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[cloud1870]

once upon a time there was a war between the human and pokemon and it was very tough for humans but when they learned to use technology they defeated the pokemon easily
the leaders of the pokemon which are legendary pokemon are making a plan for an attack to destroy the humans but they were arguing...
Mewtwok the humans have beaten us after that long war so we will attack with all our power
Ho-oh:we cant Mewtwo they are too strong we have to make a plan which doesnt involve us dying
Mewtwo:any suggestions
Jolteon:well we can use our special attacks to attack from a range
Lugia:shut up jolteon
Mewtwo:i think it's worth a try after all what have we got to lose?
Lugia and Ho-oh:i dont know maybe our lives thats all

Mewtwok you stick to your plan ill stick to mine
Lugia:fine

so at night Lugia's team attacked the humans but little did he know they made a shield against pokemon

and mewtwo's team attacked in the morning but they're special attacks came back to them from the shield

so all the legendary pokemon got angry so everyone used they're strongest attacks it didnt work so mewtwo and lugia stood together and with one aeroblast and psychic the shield was destroyed
the humans unleashed they're most powerful machine
the pokemon obliterator
so they attacked the pokemon didnt die but all of them slept and now in our time they have awaken and they are a threat to the world

will they stop and if so who will stop them?.....

so by the 2 years that passed normal pokemon have joined humans but they're leaders didnt
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heres mine

name:Cloud
Age:10
Description:black hair,brown eyes,thin
Starter:Eevee
history:his parents died when he was 6 and he went in the streets dying from hunger but one day he went on the doorstep and found ash's mom she took him in and now he is ash's best friend

 

[Yami Ryu]

atfirst I thought this was a joke Sign Up .. then I realised no .. no it's not. And my urge to laugh died. Your own sign up is dismal.

Description:black hair,brown eyes,thin

So he's a stick with eyes and hair? Is he even human?

history:his parents died when he was 6 and he went in the streets dying from hunger but one day he went on the doorstep and found ash's mom she took him in and now he is ash's best friend

So there's no such thing as Social Services here? Or Orphanages? Or anything in the way of child care? Where were his relatives? Why didn't they take him in? Or a caring nieghbor? Or the POLICE even? And why did they die? And why/how did Ash's mom find him? And you do know her name is Delia, right? And why 'Ash's best friend' and not 'Ash's adopted, little brother'?

And the Starters: If you're getting Pikachu, why the heck is Pichu there? And why Eevee? Gary didn't start with Eevee, he started with Squirtle, so technically, Eevee isn't a starter pokemon. Nor is Pichu. Pikachu is stretching it because Ash recived it, but that doesn't mean Eevee or Pichu should be there

And I can't make heads or tails of the plot, the structure hurts my eyes, and the script distracts me from being able to decipher it. What is the plot about? When Legendaries Attack Humans? What? Why did the Legendaries start the war? And how was Mewtwo in this war that was so long ago and whatever? And if this war is still going on why would anyone let their ten year olds become trainers?

 

[RaZoR LeAf]

Please read the RPG Rules. Scripting is not allowed, and your plot is far from readable. Use the cafe for help.