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The Lillycove Chronicles By Chaka27 (advanceshipping & gymshipping)

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Power Shot

Reignited with Ego!
Oh boy, you still have a long way to go. The discription was non existant in the fight, one of the biggest parts of the chapter. YOU MUST USE MORE DISCRIPTION!!! You also used the Star Wars wannabe line badly, and you should definately spend time around reading skilled writer works and comapring your works to them.

Don't take it too badly, but you still have a long way to go to being a good writer.
 
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elementalmightyena

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like it so far but try and descibe things a little better okay.
 

Chaka27

Banned
Atually the Contest wasnt even part of the plot but It was mentioned before and I didnt know why else she would be alone in her room so I fust added it.
 
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jinxie

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..you don't take criticism well. aaahpleasedonthitmeitwascriticismabouttakingcriticism

Yeah, the description needs a lot of work, but you will improve. no gymshipping:(

keep on trying, you hottie
 

Chaka27

Banned
jinxie said:
..you don't take criticism well. aaahpleasedonthitmeitwascriticismabouttakingcriticism

Yeah, the description needs a lot of work, but you will improve. no gymshipping:(

keep on trying, you hottie

Well I typed most of it at around midnight cause I couldnt sleep so it shoulndnt be perfect and the main foucus will be on advanceshipping but I will add a gymshipping scene for you. O_^
 
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jinxie

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Chaka27 said:
Well I typed most of it at around midnight cause I couldnt sleep so it shoulndnt be perfect and the main foucus will be on advanceshipping but I will add a gymshipping scene for you. O_^

OHMYGOSHOHMYGOSH! YAY! I LOVE YOU.

Sorry. Gymshipping rush.

I'm excited
 
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Ember

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I'll probably have the pics done tonight. But I have to wait for the weekend so that I can scan them at my aunt's house.
 

Chaka27

Banned
Well heres the Next chappy......


CHAPTER 5- Magma Madness

As Ash Courtney Hank and Shelly are traveling through the Fiery Path when they realize that it’s late and they setup camp in a roughly 3 square yard platform in the rocky walls of the tunnel. It’s around 10 and Courtney is about to go to sleep when she sees Ash sitting on the ledge and she sits along side him. “Ash, something wrong?” She asked.

“You wouldn’t care,” Ash said “you two are just helping so you can get back at Maxie.”

“No Ash, were your friends now, were here to help you save May.” Courtney assured him.

“Well I’m worried about May.” Ash said softly but loud enough for Courtney to hear “I’ve never cared about someone so much before, not because she is my best friend, but because I love her.”

“Well I believe you but you have got to tell her.” Courtney replied

“I will,” Ash said “at the Aqua Ball.” He assured his new friend.

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The Next morning Ash and the others finally made it out of the Fiery Path. The golden sunlight tanned their whitened faces. They couldn’t enjoy it for long because a sandstorm hit and they were trapped in it.

“Damn it!” Ash said “What are we supposed to do now Shelly………Shelly? Shelly where are you?” He kept looking for the others but he had to stop because the storm was too strong. All of a sudden a see-through white dome coming from has bag protected him and Pikachu.

[What the Hell?!] Pikachu said.

[It’s me.] A voice said as a familiar egg popped out of Ash’s bag.

“Togi?” Ash said surpied.

[Nope] it said and it was then surrounded with a glowing light and evolved. [It’s Togetic]

“Holy ****!” Ash said in shock.

“Ash!” Shelly cried as she found him and Togi let her inside. When she came in she brought Hank, Courtney and a ton of sand. And she ran over to him and hugged him.

“C-Can’t breathe!” Ash cried before Shelly let him glow. And for the rest of the way they walked under the Safeguard and, for Ash, squeezed his older sister.

………………………………


Back in Lillycove City Misty and Brock were at the beach. Misty in a blue Tankini and Brock in Orange Trunks playing Volleyball when a Knockout Blonde in a Pink string bikini walked up to Brock.

“Hey cutie, I’m Heather what’s your name?” she said with hunger in her eyes, but Brock and Misty weren’t to happy about this.

“Back off Sl*t!” Misty roared as she B*tch-slapped her.

“Screw you wh*re!” Heather screamed back and kicked her in the stomach only to be pinned down by Misty. “Stop it, your to fat, you might crush me you Lesbian!”

“Whazzat you said?!” Misty roared.

“Fat” Heather said “it rhymes with flat which you are too!”

“F*ck you!” Misty hollered as she threw Heather into the ocean.

“Misty, are you okay?” Brock asked “that girl was a pain in the A-“

“Brock, was she right?” Misty whimpered “Am I flat and fat?”

“No, not at all, you’re perfect Misty,” Brock said “I’ve seen all of you once and I can’t wait to see it again.”

“Why wait any longer?” Misty purred.

*Blink Blink*

“Do I ever!” Brock said excitedly as they ran home. And everybody else heard them moaning all night long.

………………

The next Morning Brock woke up next to Misty and he smiled at her. “Thanks Misty, if I weren’t for you I might have been waking up in tears in a bed in some Motel with tat lousy Heather.” He said smiling.

“No problem Honey,” she said “I love you.”

“I love you too.” He replied “Wanna go get Max back for spying on us?

“Sure.” Misty replied. And two hours later Max was hanging on a hook by his boxers in a closet.

………………………………………

May was sitting in a barrack in the Girl’s Prison Dorm in the Magma Secret Base down in the Seafloor Cavern. There was also a Cafeteria, a Library, a Fitness Center, and a Boy’s Dorm. It was noon so most people were at lunch but she was alone on her bunk. Her tears shed from her eyes and on to the sari her new friend Makayla made her. Makayla was a 27 year old Woman with a 3 year old boy Adam, and a 5 tear old girl Clover. Makayla was a lot like May, she too was a Coordinator. She had a Milotic, Starmie, and Azumarill. She also was taken from Lillycove City, where she lived. And most of all she was taken away from some one she loved, she and her children had been captured 2 years ago and taken away from her husband, Tony.

“You Okay?” Makayla asked as she sat down next to May.

“Yeah I’ll be fine.” May said. But it was a lie; she would never be fine until she was with Ash again.


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Well How was it CoughjinxieCough......
 
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jinxie

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poor may...and max. Psh. I don't like Max. He's totally weird (because of that episode where Ash beat Norman and Max stole Ash's badge. wtf)

OH MY GOSH! Gymshipping! yay! I just love the gymshippingness. I smiled. A lot.

I hope your next update is soon (withmoregymshipping)

and your punctuation needs work - don't rush events

<3
 
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dragonmaster5000

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Another good chapter! The description improved a lot! You're getting there! I can't wait for the next chapter!

On a side note, I didn't know Pikachu could swear...XD And that catfight between Misty and Heather was...awkward. XD
 

Chaka27

Banned
Well the catfight was for jinxie and the next few chappy's will be the same order for POV's; Ash then Misty and Brock Then May. also there is a girl in my school named heather and I hate her so.....
 
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Anikin

Rebel
This story seems to be improving chaka. Keep up with the good work.
 

Anikin

Rebel
I wonder how whill those pictures look.
 
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elementalmightyena

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wow that was a lot better and i loved it! keep up the good work!
 

Chaka27

Banned
Thanx, Here it is.......


CHAPTER 6

Part 1-May’s Hero

After 3 days Ash and friends had arrived at the Magma Train Station ready to attack. And when the time was right they called out Feraligatr, Claydol, Flygon, and Pikachu. “Attack!” Shelly cried. And then the fight broke out.

“Look out!” Someone screamed because a fire attack set the station on fire with Ash and the others still inside. The Fire had separated Hank from the others who were near an open exit. Hank on the other hand would have to make his own way out, after he beat the Magma grunts that were also trapped. The heat was fierce and dried up their sweat as soon as it left their skin. The heat was also wearing them out but there desire to stop Maxie kept them going, especially for Ash.

“Go on without me, I’ll be fine!” Hank shouted to Courtney and after a few begs she finally gave in and joined Ash and Shelly on the last car on the train where Shelly had Knocked Out the two guards and stolen their uniforms for her and Ash. As the Train took off the three watched as the Station collapsed.

“No!” Courtney cried.

[Sh*t look out!] Pikachu gasped as he saw 8 guars come after the train.

“I can stop them” Courtney growled “For Hank.” Then she leaped out and attacked the guards with tons of power. Now it was only Ash and Shelly.

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May was in working out with her pokemon in the gym thinking about Ash when Croconaw and Ivysaur walked up to her.

[What’s wrong?] Fang said

“It’s Ash,” May sighed “I miss him so much and I’m really worried about him.’

[HIM!?] Rose yelled [he ain’t the one in this damn jail!]

[You’re not helping] Fang replied [but I know what will………]. And before May could ask what he meant, they evolved right in front of her in an aurora of Dazzling light.

[So that’s what you guys were up to.] Blaze said walking over to them [To bad the others can’t see you know.] She was right; Angel, Skits, and Lovely were still in Lillycove city. She was wondering about them when she spied something moving in a box. When she looked over she saw it was a baby Smochum.

“Hey there cutie, where is your trainer?” May asked her.

[I don’t have one] it sobbed [I’m all alone.]

“Well why don’t I be your trainer. I’ll name you Smooch.” May said as her new Pokemon jumped into her arms and kissed her.

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Meanwhile Ash and Shelly had gotten of the train and were making a plan outside the Prison chambers. “Okay Ash so I’ll cause a distraction while you get May” Shelly said as Ash nodded and ran to get May and Shelly distracted the guards with a Hydro Pump from her Blastoise. “You can never get good help anymore.” Shelly Smirked as she followed after Ash. Who was having his own problems.

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May was walking into the Prison Lobby with Smooch in her hands when she saw Ash cornered by five guards and she sent out Rose to save him.

“Frenzy Plant!” May cried as five massive vines lifted up the guards and sent them through the wall into the hallway. And May ran up to Ash and gave him a giant hug causing him to blush.

[Is this your boyfriend?] Smooch smirked.

“She’s my BEST FRIEND! ……… and who are you?” Ash hollered.

“Ash that’s my new Pokemon, Smooch.” May said “and Ash you’re not just my friend, you’re my………Hero.”

“Really?” Ash said as they both started blushing madly. “Well me and Shelly are going to be everyone here’s hero because Shelly has All the prisoners waiting for us in a sub, so let’s get the hell outta here!”

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Later, as the submarine was a few miles away from Lillycove city. Ash, May and Shelly’s Pokemon were out with them inside the spacey Pilot room. Shelly was steering the sub with the help from her Blastoise, Dragonite and Pidgeot. Ash and May’s Pokemon were playing while May was sitting on a couch deep in thought when Ash sat down next to her and put his arm around her causing her to blush madly. “What’s wrong May?” Ash asked her.

“Nothing,” May sighed “It’s just that I don’t know how to repay you for saving us all.”

“Well, you could agree to be my date to the Aqua Ball.” Ash grinned.

“I’d Love too Ash!” may giggled.

“Hey guys Can you tell Hank and Courtney were almost there.” Shelly asked them. They agreed and went to tell them. Hank and Courtney hade made it safely to the Magma base and were resting in the Captain’s bedroom. And after they told them he said to himself ‘were almost home, were almost home……’

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Misty walked over to Brock and sat down next to him and put her head on his shoulder. “Hey baby, what’s up?” Brock asked his soulmate.

“Well…err…It’s……” Misty stammered. How could she tell him? Sure he loved her, but this was big. But she had to tell him. “Brock, I’m Pregnant……………Brock?........You Okay?......Oh My god! Bock fainted!”

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Later on Ash, Shelly, May, Hank and Courtney were at the door of the Ketchum Mansion. Then with a rush of excitement they walked in and were instantly attacked………………by hugs.

“You’re okay!”

“We were so worried!”

“I’m so happy!” The shouts of joy were interrupted by Ash.

“Where’s Misty?” He asked. And everyone was silent and nervous………until Sean broke the silence.

“The poor girls Pregnant!” he announced

“WHAT!” Ash, May and Shelly roared.

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Like it? Read and Reply. Also Ill fix the other chappys later on.
 
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Ember

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^_^ Very sweet. I loved it when May said Ash was her hero. Keep up the great work!
 
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