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The Second Clone (PG to PG-13)

Dragonfree

Just me
Whee, yet another chaptered fic of mine.

This is actually one of my earlier works, but spiffed up quite a bit.


The Second Clone



~1~​

Yes, the second clone. That’s me. After the Mewtwo experiment failed so miserably, they made sure to clone a relatively weak, fairly common Pokémon like Sentret when they started fiddling with their cloning again.

And I was a complete success. My powers, while great, were not particularly dangerous, not even after I evolved. I could whip wild Sentret around my level with ease, but the higher-leveled Furret were nearly a match for me. I was the embodiment of perfection itself in their eyes, and as so they grew fond of me.

For example, my name. They always used to have DE No.1 written on my cage. The DE was some sort of an acronym – they usually called me DE-one amongst each other and referred to me directly as DE. I think it was one of the scientists’ young daughter who first misread it as “Denol”. They laughed at the time, but in the end they started calling me that too, figuring that just an acronym and a number made a sad excuse for a name. When government officials came to investigate the lab, I was proudly introduced as Denol the Furretwo, the first successful super-clone.

Anyway, those government officials complained that I couldn’t be kept in a cage for the rest of my life because of Pokémon cruelty, apparently, so the scientists scheduled my release. They made me infertile in some unpleasant surgery, placed a little metal object I didn’t quite get what was – I think they said it would enable them somehow to see where I was – under the skin on my neck, and finally released me to join the group of wild Sentret living not far away from the lab.

To be honest, I always liked the lab. The scientists would pet me, the injections were easy to get used to, and I got food whenever I pressed a lever. Truthfully, I wasn’t too keen on being free, but hey, it would seem rather pathetic to just run back inside, wouldn’t it? So that was why I shrugged it off and went to meet with the wild Sentret.

As it turned out, the wild Sentret didn’t like me very much. Much to my surprise, I found that the first Pokémon I ever battled, a small Sentret with a very long tail, was there. I remember when the scientists brought him in to test my abilities and I realized for the first time that violet fur wasn’t natural for my species; the normal Sentret was just an ugly brown. And he was a pathetic battler, too – a breeze to beat up.

Well, that particular Sentret turned out to be one called Ethan. Quite popular in the group; all the younger Sentret gathered around him and listened to every stupid word that escaped his mouth. I was the only one who realized he was full of crap. And now Ethan had been spreading some stupidity about how I supposedly ‘cheated’ in our battle by being a clone. By that logic, you could say that now I’m cheating by being an evolved Furretwo. And by the way, the winner is always cheating by being better. What an idiot.

But that was how I found myself plagued by his constant snide remarks and ignorant comments all day long after joining the colony.

“Still there acting all big, are you?” Ethan sneered. Yup, here we go again.

“So?” I retorted. “Yeah, I’m bigger and stronger than you. Get over it.”

“Oh, I’m so scared,” Ethan replied sarcastically; I saw him withdraw slightly into his crowd, though. How typical of him to try to intimidate me in a group. Our original battle was still fresh in both mine and his memory – it made the scientists think I’d do fine among others of my kind, and sure, I would have, if only Ethan hadn’t been the prick he was. He spread that annoying ‘cheating’ story. Not that the other Sentret didn’t think I was ugly, anyway, because I wasn’t the same color as them. They were pricks too.

“Really, do you need to be five together to even talk to me?” I snorted. “You’re even more pathetic than I thought.”

This ****** Ethan off; he growled at me, crouched to the ground and charged at me for a Headbutt. I rolled my eyes at his predictability before leaping out of the way in a blur, turning swiftly and tackling him in the air to throw him a meter backwards. He fell into the yellow grass and bounced against the ground like a rubber toy before rolling a few times over and then finally coming to a stop. I smirked at his sheer lack of skill.

Ethan got up with difficulty after a few seconds, his ears and tail hanging down. He gave me a nasty glare before disappearing into his hole. His friends stared after him and then looked at me with wide eyes. That was more like it. Now don’t mess with the second clone, will you?

I casually licked my paw to emphasize my point, but a high-pitched shriek from one of the scouts interrupted – an urgent Arbok warning. I watched them flee horrified into their underground homes, away from their most feared opponent, and wondered if I had discovered a way to prove myself.

I looked around as the last of the striped tails disappeared underground. The only thing they were ever better than me at was camouflaging. Perhaps the scientists made me purple so I would be easier to spot if I escaped by accident, but for a wild Pokémon this was very frustrating. I stood out like a sore thumb in all the tall, dull yellow grass. The only thing I could rely on for defense was my powers.

Oh, there it was. A purple cobra snake Pokémon slithered sneakily in the grass nearby, its tongue flicking out every now and then. I concentrated my psychic energy – because those were my main additional powers – and messed with its mind a little bit. Hmm, a female. She shrieked in mental pain, thrashing about where she was and completely forgetting about hiding.

Then I noticed that she wasn’t alone. Following her was a young, blond-haired human boy. He stopped to stare at me and his Arbok for a second, and then proceeded to yell, “It’s the Furretwo I saw on TV!”

Great.

He threw a red and white sphere at me; I ran off to the side but the ball hit the tip of my tail and opened. Stupid tail. I fought to concentrate and keep myself solid, smashing the ball back towards the human.

“Arbok, Poison Fang!”

The snake-like creature lunged down at me with a hiss and sank her poisonous fangs into my skin. Slightly numb, I retaliated with another Confusion just to get her off me. It was successful and I started retreating to the Sentret holes, but then realized I wasn’t making much of a name for myself by running away.

I turned around. The Arbok appeared to be severely weakened. Perhaps I had a chance.

I focused all my power for another psychic distraction while I quickly approached her and slammed my tail into her head. The snake spread out the two patterned flaps on either side of her neck in some sort of an attempt to scare me away – instinct, I’m guessing – but then dropped limply to the ground, hopefully out cold.

Now that I had done something heroic, the Sentret would have to accept me as somebody great, and at least much greater than that idiot Ethan, right? I ran back towards the Sentret holes, but just before I managed to slip into the safety of my hole, I felt the poison kick in again and immobilize me for a second.

Then everything went white.
 

Timid Kyogre

Endangered Creature
Who would've thought of a second clone? and a Furret too. I like Furrets ^_^

This story is quite interesting...I'll be staying here for sure :D

Then I noticed that she wasn’t alone. Following her was a young, blond-haired human boy. He stopped to stare at me and his Arbok for a second, and then proceeded to yell, “It’s the Furretwo I saw on TV!”

Great.
I loved this part for some reason ^^

~Timid Kyogre
 

mewga

Volcano Trainer
This. Is. Great. But no quest for the legends. =P

Needs a tad bit more description, like you should have added the arbok belly pattern or something among those lines, but I know after many hours of reading your work that you don't have as much description, but the writing is still amazing.

Is this a prolouge? It says 1 but I'm not sure.
 

Dragonfree

Just me
It's chapter one.

And don't expect much description from this. This is a first person fic, and if Denol doesn't feel like detailing the Arbok's pattern, so be it. :p
 

~*Myuu the Ryuu*~

The epitome of grace
i have gotta see what happens when ohtachi posts here XD.

anyways, this is a good fic, with all of the necessary components and a good plot. furrets are cute and fuzzy, and because you're writing about them, that boosts my rating :)

12/10
 
Huzzah, another chaptered 'fic by Dragonfree! This'll be interesting for sure.

Interesting how you used the Shiny colors for Furret. Which reminds me:
Denol said:
The only thing they were ever better than me at was camouflaging. Perhaps the scientists made me purple so I would be easier to spot if I escaped by accident, but for a wild Pokémon this was very frustrating.
I had a similar line of thought awhile ago as to why "Shiny" Pokémon are so rare; the different coloration messes up their natural camouflage, so they stand out to predators and get eaten and stuff.

Anyway, back to the 'fic.

I also liked the idea of how Denol's name came about as a misreading by one of the scientists' kids. Also, I'm glad the scientists, though briefly appearing characters, had some depth to them. Usually with Pokéclone 'fics the scientists are all nonemotional and act like wimps when an evil boss is around or some other such trite nonsense. But these scientists had actual humanity.

I'm not surprised Denol didn't want to go back to the lab; after all, he grew up there, and it was his home for awhile.

Overall, a very good 'fic, Dragonfree. Looking forward to how the story develops. Also wondering what the "DE" in Denol's original designation stands/stood for.
 

Dragonfree

Just me
*pokes one-star rating* o.o O...kay... Mind elaborating instead of just running off? *prods Phantom of the Monostar*

Actually, I didn't know shiny Furret were purple. o-o Funny coincidence, really... Denol is more of a bluish purple, too, while the shiny is redder. But yeah. Not intentional. Kinda awkward, though...

Yeah, I figured it would be a good idea to make the scientists show a little bit more character than jsut being random people who clone. I'm thinking about giving them some more appearances - back when I started this, I really couldn't think of much to put in it, which was why I never wrote more than four chapters, but now it's more shaping up. Thanks for the comments. :)
 

Demy

Well-Known Member
just something very quicky Dragonfree are you a mod of the fics ? i have just been read a fic called Rejected (rating: R done by Zerodius it have quie a lot of sexual refuces though out the story. can you do something about it?

the first chapter is not bad but maby a bit more discrition mmight of hepled.

Hope it put the first bit in the right area ):
 

Eternal Daydreamer

Surrender to the Sea
I have finally read something from start to finish from Dragonfree. :bows to Dragonfree: This is pretty good and reminds me of an old fic I wrote from the POV of Miss Veruca Salt. However, mine wasn't very good so I deleted it but this could go places. Yep, it can alright.
 

Dragonfree

Just me
Demy, that would have belonged in a PM, and aside from that, you don't appear to have noticed that I'm a regular reviewer of that fic. It's rated R for a reason; if you don't want to see sexual references, don't read stuff that's clearly rated R.

As I said, this is first person, and thus, the next person who tells me to describe more will be stabbed with a spear. <<
 

Evanarios

...yep
Yah so I woke up, and thought to myself
"Must... Review... Fics." So I jumped on Serebii and read your story. lol :p

Anyway it's cool I like it. I will probably read more, because it makes me want more. Anyway dude, Good job I hope to see the next chapter. Dude.

Good ay!

~Evanarios
 

Pokefan20010

Was Pokefan20010!
Yes, a good read. I like the first-person view. It's a good break from the ordinary third-person view. My first review too. 8.75/10
 

Chibi Pika

Stay positive
Wooshie. ^^ I looove the skill with the first person here. I mean, anyone can write "I" but to do it and truly have the main charcater telling the story in their words is an accomplishment. *coughonethatIhaveyettoachievecough.* Anywho, I like how this is going very much. I aslo admire your ability to write more than one fic at a time. Me, I can't even handle one fic without chapters taking two months. ><

*Rates five stars and goes off to prod Phantom Monostar with pointy cheeseballs.*

~Chibi~;249;<?>;rukario;
 
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UnholyWeather

Guest
Yes a very enjoyable read.

Good usage of the first person view. Not much else to say other then i hope you continue this story.

I'm a fan of Quset for the Legends so keep that going too.

Have peace.
 

icemew

Banned
This is an awesome fic! The idea of a Furret clone is just great, it makes me think of the first movie with a purple Furret running around making threats, and I thought your not-evil scientists was a cool idea.
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
Ha, good ol' Furrets...with purple...skin. o_O

First-person perspective tends to lose description because the one whose eyes you're seeing through isn't noticing something, or isn't particularly interested in describing what it saw to you, but we all know that :p However, first-person gives you a great insight on the main character's emotions and opinions, so that's what most of those POVs are made up of. Certainly, Dragonfree deed a purdy good job ^^

Denol comes across to me as a sarcastic, laid-back, and righteous dewd of a Pokémon clone, yusssssss... I'm kind of curious myself as to why the Furret was purple; I remember that Mewtwo looks almost nothing like Mew, and has that sort of violet tint to him... Maybe that's the result of the gene splicing and stuffs? I suppose you or Denol will tell us sometime xP I love his witty remarks, and the origin of his name was a perfect example of originality. So kewl that you could look at the number on his cage, and a little girl could misinterpret as "Denol." That was brill XD

Anywhooo, we'll see what happens when teh Furret clone wakes up. Looking forward to the next chapter D;
 

Demy

Well-Known Member
Um, sorry Drangonfree :-( I will remeber that for next time.

When are you puting chapter 2 up ?

Demy
 

Dragonfree

Just me
What the heck? Don't bump the thread just to say you're sorry for a post you made three months ago.

I'll put chapter two up when I finish writing it, and just as a note, that will always be the answer to the question of when I'll update my fics, so you don't need to ask.
 

Dragonfree

Just me
W00t, chapter two after... dunno how long.

I just love the characters in this fic...




~2~

The guy’s name was Michael, apparently. I found out when he let all his Pokémon out in some sort of an exercise yard in the Pokémon Center while he presumably went to eat or something – I guess he wanted us to meet or something. My first thought was that it was rather considerate of him, actually.

I looked over at the group of Pokémon that had been sent out with me. A purple catlike Pokémon with a narrow, forked tail that she swung around was talking in whispers to another strange Pokémon that looked exactly like her except that instead of purple fur, she seemed to have a shiny, reflective skin. They looked at me in between their whispering, which gave me the feeling they were expressing some opinions about me. I frowned slightly as they started to giggle.

The Arbok that I had fought was also there. She was looking at the cats and at me with some sort of an apologetic, passive look that annoyed me a little. Near her was a little green lizard of some sort with a bright red belly that seemed too be examining something in the grass (he had those huge yellow eyes that gave me the creeps). Finally, a yellow semi-humanoid with black tiger stripes snored a few feet away – I got the feeling that this was the most powerful Pokémon in the group from his size and muscles, but since he was asleep, he looked comically harmless.

“Hi,” I finally said after getting fed up with them just standing there and blinking.

“Hello,” responded the Arbok in a low hiss that still somehow sounded pleasant in a way. Well, I can’t explain it, so I won’t try.

“Do you have a name?” asked the purple cat in an uninterested manner – I would later learn that her species was called Espeon.

“I’m Denol,” I said. “Denol the Furretwo.”

The chrome-cat snorted in a metallic, uncomfortable fashion. “Aww, poor widdle Denol didn’t feel speshul enough being just a Furret.”

“It’s true,” I said, offended. “I’m a super-clone. I’m more powerful than any Furret you’ll ever see.”

The cat’s shape suddenly melted into a perfect replica of me, only minus the colors. She – or was it a he now? – walked towards me.

“The thing is, Denol,” she said in a mocking, sweet tone, “that Furret are weak Pokémon. In general.”

She slammed her tail into my body unexpectedly, catching me off guard for a moment. I was thrown heavily backwards and landed in the grass. Not particularly hurt, though.

“Being stronger than any Furret is, to be honest… not much to be proud of.” The Pokémon looked at me with an expression that reeked of superiority complex.

I shook my head as I got on my feet again. “What are you, anyway, if you think you’re so much better than me?”

She gave me an unpleasant grin. “Oh, you don’t know? Ditto, Coppy, Flex… Surely you must know that evolution line?”

I shook my head. The scientists really could have given me some pictures of other Pokémon species, on second thought. This wasn’t a very comfortable situation, and actually I felt kind of dumb knowing nothing about any of them.

“Well, I’m a Flex, and that means I can transform into other Pokémon and use their attacks from memory. Useful, don’t you think?”

“Eh, are you male or female?” I wasn’t liking the way she was looking at me at all by now, and to be honest, I hoped she’d go away. Every subject I brought up only seemed to give her more opportunity to mock me. Sadly I found that her grin only widened at the question.

“Technically genderless, but I copy the whoop-ee-doo parts too.” She glanced between my legs and frowned. “Not that you have much to whoop-ee-doo about. Christ, what the hell happened to you? Got so emo about being different that you resorted to self-mutilation?”

I felt myself blushing. “The… the scientists didn’t want my enhanced genes to mix with those of the wild species,” I muttered.

She snorted. “Well, there goes your only chance at making friends,” she said coldly. “Anyway, I may be genderless, but if you ever feel the need to talk about me to anybody, I’m a she by preference. My name is Victoria.”

I nodded curtly to show I had heard her and decided to ignore her. I heard her snicker as I turned to the Espeon, who snickered back at Victoria.

“Let’s get the introductions over with. Who are you?”

The cat rolled her eyes. “Wow, you’re not making much of an effort to be liked, are you?”

“What – is – your – name?” I growled, trying to ignore her comment.

“Mystic,” she said shortly. “And I’m an Espeontwo!” she then added in a mocking voice before having a giggling fit with Victoria again. I sighed.

“Will you two cut it out? You’re just jealous or something.”

“Jealous?” Mystic exploded in laughter. “You need to have your ego deflated, dear. Badly.”

I wondered for a couple of seconds whether I should bother responding to that and decided not to.

“Fine, be that way,” I just muttered. “Is the guy who caught me nice?”

Mystic stopped giggling before answering. “Michael? He sucks, but at least you can laugh at his cluelessness sometimes. Kind of like you.”

I sighed, ignoring the insult. Not only was my new trainer one whose Pokémon had a severe attitude problem, but also one who wasn’t even good. Just great.

“So why don’t we, like, escape or something?” I suggested.

“And I guess you have a ready-made escape plan up there in that wonderful brain?” Mystic said sarcastically. “You know what would happen if we ran away? Some trainer would just get us again, that’s what. And all those human kids are the exact same, anyway. There is no point.”

“He’s not that bad,” the Arbok said quietly, speaking for the first time in a while. “He’s just… a bit clueless sometimes. I mean, he’ll get better,” she added quickly. “I think all trainers start out a bit like that.”

Victoria snorted. “Start out? It’s been a while since this guy started out, and he hasn’t gotten one bit better at battling. But he gives us nice food, and we get to battle without having to search for worthy opponents. What else is a trainer supposed to do?”

“My name is Vera,” the Arbok said to me in a clear attempt to change the subject back to introductions.

“Leonardo,” the little green gecko piped up, glancing briefly up at me before suddenly shooting out a long, sticky pink tongue at a small insect somewhere in the grass and bringing it helplessly back into his mouth.

Vera looked at the big yellow thing, who was now scratching his back in his sleep.

“That’s Sparky,” she said, pointing at him with the tip of her tail. “He was Michael’s starter as an Elekid. Michael’s father owns a breeding center. Michael hasn’t really used him a lot since he became an Electabuzz because he tends to sleep during battle, so don’t expect to see much of him.”

I nodded, making a mental note of the Pokémon’s species name.

“Excuse them, too,” Vera whispered, leaning a little closer to me and looking at Victoria and Mystic. “That’s just the way they are.”

I nodded and smiled to her. I was already kind of liking Vera. She seemed to be the only Pokémon worth talking to out of my new ‘friends’.

One thing was certain: I would have to devise an escape plan.
 
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