The Pre-Evolved Pokemon Trainer(ages 12+)

[Pete the Unstoppable]

Mild Language, Mild Violence and some disturbing parts.

Here are the main character profiles.

Tyler Stan
Age:12
Gender:Male
Weight:75 pounds
Height:4'6 Feet
Skin:White
Hair Dark Brown(flat)
Eyes:Light Blue
Clothes:Blue t-shirt and blue shorts.
Personality:Kind and dramatic
Alias:The Pokemon Weakling
Siblings:Beth Kai(stepsister)
History:He lived in a poor family. He had to live in an apartment in Pallet Town. His parents finally made enough money when he was 8 to buy a house and when they were moving on Christmas Eve Tyler's parent's car slipped on it's side on black ice and both of Tyler's parents died, but Stan was unharmed. Someone saw this and notified the police and Tyler ended up in an orphanage in Viridian City. Tyler went to the Pokemon School there in Viridian City and graduated. He got adopted by Carley Kai(Beth Kai's mother).
Other:Any Pokemon he obtains or catches never wants to evolve.

Beth Kai
Age:18
Gender:Female
Weight:120 pounds
height:5'7 feet
Skin:White
Hair:Blond(ponytail)
eyes:light green
Clothes:red skirt and red top.
Personality:Kind and dramatic
siblings:Tyler Stan(step borhter)
History:Lives in a rich family. She was always lonely though. Her parents were always making deals and contracts so she always had to be babysat. Beth went to the first-class Pokemon school in Saffron City and graduated. When Beth graduated from her school with 100%'s or more on everything she was considered an ace student and was rewarded a Female Lapras. Her Lapras doesn't obey Beth, it is about level 50. Beth also has a baby Seel. Her parents realized she was lonely so they adopted Tyler Stan. Although Beth and Tyler didn't get along at first now they are great step-siblings. Beth travels along with Tyler during their Pokemon journey.

Chapter 1:The Journey Begins

Other Important Characters for this chapter.

Prof. oak
age:???(please let me know)
Gender:Male
weight:???(please let me know, in pounds)
height???(please let me know, in feet)
eyes:???(please let me know)
clothes:red shirt, white labcoat and i think brown jeans.
personality:I do not know
alias:The Pokemon Professor
siblings:none that I know of.
history:Unknown.

I haven't had much time to think about what happens but, please let me know this, what u think about the 2 character profiles i've made and help with the prof. oak profile.

 

[Dilasc]

Wow! Just like your first fic, this story is so very, very EPIC! I mean wow! The passion, the drama, the excitement! You must write more before my left testicle EXPLODES. Forget any other story, this is truly the work of a god. Please, make me your little pet monkey and name me Sweegiekhan! I can dance in your service!


Ahem, I think I went overboard on the sarcasm there, didn't I? This is not allowed. What you want to do is delete this thread and move it to the author's cafe, or better yet, just give us the actual story, eh? Eh? Yea, I thought so. So, all in all, if this is anything like your first story, it'll be awesome, and really deseerve that cool LOCK!

 

[Yami Ryu]

... not only are the characters flat, but the main character borders on a gary stu. He had enough money at eight to buy something as expensive as a house? But I doubt this even belongs in the Authors Cafe as it doesn't even hint at the plot. Oh the title may, but seriously, who wants to read about a rich twelve year old that has baby pokemon that never wants to evolve. Or basically an Ash Personia- his pokemon basically never, or rarely evolved.

You're not supposed to post character profiles. You're supposed to post CHAPTERS ot PROLOGUES. Not spam of what you do to avoid describing or going into the characters personalities in your writing.

Spammer -_-

 

[Dilasc]

To the poster of this thread, I suggest you read a few good stories before you even try posting a chapter. After reading your first Mary Sue story about Mew and a Nurse Joy with torpedoes (*snicker* heh, you pervs made me walk right into that one,) I don't exactly have high hopes for this one. So, the best way to learn, is through watching he examples of those who know what they're doing. Go read some stories! Trust me on this.

 

[Joe Vega #4]

Here's an idea. Scram. That or go to the Advice for Aspiring Authors Sticky. You desperately need it.