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Yes, behold, my first fan fiction. Well, my other non-completed one got deleted, anyways. Anyways, as you all wanted me to in my old one, I have greatly improved on my grammer, detail, paragraphing sets, ect. So here is my newest (and hopefully better) fanfiction, titled "The New Trainer". Enjoy, and remember, please reveiw to tell me what I can do to become a better writer.
EDIT: Oh wait, it didn't get deleted...oh well, this ones better then the other one. and if you want to see my other hidiouse one, go to my profile and click one "Find all threads made by Persian". But i'm warning you, it's so horrible that your eyes will melt. RED MY OLD ONE AT YOUR OWN RISK!!!"
Chapter One: The new trainer
"Big sister, big sister, wake up, wake UP! Josie wants you to wake up!" A small voice said. These words had came out of the lips from a small girl, with blond hair, a yellow dress, and brown eyes.
The little girl was shaking a plop on a bed back and forth, over and over and over again, screaming "Kikki, Josie wants you to wake up!", and such other things. "Kiko, not now, i'm not in the mood to hang out with Josie, maybe later on..." Another voice mumbled.
The voice had came from something underneath the covers of the bed, that the other small girl was shaking. "No, Josie doesn't want to play with you, she wants to start pokemon training with you, she told me so!"
The small girl yelled, in a worried tone. Suddenly, a person jumped from under the covers, revealing herself to be a female girl, looking about 12 years old. She had messy light brown hair, and crystal like- brown eyes to match.
"Holy crap, I totally forgot! Pokemon training starts today!" The 12 year old girl shreiked. She sprung out of bed, and darted over to her closet. It was full of clothes and junk, like any other closet would be full of.
She took a pair of light blue jeans, and a short sleeved, light blue t-shirt. "Bye sis, love ya!" She said fastly to the little girl. She ran completly dowstairs, and then darted into the bathroom to change.
(And since i'm of corse not going to give any "details", i'll skip to when she comes out)When she came out, she was wearing the chlothes she had picked out, except her light brown hair was fully brushed, and it was tied into a pontytail.
She put the hairbrush on the living room coffe table, and sat down on the couch. She grabbed a pair of white socks, and put them on. She ran into the kitchen, and sat down at the table. Her mother, (curly brown hair, green eyes, blue dress, dark blue high-heels)was at the table, mindlessly flipping the pages of the newpaper.
The moment was sighlent. The girl waited a few minutes, hopelessly trying t catch her moms attention. after a few seconds, she sighed. "Mom, you DO know that today is my twelth birthday, right?"
The girl asked, widening her brown eyes. "Yes Kikki, you've been begging for me to let you start pokemon training for weeks now." Her mother said, not even happening to glance at her. Her green emeald like eyes were still focused on the large black and white newspaper.
"Oh mom, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE, can I start pokemon training?! Alyssa already started two years ago, when I should of started, but you said I was too young to start, and now i'm TWO YEARS behinde!
And I promised Josie that id'e give her a Skitty when I got one someday, but I can't do that unless I start pokemon training!
I've already packed stuff in my backpack, i've been studying pokemon training in books, and i've been watching pokemon training programs! I know I ready to start I-" Kikki (the girl) was interuppted.
"Fine! If you think your so perfect and ready to train. Go see your father after you've gotten the stuff you've packed, he might have a spare Eevee lying around or something. But Kikki, trust me, pokemon training is a huge responibility! It takes lot's of confidence, training, and lot's of love for your pokemon to just trust you!" Her mother yelled.
Her mother layed the newspaper on the kitchen table, and walked over to a see-through stain glass case. She opened it, and took a red and white ball from it, and then closed it. "Rose, come on out."
She said, gentely tossing the pokeball. It hit the ground, and then sprung open. A flash of a beam of red light shot out forming a shape. It was so bright, that it nearly "blinded" Kikki and her mother. A pechish fox with nine tails was revealed, a ninetales of corse.
"Rose here started out as a Vulpix Kikki. A small, pranching vulpix. At first, I showed Rose so much love that it was unreal, but she still didn't trust me. Even after countless times of hugging, countless victorious battles, and such. But one day, after yet another plain victorious battle, I was blinded by a blue flash of light.
Rose grew bigger, changed color, and had grown nine long, swishing tails. That's right, she evoulved into a Ninetales. Of corse, pokemon get more mature as they grow older, so soon after another two months, Rose finally began to warm up with me, and we mixed together like peanut butter and jelly..." Her mother explained, stroking Rose. The Ninetales purred with pleasure swishing it's nine tails harmlessly.
"Whoa...." Kikki said, almost as deep as a whisper. "Well, can't I just ask dad to give me a pokemon with a trustive nature?" Kikki asked. Her mother sighed, still stoking Rose. "Kikki dear, it's not that simple. A pokemon has to open it's trust to you after you've given it lot's of love." Her mother said. "Well, I'm gonna go grab my packed backpack, and go get my pokemon from dad. See-ya!" Kikki replied, getting out of her chair.
She walked back upstairs, and opened the door to her room. Everything was just as it last was, except her little sister has happily bouncing up and down on Kikki's bed. "Hey, get off there! Your going to wreck it!"
Kikki yelled. Her little sister immeaditly stopped jumping, and she sat on the bed, sending a small blink to Kikki. Kikki took a deep breath, and walked over to her shelf. She grabbed an orange backpack, and walked back to the door. "Sis, mom finally said I could start pokemon training, so I have to go away.
But I promise, i'll call you guys on the phone every day, and someday, I WILL get that Skitty for you." Kikki said. "But...i'll miss you..." Her little sister sniffed as a tear rolled down her cheek.
She ran over and hugged Kikki, fully crying. Kikki smiled, and hugged her little sister. "It's okay, i'll call you on the phone everyday. And every once in a great while, I promise that i'll come visit you.
Okay?" Kikki asked. Her little sister looked up at Kikki and sniffed, nodding. "Okay then...but can I follow you around until you get your starter and have to leave the house?"
Her little sister asked. "Umm...sure, I guess.." Kikki answered. Her little sister smiled, and they both went downstairs.
Okay, I KNOW that was extremley short and crappy, but I promise, I will add more too it, and it's crappyness will begin to slowly go away. And i'm currently looking for some charecters to join Kikki on her pokemon journey (Yes, that would be a main charecter!) So if you want to, tell me a breife description of your charecters name, his/her looks, his/her pokemon, (But they'll start out with just one, and it can't be a legendary. What kind of begginer trainer would have a legendary? o.o)But if you give me a full list of the charecters pokemon, then they'll start out with the first one on the list, and lowly catch all the other ones on the list! You also need to tell me yours charecters personality, their age, and their gender. You WILL receive credit and copyright in each chapter of the story, and please note that I AM ONLY ACCEPTING TWO CHARECTERS TO JOIN KIKKI'S POKEMON JOURNEY. Thank you, ta ta for now!
EDIT: Oh wait, it didn't get deleted...oh well, this ones better then the other one. and if you want to see my other hidiouse one, go to my profile and click one "Find all threads made by Persian". But i'm warning you, it's so horrible that your eyes will melt. RED MY OLD ONE AT YOUR OWN RISK!!!"
Chapter One: The new trainer
"Big sister, big sister, wake up, wake UP! Josie wants you to wake up!" A small voice said. These words had came out of the lips from a small girl, with blond hair, a yellow dress, and brown eyes.
The little girl was shaking a plop on a bed back and forth, over and over and over again, screaming "Kikki, Josie wants you to wake up!", and such other things. "Kiko, not now, i'm not in the mood to hang out with Josie, maybe later on..." Another voice mumbled.
The voice had came from something underneath the covers of the bed, that the other small girl was shaking. "No, Josie doesn't want to play with you, she wants to start pokemon training with you, she told me so!"
The small girl yelled, in a worried tone. Suddenly, a person jumped from under the covers, revealing herself to be a female girl, looking about 12 years old. She had messy light brown hair, and crystal like- brown eyes to match.
"Holy crap, I totally forgot! Pokemon training starts today!" The 12 year old girl shreiked. She sprung out of bed, and darted over to her closet. It was full of clothes and junk, like any other closet would be full of.
She took a pair of light blue jeans, and a short sleeved, light blue t-shirt. "Bye sis, love ya!" She said fastly to the little girl. She ran completly dowstairs, and then darted into the bathroom to change.
(And since i'm of corse not going to give any "details", i'll skip to when she comes out)When she came out, she was wearing the chlothes she had picked out, except her light brown hair was fully brushed, and it was tied into a pontytail.
She put the hairbrush on the living room coffe table, and sat down on the couch. She grabbed a pair of white socks, and put them on. She ran into the kitchen, and sat down at the table. Her mother, (curly brown hair, green eyes, blue dress, dark blue high-heels)was at the table, mindlessly flipping the pages of the newpaper.
The moment was sighlent. The girl waited a few minutes, hopelessly trying t catch her moms attention. after a few seconds, she sighed. "Mom, you DO know that today is my twelth birthday, right?"
The girl asked, widening her brown eyes. "Yes Kikki, you've been begging for me to let you start pokemon training for weeks now." Her mother said, not even happening to glance at her. Her green emeald like eyes were still focused on the large black and white newspaper.
"Oh mom, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE, can I start pokemon training?! Alyssa already started two years ago, when I should of started, but you said I was too young to start, and now i'm TWO YEARS behinde!
And I promised Josie that id'e give her a Skitty when I got one someday, but I can't do that unless I start pokemon training!
I've already packed stuff in my backpack, i've been studying pokemon training in books, and i've been watching pokemon training programs! I know I ready to start I-" Kikki (the girl) was interuppted.
"Fine! If you think your so perfect and ready to train. Go see your father after you've gotten the stuff you've packed, he might have a spare Eevee lying around or something. But Kikki, trust me, pokemon training is a huge responibility! It takes lot's of confidence, training, and lot's of love for your pokemon to just trust you!" Her mother yelled.
Her mother layed the newspaper on the kitchen table, and walked over to a see-through stain glass case. She opened it, and took a red and white ball from it, and then closed it. "Rose, come on out."
She said, gentely tossing the pokeball. It hit the ground, and then sprung open. A flash of a beam of red light shot out forming a shape. It was so bright, that it nearly "blinded" Kikki and her mother. A pechish fox with nine tails was revealed, a ninetales of corse.
"Rose here started out as a Vulpix Kikki. A small, pranching vulpix. At first, I showed Rose so much love that it was unreal, but she still didn't trust me. Even after countless times of hugging, countless victorious battles, and such. But one day, after yet another plain victorious battle, I was blinded by a blue flash of light.
Rose grew bigger, changed color, and had grown nine long, swishing tails. That's right, she evoulved into a Ninetales. Of corse, pokemon get more mature as they grow older, so soon after another two months, Rose finally began to warm up with me, and we mixed together like peanut butter and jelly..." Her mother explained, stroking Rose. The Ninetales purred with pleasure swishing it's nine tails harmlessly.
"Whoa...." Kikki said, almost as deep as a whisper. "Well, can't I just ask dad to give me a pokemon with a trustive nature?" Kikki asked. Her mother sighed, still stoking Rose. "Kikki dear, it's not that simple. A pokemon has to open it's trust to you after you've given it lot's of love." Her mother said. "Well, I'm gonna go grab my packed backpack, and go get my pokemon from dad. See-ya!" Kikki replied, getting out of her chair.
She walked back upstairs, and opened the door to her room. Everything was just as it last was, except her little sister has happily bouncing up and down on Kikki's bed. "Hey, get off there! Your going to wreck it!"
Kikki yelled. Her little sister immeaditly stopped jumping, and she sat on the bed, sending a small blink to Kikki. Kikki took a deep breath, and walked over to her shelf. She grabbed an orange backpack, and walked back to the door. "Sis, mom finally said I could start pokemon training, so I have to go away.
But I promise, i'll call you guys on the phone every day, and someday, I WILL get that Skitty for you." Kikki said. "But...i'll miss you..." Her little sister sniffed as a tear rolled down her cheek.
She ran over and hugged Kikki, fully crying. Kikki smiled, and hugged her little sister. "It's okay, i'll call you on the phone everyday. And every once in a great while, I promise that i'll come visit you.
Okay?" Kikki asked. Her little sister looked up at Kikki and sniffed, nodding. "Okay then...but can I follow you around until you get your starter and have to leave the house?"
Her little sister asked. "Umm...sure, I guess.." Kikki answered. Her little sister smiled, and they both went downstairs.
Okay, I KNOW that was extremley short and crappy, but I promise, I will add more too it, and it's crappyness will begin to slowly go away. And i'm currently looking for some charecters to join Kikki on her pokemon journey (Yes, that would be a main charecter!) So if you want to, tell me a breife description of your charecters name, his/her looks, his/her pokemon, (But they'll start out with just one, and it can't be a legendary. What kind of begginer trainer would have a legendary? o.o)But if you give me a full list of the charecters pokemon, then they'll start out with the first one on the list, and lowly catch all the other ones on the list! You also need to tell me yours charecters personality, their age, and their gender. You WILL receive credit and copyright in each chapter of the story, and please note that I AM ONLY ACCEPTING TWO CHARECTERS TO JOIN KIKKI'S POKEMON JOURNEY. Thank you, ta ta for now!
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