Whee, three reviews, and SerebiiForums had died for near half a day as well... Thanks all!
DarkPersian479:
Good grief, did I miss all those mistakes? I wasn't this bad before... although some seemed to have been caused in the transferring process from the document to here (for instance warm =/= arm)... how odd. Might have accidently pressed a letter or something...
Most of the mistakes seem to be in the battle area - I shall have to address that next time. Probably because the battles were the last thing that I had written before submitting. I shall (try) to improve and have a better (less) amount of mistakes next time!
Note that Wes and Rui haven't tried nicknaming, and thus don't know that it shouldn't work... yes that should cover it
Either way, Hoks and Koks are weird... silly Colosseum names.
Remind me to catch up on your fic and make SerebiiForums not lag so - I've been desperately trying to catch up for quite a while now... (month or something?)
Psyblade:
Consider it me trying different types of humour, as well as me trying to cover all types of humour so all people like it. And that dream equence was simply a product of me trying to come up with something to start the chapter off - having Wes being sad about lack of father with it being funny at the same time... and dreams can be weird.
Running gag, you say? *shifty eyes*. I'll just say that I had been considering some... other things with that...
Sike Saner:
I thought that Spinda were the only Pokemon right for him - for those who hadn't play the game, Spinda's battle animation is them walking around, as if they were drunk. Very amusing.
I'm glad that you liked Miror B's scene (and him singing to the tune fits too!). And I thought it was time to see his thoughts on the whole matter.
Anyway, thanks for reviewing, and I look forward to more *hint hint*
Good grief, did I miss all those mistakes? I wasn't this bad before... although some seemed to have been caused in the transferring process from the document to here (for instance warm =/= arm)... how odd. Might have accidently pressed a letter or something...
Most of the mistakes seem to be in the battle area - I shall have to address that next time. Probably because the battles were the last thing that I had written before submitting. I shall (try) to improve and have a better (less) amount of mistakes next time!
And that's why I got Wes to distract Rui, thus me not having to address that issue It's an odd thing after all... *I'm shadow don't nickname me!*Not that Shadow Pokemon can be nicknamed before purification anyway...
Note that Wes and Rui haven't tried nicknaming, and thus don't know that it shouldn't work... yes that should cover it
Ah, yes, that's what happens when you can't read your own writing and end up looking at a source that has it wrong... further checking on the issue has many saying Hoks, so it has been changed.Actually, I think the guy's name was "Hoks."
Either way, Hoks and Koks are weird... silly Colosseum names.
Give Reath some slack - she works with Miror B... probably would grate on you a bit... then again, it's Miror B.Hey, the afro is awesome. So's the music. And the dancing. As for the Ludicolo obsession - well, I'll give her that.
Good point, however:Well, it is true that his Shadow Pokemon sucks compared to the others (and it mostly sucks in general, to be honest.) However:
The legendary dogs/cats/gerbils can't dance all that well, either
Miror B could probably teach Suicune, Raikou and Entei to do a synchronized dance anyhow...
Indeed.I find it quite ironic that a SANDshrew would say that it hates sand XD
How true. Execpt that when you're Tom, you go out in an amusing manner.Remember kids, alcohol abuse is bad. It makes you lose battles and look like a n00b while losing.
Glad you liked it. Hurrah for Miror B music! You may need to play it in a few chapter/s time.Yeah, everybody loves Miror B and Tom the random drunk dude (well, except maybe that guy Vilch who got beaten up LOL). Another awesome chapter. I probably could've quoted all of Tom's drunken ramblings as LOL highlights, but I figured I quoted enough as it is. I also liked having the Colosseum game guide on sale at the store- wonder what would've happened if Wes DID buy it (OMGMAJORSPOILER)
Don't know what else to say, except great work and I actually blasted the Miror B salsa theme from my computer's speakers. Oh, and I almost fell out of my seat when Tom made his not so grand entrance.
Remind me to catch up on your fic and make SerebiiForums not lag so - I've been desperately trying to catch up for quite a while now... (month or something?)
Psyblade:
I agree Maybe being on the PM list will save anything like you missing my sig from happening?Again, I only noticed this by the signature...
Thank God I did.
Yeah, I used a few of those in the story (another one being Reath saying that she hate people who are late, then Miror B asks her why she is late again).I simply love the way of 'passive humor' you hang in your fic. Like this part that could be 'violent humor' and 'passive humor'
This could mean that Makuhita is just bored and likes to punch people, and it could mean that Makuhita took the advice. And once seeing the thing that makes him laugh, (Johnson) he put something worth laughing at in him (The punch)Wes looked at Johnson, wondering what ‘advice’ the children would have to suffer.
“Be on the look out for things that make you laugh,” recommended Johnson. “If you see nothing worth laughing at, pretend you see it, then laugh.”
“Maku!” (Sounds about right…) Makuhita exclaimed, looking around the room for something. Seemingly unable to find it, he turned to Johnson and gave him a punch in the gut, causing Johnson to cringe in pain.
“What was that for?” asked Johnson.
“Maku!" (Hahaha!)
Very funny once you realize it...I like this complex humor more then floating pies...or panties. XD
Consider it me trying different types of humour, as well as me trying to cover all types of humour so all people like it. And that dream equence was simply a product of me trying to come up with something to start the chapter off - having Wes being sad about lack of father with it being funny at the same time... and dreams can be weird.
I don't even know if there was a game guide for the game... I guess there probably was. Oh well, poetic lisence.ARGH!! THE FOURTH WALL IS SHATTERED TO BITS!!
*Gathers bits of the fourth wall, then realizes that the fic is comedy-based*...We love game guides.
Actually, both. One time I *think* he reduces the price down to $1, and he might offer some other crazy deals as well.Lol, that mobster in the shop...wasn't it ten potions for ten dollers?
I though that up shortly after coming up with the whole mind-wiping idea. Miror B's afro has many possibilities.Sunk into the afro?! Original!!
Wow, that could be a running gag...a real funny one at that.
Running gag, you say? *shifty eyes*. I'll just say that I had been considering some... other things with that...
Thanks - I'm glad you liked the battles. I spent some time thinking of them.Wow, the battles had me on the floor laughing...exploading presents must suffer? All the like were so funny that it was serious comedy.
*more shifty eyes*Coupon for dance lessions too? RoFL! I hope this isn't Miror B who does the teaching.
Sike Saner:
I knew you'd like the return of Tom. He literally came from nothing, when I had gotten up to him, I thought 'now, why would this guy tell you important information that he doesn't want to give?'. And thus drunk guy was born.FWEE FOR THE RETURN OF TOM! That guy cracks me up so very much... XD And I thought it was awesome that he had Spinda--and drunk Spinda, no less!
And lol at Miror B. speaking to the tune of his theme song! XD Also, it was interesting to see his thoughts on the Shadow Pokémon plan.
I thought that Spinda were the only Pokemon right for him - for those who hadn't play the game, Spinda's battle animation is them walking around, as if they were drunk. Very amusing.
I'm glad that you liked Miror B's scene (and him singing to the tune fits too!). And I thought it was time to see his thoughts on the whole matter.
The first line is from Black Books, the rest was my twist on itGot a laugh out of me, too. XD“Be on the look out for things that make you laugh,” recommended Johnson. “If you see nothing worth laughing at, pretend you see it, then laugh.”
“Maku!” (Sounds about right…) Makuhita exclaimed, looking around the room for something. Seemingly unable to find it, he turned to Johnson and gave him a punch in the gut, causing Johnson to cringe in pain.
“What was that for?” asked Johnson.
“Maku!" (Hahaha!)
I believe I had also mentioned it when Wes and Rui first got to Pyrite.I am amused by the fact that it smelled like cheese. XP
Yes, indeed - what else is within the realms of Miror B's hair?LMAO! I wonder what all else has gotten lost in that hair over the years? XP“Oh well, off to the bin it goes,” he conceded, picking up the Itemfinder and throwing it over his shoulder towards the bin. The object never made it though - instead it collided with Miror B’s afro and sunk into it. Miror B seemed not to notice this, and gave a sigh.
A feature of Colosseum which was very odd - just because you live in a desert dowsn't mean you name your children so weirdly...Lol, a lot of the names in that game (as well as in Gale of Darkness) had me asking a question like that one. XD
Personally I like the line 'I forgot my forgot something' - for personal reasons.Pretty much everything that comes out of Tom's mouth is pure magic. XD“Whas? Oh, rightio!” said Tom who had now progressed to Morris dancing. “I’d better send out my Pokeymans, right? Lets me sees….” he mumbled, rummaging through his pockets.
“Where are they?” he muttered. “Oh dear, I think…
“What?” asked Wes impatiently.
“I forgot my forgot something.”
“What?”
“Oh, waity, it’s in the other rocket, no, clock, no, my pocket! That’s it!” Tom announced, pulling out two Pokeballs from his other pocket. Already the crowd was booing at the delays.
Wonner is too good to pass up on.More Tom awesomeness... AND HE SAID "WONNER" AGAIN!
Hence why I brought him back - I like writing him, and people seem to like him Maybe I should just kick out Wes and make this into 'The Adventures of Tommy-tom-tom boy... Tom!"Even in his sleep, he says awesome things. XD
Frelling frell, do I ever like that character. XD
Can't have a battle with Delibird without Present. Seriously, what is up with a penguin giving exploding presents?IMO, Present is one of the funniest attacks in the Pokémon universe, so seeing it in text was awesome. XD
Anyway, thanks for reviewing, and I look forward to more *hint hint*
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