Dragonfree
Just me
For your convenience, I'll have a chapter index here, which will link you to the post each chapter is in so you won't have to search through all those pages.
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Note: From now on, every time I post a new chapter I will actually go through this list and remove anyone from the PM list who hasn't been online for a couple of months during which I have been posting chapters. If they do come online, they'll see a PM about at least one new chapter anyway, which would make them at least check the thread again. Also, if you're interested enough to be on the PM list and not want to get yourself removed from it, it really is common courtesy to leave a review to let me know you're actually reading those chapters I keep PMing you about, m'kay?
NOTE FOR NEW READERS (3/3/2012; edited 2/20/2013)
This fic is not very good. That's not modesty talking; it's the decade of writing and general life experience that I've acquired since I first started it. Today I criticize the hell out of fics that do many of the same things I did in the first thirty or so chapters of this fic (it gets somewhat better after chapter 31 or so). I'm still writing it because I'm stubborn as a mule and still love it as my demented little brainchild, warts and all, but there are warts, not as in "Well, it's not perfect" but as in "No, really, there's a wart right here, and here's an exact diagnosis of why it's definitely a wart."
Lots of people seem to enjoy it anyway, and that's great - I love entertaining people, and I sincerely hope it manages to engage you too if you read it (after all, even if your child has warts, you still love them and want them to do well in life). But this does mean you should keep a couple of things in mind:
1) Do not try to reassure me that there are no warts. Again, this isn't modesty talking and I'm not fishing for praise. If something doesn't bother you, it doesn't bother you, but that doesn't mean it isn't a bad thing generally. I'm thrilled if you like it in spite of its flaws, but it is not flattering to insist that there are no flaws, any more than it would be flattering to tell you you're ten feet tall when you know as a matter of fact that you aren't.
2) Do not imitate me. While this is a reasonably popular fic, please do not ever think along the lines of, "Well, Dragonfree got away with it, so it must be okay" - not in response to a vague hunch that something seems off about an idea you had, not in response to a reviewer telling you it's a bad idea, not in response to another author who is laboring to avoid it. No, giving your characters pseudo-legendaries with a half-baked justification about how a conservation project just happened to be releasing a bunch of them in the exact time and place the characters are is not good writing. Neither is starting your main plot a full third into the story. Neither is making your character's Pokémon wax lyrical about how amazing he is because he cares about Pokémon. Neither is making Nurse Joy entrust rare Pokémon who are young and injured to your protagonist, even if he was the one to bring the Pokémon in. Neither is lengthily describing the appearance of every Pokémon species that appears in the story. And so on. As a general principle, a story getting readers doesn't actually mean it's good, much less that every choice the author made writing it was a good one: "It's in this popular book/fic/movie" is not an argument that something constitutes good storytelling, only that people may be willing to look past it. Do not let this story inspire you to make the same stupid choices I did.
3) I already know. So if those early warts do bother you, there is, generally, no need to point them out - you can if you want to, of course, but odds are I've been aware of all the ridiculousness you're noticing in the first thirty or so chapters for several years by now, so writing up lengthy criticism of it is probably not a very productive use of your time unless you just really enjoy ranting for its own sake. By all means glue those criticism-goggles back on when/if you get past those earlier chapters, however - insightful criticism on stuff that isn't already making me facepalm is incredibly valuable and I welcome it.
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RATING
Violence: None, but the whole thing is aftermath of violence.
Gore: A bit. Well... quite a bit, actually.
Sexuality: None at all.
Profanity: None.
Other: Nothing special.
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Prologue
The flaming remains of a town burned sadly in the sharp wind. On the singed ground lay bodies.
Humans, mostly. The plant-less soil was littered with them. Dry blood colored it dark red. Most of them were pretty much in one piece; a few were still weakly breathing although they would certainly never wake up again without medical aid.
There were also several virtually torn apart corpses. They were not of humans. It was like a supernatural being had swept past with the sole intention of killing those but its mere presence had made everything else drop dead too.
The mutilated ones were powerful creatures known as Legendary Pokémon. There were twelve or so dead Legendary Pokémon in these former streets in total – although admittedly, only two of them were not in bloody bits with their guts spread around.
Both had somewhat catlike shapes. One had blood-stained whitish-pink fur; it was rather simple-looking, with stubs for ears, small front paws but large, rabbit-like back legs, and a long, thin tail ending in an oval shape.
The other one looked a bit similar to the pink one, but a lot larger; it was whitish gray with a deep violet, muscular tail; it narrowed towards the similar oval on the tail end. The ears were smaller in comparison to the head and more pointed than the pink one’s. The overall shape of the body was more human; it had long, bony arms with three ball-like fingers although the legs were more like a kangaroo’s. It had a large, bleeding wound in the middle of its chest.
The pink one stirred. It was still breathing. The life slowly returned to the little body. A leg twitched. Soon enough, its eyes opened.
“Mew?”
The small creature rose up and stared wide-eyed at the destruction.
The Legendary Pokémon levitated a meter or so into the air as its big, innocent-looking sapphire blue eyes fearfully scanned the area.
Then it stopped, kicked the air with both legs and darted towards the place it was staring at.
Terrified, the Legendary looked upon a black, feline-like head. It had likely belonged to a Legendary Pokémon the size of a leopard or so. Two neon green stripes pointed downwards from the top of its head. The same green shade was also on six long spikes which sprouted from the back of its head, three on each side, and on two slash-like markings on either side of the muzzle. The left eye socket was empty; what had been the right eyeball was now merely a torn, bloody mess.
The pink Legend’s disbelieving eyes stared at the severed head in horror.
“Chalenor!” sounded a desperate telepathic scream. But nobody was around to hear it.
Prologue
- Extra I: Chalenor
Chapter 1: The Pokémon on the Road
- Extra II: Wait a minute... levels?
Chapter 2: The Book
Chapter 3: Vuiii!
- Extra III: The Agreement
Chapter 4: Cleanwater City
Chapter 5: The Lake of Purity
Chapter 6: The Mammal, the Monster and the Mental Change
Chapter 7: Charmeleon's Trainer
- Extra IV: The Full Story
Chapter 8: The Master of the Clones
Chapter 9: Mew's Escape
Chapter 10: The Mew Hunter
Chapter 11: The Lizard and the Mantis
Chapter 12: Let There Be Light
Chapter 13: The Black Desert
Chapter 14: Thief and Victim
Chapter 15: Darkness and Poison
Chapter 16: The Third Badge
Chapter 17: The Shark and the Serpent
Chapter 18: Enemies Forever
Chapter 19: Good or Evil?
Chapter 20: The Warning
The Pokémon Festival - May 21st: Evolution
The Pokémon Festival - May 22nd: The Attack Approval
The Pokémon Festival - May 23rd: The Pokémon Frenzy Tournament
The Pokémon Festival - May 24th: The Threat
The Pokémon Festival - May 25th: Chaletwo's Arrival
Chapter 26: Dead or Alive
Chapter 27: Past, Present and Future
- Extra V: Guilty
Chapter 28: Scyther's Revenge
Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart
Chapter 30: The Dragons of Ouen
Chapter 31: Spirit
Chapter 32: The Birthday Party
Chapter 33: Thunderyu
Chapter 34: Return to Cleanwater
Chapter 35: Suicune
Chapter 36: The Crater
Chapter 37: Carl
Chapter 38: Volcaryu
Chapter 39: The Workings of the War
Chapter 40: In the Dark
Chapter 41: Return to Scorpio City
Chapter 42: Splitting Up
Chapter 43: To Champion Island
Chapter 44: Polaryu
Chapter 45: The Ouen League HQ
The Ouen League - Chapter 46: Day One
- Extra VI: Letting Go
The Ouen League - Chapter 47: The First Preliminary
The Ouen League - Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
The Ouen League - Chapter 49: The Rage of a Scyther
The Ouen League - Chapter 50: Friendly Competition
Chapter 51: Fake-Out
Chapter 52: The League Finals
- Extra VII: April Fools
Chapter 53: Away
Chapter 54: Reunion
Chapter 55: Unprepared
Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari
Chapter 57: Three Conversations
Chapter 58: Sins of the Mother
Chapter 59: December
Chapter 60: The Swarm
Chapter 61: Mewtwo
Chapter 62: Diplomacy
Chapter 63: Recovery
Chapter 64: Hide and Seek
Chapter 65: Three Dragons
Chapter 66: Doubts
Chapter 67: Friends
Chapter 68: Truths
Chapter 69: Lies
Chapter 70: Waraider
The Final Stretch - Chapter 71: Shattered
The Final Stretch - Chapter 72: Rick
The Final Stretch - Chapter 73: Recuperation
The Final Stretch - Chapter 74: Unraveling
The Final Stretch - Chapter 75: Mewtwo²
Chapter 76: Chalenor
Chapter 77: Home
- Extra I: Chalenor
Chapter 1: The Pokémon on the Road
- Extra II: Wait a minute... levels?
Chapter 2: The Book
Chapter 3: Vuiii!
- Extra III: The Agreement
Chapter 4: Cleanwater City
Chapter 5: The Lake of Purity
Chapter 6: The Mammal, the Monster and the Mental Change
Chapter 7: Charmeleon's Trainer
- Extra IV: The Full Story
Chapter 8: The Master of the Clones
Chapter 9: Mew's Escape
Chapter 10: The Mew Hunter
Chapter 11: The Lizard and the Mantis
Chapter 12: Let There Be Light
Chapter 13: The Black Desert
Chapter 14: Thief and Victim
Chapter 15: Darkness and Poison
Chapter 16: The Third Badge
Chapter 17: The Shark and the Serpent
Chapter 18: Enemies Forever
Chapter 19: Good or Evil?
Chapter 20: The Warning
The Pokémon Festival - May 21st: Evolution
The Pokémon Festival - May 22nd: The Attack Approval
The Pokémon Festival - May 23rd: The Pokémon Frenzy Tournament
The Pokémon Festival - May 24th: The Threat
The Pokémon Festival - May 25th: Chaletwo's Arrival
Chapter 26: Dead or Alive
Chapter 27: Past, Present and Future
- Extra V: Guilty
Chapter 28: Scyther's Revenge
Chapter 29: Stormblade and Shadowdart
Chapter 30: The Dragons of Ouen
Chapter 31: Spirit
Chapter 32: The Birthday Party
Chapter 33: Thunderyu
Chapter 34: Return to Cleanwater
Chapter 35: Suicune
Chapter 36: The Crater
Chapter 37: Carl
Chapter 38: Volcaryu
Chapter 39: The Workings of the War
Chapter 40: In the Dark
Chapter 41: Return to Scorpio City
Chapter 42: Splitting Up
Chapter 43: To Champion Island
Chapter 44: Polaryu
Chapter 45: The Ouen League HQ
The Ouen League - Chapter 46: Day One
- Extra VI: Letting Go
The Ouen League - Chapter 47: The First Preliminary
The Ouen League - Chapter 48: The Second Preliminary
The Ouen League - Chapter 49: The Rage of a Scyther
The Ouen League - Chapter 50: Friendly Competition
Chapter 51: Fake-Out
Chapter 52: The League Finals
- Extra VII: April Fools
Chapter 53: Away
Chapter 54: Reunion
Chapter 55: Unprepared
Chapter 56: The Ouen Safari
Chapter 57: Three Conversations
Chapter 58: Sins of the Mother
Chapter 59: December
Chapter 60: The Swarm
Chapter 61: Mewtwo
Chapter 62: Diplomacy
Chapter 63: Recovery
Chapter 64: Hide and Seek
Chapter 65: Three Dragons
Chapter 66: Doubts
Chapter 67: Friends
Chapter 68: Truths
Chapter 69: Lies
Chapter 70: Waraider
The Final Stretch - Chapter 71: Shattered
The Final Stretch - Chapter 72: Rick
The Final Stretch - Chapter 73: Recuperation
The Final Stretch - Chapter 74: Unraveling
The Final Stretch - Chapter 75: Mewtwo²
Chapter 76: Chalenor
Chapter 77: Home
PM list (post if you want to be on it or removed from it, but if you like it enough to want to be on the PM list and are posting anyway, I would really appreciate if you included an actual review and not just a "Please put me on the PM list"):
Kaizer; Sike Saner; fishyfool; Ysavvryl; SamuraiDragon1; Razor Shiftry; Estuary; Seiryu; Amras.MG; TheSequelReturns; GastlyMan; moonlightning; gmoyes; Chimpchar; biggggg5; Agent Tectonic; Wartiger97; Sidewinder
Note: From now on, every time I post a new chapter I will actually go through this list and remove anyone from the PM list who hasn't been online for a couple of months during which I have been posting chapters. If they do come online, they'll see a PM about at least one new chapter anyway, which would make them at least check the thread again. Also, if you're interested enough to be on the PM list and not want to get yourself removed from it, it really is common courtesy to leave a review to let me know you're actually reading those chapters I keep PMing you about, m'kay?
NOTE FOR NEW READERS (3/3/2012; edited 2/20/2013)
This fic is not very good. That's not modesty talking; it's the decade of writing and general life experience that I've acquired since I first started it. Today I criticize the hell out of fics that do many of the same things I did in the first thirty or so chapters of this fic (it gets somewhat better after chapter 31 or so). I'm still writing it because I'm stubborn as a mule and still love it as my demented little brainchild, warts and all, but there are warts, not as in "Well, it's not perfect" but as in "No, really, there's a wart right here, and here's an exact diagnosis of why it's definitely a wart."
Lots of people seem to enjoy it anyway, and that's great - I love entertaining people, and I sincerely hope it manages to engage you too if you read it (after all, even if your child has warts, you still love them and want them to do well in life). But this does mean you should keep a couple of things in mind:
1) Do not try to reassure me that there are no warts. Again, this isn't modesty talking and I'm not fishing for praise. If something doesn't bother you, it doesn't bother you, but that doesn't mean it isn't a bad thing generally. I'm thrilled if you like it in spite of its flaws, but it is not flattering to insist that there are no flaws, any more than it would be flattering to tell you you're ten feet tall when you know as a matter of fact that you aren't.
2) Do not imitate me. While this is a reasonably popular fic, please do not ever think along the lines of, "Well, Dragonfree got away with it, so it must be okay" - not in response to a vague hunch that something seems off about an idea you had, not in response to a reviewer telling you it's a bad idea, not in response to another author who is laboring to avoid it. No, giving your characters pseudo-legendaries with a half-baked justification about how a conservation project just happened to be releasing a bunch of them in the exact time and place the characters are is not good writing. Neither is starting your main plot a full third into the story. Neither is making your character's Pokémon wax lyrical about how amazing he is because he cares about Pokémon. Neither is making Nurse Joy entrust rare Pokémon who are young and injured to your protagonist, even if he was the one to bring the Pokémon in. Neither is lengthily describing the appearance of every Pokémon species that appears in the story. And so on. As a general principle, a story getting readers doesn't actually mean it's good, much less that every choice the author made writing it was a good one: "It's in this popular book/fic/movie" is not an argument that something constitutes good storytelling, only that people may be willing to look past it. Do not let this story inspire you to make the same stupid choices I did.
3) I already know. So if those early warts do bother you, there is, generally, no need to point them out - you can if you want to, of course, but odds are I've been aware of all the ridiculousness you're noticing in the first thirty or so chapters for several years by now, so writing up lengthy criticism of it is probably not a very productive use of your time unless you just really enjoy ranting for its own sake. By all means glue those criticism-goggles back on when/if you get past those earlier chapters, however - insightful criticism on stuff that isn't already making me facepalm is incredibly valuable and I welcome it.
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RATING
Violence: None, but the whole thing is aftermath of violence.
Gore: A bit. Well... quite a bit, actually.
Sexuality: None at all.
Profanity: None.
Other: Nothing special.
------
Prologue
The flaming remains of a town burned sadly in the sharp wind. On the singed ground lay bodies.
Humans, mostly. The plant-less soil was littered with them. Dry blood colored it dark red. Most of them were pretty much in one piece; a few were still weakly breathing although they would certainly never wake up again without medical aid.
There were also several virtually torn apart corpses. They were not of humans. It was like a supernatural being had swept past with the sole intention of killing those but its mere presence had made everything else drop dead too.
The mutilated ones were powerful creatures known as Legendary Pokémon. There were twelve or so dead Legendary Pokémon in these former streets in total – although admittedly, only two of them were not in bloody bits with their guts spread around.
Both had somewhat catlike shapes. One had blood-stained whitish-pink fur; it was rather simple-looking, with stubs for ears, small front paws but large, rabbit-like back legs, and a long, thin tail ending in an oval shape.
The other one looked a bit similar to the pink one, but a lot larger; it was whitish gray with a deep violet, muscular tail; it narrowed towards the similar oval on the tail end. The ears were smaller in comparison to the head and more pointed than the pink one’s. The overall shape of the body was more human; it had long, bony arms with three ball-like fingers although the legs were more like a kangaroo’s. It had a large, bleeding wound in the middle of its chest.
The pink one stirred. It was still breathing. The life slowly returned to the little body. A leg twitched. Soon enough, its eyes opened.
“Mew?”
The small creature rose up and stared wide-eyed at the destruction.
The Legendary Pokémon levitated a meter or so into the air as its big, innocent-looking sapphire blue eyes fearfully scanned the area.
Then it stopped, kicked the air with both legs and darted towards the place it was staring at.
Terrified, the Legendary looked upon a black, feline-like head. It had likely belonged to a Legendary Pokémon the size of a leopard or so. Two neon green stripes pointed downwards from the top of its head. The same green shade was also on six long spikes which sprouted from the back of its head, three on each side, and on two slash-like markings on either side of the muzzle. The left eye socket was empty; what had been the right eyeball was now merely a torn, bloody mess.
The pink Legend’s disbelieving eyes stared at the severed head in horror.
“Chalenor!” sounded a desperate telepathic scream. But nobody was around to hear it.
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