The Journy

[Jacx]

Hey. This is my first fic and i´m not very good at writing either xD
I´m 11 years old and i live in sweden so my english stinks.. Anyway here it comes i hope u.. ehm understand it x)






Chaper 1 : The Begining




Wake up Ricky!
You have been nagging about this day for the last 4 years and now I will not allow u to miss it! In the room, a white haired women, with a red Shirt and White pants stood up yelling at her 14 year old son.
What Is it morning already ? in the bed a brown haired boy sat straight up rubbing his eyes. When he finally could look he saw his mom standing in front of him yelling something..
Come on now , Hurry up honey, you don’t want to be late getting your pokemon right ?
Oh right .Ricky said and hasty jumped off the bed and accidentally slipped on the rug and fell onto his pokemark cushion. He jumped of the cushion , put on his red and white shirt and matching pants, and ran down the stairs.. Oh I can’t believe this day has come. His mother said with tears in her eyes.
Ricky said nothing just smiled at his mother who was still crying and gave her a big hug before picking up his packed bag and throwing the break fest into his mouth.
. Bye mom I’ll be back in a quarter or so. He said before running out of his house and into the laboratory just some blocks away from his own house Hello Ricky. A little bit late I see.. Said a Grey haired man wearing a white shirt with some pictures on it and matching jeans.
The man was named Alberto Frotry Wems . But the neighbors called him Professor Wems. He was the pokemon professor of the Ream region.
I’m sorry professor I over slept..
Well you should be lucky that I saved u one pokemon. The professor said.
What are the starters already gone ?! I Always wanted an Cyndaquil. The Brown haired boy said with almost tears in his eyes.
Well…you could always wait 1 more year and come back you know.
Never ! I finally got mom to let me go on a journey with pokemons.. She is so over protecting me.
Haha, she is not over protecting you, she is only a mother . The pokemon professor said smiling.
Well back to what I was saying . I saved you one pokemon, it’s not a cyndaquil but I think you will like him . The professor said opening a pokemon ball. A red beam struck out and took the form of a beige little creature.. Wow a eevee. The boy said surprised.
Eeev. The little creature growled confused.
He is yours now and I hope u will treat him with love. The professor said, still smiling widely.
Oh, and before u go I have something for you. The professor handed the new trainer some pokeballs and a pokedex.
There you go. He said.
Don’t forget to say goodbye to your mom now! The smiling professor said.
I wont. The boy replied smiling widely..
Okey , eevee. I’m your new trainer and I will train you to beat other pokemons in battles. The boy said to the confusing beige little creature..
The eevee looked at the boy confusing then said . That’s sounds good to me, Not looking so confounded anymore.
The new trainer replied. Good lets go say goodbye to my mom then!
Ah Ricky.. I cant believe this day have come .. Said the white haired women with tears leaping from her eyes. I guess that you will be fine. now when u have your own pokemon and everything. Eevee . The little creature growled happily. You do not have to worry about a thing mom. I will be just fine. After squeezing the life out of Ricky his mom finally lets go of him, and he starts his journey with his first pokemon.
Okey eevee, it’s only you and me now. The new trainer said.
Yeah. Now lets go beat some pokemon! The Eevee replied happily.
You got a hardy nature right. Said the trainer picking up his pokenav that he got from his mom and pointing it at the eevee . Yep a hardy you are. He said after he got response from the pokenav. mom and pointing it at the eevee . Yep a hardy you are. He said after he got response from the pokenav.
Apparently . the little creature replied still as happy.
After waking to route 4 he decided to rest a bit. But when he was going to sit down he heard some one yelling.
Hey you there with the eevee!
When he turned around he saw a girl trainer, with big eyes and long blonde hair holding a skitty in her arms, she was approximately in the same age as him to.
Yeah what do you want ? He asked the blond haired girl.
A battle of course! She replied rolling her eyes.
Umm… Sure bring it on . Ricky replied.
Yeah bring it. The eevee yelled to the skitty.
Okey. Good. I choose you Skitt!

 

[Jacx]

Chapter Two, The First Battle The First Capture


I don’t have a nickname for my pokemon, but it does not matter..Go Eevve
Okey, Skitt let’s start this with a tackle !
Eevee Use your tackle to! Ricky said feeling more confident as the battle begun.
Eevee yelled out a battle cry and collided with the skitty.
Skitt , tackle him again.
Eevee try your tail whip.
Eevee being the faster one of the two pokemons whipped his tail cutely, sharply lowering the skittys defense.
Watch out . The boy trainer yelled to his eevee.
The eevee tried to jump out of the range for the skitty to tackle him but it was to late. Eevee was tackled heavy and collided with a big rock .
Good Skitt, Now finish him with another tackle..!
I don’t think so. Eevee use your quick attack now!
The eevee obeyed his trainer and tackled skitty hard with a quick attack, throwing her into the air, fainted.
How ..? The girl trainer asked confused.
I lowered your Skittys defense with the tail whip, remember ? The boy trainer replied proud.
Way to go eevee! We won our first battle ever! The Boy trainer said hugging his pokemon.
Yeah …. I rock. The eevee replied happily. And u did kind of good to. He said to his trainer.
Yeah, we both rock. The trainer said smiling widely.
After receiving some poke dollars from the girl Ricky spotted something yellow in the bushes.
He picked up his pokedex.
Pikachu. Mouse pokemon . The pokedex said in a electro voice before shutting down. Darn , I need to get this thing repaired. Ricky thought.
Okey, eevee use your quick… But before he could finish his command he saw the girl throwing a pokeball at the pikachu. Hey. That pikachu is mine. He said.
Nuh Ah, I always wanted one. She said. But the pokeball opened again and the pikachu came out angry. Yes. Ricky cheered. Okey now eevee quick attack. In an extreme speed the little creature tackled the pikachu hard, sending it hitting a tree. Pika! The yellow creature said angry. And attacked with a thundershock.
Eevee take cover behind that rock. Ricky commanded.
The eevee jumped behind a rock and took no damage of the attack.
Good now use a growl!
The little creature growled loudly lowering the pikachus defense. Good eevee. Ricky said.
Now. Go pokeball! The Boy trainer yelled throwing a pokeball at the pikachu.
The ball shook a little before the red little button finally blinked. Yes I caught a pikachu! Ricky said happily , thanking his eevee.
Does this means that he will travel with us now ? The eevee asked.
Yeah, he will travel with us. Rick replied smiling.

Gah..I got to stock up in pokeballs! The girl trainer said.
Of course u can not just bring one pokeball with you. The boy trainer said harsh.
Whatever. The girl trainer replied rolling her eyes.
Anyway I have to go to a pokemon center with my skitty. C’ya.
Okey.. Bye. Lets see what attacks this pikachu haves. Go pikachu. Ricky said opening his pokeball.
A red beam flew out, hitting the ground and took the shape of the mouse pokemon.
Pika? The Pikachu said confused.
Hi, I´m your new trainer and I will train you to …
Oh here he goes again. The eevee interrupted rolling his eyes.
Let me take this part. The beige creature said.
Ehm..Okey whatever. Ricky said looking at his eevee
The eevee said something in pokemon language that Ricky could not understand to the pikachu.
While the two pokemon talked Ricky took up his pokedex to look at the pikachus attacks and hoped that it would work.. This time it worked.. Perfectly.
Thundershock
Quick Attack
Volt tackle
Dig
The pokedex said in an robotic voice this time.
Wow. His mother must have been really strong. He thought.
After a while the mouse pokemon finally approached Ricky.
Hi there, Ricky said…. I’m your trainer and I will.
I know your eevee already said all those things to me. The pikachu said looking at the eevee.
Okey good. I was thinking of giving you guys nicknames… If that is okey with you?
Why not. The eevee said looking back at the pikachu.
Sure… That sounds good. The pikachu said and turned his eyes on his new trainer.
Good.. I will call u pikachu…. Hmm Sparky! Does that sound good ?
Yeah I like it ! The pikachu said looking less nervous then before.
Good. And you eevee…umm… I don’t know.. I cant think of a good nickname for you right now. But it will come, Eventually.
It’s okey. But how about call me Rambo, or The Rock…. Or maybe Super Power?
The eevee said jumping around exited.
Ehm… I don’t think those nicknames would fit an eevee.. do you ?
Not really but they would fit me right.. I´m the rock! The eevee said dreaming.
Hahaha, You could always dream buddy. The trainer said returning his pokemons into their pokeballs.
After walking for about 1 hour Ricky finally arrives in Erop Town.
When he walks into the towns pokemon center he spots the girl that he battled.
Hey there. He said smiling.
Oh hey. Did not see you. They girl said happily.
I caught a totodile right after we battled. The girl said exited.
Wanna see it ? She asked.
Sure I have never seen one in the real life . only on TV . The boy said.
Go Fear! She said sending out a blue pokemon with a giant jaw.
Oh I want a nickname like that. Eevee complained inside his pokeball.
Wow. It looks cute. In a strange way . The boy trainer said glaring at the big jaw pokemon.
Dile. The totodile said harsh .
Yeah I like him. The girl said returning the confused totodile to his pokeball.
I did not get you name by the way. He said..
Oh It’s Alexa.. What’s yours?
My Name is Ricky . He Replied smiling
Yes, Can I help you? The nurse said.
Oh right I forgot. The boy trainer said giving the nurse his pokeballs.
Okey, I will take your pokemons for a while. I will say when they are healed.. Take a seat in the time.
Okey sounds good . Ricky said smiling at the nurse.
After 10 minutes the nurse gave Ricky his pokemons back fully healed.
That’s one cocky little eevee u got there… The nurse said looking at eevees pokeball.
I cant help it. That chansey was tickling me! All I only said the truth ..The eevee said harsh.

After booking a room and calling out his pokemon the girl trainer comes in.
Hey. .I did not get a room. the whole center is full.. So I was wondering if I could share this one with you? She asked with puppy eyes..
Sure! He replied looking at her eyes.
I got a spare bed anyway.
After calling out her pokemons she asks the boy:
Do you have anyone to travel with?
No, not right now. He replies.
Want to travel with me? I heard it could get pretty lonely on the roads.
I heard that to.. So why not it could be pretty fun anyway. He said.
Okey cool!
After 10 minutes both trainers fall asleep.
Hello. I´m The leader of Ricky’s team. The eevee said.
What team, you are only 2 pokemons ? The skitty interrupted cocky.
That’s true.. The eevee admitted.
Hello eevee I´m Fear. Said the Totodile.
Hi Fear. This Little shy creature is Sparky. Said the eevee pushing Sparky forward.
Heh..Hey Fear and..Skitt was it ? Sparky said nervous.
Hello. The totodile and skitty said together.
Nice to meet you all. Sparky said.
After 30 minutes of chatting the four pokemons fell asleep.
Next day Ricky waked up with his eevee on top on him.
Hey eevee move it I´m to tired to cuddle.
I don’t want to cuddle 1 want to train. So wake up now! Eevee yelled.
I´m up I´m up! Ricky yelled.
Hey what’s this about . Said an newly waken Alexa.
Nothing. Both said.
After putting their clothes and getting some breakfast, the two trainers where on the road.
Okey next stop Axlera City! There we will get our Flame bag. Ricky said happily.
Yeah we will so totally… But before Alexa could finish two trainers appears from behind a tree. Huh ? Ricky said confused.
I challenge you. The first trainer said pointing at Alexa.
And I challenge you!. The other trainer said pointing at Ricky.
Ehm …Okey . Ricky said maximizing Sparkys pokeball..

 

[Jacx]

Chapter Three . Digging Power

Okey..Sure. Alexa said maximizing Fares pokeball.
Do you think they have been hiding behind that tree all day long? Alexa asked..
They look kinda crazy so they might just have. Ricky whispered to Alexa
I choose you elekid! The odd trainer shouted.
A yellow battery looking creature appeared from the pokeball.
Ele, ele! The Elekid shouted
Go, Sparky! Ricky sended out his shy looking pikachu.
Elekid. Use your thundershock now!
The battery looking pokemon sended out a ball of electricity onto the Pikachu.
Hurry Sparky, Use did now!
the pikachu dug himself underground waiting to attack.
Ehm.. Elekid use your.. Gah you only know electric attacks. The trainer said sadly.
Yes! Now Sparky attack! Ricky commanded.
Sparky jumped out of his hole attacking the elekid heavily knocking him out.
Yes We did it ! Good job Sparky! Ricky cheered.
Pika. The Pikachu said happily.
After receiving poke dollars from the trainer Alexa returned.
Hey there How did your battle go ? Ricky asked
It went awesome. Fear is stronger then I thought! Alexa replied happily.
After waking for what seamed forever the two trainers finally reached Axlera City.
The best thing with this town is that it got a huge mall. Alexa said exited.
Yeah , whatever just let us get our Flame bag now . Ricky said .. not so very exited.
Nuh ah! First I will go and get some tm´s to teach my pokemons then I might go challenge the gym leader but not right now . The girl trainer said.
Well I guess that’s an good idea . Ricky replied and entered the huge mart.
This is big. Ricky said looking around..
And this is only the first floor to. Alexa replied happily..
Girls. Always shopping, shopping and shopping.. Ricky though.
When they reached the third floor Ricky went to the tm and hm floor.
Before hms was rare but now you could buy them in almost every pokemart.
Let’s split up and we meet outside in 15 minutes. Alexa said running up to the clothes floor.
I thought she was going to buy some tms. Eevee said inside his pokeball.
I thought so to..But what ya going to do.. Girls are girls..
After buying two tms : secret power and dig. Rick is about to go when he spots a thunder stone and other stones on the 1 floor.
3000 $!? I only have 23 $ Gah … Well to bad Sparky could have evolved with that one..So could eevee though..
When he finally leaves he teaches eevee the tms that he bought . Great now both of my pokemon have strong attacks.. After 10 minutes he finally spots Alexa.
Where have you been?! I have been waiting forever. He says.
Oh I´m sorry. I found such a cute looking jacket and a tough looking bandana ..To bad I could not afford them though. She said.
But I bought some tms anyway..
So did I. Ricky said.
Good lets go challenge that gym leader now then! Alexa says exited.
Yeah lets do that. Eevee shouted.
Yeah…What eevee said… Ricky said.
Okey you can go first. Alexa said nervous.
Hmm Why not.. Here we go. Ricky said walking into the big gym.
After beating the gym trainers and healing his pokemon Ricky finally gets to fight the gymleader.
My name is Brandy. I´m the Gym Leader of Axlera, And I will burn you to a crisp.
Whatever . Ricky said rolling his eyes.
2 vs. 2 ? The gym leader asked
Sure.
Okey . I choose u Charmander! A lizard looking pokemon appears in front of the gym leader.
Go Eevee. Ricky shouted sending out his Eevee who started to Glare at the Charmander.
Charmander. Start things out with an ember!
Eevee counter with an quick attack now! The eevee hasty attacked the lizard looking pokemon throwing it into a big boulder.
Charmander are you okey? Asked the gym leader, worried about his pokemons health..
The Charmander nodded.
Good. Use another ember now!
Eevee watch out! Yelled the boy trainer , but it was to late. The fire had already reached eevees body.
Eevee! Yelled the Beige pokemon in pain.
Come on eevee you can make it. Ricky said.
Eevee. The eevee said happily.
Good use dig! Ricky commanded
The Eevee hasty dug a hole and jumped into it.
Charmander use double team now! The gym leader commanded.
The Charmander starting making clones of itself .
Okey. Eevee concentrate hard, I know that you can make it. Then attack the Charmander that seems right.
Eevee obeyed and hit the middle Charmander who screamed and the fall to the ground.. Fainted.
Aaw. Charmander return. The gym leader said and returned his pokemon into its pokeball.
Yes you did great eevee. Now return.
I know I Ro..But before the eevee could finish his sentence Ricky returned him to his pokeball.
Okey it’s your turn. Go Sparky! Ricky shouted and sended out his now tough looking pikachu.
Pikaa! Sparky said with burning eyes.
Okey. I chose you Vulpix! A red fox looking pokemon came out of the pokeball.
Vulpiii. It screamed running into battle.
Vulpix use your quick attack. Now ! The gym leader commanded.
Use your quick attack to Sparky! Ricky shouted.
Sparky , being the faster one of the two pokemons attacked harder and made Vulpix flying skywards.
Great. Now use your dig! Ricky commanded.
The pikachu hasty dug itself underground waiting to attack.
Now attack Sparky! Ricky commanded *** the Vulpix landed.
Sparky obeyed and hit the Vulpix , who was thrown right into her trainers arms.. Fainted ..
Return. The Gym leader said and returned his fainted fox pokemon.
Yes , Good job Sparky! The Boy trainer said exited.
I made it, uh uh I made it! The Pikachu sang dancing around.
Yeah take it easy now. Ricky said returning Sparky to his pokeball.
After Receiving the Flame bag and some poke dollars Ricky left, Heading for the mart to buy a thunder stone.
Did you won? Alexa asked him.
Yeah I won. Sparky is stronger then I thought. Ricky said surprised.
Oh great , good job! Alexa said exited.
Thanks, I´m pretty sure that you will beat him easily.. With your totodile being water type. Ricky said.
I think so to. Alexa replied happily.
After buying the thunderstone Ricky did not knew wish pokemon he should evolve…
Go Eevee, Sparky. Ricky said taking out his pokemons..
Hey guys.. I was thinking about evolving one of you. I got a thunderstone but I don’t know wish of you to evolve.. Ricky said confused..
Evolve me evolve ME!!! Sparky Yelled. Please I want to be a Raichu just like my mom was .
Yeah you can evolve him.. I´m strong in this form anyway. Eevee said cocky.
Okey Sparky it is. Rick said moving the thunderstone closer to Sparky. Then a Sparky started to shine , his tiny tail started to become more longer and his paws started to become more tougher. Then when the light faded a Raichu stood in front of him .
Rai! Sparky said happily and surprised.
Wow, You look great Sparky . Ricky said happily.
I KNOW . Sparky Yelled exited.
Yeah you look cool , Whatever return me to my pokeball please. I was just going to take a nap you know… The eevee said..
Okey okey,I will return you both . Ricky said returning his pokemons into their pokeballs.
I won ,I won! Shouted Alexa who just finished her battle at the Gym.
Great I knew you could do it. Ricky said smiling.
And that’s not everything. Fear Evolved! Alexa said smiling widely.
Oh cool, I just evolved Sparky to. Ricky said proud.
The two trainers booked a room for the night at the pokemon center and healed their pokemon before leaving the next morning.
So.. What should we do today then? Ricky asked.
Well, next gym is in Apricot Island. How about getting started going there ? Alexa said.
Yeah but we need a pokemon that knows how to surf… I got the HM but I have no water pokemon, And Fear can only carry one passenger. Ricky said confused..
Then, We just have to go and Catch Another water type pokemon..Right? Alexa asked
Right….Then…Let’s get started . Rick said.
Yeah… Let’s Split up. And we meet at the pokemon center in 3 hours okey ? Alexa asked.
Okey. Bye. Ricky said.
On his way to the river a boy trainer with shaggy clothes challenges him to a battle.
One VS One okey? The Boy trainer ask.
Okey. Go eevee! Ricky Sends out his Hardy nature cocky Eevee.
I choose u Squirtle! The Trainer said and sended out a turtle looking pokemon.
You are going down. The eevee said to the confusing looking Squirtle.
Eevee use secret power now! Ricky commanded.
Eevee jumped and hit the Squirtle with his tail. On this ground secret power looks like a slam. Ricky thought.
Squirtle use surf now! The Shaggy trainer commanded
A huge wave appeared behind the Squirtle who jumped on it .
Ouch! Eevee use quick attack and knock that Squirtle of the wave! Ricky commanded.
Eevee shouted out a battle cry before knocking the Squirtle down of the wave, but got hit by the surf attack and throwed backwards . But thanks to the quick attack the Squirtle also got hit by his own attack and fell down.. Fainted.
Way to go eevee! Ricky Said hugging his eevee..
I said he was going to go down didn’t I? Huh didn’t I? The Eevee said licking his trainer all over the face.

 

[Jacx]

Chapter Four , The New Pokemon

Stupid Squirtle ! As soon as we come to the center I will release you. Do you got that ?

Huh…Can’t even beat a puny eevee.. The Shaggy trainer yelled in anger
.
Hey 1. My eevee is not puny. 2. don’t yell at your Squirtle, it’s not his fault that he got a bad trainer. And 3. instead of releasing him I can take him from you. Ricky screamed at the trainer.

”Whatever take him, I don’t want him anyway!”

The trainer said throwing the Squirtels pokeball to Ricky.

After seeing the shaggy looking trainer walk away, Ricky cheered.

Yes I caught Ehm I mean.. Got a Squirtle !

Now when Ricky haves a water pokemon he decided to look up Alexa ,

As he thought she was not on a beach or something, she was in the “mall” drawling at some pants…Girls . Ricky thought rolling his eyes.

Hello there .. Having a hard time finding a pokemon in here maybe ? Ricky asked cocky.

Oh yeah. Heh I , I , I was just going to buy some pokeballs first you know . Alexa replied nervously .
Well you will not find any pokeballs in those pants you know. Ricky said smiling.

But it’s ok . I got a water pokemon anyway. A Squirtle actually . Ricky said easy.

Oh okey. Great then I guess we should be on or way to Apricot island then. Alexa said sadly.

Yeah, I guess. Ricky said looking into Alexas big puppy eyes. But I can wait a while. Seeing Alexa so wanted to try those pants on.

Oh Thank you! Alexa replied kissing Ricky on the cheek who blushed eminently.

Any time. Ricky thought, seeing Alexas huge smile.

”try it on then”

”not when you are looking, stupid” Alexa said also blushing.

”Oh right sorry” He said after turning around.

”okey. You can look now” Alexa said after 5 minutes.

As he turned around he got stunned. Like a paralyzed magicarp he just stood there with open mouth..

”you look..Great” He said still looking at the girl. She did not only tried the pants on. She had a Blue bandana, a short blue and white shirt and matching pants.

” Thank you “ The girl said, blushing.

” Though it all costs 3200 $, and if I buy it I will only have 400 $ left..”

”BUY IT” Ricky Shouted.

” I mean .. We will get some money when we get our second bag…” He hurried up and said.

”True. I’ll buy it !” Alexa said smiling widely.

After waiting a half-hour the girl trainer finally came out of the shop wearing her new outfit.

” So.. Shall we go then? She asked.

” Oh right. Yeah the beach is not far away from here” The boy trainer replied, still stunned of her beauty”

”Oh Ricky-Boy is in looove in Alexa, Ricky looooves Alexa” The cocky eevee cheered inside his pokeball.

” Shut it you “ Ricky said harsh to his hardy eevee.

” Ricky and Alexa sitting in a tree K.i.s.s.i.n.g “ He heard from the newly evolved Sparky.

” When did u started talking from your pokeball? “ Ricky asked the chubby mouse pokemon”

” When Eevee told me that you are in LOOVE” Sparky replied.

”I’m not in love just to let you know, we are just friends! “ Ricky said harsh hoping Alexa did not hear him.

”Hurry up Ricky!” Alexa shouted from the beach ..

”I’m coming, I’m coming..” Said Ricky who just started to run.

When he finally reached the beach , Alexa already was in water , surfing on her Croconaw..

” Okey. Go Squirtle “

 

[Jacx]

More Chapters will be edited in about 2- 3 days or so

 

[Pikachuu!]

Dude, I understand your from Sweden and all that about your english. But you got to learn how to use speech marks, and don't press the ENTER key after every sentence. Theres plenty of things you can change in that.
I know that I can't really speak en all, as I am writing a new fic (my last one was slain) but make it better dude re-write.

 

[Yami Ryu]

Hey. This is my first fic and i´m not very good at writing either xD
I´m 11 years old and i live in sweden so my english stinks.. Anyway here it comes i hope u.. ehm understand it x)

Hi, I'm 19. And I have read the rules. And I doubt you have even managed that. And you want to know something? I've known a kid that was ten years old, that lived in In Hong Kong, and he has better english than you. So Age and Location Are Not Excuses. It's not an excuse for making a fic that's such an eye sore. That is so rule breaking. That is so shallow and tacky and etc etc etc along that route, that it makes peoples eyes bleed to even think of looking at what you attempt to call chapters let alone a fic.

You've been reported, have a nice day

 

[Jacx]

you are 19 and is on this site ? =/ anyway..let this fick rot then...

 

[Jacx]

oh i meant fic sry ...

 

[Silawen]

I am not defending this guy's story, it is not good in the least, nor am I going to defend that he hasn't read the rules, but age and location definately matter. For an 11 year old his English is very good. I'd like you to learn a foreign language in that short a time. (Especially when you realise that people only start learning a foreign language at the age of 9/10.)

Instead of giving advice and helpful comments you chose to degrade him and act insulting. Yes he should have read the rules, but that's no reason to attack him. You could have just told him to read the rules, report him, and be done with it.

I get very touchy about this, seeing as I had to struggle with the English language myself. It's hard enough trying to talk to someone in a foreign language, let alone with someone reacting to it like that.

Jacx, if you want I can beta your story. You can then re-upload it and stick to the rules better.

 

[Jacx]

I read the rules now..Sry guys =/ i had no idea.. Nah it's okey.. I think i will stop with the fan fic thingy and try to become better at english x) Thanks anyway though