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The Johto Journey (forgive me for the unoriginal title)

Missingno. Master

Poison-type Trainer
Chapter 1; New Bark Beginnings

BRRRRIIIINNGG!

That was the sound that 10-year-old Jason Golde heard on that fine Friday morning. Jason sat up in his bed, yawned, and smashed his fist on the alarm clock that caused him much grief every morning at 9:32 A.M.. Exiting his small bedroom, Jason walked sleepily down the hall, descended the stairs, and from there, the fantastic aroma of bacon led him right into the kitchen.

"Eat up!" said Jason's mother. Though she was in her late thirties, Jason's mom looked every bit as attractive as the general teenage girl. She stood by the stove, upon which a frying pan was placed over the open flame, containing several strips of sizzling pork. About five of these aforementioned bacon strips had been placed on Jason's plate, roughly an inch away from his eggs. Jason sleepily picked up his fork and slowly proceeded to eat his breakfast.

"Come on, Jason, move a little faster," urged his mother. "You don't want to be late for getting your first Pokemon today!" These words appeared to have a magical effect on Jason, for almost instantly after his mother had stopped talking, Jason had wolfed down his bacon and eggs with all the speed of a starved Munchlax, and had raced upstairs. Within minutes, Jason emerged from the staircase, sporting a red sweatshirt, a pair of yellow shorts with a black stripe going down either side, and a matching yellow baseball cap stuck onto his head backwards. Slung over his back was a sturdy-looking yellow backpack.

"How do I look?" he asked his mom. Truthfully, Mrs. Golde thought he should've combed his hair, but knew he really wanted to begin his Pokemon journey. "YOu look great, dear," she said. "Now, before you leave, don't forget this." And she took out of her pocket a wristwatch that Jason recognized as a PokéGear. He snatched it out of her hand with a quick "Thanks, mom," and raced out the door towards Professor Elm's lab.

Soon, Jason approached the lab of Professor Elm, but he could tell all was not right. A young guy about Jason's age with long red hair, dressed all in black, came racing down the road, three Pokeballs in his hand. Then Jason saw the slightly balding Professor Elm in hot pursuit, a pair of Pokeballs in his hand. Jason decided to go after them, and find out from Elm what was happening. Eventually, after much twisting, turning, and running, the Professor had the red-haired guy cornered in an alley next to the lab. Jason then caught up with them, stood behind the professor, and panted "Prof-professor... Elm... What's... go-going... on..?" Professor Elm, not looking away from the guy, said angrily "That no-good punk stole the three starter Pokemon, that's what!" That guy then smirked evilly and spoke up.

"That's right. I stole the Pokemon. And I ain't ashamed to admit it. Know why? Cuz I'm gonna get away with it. Hey, if you want 'em back so badly, why not battle me for them?" "I only have two Pokemon on me," growled Elm. "Actually, I have another one in my lab-" "Uh, uh, uh," interrupted the guy, shaking his head. No going into that lab of yours. Or anywhere else where there's a phone, for that matter! And if you do, I might have to visciously attack you. Even if you do manage to call the police, by the time they get here, you'd be nothing but raw hamburger." Professor Elm then realized that Jason hadn't been seen. "Jason!" he hissed. "Go into my lab and grab the Pokeball off the table!" Jason nodded, and raced away. Unfortunately, the guy saw this. "AHA!" he roared. "Havin' your little underling call the police, eh? I won't have it." He threw the three Pokeballs that were still in his hand. "Totodile! Chikorita! Cyndaquil! Come out and destroy!" With that, the Pokeballs exploded open, revealing an aqua blue bipedal reptile Pokemon with a large set of jaws, a light green dinosaur-like Pokemon with a leaf emerging from its head, and a blue-and-cream mouse with a long snout and flames shooting from its back. The foursome raced after Jason into the lab. Professor Elm took off after them.

Jason had grabbed the Pokeball off of the table at the far end of the lab, when he turned around, and found himself cornered by Cyndaquil, Chikorita, and Totodile. Professor Elm then raced into the lab, and with a great leap, one that might spark the envy of a Doduo, landed at Jason's side. He said "If it's a battle you want, it's a battle you'll get! Beedrill! Dunsparce! GO!" he cried, throwing his Pokeballs. Out of them exploded a dangerous-looking bee Pokemon, with stingers for forelegs, plus a huge stinger jutting out of its ***, and a small, yellow serpentine Pokemon with a rather large head, a blue-and-white striped pattern on its back, and a pair of rather small wings, a drill-esque protrusion coming from its rear end. Both Pokemon hovered in midair before their trainer. Jason threw the Pokeball he had picked up off the table. Out of it emerged a spherical Pokemon, purple in color, bearing a skull-and-crossbones symbol below its simple face. Pores jutted out all over its body, and every pore seemed to seep a yellow gas. It was a Koffing.

"Hah!" roared the guy. "Those Pokemon look wimpy and weak. Totodile, Water Gun the purple blob. Chikorita, blast the winged snake with Razor Leaf. And Cyndaquil, give that stinger-loaded shrimp a taste of your Ember." Obediently, Totodile unleashed a stream of water from its massive maw, Chikorita spun the leaf on its head not unlike a helicopter blade, shooting leaves out of it, and Cyndaquil shot a stream of rather feeble-looking flame from its mouth. The professor was quick to react. "Dunsparce, use Dig to avoid the Razor Leaf! Beedrill, use Protect!" Spinning its drill-like tail, Dunsparce struck the lab floor, and dug itself into a hole, watching the leaves soar overhead. Beedrill took on a faint blue glow, and seemed to snicker as the Ember dealt it no damage. Koffing, however, was much less prepared for the Water Gun, and took it in the face. Jason panicked. "AH! Um, Koffing, oh, use... Smog?" The water onslaught ended, and Koffing inhaled deeply. It then opened its mouth, and with a rather repulsive belching noise, sprayed a cloud of smelly gas towards the Totodile. Totodile was engulfed in the Smog, and after a few seconds of coughing, emerged from the smog looking faint, its forehead having taken on a purple tinge. "It's poisoned," explained Elm. Then, before anything else, Totodile fell over, fainted. The guy scowled, and held out a Pokeball, returning Totodile to it.

"Stupid weakling." he muttered. "Ah, well. Cyndaquil, attack! Use Ember again!" Cyndaquil opened its mouth, but before any fire could form, Elm called out "Now, Dunsparce!" The Land Snake Pokemon emerged, butt-first, out of the ground, hitting Cyndaquil dead on. The Cyndaquil flew across the lab, and fell at the guy's feet, unconscious. It then automatically launched the ember attack, which struck an unwary Chikorita. Chikorita screeched in alarm and pain as it caught fire. However, the fire went out in a matter of seconds, but Chikorita had fainted. Positively furious, the guy returned Cyndaquil and Chikorita to their Pokeballs. "They're all worthless." he muttered. He then made for the door. "Call the police if you want," he called, "But you'll never catch me! No authority figure can overcome Brad Silver!" With that, he ran towards the entrance of Route 29.

"Jason," said Professor Elm, "You weren't too bad back there with Koffing." "Thank you, sir," said Jason. "But what am I going to do for a starter Pokemon, now that that Brad idiot's stolen them all?" Elm smiled. "Don't worry about that. Because you helped me out back there, I'm gonna let you keep that Koffing." Jason exclaimed "You mean it?! YES! I get my first Pokemon after all!" Elm then held out five Pokeballs in one hand, and a red box in the other. "These are your Pokeballs and Pokedex," he said. "The Pokeballs are for catching wild Pokemon, you can pick more up at any Pokemart. And the Pokedex is a digital encyclopedia of all Pokemon in the Johto region! I daresay you'll find it useful on your journey." "Thanks, professor!" said Jason, leaving the lab, and approaching his life as a Pokemon trainer.
 

Goldyoshi

I > You
I see that this has gotten no reviews at all, so I am going to review it for you. :)

The beginning of the story is very fast-paced, with little description of Jason himself. Personally, I prefer to reveal the last name of characters by som eother way, but that tends to be just me. I like how you managed to perform a twist on the Silver thing, but so far, it smells mostly of trainer fic (however, the direction you've chosen COULD unwind into something else).

As for grammar errors and spelling, you did wonderfully! Perhaps you forgot a period in the dialogue once, which looks slightly odd, but other than that, I remember nothing wrong. You spelled all of the Pokemon's names right, which is great.

The shouting of the name seems cliche to me, as does the 'I'm get away with this!' attitude of Brad, but I like how rather than just letting Jason get away and attacking the professor, he sent some Pokemon after Jason himself. Maybe if he had just used one Pokemon for Jason, however, then maybe he could have actually won the fight...but what fun would THAT be? A bad guy winning at the beginning of the fic.

Overall, the story has a few detail problems, and maybe splitting some of the bgger paragraphs would be better, but the grammar and spelling were wonderflu, and I think you did the battle quite nicely, as few people can actually do that. Looking forwardto seeing more.
 

Missingno. Master

Poison-type Trainer
Thanks for reviewing. I might make it go a different way, but for now it'll be kinda trainer fic-y. Here's chapter 2.

Chapter 2; Arriving at Cherrygrove City

Jason had left New Bark Town hours ago, and was strolling through the beautiful grassy plains of Route 29. So far, all the Pokemon he had seen were nothing more than the common Pidgey and the odd Rattata every now and again. He was thinking to himself, "What am I going to catch? I can't beat all the gyms with just a Koffing". But just as that thought ran through his mind, he saw something ahead.

It was a small brown Pokemon, with its tiny arms outstretched. There was a large flap of skin between the bottom of each arm, and the Pokemon's sides. In this respect, it almost resembled a kite. But no kite, Jason imagined, would have a small head poking up from the top, nor a pair of small, dark brown ears poking up from aforementioned head. And if it were a kite, it definitely would have a smaller tail. Indeed, this thing's tail was enormous. In fact, it had been perched upon its tail, as though it was one big, beefy leg. Jason didn't know what it was, but then remembered the Pokedex that Professor Elm had given him. He took it out of his pocket, opened the cover, and found a note taped inside. It read

"Jason,
Hold out Pokedex toward Pokemon
Press blue button to scan Pokemon
Prof. Elm"

Jason shrugged, aimed the Pokedex at the brown Pokemon, and pressed the blue button. A few beeping noises occurred, and a picture of the Pokemon appeared on the Pokedex's screen. A mechanical voice then came out of the Pokedex, saying


"Sentret, the Scout Pokemon. It stands on its tail so it can see a long way. Should it spot an enemy, it cries out lously to warn others of its kind."

Since this Sentret was looking the other way, Jason thought, It'd be best to just throw a Pokeball at it now. So Jason took one of his empty Pokeballs off his belt, pressed the button to enlarge it, and hurled the Pokeball at the Sentret. THe ball struck the Scout Pokemon square on the back. Hovering back a few inches, the ball opened, bathing Sentret in a red light. In a few seconds, Sentret was indistinguishable from the light, and had been sucked into the ball, along with the red light. The ball landed on the ground, and began to wobble, its button flashing red. Jason stared at it, waiting for it to stop wobbling, when then...

FLASH! With a brilliant burst of light, Sentret broke free of the Pokeball! It was facing Jason, now, and didn't look too happy. However, Jason wasn't all that worried about this. "I can take that thing on," he thought to himself. With that, he took Koffing's Pokeball off his belt and tossed it, calling "Koffing, it's go time!" In another brilliant burst of light, Koffing appeared. It hovered in midair between Jason and Sentret, smoke puffing from its pores every so often. Jason was ready for battle.

Sentret, however, was not. It leaned its tiny head back, opened its tiny mouth wide, and bellowed out an earsplitting "SENTREETT!!". "That can't be good," Jason remarked to Koffing. "Koff," the Koffing nodded in agreement. Sure enough, mere seconds after Sentret's scream, nearby trees and bushes began to rustle. THen slowly, a large number of Sentret, equally angry-looking as the first, emerged from the foliage. They formed a circle around Jason and Koffing.

"RUN!" screamed Jason. And run they did! Jason and Koffing ran and floated respectively towards one smaller Sentret, and with amazing agility, Jason leapt over the Sentret. Not too big of a feat considering he only jumped over the smallest Sentret in the bunch, but there was no time to think about that; Jason had to keep running, for the Sentrets were giving chase. Some had dismounted their tails and were trying to run. Others were bouncing on their tails, not unlike a Spoink. Jason kept running. For about five minutes he saw nothing more than field and trees, but eventually, he saw what had to be the entrance to....

"Cherrygrove City!" gasped Jason. He put on more speed and within a minute, was within the city limits. He saw no benefit in that, however, as it seemed the Sentret would be able to enter the city easily. Suddenly, a clown-like Pokemon landed on the ground before Jason, probably having jumped over its head.

"Mr. Mime, use Barrier!" a voice croaked from behind Jason. Mr. Mime waved its hands around slowly and backed up. For a moment, it seemed as though nothing had happened. Then, the Sentrets all charged towards Jason.

"SMACK!" The Sentrets hit the Barrier as one, and were flattened up against the invisible wall. Slowly, they picked themselves up, and dejectedly walked back into Route 29. Jason turned around to look at his rescuer. It was an elderly man, with pure white hair and a beard to match. He was dressed in a light blue robe, and held a twisted and gnarled cane in his hand.

"Nice to meet you," he said. "You.. you saved me!" Jason gasped, still attempting to catch his breath. The man nodded. "I bet you're a rookie trainer?" JAson nodded somewhat shamefully. The man chortled. "Ha. There's no reason to be ashamed," he said. "Everyone's a rookie trainer at some point. Why, even I was starting out, with nothing but a Mime Jr. and a desire to become Pokemon Champion. But I digress. My name is Clarence. Just call me Mr. Cherrygrove, though." "Mr. Cherrygrove?" inquird Jason, confused. "Isn't that the name of the city?" "Indeed it is," answered Mr. Cherrygrove. "My great-great grandfather first founded this city, naming it after himself. So what's your name?" "Jason Golde," Jason said.

"Well, Jason Golde," said Mr. Cherrygrove, "I think I'll give you a tour of this city." And they began to walk around, Mr. Cherrygrove pointing out various locations, such as the Pokemon Center, the Pokemart, his own house, and the path to Route 30. Finally, they stopped at a beach. "And this is the sea, as you can see," said Mr. Cherrygrove, chuckling slightly at his own bad pun. "Here, we will have our annual Qwilfish Festival tomorrow."

"Qwilfish Festival?" asked Jason. "Yes, Qwilfish Festival. A long time ago, this city's waters used to be populated by Quagsire. And they were part of an important festival, where they'd take any spherical object, take it to a waterfall, shoot it up the waterfall with Water Gun, and let the items float back to us. Legend had it that whatever item returned last was lucky." "Sounds cool," said Jason. "Well, it was. Until about five years ago." said Mr. Cherrygrove gravely. "See, the Quagsire got it in their heads somehow that we didn't object to them taking our spherical objects, and so they progressed to not returning them. One thing let to another, and eventually, the town was being robbed by the Quagsire on a daily basis. Then one day, I don't know if it was odd ocean currents or what, but a large school of Qwilfish had gathered near our beach. They saw the Quagsire returning to the sea with their loot one morning, and a fierce battle ensued. Long story short, in three days time, the Qwilfish had driven out the Quagsire, found their secret hideout, and busied themselves by returning to us everything that was stolen. And that's not easy for Qwilfish, as they have no appendages of which to speak, unless you count their tail. Needless to say, we were able to convince the Qwilfish to stay, and the anniversery of the end of that battle was celebrated every year afterwards with a Qwilfish-centric festival."

"Wow," said Jason. "What exactly goes on at the Qwilfish Festival?" "Well," said Mr. Cherrygrove, "first there's a fishing contest to see who can catch the biggest Qwilfish, and after that, we have a Qwilfish Battling Competition. The winner of that competition gets a TM 36, which teaches Sludge Bomb." "What's a TM?" asked Jason. "A TM stands for Technical Machine. It's a disc-like device that automatically teaches a compatible Pokemon a certain move. There are fifty TMs in all, each teaching a specific move corresponding to their number. TM 36, as I stated, teaches Sludge Bomb. The most powerful Poison attack. Perfect for any Qwilfish." Jason nodded. "Can anybody be part of the festival?" "Of course," said Mr. Cherrygrove. "Just show up tomorrow."

Jason smiled. He was going to be part of the Qwilfish festival, and possibly even catch his first Pokemon! He walked into the Pokemon Center, where he reserved a room for the night. THe room was small, containing a bunk bed, a dresser, and a table. Jason flopped down on the bottom bunk, imagining himself catching a Qwilfish and winning battles with it and Koffing.
 

Master Alltro-N

The Deserts Spirit
Hmm, Nice story Missingno. Master, I like it. I thought it was quite interesting starting with a Koffing, it is quite out of the norm. Qwillfish Festival sounds interesting, can't wait

Master A-N Out
 

Skysthelimit

Hoenn's Superstar
SO I am going to review on Chapter one.

First the story went SOO fast, it literally made my head spin. Ouch, I think I got a case a whiplash too.

Decription was lacking.

Also, the characters are flat.

So basically What I saw was,

"Wow Three Of the rarest pokemon in Johto were stolen by a ten year old, but thats okay.... heres a pokemon Jason"

Maybe you could Slow down the pase and add some adjectives somewhere in time for chapter three.

Good Luck
 
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