open door of a small house at the town’s edge, it was his only hope. Fortunately, there were other soldiers in the small abandoned house firing through a window at the advancing enemy. Grix soon went to the window and fired his last three rounds of ammunition. The other men in the house were firing two machine guns through the window, at the enemy and there was a growlithe blowing flamethrowers at the enemy through the window, trying to burn the advancing troops and the bright flmes blinded them also. It was from the machine gun fire that no one could hear anything else but loud bangs that felt like the mens ears were about to explode and hot from the growlithes flamethrowers that radiated heat into the small house. Grix had to put his Thomson down because it had no ammunition and grabbed a spare .45 Colt handgun that the other men in the house had. Grix could see out the window, the enemies that were being shot at with the machine guns and the flamethrowers were dropping rapidly before they could even fire their weapons or release thier pokemon and the fellow Kanto soldiers in and on the other houses seemed to be defending the town very well from the Mushwatzian attackers. Soon the growlithe got so tired that he could barely breath and couldn't attack anymore, now without the bright flame blinding the enemy, the Mushwatzians could fire strait at the machine gunners. One lucky shot went through one of the gunner’s helmets into his head, spewing blood all over the place as he fell backwards; it was a gory sight to see. The other machine gunner couldn't help looking beside himself at his friend, then he was shot in the helmet making the helmet fly off his head and only knocking him unconscious with a bloody wound on the side of his head. Everyone had to get to cover and dove down as the enemy advanced and fired into the window with little opposition from the men in the other buildings. Soon an enemy bazooka fired a rocket at the house, hitting a wall causing bricks and rubble to fall on the group of men. Several of the men around Grix were killed or injured by the collapsing structure, Grix's shrapnel wound on his leg re-opened again and bled in pain. All the men who were in the house had blood somewhere on them. Immobile, they couldn't get up to defend themselves from the advancing Mushwatzians that were also shooting at them.

"I'll fire at the enemy, and you transport the wounded to safety, leave the dead," It was John and the remaining squad members. He was dragged to the a field surgeon by Buffy, the unconscious machine gunner was dragged by Rex, and a remaining man was grabbed by Tom. John slowly backed away bravely, firing his M-1 Garand at the enemy, covering the wounded men that were being dragged back, as other Kanto snipers and machine gunners fired from the buildings surrounding. The sound of the guns, the sight of pokemon fighting, and the death was just too much for the wounded to bear made the wounded stressed as the surgeons worked on their wounds at a secure place in town. As they worked on his leg, Grix fell asleep under a psychic pokemon's yawn.

Back in Mushwatzia, the great Kougle Van Korn was doing more to make himself look good for his people.

"Norha houshtwi lor kouf jenta outa huotli Swintz, hougenhi kout ich la kunhougle dougky mork chout koranmo FORHICH!!!!"(I received reports that the Kanto shoreline has been besieged! Swintz has done great work! and now we will soon have VICTORY), he says in his speech and the almost brainwashed crowd cheered at his evil plans that sounded good, he always had a way of making the people love him, and his next words would make the people a little too loyal to him, "Ou Hi stritoh Ou Jorgle Gougwitz twinimch horgy coruche goinle chig mo hounwit hasgo, N00BISM!!!"(I see my great country, the military follows me, you think that I am the best thing that could happen to the world and so I am and now you can hale me as your God for that is who I am, this shall be called N00BISM!!!) The people that were loyal cheered and all of Mushwatzia knelt before him. All his peoples now saw him as a god, and were called the n00bs because of the new religion.

The evil dictator was now a god and his subjects were called n00bs, to be a n00b you practiced n00bism where you are put on the earth to annoy your enemies and do brave things and fight for your own cause as well as a larger cause, that cannot be explained in words, you just had to follow that way of life and so you can find peace. The people took to this religion quickly. Soon the Mushwatzian Army and Navy overseas would start to practice this new religion when the news reached them.



In Kanto, Grix woke up with his leg hurting less than it was. The guns and pokemon seemed to have ceased fire, yet the town around him was ruined. It seemed peaceful without the loud sounds and gory sights

"What happened?" Grix asked Rex.

"Your leg got messed up," Rex replied.

"No, with the battle," Grix said.

"Kanto was able to fight them off, they retreated back to Cinnabar and Seafoam, but Kanto has lost a lot of men," John then said, “But they took a lot of prisoners with them.

It was a victory, Grix was surprised that victory was won after all the defeat that he saw back home at Cinnabar. He then got up and could stand without his leg bleeding, but it was still in pain. Viridian was still in ruins and the streets still had dead bodies of humans and pokemon, blood, rubble, and depression. To recover his leg, the Army of Kanto aloud him to go to Saffron and Celadon. There was not much to do there, his parents were at a hospital there and so that was his first priority.

“Mother, Father, how are you doing?” Asked Grix, looking at his parents resting in their hospital beds, immobile.

“Oh, were recovering, slowly, but surely,” The father said.

“I want to know about you dear,” The mother said.

“Oh, well I was recruited into the Army of Kanto!” Grix said as his parent’s faces lit.

“That is very, very…” The father didn’t know if it was a bad thing or a good thing.

“Good news?” the mother then said.

“Yes it is good news,” Grix said, “I finally get to fight for this region!”

“So I think you should go now, Son,” the father said, “Love you Grix.

“Love you Grix,” the mother then said.

“I love you too!” Grix then said leaving. The hospital was obviously impacted by the war; it was over packed with wounded civilians and soldiers. Grix later walked to the Pokemon Center to heal his pokemon, only to find that, it too was over packed and they didn’t have time for him, there were worse cases like the growlithe that he saw in the house earlier leg was broken and had blood all over itself. Grix just couldn’t watch the gory sights, so before he could get too sad, he left. Even when he left, the horrible sights continued. Homeless people roamed the streets more than ever at the time, looking for food and wondering the streets. Even a church looked depressing, especially as the bishop spoke…

“Shall you come down and totally destroy this evil and the evil doers destroying your creation of the earth! Shall we defeat them, for we are your warriors, warriors of God and shall we win this war for you! God! We will fight for a peaceful world where we could live in harmony and you are our king! Oh Lord! Will you help us in our extreme fight against these demons, shall you not save their souls and condemn them to the burning realm of Hell! And may our soldiers die in honor and go to heaven for their good deeds and the struggle that they made! God Bless Our Troops! God Bless all of us! Shall we, the warriors of the Cross defeat the evil and receive salvation. Pray to God with our priests, and shall we win the enemy have faith in the Lord your God! And shall you survive and…”

Grix couldn’t listen any longer; it only made him feel worse. The Bishop was saying too much. He walked outside of the crowded church, to only see the once great city, having poor and homeless people. It was depressing to see this, and so Grix found a last way to enjoy his time off to recover, a Hitmonchan boxing match. The place was crowded with people that also wanted to have some fun.

“Hitmonster dodges Hitmonchamp’s Sky Uppercut causing it to over punch and Hitmonster comes back around and uses Rapid Punch on Hitmonchamp’s backside. Hitmonchamp almost loses its consciousness, what, oh my goodness Hitmonchamp pulled a quick Sky Uppercut on Hitmonster, causing it to fly strait up. Now it’s coming back down and hits Hitmonchamp on the head with a Brick Break. Hitmonster hits Hitmonchamp with several Arm Thrusts. Hitmonster’s attacks are blocked by Hitmonchamp’s Detect. Hitmonchamp uses Counter after his Detect causing Hitmonster to attack itself! Now Hitmonchamp uses a Dynamic Punch on Hitmonster! Causing it to fall on the ground. Hitmonchamp tries to use Brick Break on Hitmonster’s back, but Hitmonster pulls a Sky Uppercut and now Hitmonchamp is in the air. Hitmonster uses Bellydrum, raising its attack; Hitmonchamp comes back down, but is hit with an all powerful Mach Punch!
HITMONCHAMP IS K.O.ed and unable to battle! HITMONSTER is the winner!”

It didn’t last that long and wasn’t as exciting as a match before the Mushwatzian invasion. Yet again Grix opened the doors to the devastation that used to be Saffron. This time, after the match, tanks and military vehicles were roaming the streets. Grix then walked to Celadon City to see if anything was better there, but the route going there was covered with army tents and the roads were swarming with Jeeps. It wasn’t normal to see what has happened to Kanto. Within an hour he arrived at Celadon City, but it still faced the same devastation as Saffron. Grix went into the department store, but it was overcrowded and all the merchandise was running out. He then went to the Rocket Game Corner, where it too was crowded. Nothing was right in Kanto anymore, and so Grix returned to his hotel room in Saffron, where the hotel was completely packed and it was hard to get on the elevator.

The next day a man showed up at his hotel door and ordered Grix to rejoin his squad. Grix took to these orders; his leg was already recovered yesterday. When he left the hotel the squad was reformed, to replace Jerry who was shot by Mushwatzians, an experienced engineer was in his place, his name was Jeff.

“Here, how about you take this to replace your old Tommy Gun,” Said John Giving Grix an M-1 Garand, “We couldn’t get you another Thomson, it was too expensive to issue.”

“Yes Sir! I’ll take it!” Grix then said.

The vehicle then drove them to an area near Viridian, which was like a city of large, green tents. That was their new base instead of the old Pallet Town base. The new base was quite comfortable. In the evening that day, Grix fed his pokemon food. Mightyena seemed rather strange and didn’t want to eat. The loss of his old trainer still burned in the poor things heart and to now be with a different trainer was strange.

In the Sevii Islands where the Mushwatzians came first, they built several prisons for the captured soldiers of Kanto. Later a ship arrived with the words of Van Korn for Admiral Swintz to soon enforce N00bism to his men. N00bism was perfect for them they would use it as a good thing and annoy their enemies in Kanto with telegrams and film of the prisoners; it was a perfect strategy to taunt the enemy. Soon the sent telegraphs and filmed the prisoners for Kanto to see.

Not to long later they arrived at Viridian.

..._ . __ .. _ ... .. .._ ..__ .. ... .. .._ _ .._ ._.. _..__.._... .._ ... _ _..
(You are abunch of losers and are stupid and fight like girls)

The films of the prisoners also tormented the Kanto generals, they were so mad that they couldn't control their temper at the insults and soon got too mad and couldn't command troops properly. The N00bism belief was working, and it was all part of Admiral Swintz's Smartness. Soon another attack would come from the Mushwatzians.

In Saffron the high soaring airships were out of view and range, they could not be seen from the ground or radar and soon they were ordered to drop bombs and release small fighting planes out of the hangers to attack the city.





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[qwerqwer]

me again. And you need to work harder. Dont say what happened. Describe. is that too hard to understand? fine D-e-s-c-r-i-b-e. And nice use of propoganda. At least that is clear. But saying there were loud noises doesn't help. Say that blast created ear-ringing sounds that knocked them off their feet. And wasn't the tommy gun outdated by 1948. It saw action in WWII but i think they had better submachine guns by that time. Expand everything. this is like a timeling, saying what happend in breif detail. Not good enough. And what happened to the RPG's?

 

[Mewdio]

me again. And you need to work harder. Dont say what happened. Describe. is that too hard to understand? fine D-e-s-c-r-i-b-e. And nice use of propoganda. At least that is clear. But saying there were loud noises doesn't help. Say that blast created ear-ringing sounds that knocked them off their feet. And wasn't the tommy gun outdated by 1948. It saw action in WWII but i think they had better submachine guns by that time. Expand everything. this is like a timeling, saying what happend in breif detail. Not good enough. And what happened to the RPG's?

The Thomson "Tommy Gun" was not discontinued by 1948. The 1928 model
was used during Korea, along with the M-14. They even saw some action
in Vietnam before they were finally discontinued, then they were replaced
by the next generation of submachine guns after Vietnam.

My source-

http://www.auto-ordnance.com/ao_ao.html


just read under this heading-
Thompson Submachine Gun Cal. .45 M1


Well anyway, I will fix this chapter and add more detail to it and remember
your advice!

 

[Shadow Lugia206]

I got one thing to say. Be Best if there were no soldiers or blood or violence, just pokemon fighting

 

[Naraku_Diabolos]

See, what I do to get some ideas down for my own fanfic is to watch certain television programs, look at different books for ideas, watch different cartoons, play different video games that can have similarities with what I'm writing about.

One thing you could do is PLAN before you make another chapter. It's good to have both the main story on one file in a folder, a character-web, character entries (tells about how the character will be introduced and their background so it can be explained in the main story) and a plot-line on what's to come.

Will you tell in your story on how Grix met his Dragonite and how it became his partner Pokemon? Partner (Pet) Pokemon are Pokemon who accompany their Trainers all the time by staying outside of their PokeBalls. Like Ash and his Pikachu. Also like in Pokemon Ranger, in which the Ranger charms the Pokemon into become his parter for an amount of time on his journey.

If any of your other characters catch a Pokemon or they join forces with the characters, the people have to gain the trust of the Pokemon. If Grix becomes more experienced, like he is, his Dragonite will become an essential ally in the PokeWar.

 

[Mewdio]

Chapter 6 - The Devastation to the People, a Crumbled City




The Mushwatzian airships fly above the clouds transporting men, pokemon, supplies, and bombs that are ready to drop. Elite soldiers riding on charizards, wearing oxygen masks, and armed with machine guns mounted on the backs of the charizards escort the airships through the skies over Saffron. Soaring at the front was Admiral Swintz on his flygon with his war-ready Flareon on his shoulder. It was midnight and Admiral Swintz gave the order for the bombs to be dropped, “Konzit Hinen Grot Witanhorg!” the order radioed to all the airships and soon bombs dropped from them through the clouds and to the city below.

The people still in the streets after dark couldn’t see the bombs falling from the sky. Many people were still sleeping without much knowledge of what would soon happen to their homes. Inside the local church the priest was preaching and many people were still in the church praying for them, their family, their home, and their pokemon. The silence in the streets was soon broken when the first bomb went through the front window of the church. When the glass shattered the people panicked and screamed, the horror could be heard inside their voices and the looks on their faces. The bomb landed in the main isle and the explosion blasted rows of benches into the air, only injuring the worshippers sitting in them, many people had already ran right when the bomb shattered the window. The people ran in fear to the nearest exit and the priests kept preaching. The rest of the town was also in complete horror; bombs destroyed several buildings while people were sleeping in them. People and pokemon ran through the streets as devastating explosions could be seen ripping through the city all around them. When people heard the blasts from their homes they quickly packed what they needed and ran out of there houses, leaving many things behind even children and pokemon.

Cars would fill up fast, but couldn’t move fast with so many people clogging the streets. Many trainers released pokemon so that they could ride them out of the horror and chaos.

“Were all gonna die!”

“Oh my God!”

“Run!”

“Please help me, Anybody!”

“Pidgeot, fly me out of here!”

“Look Out!”

“Mommy!”

“No! Please don’t die on me.”

“Oh Shoot!”

The bombs kept dropping and the chaos went on until sunrise. At sunrise the skies above Saffron were cloudy, people and pokemon still ran, while some stayed and looted the shops that were damaged. Bricks were scattered at the foot of the buildings that were damaged. Rubble took the place of buildings that were destroyed. The usual aftermath of dead bodies was also a sight, a sad one to see.

Grix and several other men at his camp were not deployed until sunrise. They were fed breakfast on the platoon’s transport, ready for what would come; Saffron in ruins. The truck rumbled down the road to Saffron, everyone could see refugees and displaced pokemon running from the site, many people nagging for a ride or money.

“Okay as you all know, Saffron was bombed,” Lt. Heddle said, “What you need to do is clean the place up, you’ll get further orders from General Koludo when you get there. You got me?”

“Yes Sir!” all the men on the truck replied.

“Is the area still dangerous?” John asked, “I want my squad prepared, they’re still quite new.”

“From what I know, the damaged buildings could be dangerous. You may have to rescue a few people and pokemon, I recommend your pokemon help you with this,” Lt. Heddle replied as John looked at him strangely, “But um, the Mushwatzians, well were not sure about them.”

The truck kept on the road along with hundreds of other vehicles. They had no fear of the Mushwatzians returning at all, but little did they know that the large fleet of airships was still hovering too high for radar, over the clouds, with hundreds of paratroopers and war-ready pokemon. The elite soldiers on charizards were also ready and could hardly wait for their role in the Mushwatzian offense.

Back in Mushwatzia, this new religion, noobism was no longer doing much good for the people. People were now annoying each other to seek attention and prove their own superiority over others. Pranks were now carried out on their own fellow countrymen everywhere. Soon riots began in the streets in every city of Mushwatzia, people were no longer worshipping Van Korn in what was supposed to be a perfect national religion. They thought that they would only win victory over the enemy if they practiced noobism, yet now they squabbled among themselves. Kougle Van Korn then had relized what he had done in trying to make the people worship him as a god, it was a bad idea and so he outlawed what he created.

The truck had arrived to the broken city of Saffron, it was silent, few people still walked the streets; it was not the same city. When the hundreds of soldiers first saw the sight a lot of emotions went through them, all of them sadness, it surged through them. It made several men shed tears, some looked away from the sad site, while some couldn’t stop starring. Even some of the pokemon out of the pokeballs were sad.

“OK, let’s unload already!” Lt. Heddle commanded to the whole truck, wiping his watery eyes, “Wait for further instructions!”

The entire truck then unloaded, as the entire caravan did. General Koludo the walked to the waiting mayor of Saffron who was looking quite mad.

“Sorry I’m a little late,” General Koludo said as all the soldiers of lower rank looked and listened to the loud conversation.

“A LITTLE!!!” the mayor shouted as all the soldiers flinched at his words, “You say a little late? You were way late! Five dang hours! Do you know how mad my people are? Do You Realize what you have done? Explain Yourself, NOW!” Even some civilians still walking in the streets stopped and listened.

“At least we arrived, Mr. Mayor!” General Koludo shouted, “We could just leave you know!”

“Ooooooooooo…” several soldiers shouted. Both the men looked at the army.

“You Get Him, General!” Grix shouted. John hit him in the side with the back of his gun to shut him up.

“Fine then you do what you need to, but don’t fail this time!” the mayor then turned his back.

The General then gave orders to all the platoon leaders including Lt. Heddle.

“OK, Hasset, clean up the area around the Pokemon Center and the police station and the buildings surrounding. Lee, take your platoon and clean up the main shopping center and the area surrounding if you can. Pearson, clean up the mess around the park. Heddle, I need your platoon to clean up the Silph building, the hospital, and all the area surrounding. Metty, I need you to………”

“OK, I got orders from the General to clean up the Silph Building, the Hospital, and the area surrounding,” Lt. Heddle said. A large surge of emotion went through Grix when he said the hospital; several questions ran through his head at that second. “OK, so Ronald, John, Amos, Kent, Jake, Kevin, make sure your squads stick together, I don’t want anyone getting lost. I recommend that you use your pokemon to do a lot of the work, I warn you that some of the buildings still standing are not safe, this will be bloody work; there are a lot of civilian fatalities and some may still be alive under the rubble so this will also be a rescue mission, and last there may be some fires so put ‘em out!”

The entire platoon then boarded the truck and drove to the assigned area, going over very bumpy road littered with bricks, rubble, broken cars, and even dead people with a party full of pokeballs still on their belts. Many survivors were still walking the streets looting and looking for loved ones. Many displaced pokemon even roamed the streets looking for their trainers. Some buildings were gutted, some damaged, some leveled, and some burning. As the truck drove some soldiers looked away, while others couldn’t help starring.

The truck finally arrived at the assigned sight, the Hospital and the Silph building. The Silph building had several shattered windows and a devastated interior. Half the hospital was leveled partially still burning. Grix’s parents were in the hospital, Grix didn’t know if they were alright or not.

“I sure hope they’re OK,” Grix said to himself.

“OK, John take your men to those damaged apartments over there.”

“Yes Sir!”

“Lieutenant, could you do me a favor and see if Mr. and Mrs. Tyron are in there?” Grix asked.

“Yes I’ll do that for you,” Heddle replied.

The squad then walked over to a damaged apartment complex. Nearly the entire place was leveled, some areas like stairwells and some walls still stood but few entire rooms were standing. Civilians and their pokemon walked all over the rubbish searching for loved ones.

“Attention all civilians, please withdraw your pokemon and clear the area this is our job now!” John ordered. All the civilians then obeyed and left the area. “OK we need to search for survivors and get them back to our truck!”

“Go Dragonite and Mightyena!” Grix said, releasing his pokemon, “Dragonite use your hydro pump to put out those fires over there, Mightyena try to sniff out any survivors. Mightyena?” Mightyena was looking away from Grix. “Sniff out the survivors, will you?” Mightyena still ignored him. “What’s wrong with you!?”

Grix then withdrew Mightyena. It was obvious that Mightyena was still sad about his old trainer dieing and having to have a new trainer. Dragonite continued to put out the fires while Mightyena was still in his ball doing nothing. All the other soldiers in the squad had their pokemon out and working, they even found a few survivors. Rex had a Vaporeon, a Sandshrew, and a Beedrill. Tom had a Flareon, a Caterpie, a Vulpix, and a Bulbasaur. John had a Pidgeot, a Squirtle, a Raichu, and an Alakazam. The new guy, Jeff only had an Eevee, training was not his largest interest he liked being an army engineer too much to train.

“Time to rest!” Lt. Heddle shouted to the entire platoon after about an hour of working. Several survivors had been found and put on the platoon’s truck. All the men marched to the area around the truck to rest and get a sip from their canteens and the pokemon to be relieved from their work also. Mightyena still didn’t do anything at all, not even drink.

“What’s with your Mightyena?” Tom asked.

“Well he’s new in my party,” Grix replied.

“I had the same trouble when I caught my pokemon,” Jeff said.

“Me too,” Tom said.

“You see, a Hoennian randomly gave him to me when he was about to die a few days ago,” Grix explained, “I remember when my Dragonite was the same, I was ten and my father worked for the Pokemon Lab on Cinnabar. He studied pokemon at the Safari Zone and caught a Dratini for me and it became my starting pokemon. At first he never obeyed, but in time he gained my trust.”

“I see,” John said.

“I’m gonna go look around a little bit,” Grix said getting up.

“Don’t go too far,” John ordered.

Grix walked over to see the hospital wandering if his parents were OK.

“Anything of my parents?” Grix asked Heddle.

“A note said they were transferred,” Heddle said, “Don’t know where though.”

“Thanks,” Grix said hoping they were OK.

Grix then wandered off to a street that was still intact with damaged shops and apartments above them. Some civilians still wandered these streets and some shop owners didn’t abandon their shops. Grix looked at the many shops, some were left alone and some were being looted, some had signs saying “Looters Will Be Shot” Grix kept on until he stood by a shop that said, “Mushwatzian Imports” on the right of the sign was a Kanto flag with a Pokeball and a red background, left was a Mushwatzian flag with a shield with a charizard on it and a crown on top and a banner below with Mushwatzian words on it. Inside the shop were Mushwatzian goods like clothes, crests, jewelry, beer, Mushtos(money) and more. Grix couldn’t help himself, the Mushwatzians anger him and without control fired through the window with his M-1 Garand creating a loud BANG that was heard all over the area. The entire platoon ran to the street he was on in no time, pointing guns at windows, looking for an enemy.

“What the Hell is going on!” Heddle shouted.

“Oh, umm… uh, there was a looter over there and a fired my gun in the air to scare him away,” Grix lied.

“Oh, False Alarm only a looter!” Heddle shouted to all the men and they all groaned.

“Wait I’m getting a radio from the General,” a man shouted, “General Koludo Sir? What, you’re under attack? Charizards?” (He dropped the radio and looked up) “TAKE COVER!”

Several men looked up to sky to see charizards and their riders coming at them at mach speeds. Suddenly pokemon were released and everyone fired their guns at the sky and the pokemon fired off attacks. Several civilians screamed and ran into buildings or wherever they could run. Some soldiers dove into open shop doors when the charizard riders fired off mounted machineguns at the Kanto Troops, some of them ran for their lives while others stood their ground as the bullets came from the sky, hitting the ground causing dust to fly where it hit. Grix jumped into the import shop along with Jeff and John.

The Charizards then did quick hit and run attacks with flamethrowers and fireblasts. They swooped down and attacked with fire attacks, then went back up to attack again. On one strike a chain of flamethrowers set several shirts on fire, as it hit as if the fire dragged across the ground.

“Hydro Pump!” Grix shouted as Dragonite let out a stream of water to put out the fires. The men who were hit with the attacks and their pokemon kept firing at the enemy with little to no success, the enemy were too quick to hit.

“Mightyena, Shadow Ball!” Grix shouted, but Mightyena did nothing, “C’mon were under attack! Dragonite use Hydro Pump!” Dragonite then did several Hydro Pumps into the sky, with little accuracy, the enemies were too fast. Machine guns, fire, and now Dragon Claw. The Charizards flew low and quick slashing with their claws. They flew by and slashed the men and their pokemon; as one slashed a man spun in a circle and fell with bloody claw marks…….

The Platoon was beginning to lose hope…

 

[Orre Gunslinger]

That just for some reason sounded dull, try to make it more exciting!!!

 

[The Dean of Suds]

You bored me. I think if you put a little more effort into it, it would be excellent. Just work on grammar and description. You can improve drastically if you work a little harder.

 

[The_Fallen_Comrade]

like everyone else, your story was slightly dull, try to make it more like the actual world war II. so like british strategic bombings, the russian's courage at retaking stalingrad, the american landing of normandy
perhaps you can make it like this, lets just say
Kanto: russian
Hoenn: british
Johto: american

that way, with the countries, it blends in with ur story, as Kanto is already taken (like the russians). and the sevii island residents can be compared with the polish

gud luck

note: im expert in wwII warfare
u cud also put sum more guns, call the mushwatzian guns flak 88s and stuff, relate to wwII weaps.

and again
gud luck
i like forward to this