The Forest and I, (My Last Entry to Serebi)

[Shiny_deoxys]

Well everybody, it has been great being here with you guys. I have enjoyed sharing all of my writing with you and hearing your responses. You all have helped me be a great writer, and it is with a humble heart that I leave you. I have decided to serve a mission for my church in Hiroshima, Japan for the next two years. With this goodbye I have written a poem for you all to enjoy. Thank you so much!
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The Forest and I

Uphold the Balance
Assert Space and Time
All is one to one as I.

Tranquility reigns where’re I go
Perfect the precious equilibrium
Light and Darkness
Melody and Harmony.

Of Life

And Death.

The peaceful serenity of my Nature
Whereas all flows in Harmony
Indescribable Peace of perfect Steadiness
Held together by Unwavering Hands of Character.

Through Pond and Creek
Of the lush and painted Forest
In which is governed all I see.
And what I see is not but now,
But All Eternity.

See the Equality
The Circle perfected
Held up through me
As with Nature.

Laughing and Giggling Brooks,
Are not delightful
Without the plinking and falling over stone
To hedge up the way.
Swishing and sloshing only to fall again
Into murky depths of ponds.

Beauty of the Lone Pine
Which stands towering all other shrubbery
Reaching clouds for solace
Holding earth for safety.
Lonely his life for ages stood
Unfelt by ground or sky.

Tranquility of the Orphan of life is here,
Shivering from the Ice of Separation.
Holds fast to the branches of the Lone Pine,
Which in turn drinks from the Giggling Brook.

Each Melody working in Harmony.
Each a Darkness enhancing the light.
And so with me this forest is
The Death that make my Life complete!​

 

[Flaming Lip]

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I loved the beautiful metaphores in this. You really did a great job. Its a shame that you're leaving. This is the first thing I've read by you and its to late for much to be said. Enjoy Hiroshima!

Anyway, this is lovely, just lovely. I can tell much thought was put into it. And the message is brilliant: Death is not to be feared, its just part of life.

Lovely, Lovely, Lovely.

 

[The Great Butler]

That was a lovely poem. Excellent work......it's sad to see a writer of your caliber go.

Good luck in your mission.

 

[katiekitten]

SD! *hugs* You gotta go? Aw... Well, you will be doing a good thing, and good luck in Heroshima.

Onto the poem. It is simply... beautiful. *sighs* Speaks of true things, with lovely metaphors like Byzantium said.

It will be sad to see you go, but we will be waiting for you when you return. Good luck!

 

[Naesala]

Exellent.Superb it should be said.I don't really know what else to say... but I you hope have fun in hiroshima!My kitten Annie{real cat}says she likes your poem and hope's you have fun as well.

 

[Sike Saner]

Uphold the Balance
Assert Space and Time
All is one to one as I.​

As soon as I read that, I knew I was in for something good. ^^

Beauty of the Lone Pine
Which stands towering all other shrubbery
Reaching clouds for solace
Holding earth for safety.
Lonely his life for ages stood
Unfelt by ground or sky.​

Terrific. This part stands out, and I would say it's my favorite. Those last two lines in particular are very excellent.

Each Melody working in Harmony.
Each a Darkness enhancing the light.
And so with me this forest is
The Death that make my Life complete!​

Absolutely beautiful. ^^


This is a piece of very high quality and beauty, one of the finest poems I've read in some time. You've given us a simply wonderful work of wordcraft here, one which provides a nice and most worthy note to go out on. Farewell, and good luck to you on the road ahead! ^^

 

[Kutie Pie]

Oh my gosh, this is beautiful Shiny Deoxys!

I love this poem. With all of the metaphors and personification, it's hard to hate.

I'm going to miss you for two years. I'll read your fics and reply (once) and then wait for TWO YEARS for the update. Why does missonary work have to be painful?!

But then, girls have a choice, not guys. MUAH HA HA HA*SHOT and struck by lighting* Of course, I'll miss you. (I had no idea you're Mormon! YAY!)

Lucky! You go to Japan! Hey! That means Asia is getting missonaires! Wait, my history teacher was in South Korea for his mission. Never mind.

Well, see you Shiny Deoxys. Miss you a lot.

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*Kutie Pie* Back in black!