Dragonfree
Just me
Chapter 26
Okay, this is me reading this one for the first time, finally. Before I do that, I'm finishing up the rest of the review, so that any speculation will remain intact even if it turns out to be jossed in this chapter.
(Since this ended up having to be a fourth post fgghghh, I'm going to not spoiler-tag it since it's discussing the current chapter.)
I liked this chapter a lot; lots of character development, getting to know Starr better as she gets to act a bit more natural, and Jade trying to deal. I just love what Starr is like, still so distinctly her but more comfortable and genuinely confident, knowing all about the dark underbelly of the city and Jade being so jarred by it. Seeing her and Jade trying to work through everything that's happened was nice, as well, and I think so far that's been pretty well paced - Jade's not just suddenly over it, still triggered by even seeing Raichu and having nightmares worrying it's all a lie somehow, and it's hard for Starr to actually talk about it.
Chibi's obviously dealing terribly and I'm eager to see more of where his storyline goes from here. I liked seeing Jade really trying to hard to be a good, supportive friend to him; it's a far cry from how she was unable to deal with Rudy's issues before and really suggests she's doing a bit better. And the portrayal of Goldenrod was nice - all your research shows!
Looking forward to learning more about what's going on with Ajia next chapter. All my theories are probably hilariously wrong, but at this point I figure she's part of the Johto Resistance and that the Kanto commander in particular has a lot to do with her.
It's been great following this fic so far and I can't wait to see how everything continues to play out from here. Best of luck on the next chapters, and all the rest! I will do my absolute best to not need another Monster Review(tm) next time I review.
Okay, this is me reading this one for the first time, finally. Before I do that, I'm finishing up the rest of the review, so that any speculation will remain intact even if it turns out to be jossed in this chapter.
(Since this ended up having to be a fourth post fgghghh, I'm going to not spoiler-tag it since it's discussing the current chapter.)
This is the sort of thing I'd have loved to see about Starr (or Ajia) throughout the fic.Rudy and I always used to come here to watch matches between kids older than us—or rather, older than him—who had already started their journeys. In the summer, it was so popular that battles often cropped up over who could train on which field—with the field at the top of the hill at the center of the park being the most heavily contested spot. We’d make meaningless bets on the combatants and excitedly call out whenever anyone sent out a Pokémon that was definitely going on one of our own teams someday.
Swift is the sweetest.“*Many of our allies have attacked us. Chibi tried to kill us when we first met him,*” Swift chirped, obviously trying his hardest to sound calm and measured. Maybe a bit too hard, but the effort was appreciated.
I really like the unexpected punch at the end of this paragrah, particularly after seeing the illustration where Raichu just looks so happy.My eyes swept over her Pokémon warily as I stepped forward into their midst. Feraligatr jerked its head upward, leering suspiciously at me the entire time. Arcanine, on the other hand, refused to look at me—the firedog kept its hateful gaze firmly on a tree further down the trail, as though it were trying to set it on fire with just its eyes. Flareon glanced around at the others uneasily, folding its ears back and flicking its fluffy tail from side to side. Rapidash stood calmly off to the side, eyes closed and flames flickering gently in the wind. Raichu… I could hardly look at Raichu without feeling sick, so I didn’t.
Pfft.“*So you’re not the enemy anymore!*” the mouse said cheerfully. Oh god why.
Huh, so her Pokémon think of her as Starr, even though even her internal monologue referred to herself as Astrid in the extra? Or is it a TQftL kind of thing where Jade's mentally translating a generic 'trainer' sort of name to Starr?“*I know that, I heard what Starr said,*” Raichu said, puffing out his cheeks in a pout.
Aw, I like Feraligatr. She obviously places a lot of value on loyalty and order, which makes sense what with Team Rocket and all.Feraligatr scoffed at my words. “*Might not like any of this, but wouldn’t ever disobey a direct order. Not much of a trainer, are you?*”
Have I mentioned I love how traumatized Jade is.And then Raichu jumped into my lap and every muscle in my body tensed up instantly and every thought dissolved into a torrent of oh god, oh god, get him off, get him off.
“*I think it will be fun being on the same side,*” the rodent said, cocking his head to the side. “*Even if I don’t get to act scary anymore.*” God, why’d he have to talk like that, all bubbly and friendly like he wasn’t Starr’s torture Pokémon of choice. Didn’t he remember what she’d had him do to me?
an endless loop of nope“Does—does he have to sit here?” I stammered, desperately attempting to force my facial expression into something neutral even as every instinct devolved into an endless loop of nope.
I like that she's thinking about this. I really enjoy the attention to detail in this fic.“It’s gonna suck carrying so much cash around, but anyone stupid enough to try and rob me deserves what’s coming to them.” She scoffed at the thought. But then her expression hardened. “What I’m actually worried about is my license. They have contacts in the Pokémon League. They could have my trainer ID flagged for anything—and odds are it’ll be something I’ve actually done, too,” she added with a grimace. I didn’t even want to think about how long her list of arrestable offences probably was.
Of course Team Rocket has internal stereotypes.Starr paused, blinking. A crooked grin slowly crossed her face, and she gave a slight laugh. “Come on, I’m—I was an executive. I know there’s that stereotype that combat unit execs are only good at bashing skulls in, but we had to know our stuff too.”
oh no I love herI blanched. “All the way to Goldenrod? Aren’t the tickets like 10,000 pyen?”
Starr gave me a look that plainly said I was an idiot while gesturing both hands at the duffel bag full of money.
She's such a Rocket, it's great.Starr nodded. “Good, cause I gotta go check out some shady places, and I don’t want you coming with. Wanna say we’ll meet up at the central district Pokécenter?”
I like this worldbuilding - makes a lot of sense they'd have something like that.Bus stops lined the streets outside the train station. It wasn’t hard to find one of the iconic red and white buses that’d lead to the Pokécenter in most towns. No license meant fishing coins out of my pocket to pay the fare (and enduring the confused looks as to why someone my age wouldn’t just pay using a license), but I’d gotten used to that by now.
noa bacon pancake
Chibi. D:“*I called Razors a coward,*” he said, eyes wide and desperate. “*I accused him of hiding from the fight while the rest of us risked our lives. That’s the last thing I said to him before he died. That’s why he put himself at risk like that.*” He was shaking all over, fur standing on end. “*It’s my fault. I did this. It’s my fault,*” he muttered over and over to himself.
“It’s not—”
“*If I can’t hold myself to what I said to him, then what am I worth? I have to fight them. They have to pay. It’s the only reason I’m still here.*”
Missing a period there.“Probably better that we stay away from the Pokécenter,” Starr went on
Here too.Sometimes Mewtwo was there, and he’d clench his fingers together and I’d feel an unbearable pressure from all sides, forcing the air from my lungs and crushing my bones with a sickening crunch
One more missing period.“Yes, now,” she said without looking back at me
Ahahaha so I guess Sebastian was Stalker after all. But yeah, called it, the Kanto commander was a red herring! He really was 1) currently a high-ranking Rocket. And he's obviously in contact with Lexx. (This makes it kind of hilarious in hindsight how we've been hearing about the Johto force being terrible and inefficient. NOT TOO SURPRISING IF THEIR COMMANDER IS A REBEL.)Starr forced herself to regain control of her breathing, wiping her eyes as she shook her head in disbelief. “Jade, do you have any idea who the hell you’re standing next to? That’s Sebastian Shepard, the ****ing commander of the Johto combat unit.”
I liked this chapter a lot; lots of character development, getting to know Starr better as she gets to act a bit more natural, and Jade trying to deal. I just love what Starr is like, still so distinctly her but more comfortable and genuinely confident, knowing all about the dark underbelly of the city and Jade being so jarred by it. Seeing her and Jade trying to work through everything that's happened was nice, as well, and I think so far that's been pretty well paced - Jade's not just suddenly over it, still triggered by even seeing Raichu and having nightmares worrying it's all a lie somehow, and it's hard for Starr to actually talk about it.
Chibi's obviously dealing terribly and I'm eager to see more of where his storyline goes from here. I liked seeing Jade really trying to hard to be a good, supportive friend to him; it's a far cry from how she was unable to deal with Rudy's issues before and really suggests she's doing a bit better. And the portrayal of Goldenrod was nice - all your research shows!
Looking forward to learning more about what's going on with Ajia next chapter. All my theories are probably hilariously wrong, but at this point I figure she's part of the Johto Resistance and that the Kanto commander in particular has a lot to do with her.
It's been great following this fic so far and I can't wait to see how everything continues to play out from here. Best of luck on the next chapters, and all the rest! I will do my absolute best to not need another Monster Review(tm) next time I review.