Things on fire are always likeable. XDheatran_ran said:Oooh, Things on fire. I like it.
But seriously though, this was another awesome chapter.
Perr was in XD as well - he owned the shop in Gateon Port in XD. And I wonder if anyone feels sorry for Johnson...? XDMakuhita is always punching things but at least it's usually Johnson, lol.
Another fine chaper. Nice reference to Team Plasma. Did Perr appear in Pokemon Coloseeum or just XD?
Well they're certainly not in Kansas? =pCalling it here, the woman who shouted at Folly and Trudly is The Wicked Witch of the West. So... Team Plasma is actually trying to liberate Oz from the Wizard, and Elphaba is a member? MIND = BLOWN. UNOVA IS OZ! EVERYTHING MAKES SENSE!
Glad you liked those parts. =)No time for more quotes, so my highlights are: Umbreon's "YEEEEAAAAH!" before charging into battle, "Spider Cannon", and the Whoops-I-Almost-Spoiled-Something line from Folly/Trudly.
Hurrah for your escape from the closet then. ;p Maybe not so for you getting weird looks but oh well. XDWell, first off, I'm one of your closet stalker-reader people, and I absolutely love this fic. Awesome chapter, as always, and you never cease to make me laugh hysterically to the point of nearly crying and making people around me wonder what the heck I'm doing.
Fire is the best thing ever. And Johnson...well, it probably isn't possibly but given how much hax he has with Magikarp...That entire part with the "Things on Fire Show" had me giggling like crazy. FIRE!!!! YEAH!
Also, Tom is awesome, and so are random citizens who do nothing and shout random things at people... which is most of them, I guess.
And how has Johnson managed to survive his entire life, with him being as stupid as he is? It just doesn't seem possible.
Loved Umbreon's entrance into the battle, too. I can't quote everything I liked from the chapter because... well, that would be most of the chapter. All of it? Yeah, that.
So, again, great chapter, and I'll be eagerly waiting for the next chapter and the opportunity to have my family give me funny looks because I'm laughing that hard.
Maybe! Especially the water-type attacks. And the fire-type attacks. *nods*Spidercannon. is. EPIC!
...Maybe there should be a TV show where epic new moves catch on fire...
...yes. =pReminds me of a string of nightmares I had last night. OH GOD THE GIANT DUCK, RUN, RUN OR IT WILL EATTT YYOOOUUU.
I see you caught most of the references in that part. XD Most... but not all. ;p Good effort though!OH GOD I JUST DIED
That it should have been - I had to reformat italiced stuff and so missed the odd thing.Random sort of thought-proccess-y "Is that... Duncan's lawn?". Guessing it was meant to be italicized?
Clearly I derped many a herp with that bit. >_<Pluralized woman here three times when it's just one woman
... and here.
And here again.
Indeed. Poor guy can't catch a break!Poor Gloom. Just tryin' to chillax wit his homies, 'n' dese *****s come in n stawt ta ruin dis joint. Man.
I'll try despite uni. Well, besids today. ;pAwesome chapter, b&b. Hillarious, as always: and update quick like this more often!
It seems the show is well liked. XDThis is officially my new favorite show on TV. YEEEEAAAAAHHHHH!!!
Yes, yes I did. =pYou just had to put that in there to have me spend 10 minutes reading it over and over for no reason what-so-ever didn't you! >:/ ...at least it was 10 minutes of awesome.
Uh, maybe? *hides answer sheet*I have always wondered what she was doing in there, and now you make it painfully obvious. You have all of the answers, don't you bobandbill!
Well at least you found it funny throughout then. XD Cheers for reviewing!XD Johnson's completely clueless as always.
I would comment on more, but you just had to make it so hilarious that I would be basically copying the entire chapter...but that is definately not a bad thing. Keep up the good work!
\o/Yet another great chapter as all ways.
It is the best kind of show. ;pWhat kinda show is that? Though it doesn't matter as its all made of win anyway.
That is a fair comment to make. =phehheheh, Tom scares me.
You know, I actually did consider throwing in another character to do just that, caps and all. XDSomewhere a plasma grunt is yelling PPPLLLLAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSMMMMMAAAAAAAAA
Oh, I don't think Tom would like to hear that-uhWell, I definitely don't wanna hear those stories.
So let me get this straight... according to this, n > 9 x 1000?A young man sat in his seat by a desk, which was covered by more papers than the number of tails a group of one thousand Ninetales would have,
Yeah, I don't think anyone bothered to point that bit out before, iirc. XD Anyways hurrah for my story making you laugh and all and cheers for the post!It's a little late, but I figured I should point this out from Chapter 11 (I think).
So let me get this straight... according to this, n > 9 x 1000?
IT'S OVER NINE THOUSAAAAAAAAAAAAAAANNNNDDDD!!!!!
You're still making me laugh. Keep up the good work!
Unfortunately I do not have anywhere near enough drinkies for Tom to remain motivated enough to keep telling stories. =(Tom is an amazing story teller. Screw YOU, b&b, Tom needs to write all the chapters from now on! Feed him his firey oceans and his drinkies! I DEMAND IT BE DONE!
Well although Tom requires alcohol to function like...well,Tom (=p), I do not even drink the stuff. XD Late night writing seems to help though? But thank you!BobandBill, DAMN. It takes either a hell of a lot of talent, or alcohol to write that drunkenly. I presume it's the former. This might be the best April Fool's ever. Bravo.
Thanks as well - glad you liked it.Best one I've seen today.
APF joke, I mean.
While this is technically correct, it sounds a little funky.Wes looked at Dakim grab the unconscious Vander and set him down on his side of the platform like a ragdoll, and grimaced.
You used Mt. Battle twice.his breaths hidden by the wind which battered at Mt Battle’s rocks below and sent a large carpet of clouds above their heads flying around the top of Mt Battle.
I think you're missing a word here.“Ok, now Umbreon, and jump to the side, quick!” Wes shouted.
Is this really the right word? I don't imagine someone as high-ranking as Nascour to use a word like this.“I hardly expected you would just march up like that and get all of your men arrested, and worst of all you lost Entei! The Pokémon that we went to so much trouble to capture and shadowfy, and you let it fall off into Mt Battle! That’s also a failure!”
Bolded phrase sounds wrong.your parents and us were worried more than enough already when you said you got kidnapped, and we want you to be safe.”
When you used the word "demanded", I would've wanted more emotion out of Rui's dialogue. Right here it's just like she's asking a friendly question and Sherles is just answering it nonchalantly.Yeah, Quagsire isn’t going to offer any useful advice...maybe Sherles is my best bet to know why then? “So... why is there a call for an arrest on Wes anyway?” Rui demanded.Sherles sighed. “Because he wants matters concerning Wes and Team Snagem cleared up,” he explained gruffly.
I have the same issue with this quote as with the previous quote - your lack of build-up. I would've liked it if you mentioned something about Rui thinking about what Fateen had said or something to that extent.“You know,” she said to Quagsire as she gave the Pokémon the box, “she’s right. Maybe not about the yogurt, but about taking matters into my own hands. Let’s go to The Under.” With that she marched back to the building the elevator was in with renewed confidence.
I don't think "quieten" is a word...maybe change the phrase to "keep quiet"?“At least quieten it down for a few minutes so I can try to contact Venus to tell her the current details,”
As I read this, I had the sudden urge to punch Espeon.“Espeon!” (Nobody likes you or your pre-evolution!) Espeon jeered, charging in once more.
SHE SPEAKS THE TRUTH.“But...but...I have a top hat!” she protested, taking said object off her head and waving it about. “You can’t say no to the top hat!”
What a strange dream... he thought to himself, reflecting on his hallucination. Not that I can remember much, but it was something about travelling about with some weird people with super powers and Tom and Miror B for some reason... and I was either fighting some great entity or a giant duck, I can’t really remember. Man, I have the strangest dreams at times...
AHAHAHA.“Probably not then. Maybe she’s some Plasma goon on holiday,” Trudly replied with a shudder. The group were well known for shouting about how Pokémon should be ‘liberated’ from trainers and other such nonsense in some silly-sounding region of little importance.
Nope, guess you didn't. ;p It happens, heh. Anyways hurrah for it making your AF day - that was partly my aim. =DThought I already commented on that chapter. Guess I didn't. But DAMN. Tom narrating a chapter. We are not worth of the sheer awesomeness. That made my April Fool's Day, I'll tell you.
\o/Well that took me a while. XD I'm reviewing from Chapter Sixteen to the latest one...so yeah! XD
Cheers for pointing those out - I like improvements and eradicating mistakes. Although on a couple:First up, grammargrammargrammar + comments here and there:
I can see where you are coming from but I guess that's just how I felt they went with the term (and if in made an official term it wouldn't be a convenient short one either, but rather very long). I think I have already used such a phrase a few times as well in the fic (as well as 'shadowfication'). I view it as a term that's easy to say and means what it is meant to mean, and Nascour in my eyes is not that pedantic, just..short tempered and weird.Is this really the right word? I don't imagine someone as high-ranking as Nascour to use a word like this.
Actually quieten is apparently a word (google confirmed this), although maybe not that commonly used I suppose?I don't think "quieten" is a word...maybe change the phrase to "keep quiet"?
I rarely use smogon (only really tried it out) but I did find the text rather robotic there so I used it as a basis. XD And I always felt that the platforms were rather dangerous places to have a battle, especially with all the win, or the higher parts of the Mt Battle challenge (namely lava!)Metang analyzing the battle
smogon-likelike a computer was a really nice addition, and it made the battle much more enjoyable. I like how you make it realistic, and how the platform itself is a factor [something that really should be added in the games, right? They're doing it with weather and Secret Power but...eh].
=OAs I read this, I had the sudden urge to punch Espeon
Miror B it was. =p But yeah, I kinda feel the same way myself - unlike most other characters (say Wes who is a silent protagonist in the game and whose past is only hinted to at best) or other admins (who don't have quite as deep a personality besides 'I'm evil dude!') Miror B is pretty well defined and I've only really exaggerated some traits at most and he's the most enjoyable for me to write as well, so I suppose he seems the more developed out of them all as a result.IMO the best thing about this chapter is Miror B. He seems the most in-character in this chapter out of all the chapters so far, which is always a good thing. Add the fact that Mirakle B's here and I can call this chapter a Miror B chapter! =D
Damn straight! =pSo, yeah, HOORAY FOR THE RETURN OF DRUNK TOM! I missed him so, and you of all people should know why. XD
Hurrah that those amused you then, along with the beginning of the chapter! =DAnyway, I liked this chapter. From "THINGS THAT GO ON FIRE" to Drunk Tom to overconfident Wes to VolbeatxIllumise, it has a lot of things at once, but somehow manages to present all of them in a clear and amusing way. Bravo, bravo!
Tom needed a heck of a lot of drink to convince to write this much. =(Also,
WE ARE NOT WORTHY OF THIS AWESOMENESS. Oh my flipping hell that was amazing. Easily your best chapter to date, so much plot and characterization encapsulated in ten paragraphs. Why didn't you start out writing like this? This would've been A LOT more enjoyable...
Random ideas I bother to go through with on late nights fuelled only with soft drink? XDSeriously though, that was a good laugh. I don't know how you do it, bnb, but you never run out of ways to entertain your readers.
Cheers for catching up and giving your thoughts - I always like large helpful reviews like this. =)I obviously can't wait for more. Even though I haven't played Colosseum, reading this makes me feel like I'm not missing out on anything. Haha.
Starting to feel drunk? Wow, that's... I'm going to consider that as an achievement. I think. =pI read this... and I'm starting to feel drunk.
This was amazing.
Thanks, and I intend to. Eventually. =pThis is an amazing fic! Keep up the good work!
You might be putting some chapters in there which I might slightly update later, mind you. =p (The first few are already done though I suppose...).I'm putting the chapters together as I read them! Hopefully when this story eventually ends it can be on one GIANT word document! (I'm still working on it) *shows a goofy thumbs up*
That's me! XDI found this fic from bobandbill's banner
Hurrah for the fic being a wonner. XD Thanks for stating what you liked about it, always good to know. =)and I have to say that this is the best thing I've read in over a decade. no joke. Here is a list of the things I found most enjoyable:
-Folly & Trudly losing the keys
-Rui's air deprivation
-Makuhita bashing its own head in screaming "die" repeatedly
-Espeon mind-wiping people
-anything with Miror B
-anything with Tom
-Viridian City coffee guy
-Skarmory and Ein's torture sequence
-Hoenn weather broadcasts
-The entire population of Agate Village running in fear from Ash
-and anything that breaks the fourth wall like the Official Strategy Guide and an EV trained Magikarp
I officially declare this story to be a "wonner" Now I gotta go. The things on fire show is about to start and I don't wanna miss it.
Hurrah for shout-outs from other people's fics now? ._.I got here from the Aventure of Aventureness when Missingno. Master mentioned this in one of his chapter. I'm in da process of reading it. Great work though!
EDIT: May I be on the PM list for now and forever please?