Excitable Boy
is a metaphor
wwMd
What would Magikarp do?
What would Magikarp do?
“Yes, hello, Sherles. It seems some Cipher grunt thought it would be fun to lock a door behind me,” Wes said to the machine. Makuhita looked at Wes and wondered how he was able to talk to someone else through such a thing without even having to punch it to make it work.
Who goes there? Makuhita thought suddenly as he became aware of Wes’s psyche, raising a hand to his head as he pondered if he should punch himself or not to make it go away.
“Makuhita!” (But punching solves problems!) Makuhita shouted proudly.
“Yanma!” (This-is-not-coffee-this-is-pain-I-don’t-like-pain-it-is-painful!)
“Yanma yan yan!”(I’m-covered-in-this-fluffy-non-coffee-substance-it’s-very-itchy-and-not-coffee-which-is-displeasing!) the bug shrilled as it flew around in circles into more feathers, as Makuhita tried to punch them out of his way.
while Yanma merely continued to ramble to itself about the wonders of coffee and its own ability to fly faster than coffee.
They didn’t seem too fazed by that though, as upon their heads were strange pieces of equipment that resembled scuba diving gear. Glancing at the scientist, Wes decided it must have been made by him to allow his Pokémon to be able to breathe better outside of water.
“Maku...hita...” (Stupid steps... being bigger than me...) Makuhita muttered.
“Umb Umb Umbreon!” (Da daaaaah daahh dah!) Umbreon shouted as he suddenly fell over himself. Espeon looked at his brother and sighed.
“Espeon esp...” (Don’t tell me some of the attack hit you too...)
“Umb eon Umb!” (Dah dah DUUH DAAAH dum!) Umbreon replied before giggling oddly and attempting to bite his own legs.
“Hariyama!” (I got bigger!) the fighting Pokémon shouted. Wes grinned – they had been all so distracted by the Entei and Raikou battle that nobody had noticed Makuhita evolve suddenly and immediately make his impact. Now instead of being a touch below the waist height of Wes, the Pokémon towered over his trainer and had the physique of a large sumo wrestler. He lumbered forward towards the Raikou and picked up the dazed legendary before hurling him to the other side of the room into another wall.
But he’s right, I can’t chase after him... he mused as he picked up the distracted dog Pokémon. He then spun around quickly and like a discus thrower hurled the two fire types into the air. The pair of dogs yelped in surprise as they whizzed high into the sky. He then followed their path and watched the two projectiles fly towards the escapees.
Sorry to interrupt the enthralling conversation here, but Johnson - stop nodding and looking at the Pokémon you’re thinking to like that! Or that man will notice!
Oh, okay, Johnson thought to Espeon happily as he turned and begun to nod at the Psychic type, adding in a thumbs up for good measure.
“I suppose Tom would have liked to be here,” he added to himself before pulling out his P*DA to alert Sherles.
“See, wasn’t that fun?” Ein asked. “But maybe I overdid it,” he added as he wrinkled his nose at the smell of singed clothing. “Yes, too much fun-”
Good pick - it doesn't, so I edited it a bit to make it more along the lines that Umbreon helped Espeon summon two light screens rather than use it (the brothers would know each other well enough I feel for this to be viable, with an energy-sharing thing. Maybe a sort of twist on the power swap deal as well I guess?). And the name of the law is Jim...bo.review beam bean thing!
I thought umbreon did not know light screen?
what is the name of the law?
non boss ones are funnier.
still funnier.
LOVE MAGIKARP'S PERSONALITY!
I hope it wasn't too obvious, but I'd rather it be that than be too left-field with the evolution.Another great chapter! Loved Magikarp's personality, and what with Makuhita constantly complaining about his size in this chapter, I had a sneaking suspicion it was going to evolve.
I'll say that the Yanmega evolution is possible going by that logic, but whether it would happen is another story. What one can be sure of is that if Yanma ever evolved nobody's coffee would be safe.Which leads me to another question; Even though Colosseum is a Generation III game, you had no problem including Generation IV attacks like Hammer Arm and Discharge. Would the same hold true for Generation IV Pokémon? Like, say... Yanmega?
Truly the great question of our age.wwMd
What would Magikarp do?
Yeah, Golbat is just a bit more blood-thirsty. =p Glad you enjoyed those parts though! And heh, the jumping technique certainly was a hit. ;pWonderful chapter. Hurray for Makuhita evolving, punching-desire and coffee references. The jumping technique was a hit and it was nice to hear Magikarp’s thoughts. Ein was sinister all right (what with attacking humans), suits him (maybe the only worthy Admin). I guess he’s as bloodthirsty as his Golbat (though he doesn’t shout Blood! or I vant to suck vour blood! all the time)…
I bet that fellow from Pokemon XD is already trying to market it. =pImagine how rich we would get just by selling this to unfortunate trainers.
Maybe but a dazed Umbreon should be amusing to most people, or so was my intent anyways. =pI loved this scene (am I a bit sadistic, no?)
It is a most beneficial evolution that somehow makes Makuhita several times larger - that brain would likely benefit at least slightly too. =p And I object - I argue that I have given Growlithe a use and also a method to using Aerial Ace! =p (Funnily enough, a move they can actually learn).Hurray for Makuhita’s evolution.
His evolution not only made him bigger, but smarter too. I see that he got another habit besides punching: hurling various creatures to an obstacle. But you have an obsession with torturing Growlithes. You should be handed to the UFPGFB&B (Union For Protecting Growlithes From Bob&Bill) ( ;
Maybe next chapter. =p Although grand is subjective at times with drunks I suppose.Waiting for Tom’s grand entrance.
I can see where you are coming from with the first thing there - remove any comedy retake and what you have from Colosseum is the guy who came up with making Pokemon into angry fighting machines in the first place. The other thing is also a neat observation I didn't plan, so I guess it is true - you are what you eat-er, train. (But that is generally the motif for the admins! Miror B dances and is easy-going - has a Ludicolo army. Dakim punches people, is the muscle guy - has physical attackers that love Earthquake. Venus is a vain character - her strategy is status, particularly Attract and confusion. Ein's the smart guy, hence the combos like toxic and later on lightningrod Pokemon partnered with water/flying. In a way you can extend it to the XD:GoD admins too).If this wasn’t a humour driven fic, I would prefer Ein being more wicked and bloodthirsty… I guess coffee had other effects on him too… Also, I noticed Ein has similar likings as his Pokémon: blood like Golbat, coffee like Yanma, fleeing like Raikou did in the end… Show me your Pokémon and I’ll tell you who you are…
Raikou shall be dealt with before the fic is finished, certainly, and Tom has not spoken his last, er, 'word'. =pI’m looking forward to your next chapter and the way they’re going to capture that Raikou… And of course Tom. He will show up, won't he?
Shall do! Thanks for the review again. =)Until then... Keep it up.
~Truthfully yours~
I wouldn't blame him. Flowers that sing stop you from sleeping and are just plain annoying.I wonder what skarmory would be like after purification...
Would it go nuts when it hears about flowers still.
How does a helicopter dance...? @_@ I mean sure, Miror B is pretty skillful with his moves but that'd be quite the feat. =p Anways, I'll confirm that that is not how it will end. =pIt would be funny if when wes fights what's his face.
Nascour's boss.
Wes catches tyranitar.
Then he loses.
then johnson and tom come up.
Tom makes slowking start drinking.
Johnsons magikarp kills slaking by bouncing it off the platform.
Then miror B hides in the escape copter.
Nascour's boss runs in chopper.
Miror B. makes the chopper dance with everyone in it.
As usual - when it'd ready to be posted, and not before. That said, likely sometime in December. It'll also likely be a touch shorter than previous chapters, partly as originally this chapter was going to be longer. Then I thought up some more scenes and points to cover and so split it in roughly half.When will next chapt be up?
soon or long way?
NOvember or december?
next year?
This'll be covered when it comes up too, but you are assuming that keys need to be obtained in the first place in the fic. =p (As a side note, maybe keep speculations on what happens in the game in spoilers? Some readers haven't played the game after all so they do not know everything).If venus was captured,
How will they get their keys.
Glad you enjoyed, and how about that, Makuhita is on a favourite list. \o/ He'll be sure not to punch you first if ever he gets angry. =p And added to the list.Dude this warstory is just epic. I love your writing style and humor. Makuhita/Hariyama is the best character so far. Will you add me to the PM list please?
"Child" is singular, "their" is plural. "Their" should be changed to "his" or "her" to make a correct sentence.Makuhita bounded after him, jumping down one step at a time carefully like a small child trying to navigate their way around a playground.
Good pick with the former, fixed that.Two things
"Child" is singular, "their" is plural. "Their" should be changed to "his" or "her" to make a correct sentence.
Second, Charge Beam is a gen IV attack and PC is a gen III, which I'm sure you know. It's not necessarily wrong, but it does seem a little odd.
Anyway, YES, a new chapter!
Added, but do you have anything else to say beyond it being amazing, curiously (eg what parts did you like in particular?).amazing fic. pls add me to the PM list so i can love it more!
\o/To begin I will say that your fic gets a 10/10 from me.
That's good to hear regarding the imagery comment as it's not that often commented upon (even though I guess the prime focus is the comedy and all it's good to have that working too, especially as it helps support some of the jokes). Also good to hear your thoughts about the character advancements as it was particular lacking in the first parts of the fic, in the original versions anyhow. As for minor spelling grammar issues - any specific instances come to mind? I would like to know where they are to fix them after all. =p And thanks for the review!Now as to the review, I have read all the chapters thus far and to point out your strong point would be your use of imagery. When I read the chapters it feels as if I can picture them happening as they happen. Whether it be the details of a battle or makuhita or now hariyama wanting to punch and hurt everything in sight, its as if the action is happening right in front of me. It also is nice to see that you give character advancements as the fic goes on and every pokemon has their own personality that is something that really lacks from other fics I have been reading. In terms of the low points, well I don't see anything wrong with your fic except minor spelling or grammar errors which can always be improved on. Keep up the great writing b&b and here's to the greatness of this due to the efforts of tom and miror b.
Added!P.S. may i be added to the PM list, this is one fic i definantely want to see play out.
“Ferali Feraligatr? (Why are you suddenly telling me to ‘Jam jam Singapore the ropes are singing ever since the watermelon...?)"
The down quickly clung to the opposing Pokémon’s skin, tickling the group and distracting them for a moment on top of making them look rather ridiculous; Umbreon for instance suddenly found himself with a white beard and moustache of fluff.
“Umb Umb Umbreon!” (Da daaaaah daahh dah!) Umbreon shouted as he suddenly fell over himself. Espeon looked at his brother and sighed.
“Espeon esp...” (Don’t tell me some of the attack hit you too...)
“Umb eon Umb!” (Dah dah DUUH DAAAH dum!) Umbreon replied before giggling oddly and attempting to bite his own legs.
“Good dodging, Magikarp!” Johnson shouted to his Pokémon which continued to flop around despite the attacks.
“How did it avoid that attack...?” Ein mused, paying no attention to the state of his Huntail.
“Wait...what? You can’t do that! Only Pokémon can flee battles!” Johnson shouted, waving his police badge at their direction. “Stop, in the name of the law! And my shiny badge!”
“Well I didn’t expect that,” Wes said. “Nor for him to leave his remaining Pokémon behind...” he added, looking at Entei currently stomping on the Lanturn with great delight and the fainted Huntail. Sighing, Wes took out its Poké Ball and returned the fire type.
“You won’t be much help in chasing that Raikou if you keep being distracted... Maku-no, Hariyama, you up for taking him on?” the fighting Pokémon nodded before marching off.
“It has my name on it!” Johnson continued to shout, before pausing in thought. “What is the name of the law...?” he asked.
Yay reviews~ Cheers all - looking forward to more! ;p
Good pick - it doesn't, so I edited it a bit to make it more along the lines that Umbreon helped Espeon summon two light screens rather than use it (the brothers would know each other well enough I feel for this to be viable, with an energy-sharing thing. Maybe a sort of twist on the power swap deal as well I guess?). And the name of the law is Jim...bo.
Something akin to Tom's thought processes, I imagine. XD (On that note, there is actually a vague reference at the end of that bit you quoted! Only I don't expect anyone to get it except maybe one person, and even then it's pretty vague.)Lol, loved the chapter!
Wes' thoughts: amazingly funny! I wonder how they continued on after that...?
Ha, that thought amuses me. XDMy first thought: Umbreon got his handlebar moustache!
Well, told us, but not Ein. =pJohnson already told us... His magikarp is EV trained, dumbo. You might as well be one, Ein...
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Hopefully the last month was enough time. =p *motions below*. Glad you enjoyed it though, and hopefully you will like the new one as well!Lawrence.
Anyway, another triumph for bobandbill! I love your writing style, random and spontaneous but consistently humorous and entertaining. And the swell characters. ("Stop filming my lawn!")
...And I guess that's all I have to say. Take as much time as you need to make the next chapter as good as the latest!
Snatch is a way to do it, yes, but it wouldn't result in two Light Screens iirc, just the move being 'transferred'.Man, I wish I'[d seen this before you editted. While Umbreon doesn't know Light screen, it does no Snatch asa starter move. And guess what move is Snatchable...
“Well of course! Given what’s happened we can’t afford to let it be known that Cipher will still in operation without another...say, three years minimum,” Es Cade said. “In the meantime, the aim is to make it seem that Cipher has disbanded.”
I think you meant don't, unless that was narration, in which case it shouldn't be italicized.It can be only one of three possibilities, Silva mused as he observed someone hauling a large crate labelled ‘not incriminating evidence’ away. Either things here are usually this busy, they had a party the day previous and so were cleaning up now, or something is going to happen. And the lack of streamers and balloons didn’t suggest the second option was the case.
He gazed at the door before a bedazzled man with a large afro akin to Miror B’s covering his eyes stumbled out.
“Sasyasya explusions! Hairesy everyshmears!” the man shouted as his flailed his arms about.
“Arrsgh! Scares mans!” he said when he saw Nascour glaring at him and hurriedly put the afro back on. Annoyed, Nascour stepped forward and pulled off the fake hair.
How does he not know the great Tom?Out of uniform, drunk and not at work! I’m docking your pay for the week... whoever you are,” Nascour exclaimed angrily as he tossed the afro to the side.
“I donny wonny goes tum schooly!”
“Arrghblurrghsmur!” the drunk shouted, pointing at the afro before running off.
Now if only they had decided to make a fountain about Ludicolo and not that silly Sudowoodo! And statues of the legendary dogs... what a silly and unstylish choice. But this shall do.”
“Hey, Nascour, can I have a new Entei?” Dakim asked.
“No,” he replied coldly.
“Say we got someone to look like Wes and have him do bad stuff! Then everyone would think he is bad and be distracted from us, man!”
*Shock* No way!...Hopefully the last month was enough time. =p
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Good old Dakim.“Today’s breaking story!” shouted a news reporter from a radio in Nascour’s office which was empty save for a bored Dakim. He had nothing to do after being told off by Nascour for breaking all the chairs in training the grunts on how to defend oneself against enraged Ursaring, and so he had given the Cipher agents the rest of the day off from his care.
Beware humans! Roaming Raikus are a sign... a sign... a sign...“Police have quashed claims from various citizens that this is a sign of either the apocalypse or an oncoming sale, but have nonetheless investigated the claims.”
Wow are they popular. And sending a Rattata as undercover?“We do not currently know the purpose but are hard at work in training our undercover Rattata in recording conversations and garnering the truth for our loyal listeners! All... ten of you.”
And now dear listeners you can hear Beethoven’s 5th Symphony that is followed by the Imperial March from Star Wars…Nascour continued as a short, stout man walked in.
Nice way of putting it. Are the other two brothers coming up soon? Or rather in the post-game stuff?“Who is that man who was shouting at me about not wearing enough blue?” he asked Nascour as he tugged at his brown coat.
“Ah, sorry about that, that must be Bluno, one of our agents. We found him moping about in the desert recently and so we brought him back in. He and his brothers are... a bit odd, to put it plainly,” Nascour explained.
Another demonstration of Dakim’s fabulous memory.Dakim blinked blankly. “Hello, man...” he said slowly as he scratched his head and looked down at the newcomer.
“You do realise who I am?” the man replied, only for Dakim’s vacant expression to remain.
“He’s the mayor of Phenac, Dakim,” Nascour muttered. “Es Cade.”
“Oh yeah!” Dakim brightened, shaking the mayor’s arm. “You gave us money!”
“...Yes, I suppose that’s the main thing I’ve done,” the mayor said angrily as he rubbed his arm. “If it wasn’t for my actions there would be no Cipher!”
And the irony of it! Who would (save for you b&b) ever think that all those ideas would be proposed by Dakim? And, I hate to admit it, but I didn’t think before how did all of Realgam’s visitors get in if the door was sealed… Take frequent breaks people, or you will need b&b explaining you the most evident stuff… (maybe the same goes for the game developers, no?)“Man, I had an idea too!” Dakim continued with a smile, oblivious to the current discussion. “Say we got someone to look like Wes and have him do bad stuff! Then everyone would think he is bad and be distracted from us, man!”
“Well... two Wes are better than one!” Dakim protested. “Or...Okay, how about this – we make a big door that can be only unlocked with keys and each admin gets one of them, so they have to beat us all individually to be able to get in!”
“And how do you propose we get a key to Venus?” Nascour asked. “And that won’t stop them coming in from the top by helicopter or the windows if they were to storm in. And what about when we open this place to the public – how would they get in?” he added, counting off the bad reasons on his fingers.
Well, now that he mentions it…“Oh, hello there, mayor!” Miror B sung, patting the man on the head. “My, is it just me, or did you lose some weight?” The mayor simply stared back, his frown growing by the second.
“His weight is the least of our worries!” Nascour shouted. “Uh, no offence of course, sir,” he added.
“Well, man, now that he mentions it...” Dakim said.
It seems like he doesn’t know very much about Cipher. Like he’s not the real boss, but the one who just financed the project and all orders are given by Nascour. It’s just that the game gave me another feeling (like he was the ultimate boss and stuff). And I’m interested to see how you will explain the “Es Cade is Evice” thing.“Well that’s just great,” the mayor spat. “If I understand correctly, Ein was the brains behind the whole process?”
You need some verb there. Be it a “be” or a “is” (as treeko's awesomeness mentioned), but you need a verb.“Well of course! Given what’s happened we can’t afford to let it be known that Cipher will still be in operation without another...say, three years minimum,”
Yay for “hurling” references. Makuhita/Hariyama and Dakim have so much in common, I wonder why he wasn’t given to him, rather than Trudly. And calming? It seems that we sadists get another member in our ranks.“How about throwing people great distances? I just find picking someone up and hurling them to be really calming, man, you know?”
That’s a way to describe Miror B. And poor Es Cade (serves him right actually) being shouted at and, moreover, being disappointed and thinking about the police coming to rescue him from this chaos of strange persons that don’t do their job right. And that’s when the “inestimable” Dr. Kaminko, “who is verily great”, started with his “incredible inventions, that are number one in the world”, heh? (btw, random appearances of Chobin's quotes here...)Es Cade sighed, watching the giant afro with a man attached to it turn the corner. He had thought him strange when they had met only a couple of weeks ago, yet now it seemed it was more the norm for this place – and besides, Miror B never shouted at him for not wearing blue. Somehow I wish for the police to come here tomorrow just to end this all. Cipher’s by far the worst investment I’ve made since that gamble with those power-draining light bulbs, but I’m determined to stick with it. I’ve come this far, and to have put so much into this building...
The one is calming himself by hurling people. The other by destroying TVs, PCs and other appliances. Everyone has a kind of sadistic way of relaxing. Members in our ranks so far: 5.And the mayor had been rather disapproving of Cipher’s spending costs on various computers and televisions too which he had broken upon wave after wave of bad news, and Nascour felt somewhat guilty when he found out exactly how much that had cost the mayor. Not that he would let the mayor know he had been responsible for that, but he now knew that he had to be a bit more careful in how he went about letting out his anger. Luckily he had someone put all the remains of the appliances in the control room so as long as the mayor didn’t go in there for the time being he wouldn’t find out about it.
And here is where I think that Tom will make his grand entrance.Walking past the train and glancing at the insides, Nascour made a mental note.
Fine. He didn’t appear in the previous quote, so I hope he will be here, but…“Metagross,” (Target locked,) the Pokémon said.
And finally, here he is!before a noise from within the train caught his attention.
It’s so good to pop up in a big company where the employers don’t know their employees. And I sense chaos is going to unleash sometime soon… (just imagine Tom trying to work, while all the time looking for something to drink… And he’s love for things on fire doesn’t help…)“Out of uniform, drunk and not at work! I’m docking your pay for the week... whoever you are,”
Deh, meh nether…“I donny wonny goes tum schooly!” Tom shouted desperately.
Sweet! Who would resist such a treatment?Wes meanwhile had recovered considerably well from his battle, also thanks to the help of several Persim berries, but he personally felt that Rui’s facial expression when she had seen what had happened to him from the battle, her sweet kiss and then nonsensical angry shouting at Ein earlier on had a greater effect than all those berries.
Oh, goodness, Johnson… And poor objects having to hear him out...Johnson for the moment was strutting around the room boasting about his own contributions to the raid to anyone who cared to listen, which amounted to a wall painting and a mirror.
Poorly-performed card tricks can be deadly (if soaked through with poison, or if they’re disguised small knives that are thrown at the victim… Man, I could make Eusine’s show graphic!). Members in our ranks so far: 6.Annoyed at the lack of response given by the scientist, he then treated the man to ‘purposefully poorly-performed card tricks’ as some sort of additional punishment, despite the fact that Ein slept through most of his ‘show’.
Random pastries references have been replaced by random waffle referencesbut had so far only managed to pull up more garbled text files containing golfing scores and secret ingredients to making the perfect waffle.
*Shock* To the stake!He is why you can’t buy bubble gum or red apples in this region, and it seems his power includes what gets constructed outside of Phenac, clearly.
If my grandpa had such a big beard, my cockatoo would be dancing from happiness. He loves my grandpa’s beard (he picks out hair after hair and plays with it, yeah another sadist) and now that grandpa had it cut a bit, he was somehow sad. We need Eagun here urgently! (poor Eagun won’t be able to use his beard as a bag after the bird’s treatment…)“What? Oh, yes, it’s somewhere in here...” Eagun said, reaching inside his beard and rummaging through it. “Ah yes, here it is,” he said eventually, pulling out a Poké Ball and handing it to Wes.
I found the sentence quite difficult to read, stumbling on the words, and had to reread it to understand it. Why don’t you put a verb there like “do”?There wasn’t much he could though besides try to gleam information about what was going on here and pull off small stunts like the one he had just performed now.
Not with Miror B around!Unless Cipher just have really lame parties, he added to himself.
Poor Silva! His moment of greatness being ruined by a mere moustache…“Oh, I am the great Silva!” he shouted as he ripped off his moustache, only to wince and shout in pain and hop about awkwardly, clutching at his mouth.
Cheers for the error catching, should be fixed now. And it's fun for me to focus on the villains at times, heh, especially as they're often ignored in Colosseum in terms of what they're actually doing too. Although I'll admit given they show so little of some (e.g. Dakim) that a lot are my own additions, but well!Ah, yes, another wonderful chapter. I like how you focused more on the villains than the heroes recently, as it provides an interesting change. I found a few grammatical mistakes, though, so here they are:
I'll try to! =DWell, overall, awesome. Keep up the good work!-TA
Haha, I imagine that's no easy feat to do, understanding Tom's slurs. XDAwesome another great chapter! As well I only noticed maybe one grammatical error which I can't seem to find which was a misspelled practice oh well no biggie.
Anyway the humor in this was delightful and after careful analysis I think I have come to understand Tom's drunken slurs
Ah yes, a side note not mentioned in my spoiler thing after chapters iirc - in Realgam tower there actually are some pictures of Ludicolos so I felt it was obvious who put those up there, given Miror B is in Realgam tower at one point in the game.I think you can tell who I agree with on the decor around that place. Here's a hint: it's for the ludicolos.
Probably if anyone was doing that, his own Pokemon.Okay, whose been giving Dakim lessons on eduaction and actual good ideas again?
Aw, but overboard is good board. =p And yes, that's not a bad assumption.Well, I don't want to go overboard for now and although this was mostly like a filler for information, I can only assume there will be a lot of action in the next chapter. Wooo! Keep up the good work and maybe go teach some comedians about real humor.
Haha, I've been tired like that before myself.*Shock* No way!...
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A sign of what though?Beware humans! Roaming Raikus are a sign... a sign... a sign...
I know - most popular radio station of Orre!Wow are they popular. And sending a Rattata as undercover?
Nah, it still has to be his ever-so-cheery mayor/Es Cade theme. The other theme is for later. =pAnd now dear listeners you can hear Beethoven’s 5th Symphony that is followed by the Imperial March from Star Wars…
As said to someone else a while back, I'll be skipping a lot of the post game stuff because it's pretty badly put together/boring/hard to do given how stuff will end too, so a lot of it will show up beforehand instead, and for some of those they'll just get a mention like the brothers. They're not really entertaining after all by themselves and for them to show up at the lab after cipher is beaten would be...rather odd.Nice way of putting it. Are the other two brothers coming up soon? Or rather in the post-game stuff?
Granted, mind, I've had a lot of time to think about the game, haha. But yeah, a lot of things are pretty silly. I mean, right after you spend time beating those admins up again to open a door, after an additional backtrack to Agate because of Eagun? 'Hi you are the thousandth visitor!'And the irony of it! Who would (save for you b&b) ever think that all those ideas would be proposed by Dakim? And, I hate to admit it, but I didn’t think before how did all of Realgam’s visitors get in if the door was sealed… Take frequent breaks people, or you will need b&b explaining you the most evident stuff… (maybe the same goes for the game developers, no?)
I kinda thought that too...until I played XD and things continued as normal for cipher despite the huge change in personal, which suggested to me that he was more an investor, or at any rate other people took what he did and ran with it. At any rate he is the lead man in the fic too - just less concerned with the finer details. As far as he's concerned (imo anyways), he put in the money and is concerned with what it's doing, while who is actually doing it he doesn't care so much as long as it's being done properly.It seems like he doesn’t know very much about Cipher. Like he’s not the real boss, but the one who just financed the project and all orders are given by Nascour. It’s just that the game gave me another feeling (like he was the ultimate boss and stuff). And I’m interested to see how you will explain the “Es Cade is Evice” thing.
Yeah, it occured to me as well that they're pretty similar as well in that respect, heh.Yay for “hurling” references. Makuhita/Hariyama and Dakim have so much in common, I wonder why he wasn’t given to him, rather than Trudly. And calming? It seems that we sadists get another member in our ranks.
Another thing not mentioned in my spoiler thing - oen of Kaminko's inventions had been mentioned in that chapter. =DThat’s a way to describe Miror B. And poor Es Cade (serves him right actually) being shouted at and, moreover, being disappointed and thinking about the police coming to rescue him from this chaos of strange persons that don’t do their job right. And that’s when the “inestimable” Dr. Kaminko, “who is verily great”, started with his “incredible inventions, that are number one in the world”, heh? (btw, random appearances of Chobin's quotes here...)
Dare I say... psyche? =pAnd here is where I think that Tom will make his grand entrance.
Waffles are tasty and pastry-like. =p (After all they can be made from a dough).Random pastries references have been replaced by random waffle references
Well, his Pikachu's attacks would be super effective against it I gues...so more reason to keep your bird away from it. =pIf my grandpa had such a big beard, my cockatoo would be dancing from happiness. He loves my grandpa’s beard (he picks out hair after hair and plays with it, yeah another sadist) and now that grandpa had it cut a bit, he was somehow sad. We need Eagun here urgently! (poor Eagun won’t be able to use his beard as a bag after the bird’s treatment…)
Yeah, I had a bit of a headstart with it admittedly, and it was a touch shorter as well. And I guess I have vaguely thought of it but nothing in depth or pre-planned or anything with that. I guess it's atm 'do XD retelling maybe after other stories and if I have the interest/motivation/ideas for it only'.I liked the chapter and how it was villain-centered. As always, lots of humour and finally more plot holes were filled in… To be honest, I didn’t wait for you to post a new chapter so soon (I guess you already understood that) and can’t wait for the next one. Although it fills me with sadness that this fic will end so soon… Have you thought writing short stories with Tom, Johnson and Duncan and his lawn?
Keep it up.
~Truthfully yours~
Yay continuity. ~I'm just going to take this moment and say YAY for "XD setups!" between Kaminko's lightbulbs and replaceing Ein with
Lovrina
We have ourselves *Gasp* CONTINUITY!!!
I guess that's why they only made the train and then gave up and went with underground trains instead. XDTruthfully, I've goven up on trains in the Orre region. Much as I'd love for there to be some, there's no way to lay track in that sandy desert. If Micheal's scooter can't be supported, (XD) then how would one support a ton of rail and 300tons of train? What pan view do we see the track in?
It seems a lot of people prefer the bad people rather than Wes, heh. Which I shouldn't be surprised at as that's the case with myself too... given Wes is arguable the Only Sane Man there and I prefer my wacky characters and all. =pCool chapter
no mistakes that other's haven't already seen....
Looking fodward to the craziness that will insue from Mirror B + Tom + silva =-)
Nice to have a chapter not primarily foucused on Wes