The Rocket Show!(Season 1)

[Moonlight Locust]

Well here's my first fic posted on Serebii.Oh and please don't complain about the length.I haven't got Microsoft Word so I did it on WordPad.Ok?Good,I hope you enjoy.
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Disclaimer:All pokémon characters are respective to Nintendo.I did not make them up.Credit to FlamingRuby for inspiring me.
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The Rocket Show!

TRS #001:A Rocket and A Firework!

(Team Rocket's Rocking tune plays)

Female grunt:And now it's time for The Rocket Show!

(A puff of smoke appears and Jessie,James and Meowth are there as it clears)

James:Hello and welcome to our show.

Jessie:The show will start with a cartoon all about us!

Meowth:Let the show begin!

(CARTOON-Pokémon Emergancy!)

(As the cartoon ends fireworks are pulled out and a giant rocket with the threesome stuck to it pulled onto the middle of the stage)

Jessie:Ready for some blasting off?

James:Jess,we've done it for years.

(The rocket gets lit and goes up and explodes with the fireworks)

Meowth:This show's a blast!

Jessie,James and Meowth:Team Rocket's blasting off again!

(The threesome land on the stage and Meowth's tail is on fire)

Meowth:ARRRRRGHHH!This is a bad first episode!

Jessie:Shut it!It's Jame's part of the show now!

(A posh mansion comes into the background.It then says Life With The Posh with James.James appears in the L and leans on it.)

James:Welcome to Life With The Posh.Today we are interveiwing the man from manopoly.

Manopoly:Hello you jolly good fellows.

James:Hello.So how did you become posh?

Manopoly:I was attacked by a were-posh-wolf.

James:Ah that must of hurt.Well we're out of time.

Manopoly:Well then,tally ho!

Jessie:Finnaly he's away.

James:Wait why's there a rocket behind us?

Jessie:And why are we tied to-

(The rocket blasts off with Team Rocket tied to it.)

The Threesome:Team Rocket's blasting off again!

The End.
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I hope you like it!If not I'll try to change it a bit.Oh and FlamingRuby!Thanks for inspiring me!
-Blue Meowth;manafi;

 

[NoDayBut2Day]

If I were you I'd re do it because scripts are not allowed. Take a look at some other fics and how there written. Also check out Advice for Aspiring Authors and the rules here in the fan fic section so you don't get in trouble.

-Danny

 

[Moonlight Locust]

Oh sorry.I was doing it the same way as FlamingRuby.She inspired me so I thought it was aloud.I am sorry and will redo it.
-Blue Meowth;manafi;

 

[NoDayBut2Day]

There are certain ways to doing a script like fic and even though I don't know a lot about it, I know this isn't long enough. If you check the rules I am sure it will be more helpful on writing a fic like this.

 

[FlamingRuby]

You're off to a good start here...but maybe you need to study ANP a bit more to brush up on segement ideas, and structure.

I do give this my blessing, though...

 

[Moonlight Locust]

Like I said I have WordPad.This was 3 pages of it.That was all I could think of.I'll put more next time ok?
-Blue Meowth;manafi;

 

[Kutie Pie]

I think you should read Typhlogirl's Poke-Talk and others for more ideas. And it should be a hair bit longer. And I'm not sure how the rocket pun'll work, but it's your fic. And you should've made the Monopoly thing longer. Adn ask for permission before doing scripts.

Otherwise, I wish you luck.

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♥Kutie Pie♥ Please be kind to midgets!

 

[Zephyr Flare]

I can honestly say rule wise I meant in Word as it's what I and many use as a judge, Wordpad though I wouldn't honestly know >>


This does sstill seem a tad on the short side, a space rom the : before the charcter text would improve on a minor front as well as the spacing with ,'s and the like. Your spelling needs a bit of a smack as well.

I'm not that up on the script fics in this forum (I admit personally thanks to English classes i learnt to hate reading it :x) I'd go with the other member suggestions, seeing how the bgger scripters have tackkled it will help improve your own.


It is nice to see script actually bothered with remotely decently but still suffers from the fact I can't chuck it at anybody and say act it out.


Sandra

 

[Moonlight Locust]

Well I'll do the next episode and use those tips.I'll use Ability Write instead since it's better and it's got a spell checker.
-Blue Meowth;manafi;

 

[Moonlight Locust]

Okay I have a little mention of ANP.It's not any material or anything.Well here's the next episode!
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The Rocket Show!

TRS #002:Shockin' 'n Rollin'

(Team Rocket's Rocking tune plays)

Female grunt: And now it's time for The Rocket Show!

(Team Rocket appear chasing a Pikachu)

James: While we're chasing this Pikachu we'll show you this cartoon!

(CARTOON-Ash Catches a Pokémon)

(Pikachu runs on stage with Team Rocket tied to the balloon)

Jessie, James and Meowth: Team Rocket's blasting off again!

(Team Rocket land inside the balloon)

Meowth: Stupid Pikachu!

(A posh mansion appears and James is inside it)

James: Today we're interviewing Poshachu.

Poshachu: Pikaposh!(Tally ho you non-poshy!)

James: I AM POSH!

Poshachu(translated): You are not!

James: Am so!

Jessie: While those two argue let's get onto the next cartoon.

(CARTOON-Electric Shock Showdown)

(The two poshys keep arguing)

James: I AM POSHER THAN YOU!

Poshachu: I AM POSHER!

James: ARE NOT!

Poshachu: AM TOO!

Jessie: It's Meowth's part now!

Poshachu and James: Pffft.I don't care.

(A sign saying Life In The Ally appears)

Meowth: I'm talking to Persian of Ireland.

Persian(translated): Hello my good old friend!

Meowth: Hi.How's it like in the ally?

Persian: It's ok when you can watch TVs inside stores.

Meowth: Interesting.Very interesting.What do you watch?

Persian: The Ash and Pikachu Show and The Rocket Show.

Meowth: A fan already!Amazing!Wait?The twerp's got a show?

Persian: Misty's cute.

Meowth :End now!End now!

(Meowth comes back on stage)

Meowth: I can't believe he's got a show!That stupid twerp!

Jessie: We'll get him when those two stop arguing.Wait why's there a Pikachu behind-

(The Pikachu shocks them)

Jessie: MEEEEE!

The Threesome: Team Rocket are blasting off again!

Pikachu: Pika!Pika, Pikachu!
(Pikachu waves)

The End.
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I hope it's long enough.Oh and I can't beleive I missed FlamingRuby's comment!
-Blue Meowth;manafi;

 

[Smile Guy]

It's actually quite amusing... If a little rushed and short, and the fact that scripts aren't allowed. Spend more time with one session, and it will come out a lot better -- I appreciate quality over quantity.

 

[FlamingRuby]

Again, studying ANP would be a good idea...you have segement ideas...but the show just doesn't flow very well.

For the record, Smile Guy, scripts are allowed, provided they're done right.

 

[Moonlight Locust]

Ok I'll read the archives of ANP as well as season 3.

Next:Blue Meowth Feature!
-Blue Meowth;manafi;