To sandslash:do you remeber your parents are there any pokemon you admire
Yeah, that was sorta what I meant, as he was, out of the team, albeit temporarily. Good to hear that Jolteons playing a part in the next chappy. ;135;Dragonfree to nintyweb: You're going to see some Jolteonness in chapter 23. He isn't out of the team, Mark just didn't use him against Ash.
Anyhoo, fun stuff hey, I like the sound of that.Chapter 23 is coming along pretty nicely, I've finished the start of the chapter and now it's getting to the fun stuff. The last obstacle is starting the fun stuff, and then I'll be able to write quickly.
Maybe it was because, if you think about it like an Animé, sometimes not everything gets animated, to save a lot of time, maybe Dragonfree just did so on purpose, trying to make it more visual, or, forgot to write it, LOL....Psychic said:Sorry I havn't reviewed in a while, been rather busy. But anyways...
Nice job on Chapter 22! Great job, very clean. I knew it would be worth the wait!
Though I'll admit, I liked the Attack Approval better in the old version. I was really excited to see how you would spice that up, but I was rather dissapointed in the end. I thought that the whole thing with the 'making up attacks in advance and using them on the dolls' was pretty original, you really should have stuck with that, but then again, it's your fic. ^^;
Catching the Leta was a nice added bonus, and I think that having Mark catch a made-up Pokémon will make things more interesting, not only for the reader, but for the writer too.
One problem I found with the Attack Approval: Scyther seems to have just appeared during the battle. You didn't add that Mark threw the Pokéball and Scyther popped out, he was just suddenly there. Meh, whatever, a little nothing mistake.
Anyways, keep up the awesome work! Anticipating Chapter 23!