The Last Battle

[angel_fire101]

Prologue:

Two Rocket agents walked into Giovanni's office.

"You wanted to see us, sir?" the first Rocket asked.

"Yes." a tall man sitting in a throne-like chair behind a large desk replied. "I want you to seek out the one named Ash Ketchum."

"But, sir, everytime we've tried to defeat him, he's delivered each of us humiliating defeats." the second Rocket said.

"I don't want you to try and steal anything from him like your previous attempts. I want you to capture him and bring him to me. Use whatever means necessary. I want him alive, though." Giovanni said.

"Are you sure about this, sir?" the first Rocket asked.

"Do I look unsure?" Giovanni yelled, slamming his fist onto the desk. The Persian sitting in his lap slid off and slinked out of the room through the open doorway.

"N-no sir. We will do as you say." the first Rocket stammered. Giovanni seemed to calm down.

"Good. Now go." he said. "And this time, failure is out of the question!"
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Chapter 1: It begins

Ash Ketchum and his friends, May, Max, and Brock were walking down a dusty path toward Glacier Town, where they were to meet up with Lance, the famous Dragon Master.

"How much further?" Ash asked Brock.

Ash was a 14 year old boy with black hair and brown eyes. He wore a blue jacket with a gray hood. A wide U shape was embroidered on the bottom. Many people did not know this, but the part with the U shape was actually a pocket. The black shirt that he wore underneath the jacket was visible where the jacket went out into a V shape. His pants were a teal blue color, and his shoes were blue, like his jacket, with black on them. On his hands, he wore black gloves with a light green color on the wrists. The gloves cut off at his fingers. A red hat with a wide black stripe going across from the front to the back with a green upside down U shape with a dot under it sat on his head. A green backpack with a large red dot and a black stripe going over the dot and across the backpack was on his back. His very first Pokemon, Pikachu, was perched on his shoulder.

"A little less than a mile." Brock replied.

Brock was a little older than Ash. (Maybe 18 or 19.) He had spiky brown hair. No one knew what color his eyes were because he always kept them half closed. (No idea why.) He wore a brown jacket with a green shirt underneath and brown pants. His shoes were a very dark blue. A big blue camping backpack was on his back.

"Wow. We're finally going to meet Lance, the famous Dragon Master!" May said.

May was 14, like Ash. She had light brown hair and beautiful sapphire eyes. She wore a red bandana with a white Poke Ball symbol on her head. Her shirt was also red. She also wore bluish-black shorts with a white skirt looking thing over them. Her shoes were a mixture of red, orange, and white. A yellow pack was strapped around her waist.

"Yeah. I can't wait!" May's little brother, Max, said.

Max was about 9 or 10. He had a blue tint to his hair. His eyes were reddish-brown with thick black glasses. He wore a green shirt with brown shorts and green shoes. A yellow backpack was on his back.

Suddenly, a man jumped out of the bushes at them. He wore a black jump suit with a big red R embroidered on it. Obviously, he was from Team Rocket. A black cap covered his eyes.

"Ooh. Too bad you won't be able to make it." he said. Another man jumped out at them. He was dressed exactly like his partner.

"What do you mean?" Ash asked.

"Our boss has requested us to capture you and take you back to him." the first man said. The second nodded.

"Wait, Giovanni wants me for something?" Ash asked. The two men nodded.

"And what Giovanni wants..." the first said.

"...he gets!" the second finished. The second threw a Poke Ball into the air. "Go, Mightyena!" he shouted. A black and gray Pokemon with red eyes and sharp fangs appeared in front of him. The second Rocket kneeled down beside the Mightyena and whispered something into its ear. He stood back up.

"Now go!" he said. The Mightyena leaped on May. The jump caused her to fly into a tree. She was knocked out. Then, the Mightyena jumped on Brock, knocking him into a tree also. Brock passed out. Lastly, the Mightyena jumped on Max, and knocked him into his sister, knocking him out. That only left Ash. But the Mightyena didn't attack him. It ran back to its trainer. The first Rocket recalled his Pokemon.

Ash was enraged. "What did they ever do to you?" he asked angrily.

"Became friends with you." the second Rocket replied with a sly grin.

"Now you must come with us. The boss wishes to see you." the fisrt Rocket said. Ash started to argue, but the first Rocket grabbed him and pressed down hard on the back of his neck. Ash's head started to hurt and he grew dizzy. Finally, he passed out. The first Rocket threw Ash over his shoulder.

"Call the jet." he said. The second nodded. He pressed a button on a remote which he had pulled from his pocket. A large plane landed in front of them.

"Now let's get back to Headquarters before the boss gets impatient." the first Rocket said, climbing into the plane. The second followed. When the were inside, the plane slowly rose into the air and headed off toward into the sunset.
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Ok, I know that was kinda boring with all of the descriptions and everything taking over most of the story, but I promise the rest of the story will be better. Anyone who reads this, please tell me what you thought!

 

[icemew]

Um, this has a few problems.

Brock was a little older than Ash. (Maybe 18 or 19.)

It's your story, don't you know?

And I thought Ash was older than May, but not they're the same age?

Also...I don't really get why Ash doesn't know who the Rockets are, since you said they'd be defeated by him before a bunch of times, or how come they're successful now if he's been beating him.

It sounds like something interesting is going on, but those things I mentioned are kind of distracting.

 

[angel_fire101]

Well, I decided to make May and Ash the same age. (It is my story, anyway, right?) As for Brock, I wanted all of them to be teenagers. (except for Max)

And Ash didn't say "Who are you?" he said "What do you mean?", as in what are you talking about?

And the reason for the Rockets capturing Ash, I just wanted to make the story more interesting. I've read plenty of stories where people do that.

 

[~*Nobody*~]

Him I like the story so far.... but why do the rockets whant Ash anyway?

 

[angel_fire101]

That's what this chapter's all about, Legendary Suicune Girl of Pokemon.

Chapter 2: Team Rocket Headquarters

The two Rockets arrived at the Team Rocket Headquarters a few hours later. They walked in to Giovanni's office. Giovanni looked up when the walked in.

"Did you get him?" he asked.

"Yes sir." the first Rocket said.

"Excellent. Put him in one of the old Rocket's rooms until tomorrow." Giovanni said.

"Yes sir." the Rockets said. They walked out of the office and down the hall. Pretty soon, they reached a long, seemingly endless hallway lined with rooms that the Rockets stayed in.

"Where's that empty room at that the boss was talking about?" the first Rocket asked.

"I think it's the fourth one on the right." the second Rocket replied. He led his partner to the room he was talking about. "Yeah. This is it." he said, opening the door.

"I guess it's a good thing that Rocket got fired before, huh? If not, we wouldn't have anywhere to put the prisoner." the first Rocket said. The phone on his belt beeped. He picked it up and answered it.

"Hello?" he asked.

Giovanni's voice came from the other end. "Report back to my office. I need to ask you a favor."

"Yes sir. We'll be there right away." the first Rocket said. He hung up.

"What is it?" his partner asked.

"The boss wants us to go back to his office. He said he needed to ask us a favor." the first replied.

They went back down the hall and found Giovanni's office.

Once they were in, Giovanni said, "You know those other kids that were traveling around with the twerp?" The Rockets nodded. "Well, I want you to go back and get them. I have a feeling they might be useful." Giovanni said.

"Yes sir." the Rockets said. The first one thought for a minute.

"Sir, where do we put the children when we get back?" he asked.

"I've got a special place prepared for them already." Giovanni said with an evil smile. "Now go." The Rockets nodded and walked out of the office.

The next day, Ash was awoken by shouting on the other side of the wall. He looked around him. The walls of the small room he was in were solid white. The bed he was on was hard. The bed was pretty much the only thing in the room.

Ash spotted his backpack lying in the corner. He picked it up and put it on. As he did so, his arm brushed up against his belt. Ash realized there were no Poke Balls there. And Pikachu was nowhere in sight. The two Team Rocket agents must have taken his Pokemon while he was knocked out.

A Rocket walked by the door. He stopped when he saw that Ash was awake. He opened the door.

"Glad you're awake. Our boss needs to talk with you about something." the Rocket said. Without a word, Ash followed the Rocket. He didn't have any other choice. This place was swarming with Rocket agents, and he didn't have any Pokemon with him. The Rocket agent led Ash into Giovanni's office.

"Guard the door." Giovanni ordered. The Rocket nodded and stepped outside the door, closed it, and stood in front of it to prevent anyone from coming in and bothering the boss and Ash.

Giovanni pointed to a large chair placed across from his desk.

"Have a seat." he said. Ash did as he was told. "I've been thinking. All of those times my fellow Rocket agents have been sent blasting off, it was you who did it, correct?" Giovanni asked. Ash nodded.

"I have also seen the way you battle and how you treat your Pokemon." Giovanni said.

"Just get to the point." Ash said. Giovanni seemed surprised at Ash's rudeness toward him. (Probably because all of the Rocket agents are too scared to talk back or anything like that to him.)

"I would like to know if you would consider joining Team Rocket." Giovanni said.

"No." Ash said without hesitation. Giovanni seemed taken aback.

"Why not?" Giovanni asked.

Ash didn't exactly answer the question. He asked his own.

"After all you've put me through, you expect me to join your team? I don't think so." he said. Giovanni became angry.

"I asked you a question!" he said.

"So did I!" Ash said. Giovanni was getting angrier by the second. Ash stood up.

"I'm not going to join Team Rocket, no matter what you say." he said.

Giovanni reached across his large desk and grabbed Ash's wrist tightly.

"You have no other choice." he said, jerking Ash back and pushing him back into the chair.

"What makes you think that?" Ash asked.

"I have your little friends." Giovanni said. A large TV came down from the ceiling. It flicked on. An image of May, Max, and Brock appeared. They were in some kind of dungeon, and were tied up.

"Join Team Rocket, or your little friends will be the ones who pay for all of those defeats you gave me." Giovanni said.

"Leave them out of this! This has nothing to do with them!" Ash said.

"It does now." Giovanni said. After a minute's pause, he said, "So, what'll it be, Ash? Choose quickly. Your time is running out."

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Ok. I admit that was a little shaky, but the next chapter should be better. Hope you enjoyed it!

 

[~*Nobody*~]

Isn't this what happened to Robin in Teen Titans? Join or your friends die? .... Oh well its still good..

 

[Yami Ryu]

I don't know wether to be happy you attempted to describe ONE character over the others, or afraid ...

"Now go!" he said. The Mightyena leaped on May. The jump caused her to fly into a tree. She was knocked out. Then, the Mightyena jumped on Brock, knocking him into a tree also. Brock passed out. Lastly, the Mightyena jumped on Max, and knocked him into his sister, knocking him out. That only left Ash. But the Mightyena didn't attack him. It ran back to its trainer. The first Rocket recalled his Pokemon.

How does Jumping on someone make them go flying/knocking into a tree? And how is the Mightyena so fast it can have time to attack May, Brock and Max, and they just stand their gawking like idiots. And where is Ash or Pikachu in this? I would assume they would have tried to defend their friends from harm, or someone would have shouted the name of a fallen comrad.

that whole paragraph is rushed, short, tacky and flat in the emotional sense, character sense and overall not enjoyable. If you can't write battle scenes, either don't include them in a fic, or ask someone to help you out in the area.

Ash was enraged. "What did they ever do to you?" he asked angrily.

I think rewording it to:

Ash became enraged at the sight of his friends being attacked before his eyes, and rather then going to their aid he turned onto their attacker with fury in his eyes. "What did they ever do to you to deserve that!?" Ash demanded, anger thick in his voice.

Oooh.

>> see how much better it is when a bit of effort is put into writing it out? One measily scentence became a nice little paragraph.

For some reason I think you're also using the reply box to write this .. just with how you have it formatted.

Overall this fic needs serious and heavy work. As it's just flat, with flat characters and flatter scenes between them. I suggest you go read Advice for Aspiring Authors. And actually go there and not ignore this, call this a flame or just say you did but didn't.

 

[angel_fire101]

Thanks for the advice, Yami Ryu. After reading what you said, then looking back at my fanfic, I see what you mean. I'll put more detail into the story from now on. Sorry about the flatness.

 

[angel_fire101]

The Last Battle Ch. 3

The Legendary Suicune Girl of Pokemon: I don't know. I don't really watch Teen Titans. Anyway, here's chapter 3:

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Chapter 3: The battle begins

Ash stared at the TV screen. Giovanni tapped his fingers on the desk absentmindedly.

"No." Ash said. Giovanni snapped to attention.

"What did you just say?" he asked, anger rising in his voice.

"I said no." Ash said.Giovanni turned his big throne-like chair around toward the TV screen. He could no longer see Ash. Ash quietly slipped out of his chair and walked to the door. He slowly turned the big, brass doorknob and pulled the door open. The Rocket guard was still standing in front of the door.

"What are you doing?" he asked in a gruff voice.

"Uh, Giovanni said he didn't have time for mindless children like me and told me to get out." Ash lied. He had to make it sound convincing, and he'd heard Giovanni yell at his agents so much, he could imagine exactly what he could've said.

"Alright then. Did he say where you were to go?" the Rocket asked.

"Um, no. But he did say he wanted you to come in for a minute." Ash said. Surprisingly, the Rocket bought it. He gave Ash instructions as to where the exit was and walked into the office.

"That outta keep them busy for at least a few minutes." Ash said to himself as he made his way down the hall. "Or at least I hope it will." He spotted a map of the Rocket Headquarters on a bulliten board up on the wall. He took it down and studied it for a minute. "Ok, so May, Max and Brock are in some sort of dungeon." he said. He located the hall with the dungeons on the map. After memorizing the route, Ash rolled the map up and put it in his backpack. After doing this, he began walking swiftly down the hall toward his destination. He didn't run because he knew he would draw too much attention to himself. If he got caught again, he might never make it to his friends in time.

After walking down numerous seemingly endless hallways, Ash finally reached the hall where the dungeons were located. He was now on the lower floor of the Rocket Headquarters, which appeared to be older and less used.

There were voices coming from down the hallway where he was headed. Ash quickly ran into an empty room and hid in an old file cabinet by the door. He left the door to the file cabinet cracked, so he could see and hear what was going on, and so he wouldn't get locked in.

Two Rockets walked down the hallway, talking and laughing. Unfortunately, they were talking too low for Ash to hear them. He watched them walk on down the hall, then he crept out of the cabinet and walked over to the door. Seeing that no one was walking down the hall, he came out of the room and continued toward the dungeons.

Luckily, no guards were guarding that hall yet, so Ash had enough time to find the dungeon with his friends inside. Brock, Max and May were tied up in one corner, and Pikachu and all of his Pokemon were in a cage in another corner. A guard was standing in the middle of the room, watching and listening to a big TV screen. Ash saw Giovanni's face on the screen. He couldn't hear what was being said, though.

The guard listened and watched for a few more minutes, then turned and walked toward the door. Ash quickly moved out of the way as the guard slung open the door and stormed down the hallway. When the guard was all the way down the hall, Ash ran into the open room. He ran over to Brock, May and Max and untied them. They stood up and threw the ropes off of them. They waited by the door while Ash found a way to get his Pokemon out of the cage. He found their Poke Balls piled on a nearby table. He picked them up and recalled all of his Pokemon except for Pikachu, into their Poke Balls. After attatching the Poke Balls to his belt, Ash motioned for his friends to follow him.

When they were halfway down the hallway, May asked, "Ash, how did you get away from Giovanni?"

"I snuck out. Pretty soon, an alarm will probably go off, and Rockets will be everywhere. We need to get out of here as fast as we can." Ash said.

"Do you even know the way out?" Brock asked.

"Yeah. I found this map hanging on a bulliten board, so I took it down. This place is so huge, I'm sure we'll need it. Even with your navigation skills." Ash said to Brock. He led everyone to a large flight of stairs. They climbed the stairs, one by one. When they were finally on the second floor, Ash took out the map and handed it to Brock.

Brock studied it for a minute, then said, "Come on." He led the others down a long hallway and through a few doors. A group of Rockets were waiting on them when Brock led them all down another hallway.

"What do we do?" Max whispered.

"What do you think? We're gonna battle 'em!" Ash said.

"All of them?" Max asked nervously.

"Relax, Max. Everything's gonna be fine. May, Brock and I can handle this." Ash said. There were about six Rockets. Ash, May, and Brock each sent out two Pokemon. Ash sent out Pikachu and Grovyle, May sent out Combusken and Beautifly, and Brock sent out Mudkip and Foretress. All of the Rockets sent out one Mightyena each. Ash, May and Brock were each facing two Rockets in a double battle. Max was standing to the side, hoping what Ash said was true. The Rockets all had nametags. The two Brock were facing were Drake and Jake, the two Ash were facing were Terrence and Vince, and the two May were facing were Sam and Matt.

"Pikachu, use Thunderbolt on Vince's Mightyena! Grovyle, use Quick Attack on Terrence's Mightyena!" Ash cried. Pikachu sent a blast of electricity at Vince's Mightyena. Grovyle charged at Terrence's Mightyena.

"Dodge it!" Terrence and Vince yelled. The two Mightyena jumped out of the way. Pikachu's attack hit the ground harmlessly. Grovyle crashed into the floor.

"Now, Mightyena, use Bite on that Pikachu!" Vince yelled.

"And you use Take Down on that Grovyle!" Terrence yelled to his Mightyena.

"Try and dodge it!" Ash yelled. Pikachu and Grovyle tried to dodge, but they weren't fast enough. Vince's Mightyena bit Pikachu's leg, and Terrence's Mightyena jumped into the air and slammed into Grovyle. Both Pokemon fell to the ground. Ash thought for a minute.

"Pikachu, jump on top of that blade on Grovyle's head!" he shouted. "Now, Grovyle, use Pound, and Pikachu, use Thunder!" he yelled. Pikachu jumped onto Grovyl'es head. Grovyle charged at Vince's Mightyena.

"What is he doing?" Vince muttered. Terrence shrugged. "Mightyena, try and dodge whatever they're doing!" Vince yelled out to his Mightyena. The Mightyena tried to dodge, but it was too late. Grovyle slung out the blade on the top of its head, and Pikachu flew off, cheeks sparking. It landed on the Mightyena's head and let out a huge Thunder attack. Vince's Mightyena fainted.

Grovyle changed direction. It headed toward Terrence's Mightyena.

"Grovyle, use Leaf Blade!" Ash said. The three grass blades on Grovyle's right wrist formed into one big blade. The blade started glowing. It slashed the Mightyena with the blade. The Mightyena looked badly injured. "Now, finish it up with Bullet Seed!" Ash cried. Grovyle opened its mouth wide and shot out a stream of glowing yellow seeds. The Mightyena was too weak to dodge. The attack hit full force. The Mightyena fainted.

"Mightyena, no!" Terrence said.

"Yeah! We did it! Great job guys!" Ash said, as he recalled Grovyle into its Poke Ball and Pikachu jumped back onto his shoulder.

May and Brock were just finishing up their battles. Or at least that's what it looked like from the condition of the Rockets' Pokemon.

"Combusken, use Double Kick on Sam's Mightyena! Beautifly, use Silver Wind on Matt's Mightyena!" May cried. Combusken jumped into the air, and Beautifly sent out cresent shaped attacks that were glowing with a silvery color. Both attacks hit full force. "Now, let's finish this up! Combusken, use Fire Blast! Beautifly, use Gust!" May cried. Beautifly flapped its wings furiously and sent a big gust of wind at Matt's Mightyena. Combusken opened its mouth wide and sent out a blast of fire at Sam's Mightyena. The Pokemon were too weak too dodge. The attacks hit full force, and the Mightyena fainted.

"Alright! You guys were great!" May said, recalling her Pokemon into their Poke Balls.

"Alright, Mudkip use Water Gun on Drake's Mightyena! Foretress use Rapid Spin on Jake's Mightyena!" Brock cried. Mudkip shot a jet of water at Drake's Mightyena. It jumped out of the way. Foretress began spinning rapidly toward Jake's Mightyena, who also dodged.

"Alright Mightyena, use Crunch on that Mudkip!" Drake yelled. His Mightyena jumped at Mudkip, teeth bared. It bit into Mudkip. Mudkip cried out in pain and fell to the ground. It had already fought hard and was pretty weak. (Brock and May had been battling while I was focusing on Ash.) Mudkip fainted.

"Mightyena, use Swagger on that Foretress!" Jake yelled.

"Evade it and use Explosion, Foretress!" Brock yelled. He hadn't wanted to use that attack, but he had no other choice. Foretress started glowing. It caused a huge explosion. Smoke went everywhere. Ash, Brock, May, and Max all shielded their eyes. When the smoke cleared, Foretress, and both of the Mightyena were knocked out. Brock recalled his Pokemon.

"Alright Pikachu. Thunderbolt 'em all!" Ash said. Pikachu sent a blast of electricity at the Rockets and their Pokemon. The Rockets fell to the ground, and the Pokemon remained motionless.

"C'mon let's go!" Brock said, running down the hall. "We're almost out!" Ash and the others followed Brock down a few more long hallways and finally found themselves in the main room. They ran out the door and down the path. Brock stopped outside the forest in front of them. Ash and the others stopped behind him.

"What's the hold up Brock?" Ash asked, walking up beside his friend and following his gaze.

"Ash, I have a feeling there are Rocket agents all over that forest, just waiting on us to come by so they can ambush us." Brock said.

"Oh Brock, quit being paranoid. Everything's fine." May said.

"No, he's right. By now, Giovanni probably knows we all escaped, and he's probably sent out hundreds of Rocket agents into the woods to wait on us." Ash said. "We'd better go around the forest, just incase."

Back at RHQ, (Rocket Headquarters) Giovanni slammed his fist onto the desk.

"How could you have let him slip by?" he asked angrily. "I wouldn't call someone I wanted for my team a mindless child, and you know that! I was trying to get him to join us, and you let him get away!" He was yelling at the Rocket agent Ash had tricked earlier. The agent stammered out apologies, but Giovanni ignored him. His concentration was on the secrurity camera that was placed on the front of the building. He had spotted Ash and his friends heading around the huge forest. He turned back to the Rocket agent.

"Round up some men." he said. "That boy has denied me for the last time! It's time he learned the lesson every person who comes across me learns the hard way: NEVER deny Team Rocket. I gave him one last chance and he blew it. So now it's time to end it." Another Rocket walked into the room.

"You summoned me a few minutes ago sir." he said.

"Yes. I want you to go after that Ketchum child." Giovanni said.

"And bring him back to you?" the Rocket asked.

"No." Giovanni said. "I want you to kill him." The Rockets stared at him, not believing what they had just heard.

"Do you really mean that, sir?" one of them asked.

"Yes. I'll have nothing else to do with that child, so I want you to get rid of him once and for all. Kill him!" Giovanni said. An evil smile spread across the Rocket's faces. Giovanni continued speaking. "Take all of our top agents if you wish. The rule now is kill or be killed. This will be the last battle between us. The last battle between Team Rocket and Ash Ketchum."

 

[Yami Ryu]

Eh ... I think you are trying. BUT.

"Pikachu, use Thunder on Vince's Mightyena, Grovyle, use Leaf Blade on Terrence's Mightyena!" Ash cried. Pikachu sent a blast of electricity at the Mightyena in front of it, and Grovyle slashed at the Mightyena in front of it. Both attacks were critical hits. The Mightyenas fainted. Ash recalled Grovyle and Pikachu jumped on his shoulder. These Rockets were a bunch of weaklings.

"Beautifly, use Silver Wind on Matt's Mightyena! Combusken, use Double Kick on Sam's Mightyena!" May cried. Beautifly sent out cresent shaped gusts with a silver glow to them and Combusken kicked the Mightyena in front of it twice with its powerful legs. Both Pokemon fainted. May recalled her Pokemon.

"Mudkip, use Water Gun on Drake's Mightyena! Foretress, use Rapid Spin on Jake's Mightyena!" Brock yelled. Mudkip shot out a jet of water, and Foretress began spinning rapidly. Both Mightyenas fainted. Brock recalled his Pokemon.

"Alright Pikachu. Thunderbolt 'em all!" Ash said. Pikachu sent a blast of electricity at the Rockets and their Pokemon. The Rockets fell to the ground, and the Pokemon remained motionless.

That is one of the worst battle scenes I've ever seen :\ why would Giovanni employ such weaklings as agents? I'm sorry but Mightyena wouldn't be taken down so easily. Not from a single Rapid Spin, or water gun. And yes, when in doubt, power play Pikachu :\

And Giovanni as cliche evil random villian all death at the main character after 'attempting' to sway him to evil. I doubt Gio would be that stupid as to try and sway a person that's absolutely good over to the evil side.

Your story is flat and sparkless. I suggest you really try to put an effort into it, it's just well. Blah. I'm not sure how I can help you get over this hill and write something better. Maybe if you read some other stories, maybe some 5 star ones you'll get my meaning. Cause untill then, you're going to keep up with this sub par thing.

And also, put some effort into fight scenes :\ it's not the games where it can be ohko or whatever. Pokemon can dodge, like in the anime.

 

[angel_fire101]

Sorry. I kind of have problems with discription sometimes. As for the battle scene, I don't know what was wrong with me. I think I'll go back and change it to a more exciting battle.

And about Giovanni, I know he probably wouldn't do that, but it's useless to waste the rest of the story focusing on him trying to persuade Ash into being evil. Besides, it's called 'The Last Battle', so there's got to be some kind of battle between Ash and the Rockets.

Anyway, I'll try and put more discription in my fic from now on. I'll also be sure to read some five star fanfics to get the idea. Who knows? Maybe I'll actually improve.

 

[Leon Phelps]

I think that Renegade has said enough, but I recommend you taking a look at the Anime Style Battling section. That could improve your fic ten-fold.

 

[angel_fire101]

Ok guys, I edited my last chapter and made the battle scene better. Hope you like it!

 

[angel_fire101]

If anyone's wondering why I haven't posted chapter 4 yet, it's because I'm still working on it, trying to make it where I can at least get someone to read the first 3 sentences. With how it's going right now, I'm going to have to work hard to reach that level.

 

[Firedance k'Treva]

I am enjoying it to a reasonal extent. it looks good, and i alway wondered if giovani would finally get rid of Ash. (or try at least)

Are they going to try for the meeting with Lance still?

 

[angel_fire101]

Eh, maybe. I'll see what I can do. I'll probably have the next chapter posted sometime tomorrow.

I'm glad somebody likes this story.

 

[~*Nobody*~]

Hey I like it! I just think you need some work in some departments. But you are one of the newer people here I've seen posting long enough chapters.

 

[angel_fire101]

Thanks, Legendary Suicune Girl of Pokemon. I'll have the next chapter posted soon. I've been really busy lately. Sorry.

 

[Riva]

Awsome. Good work, besides all the agents having the same pokemon.

Where to Jessie, James and Meowth fit in?

 

[angel_fire101]

The Last Battle ch.4

Riva - Well, I haven't really thought about putting Jessie, James and Meowth in here, but I'll see where I can fit 'em in at.
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Chapter 4: The ambush

Ash, Brock, Max and May all headed around the forest. They had been walking for what seemed like hours. This was one big forest.

"Brock, are you sure you know where you're going?" Ash asked.

"Of course I am! Why wouldn't I be?" Brock asked.

"Geez, I was just asking." Ash said, surprised at Brock's offense from his question.

"I'm surprised we haven't seen any Rocket agents. I thought they'd be everywhere." Max said.

"Yeah, so did I." May said.

"And you were right." The group stopped and whirled around. No one.

"Who's there?" Ash asked, reaching for a Poke Ball on his belt. At his question, a bunch of Rocket agents jumped out of the bushes and trees, surrounding him and his friends.

"Giovanni has given us new orders. And as his agents, we are to follow them." the Rocket in the front said. Ash said nothing. His hand still rested on the Poke Ball on his belt.

The Rocket in the front threw a Poke Ball. The rest of them followed his lead.

"We're only after Ash, but if the others get in the way, feel free to attack them also. That'll just be three less annoyances." the head Rocket said to the others.

All of the Rockets had released a Pokemon. But, this time, the Pokemon were different. Some Rockets had the same Pokemon, but not all were the same. The Pokemon released were Rattata, Mightyena, Ekans, Arbok, and one Seviper and one Cacnea stood out in the crowd. That meant that Jessie and James were in on this too. And if they were there, so was Meowth.

"Send out all of your Pokemon." Ash said to Brock and May. "We'll need all the help we can get. Max, stay behind us." Ash, May and Brock released all of their Pokemon. Ash sent out Grovyle, Corphish, Swellow, Torkoal, Glalie, and Pikachu jumped down from his shoulder. May sent out Combusken, Skitty, Beautifly, Munchlax, and Bulbasaur. Brock sent out Foretress, Ludicolo and Mudkip. (I think that's all of Brock's Pokemon.)

"Ok, all of you! Attack!" Ash yelled to his Pokemon. May and Brock yelled the same thing to theirs.

At the same time, the Rockets told their Pokemon to attack. What a battle that was. Thunderbolts, Water Guns, Bullet Seeds, Hyper Beams, Flamethrowers all flew in every direction. Pokemon that didn't use those attacks dove at each other over and over again. The Rockets, Ash, May and Brock no longer had any control over what their Pokemon did.

After a while, all of the Pokemon lay on the ground, exhausted. Everyone recalled their Pokemon. Pikachu jumped back onto Ash's shoulder.

"I guess we'll just have to do this the hard way." the head Rocket said, jumping at Ash. Ash ran out of the way, and he crashed into the ground.

"Come on, kid. You and me. Right here, right now." the Rocket said as he got up. Ash shrugged.

"I'm not that good at that kind of stuff, but I'll try." he said.

"Good." the Rocket dove at him. "That'll just make it easier for me."
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Sorry this chapter is so short and probably bad. I kind of have to go somewhere. Sorry! I'll have the next chapter up soon.