The Legend Of All Legends

[Boonge]

The Legend Of All Legends​

Chapter 1: The Legend Begins​

“Leave me alone!” screamed a little boy, who was the age 7.

“…………………” something or someone just replied with a breath.

“Ahggggggggggggg!” screamed the little boy again, but this time with agony.

“…GO…AWAY!!!” the boy screamed his lungs out.



*A big explosion takes place*


…6 years later…

“Ok Mike and Nick it’s time to choose your starter Pokemon” smiled Prof.Oak.


Professor. Oak was a very famous Professor of Pokemon throughout the Pokemon world, he always usually wore a Lab coat, brown leather shoes, had grey hair, and brown eyes.

“Well, I’m going to pick Charmander” smiled Mike.


Mike was a 13 year old kid, and is about to start his journey, he usually wears a Pokemon hat, red t-shirt and black shorts, he has brown hair that’s all over the place, white shoes and dark brown eyes he was always determined, and wasn’t very patient.

“And, I’m going to pick Squirtle” grinned Nick.


Nick was also a 13 year old kid, who was about to start his journey, he usually wore a white headband, blue T-shirt, blue jeans, black shoes, and he had short blond hair and, had brown eyes, he was very cocky up him self type of kid.

“Wonderful, here is you’re pokedex’s Mike and Nike, and here a 5 pokeballs for each of you, now go start your journeys” smiled Prof. Oak.

“Thanks Professor, I’m going to be the best trainer ever” grinned Mike

“Hold it Mike! Were do you think your going lets check out our Pokemon battle me!”

“Fine! Go Charmander!!!” Mike sent out Charmander.

“Yes bring it on! Go Squirtle!!!” Nick sent out Squirtle.


Charmander was a Lizard type Pokemon, it had sharp claws on its hand and feet, and had a flame burning on the tip of it’s tale, Charmander was orange coloured, Squirtle was a Turtle type Pokemon, it had 2 short legs and 2 short arms, with a shell around its body, Squirtle was blue coloured.

<Wow my first Pokemon battle> Charmander smiled.

<And you’re going to lose in you’re 1st Pokemon battle> Squirtle smirked.

“Charmander agility, then follow up with a tackle attack” yelled Mike

“Squirtle hide in your shell” smiled Nick


Charmander started with it’s agility it went off like a rocket, then attempted it’s tackle attack but Squirtle was already in its shell and, tackle inflicted no damage.

“Charmander grab Squirtle while it’s in its shell then wait for it to come out, you know what to do once it comes out” smiled Mike

“Squirtle come out of your shell once it grabs you use water gun” smiled Nick

Charmander got Squirtle in its shell then lifted it up Squirtle came out of it’s shell and used water gun Charmander ducked and the water gun hit the ground causing the 2 to go up flying in the air.

“Charmander now ember!” yelled Mike

Charmander used ember it released flames and ember inflicted both opponents once the dust settled Squirtle had fainted and fallen to the ground.

“Hmm good strategy you used ember while both were up in the air, while Charmander was holding Squirtle once it used ember Squirtle took full blast of it and then fell to the ground and fainted while Charmander didn’t get hurt by its own attack that much, thus fur Charmander had the time to fall on its feet well done Mike” grinned Prof. Oak.

“Hmppph” that was nothing but beginners luck smell you later gramps and Mike” Nick grinned.


Nike walked out with a defeated look on his face.

“See you Professor” smiled Mike.

“See you boys” grinned Oak.

Mike walked out with a great future ahead of him.

“Hmm I should better get acquainted better with my Pokemon Charmander! Go Charmander!”

<We really kicked some *** back then hey Mike?> smirked Charmander.

“Hehehe yea we did little buddy!” laughed Mike.

<Do you think one day I will become really strong?> asked Charmander.

“Yea I bet you’re going to be the greatest” smiled Mike.

<Shucks> blushed Charmander.

*Somewhere far away in the ruins in Egypt*

“Boss we’ve found something very interesting!” yelled “ “

“Let me come check” smirked “ “

“Hmm translating this it says” grinned “ “

“Legends are destined to be Legends but Legends can’t always be good” read “ “

*Back at Pallet Town*

“Charmander you ready me and you are now about to start our very own journey lets go!” smiled Mike

<Yea I can’t wait to get into some battles>

Mike and Charmander walk out of Pallet Town at about 2.30pm


THE END.





ANY HINTS TIPS ;249-d; ;249-d; ;249-d;

 

[Xiang]

WTF. You took barely ANYTHING Renegade or anybody else said into consideration. Where is the description? The originality? The actual work? The beginning seemed useless. This thing was riddled with errors liek the extra quotation marks. Read one of those five star fics to see what fic writing means on this forum.

 

[Guitar dude bill]

After I read the fourth paragraph or something I could tell that you were the same author of pokemon dimension, the same way you write, the same low quality fic you just wrote.
Even though you have description, you described terribly, I mean, you say, 'there was a boy called mike, he had brown eyes, blonde hair, white skin' with out even adding actions to describe them, which is the way you should describe things.
And the originality. This is just a remake of your previous one, which had already been done to death, and the minor things you changed just lowered it's originality. To add originality into this you're gonna have to make original events and twist the plot into an original plot. This plot is so unoriginal it's not really your plot, just copied from the games and anime.
Your characters are just plain flat. You say they have personality with narration when they really have none. They have no emotion or personality. So you really need to improve and work on this alot. Give them emotion and personality. They seriously need work on.
Your grammar *snort*. I'm not even prepared to go correcting it. Just you use <these> for talk from pokemon, not good, my friend likes speech marks and different colours for talk from pokemon. And you used stuff like *here* for a lot of stuff. You NEVER use those in normal fics unless your cutting out a swear word. And again you weren't spelling out your numbers and writing 'em in figures. STOP DOING THAT!!!! To avoid making those embarissing mistakes again I suggest you do it on MS word.
So overall this is a rock-bottom failure. Sorry. But I'm sure you can improve, keep writing. Oh and I said it once and I will say it again, read advice for aspiring authors. It's a sticky. It always stays at the top, Read it! And improve.

 

[~*Myuu the Ryuu*~]

press control+f and type in "nike" you'd be surprised where it comes up. more description, too. if this was a prolouge then okay but type longer, okay?

AND.. DO.. NOT...ABUSE... ;249-d;!!