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The Sinnoh Chronicles

Should I continue the series for a long time or quit soon?


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Rixec

Shadow Trainer
Hope you enjot the new chapter.

Chapter 10: Siege of Jubilife​

Mack, Tammy, and Ronald had made their way through Sandgem and were heading through Route 202. Their confrontation with Bobby and company was three days ago. Meaning they only had four precious days left to find Rixec. Tammy and Ronald had gotten more serious about their mission, but Mack seemed devoted.

“Perhaps it’s time for a short rest,” Ronald suggested.

“NO TIME!” Mack snarled, making Ronald and Tammy jump. “We spent two days recovering and another during our traveling. We should have found Rixec the moment we won!”

Tammy was scared; she had never seen Mack like this. Normally he was calm, cool, and …

Wait. And… and…, she thought. She was thinking back to their time with Rixec when she was interrupted.

“Tammy!” Mack barked. “We have to keep moving!” Tammy understood and continued.

They continued on for another half hour when Ronald noticed something, a secret base in a tree. Wow, people haven’t used those kinds in years. They’re normally underground now. Ronald stopped and then ran inside.

Mack noticed and yelled for Mack to get out here. He waited and Mack ran in after him. “Ronald, we don’t have time for… for…,” he was saying. Tammy came in and saw what they saw. Ronald had turned on the TV and there was a breaking news story.

“Breaking news,” the newscaster said, “we have been informed that a boy, name and age to be withheld, and his Gallade have not yet awakened from their battle. A pair of twins, with cloned Mewtwos engaged him and lost to him, but not without harm. These clones have been examined, of what’s left of them anyway, by the police.

“They are said to be stronger than one found in Sandgem so the police are now looking into this conspiracy. The twins are now being interrogated about an unknown man called Charon or Pluto. More news when the boy awakens.”

Mack and the others knew where Rixec was. In a hospital of all places. That was a dangerous move; if he was examined…

“He couldn’t have been,” Ronald said, “if he was in that bad a condition they’d be more concerned with his injuries. We still have a chance.”

“How? We have to be discreet, remember? We can’t just walk in…”

“We’ll blast in,” Mack interrupted. When Mack and Tammy looked at him, he explained his final, private instructions from Madam Platinum.

“So it’s come to this?” Ronald whispered.

“There’s no choice now,” Mack said bitterly, “we must get Rixec.”

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Hikari hadn’t left Rixec’s side as of yesterday. She was not going to separate from him and wouldn’t even leave the room, until he awakened. So the hospital provided a bed for her. Elvis brought her food everyday to comfort her. Joy (teenage) had also been encouraging her with words of comfort.

Gallade had also yet to awaken and was in intensive care at the PC. He was in more critical condition and was being worked on continuously since he arrived.

Hikari looked at Rixec, lying peacefully in his bed. This was the first time she saw his eyes, even if closed. He had never taken off his glasses.

“Hey,” a voice said. Hikari turned and saw Elvis and Joy, with some food.

“Hey,” she said bitterly. Elvis put the food on a table and sat by Hikari.

“He’ll live; he survived an explosion, he’ll get through this,” Elvis assured. Hikari started crying. It wasn’t what Elvis said that did it. It was that she was afraid that he might be wrong.

“B-but what if,” she said through the tears. Joy walked up and slapped her. Elvis looked stunned and Hikari stopped crying.

“Just believe,” Joy said kindly. “Your friendship is some of the strongest I’ve seen. Believe and he’ll recover.” Hikari looked at her and smiled.

Thanks Joy, she thought.

“…And you too Elvis,” she whispered aloud. Elvis brought out two Pokeballs and released the Pokemon inside: Turtwig and Buizel had recovered. Elvis and Joy left the room and Hikari was alone with Rixec, Turtwig, and Buizel. Hikari brushed some hair out of Rixec’s eyes; his bangs were getting long. Turtwig and Buizel looked worried.

“Believe,” Hikari repeated. She gave a reassuring smile and Turtwig and Buizel lightened up a bit. Hikari decided to distract herself by thinking about Elvis and Joy. Those two seem to be getting real close; when they weren’t with her they were with each other. She thought about what they might be doing, but when she did Rixec and herself took their places.

Hikari blushed redder than she’d ever done. She remembered when she first saw Rixec. She and Elvis had been blamed by the bombing, still no idea who’d done it, and he showed up and saved them. He had looked like a knight in shining armor, yet at the same time a hero who concealed his identity beneath his sunglasses. He’d agreed to travel with them and had treated her when she was injured by that Tangrowth.

She remembered him laughing when Turtwig jumped on him, and how he battled that pyromaniac so Elvis could get to her. Hikari wondered how painful it was for him when he left because he thought he was trouble. Piplup had hated her and Rixec-And Elvis too I think- took a fall so she would gain its respect.

Throughout everything she grew closer to Rixec and she wondered how he felt about her.

Hikari leaned over Rixec and whispered, “Rixec, I love you.” And she kissed him on the lips, never wanting it to end. But it did when the earth shook beneath her and she fell on top of Rixec. There were explosions and crashes and Hikari opened the window to see what was happening.

“WHAT THE F*CKING CRAP?!” she yelled.

Jubilife buildings were wrapped by thorny vines; others and the streets were on fire. The earth was cracked and rubble was rising as more earthquakes continued. It was only noon, but the sky had turned blood red and smoke was wasting over the town.

Hikari saw Elvis and Joy running out to see what was happening. Normally, she would have gone too, but she didn’t want to leave Rixec alone with all this happening. She walked to Rixec and held his hand and whispered, terrified, “Rixec! Wake up!”

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Mack, Tammy and Ronald watched at the work their Pokemon did. Magmortar, Tangrowth, and Rhyperior waste the city, taking their powers beyond their limits. It would serve as a distraction while they retrieved Rixec. Trainers and the police were busy dealing with the disasters, no one would notice them. And they descended into the city, grim looks on their faces.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Sunnyshore City

Mary Louise Platinum had finally gotten her battery powered TV. “How long does it take to restore the power?” she whispered. Volkner had always liked tinkering with devices, even when they were little kids. She hadn’t seen him in years despite living in the same city. She flipped on the TV and saw the news.

A reporter was in Jubilife avoiding earth, vines, and fire. “This is Jamie Simons from Jubilife. The city is facing natural disasters and half of it is gone! It is unknown what is causing this, but the city is being evacuated…”

She flipped it off and sighed. Rixec was there. “‘If there comes a time when the secret is in danger, use violence, screw discrepancy’,” she remembered telling Mack. She had hoped it wouldn’t come to this.

“Mack, bring my son back,” she said through tears.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Elvis and Joy were helping people out of the city; they would be heading east to Canalave City. “Come on now,” Elvis said to a little girl, “we’re gonna get you out of here.”

“I want my mommy and daddy!” she cried.

“June!” a voice cried. Elvis turned and saw a man in his thirties come running over.

“Daddy!” she screamed and ran into his arms. The two ran away after that. Elvis and Joy continued on through the city, looking for stragglers. They could not believe these were natural; someone had to be causing this.

Another earthquake arose and Joy lost her footing. Elvis grabbed her hand and they both fell to the ground. Elvis maneuvered himself so Joy would be on top of him instead of the concrete. Unfortunately he hit the concrete face first. He spat out some blood.

“I’m sorry,” Joy said. Elvis turned his face to her.

“It’s nothing”, he said. Their faces were close together and they immediately stood up blushing. Suddenly, the ground cracked again and a huge hole appeared. Out of it, climb a Tangrowth, a Rhyperior, and a Magmortar. They were surprised when they saw Elvis and Joy; they were expecting everyone to have run away.

Elvis and Joy were thinking the same thing: these Pokemon were what were causing the trouble in town And Elvis recognized two of them. The Tangrowth that attacked them at the lake and the Magmortar that was with some red hair kid back at Sandgem. Elvis had never met Rhyperior, but Gallade look like he had been hit by a truck when he came back in Sandgem.

“So that’s the truck,” Elvis whispered.

Joy ran forward and demanded, “Why are you doing this?!”

Magmortar raised its gun-arm at her. Mack’s orders were clear: Avoid killing, but do what you have to to make people leave. It was hoping she would get scared and back off. A sudden jolt of electricity charged through Magmortar and it saw a Shinx cackling with electricity. Magmortar fired a blast if fire at Shinx, but a Chimchar jumped in front and took the blast.

“Joy, get back to the hospital,” Elvis whispered. “Leave them to me. You make sure Hikari and Rixec are alright.” She nodded and ran off.

“All right,” Elvis said, stretching his arms in front of him. “Let’s see what you can do…”

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Mack, Tammy, and Ronald were walking at a steady pace through the streets. This was their only chance to get Rixec; failure meant…

The terrified people ran past them; it was hysteria. Some people were getting hurt because they were too frenzied to see a clear path to safety.

“All this destruction,” Tammy said, “it has sheer beauty and yet…”

“It bears pain, just as our souls bear our sins,” Ronald finished.

Mack didn’t like it just as much as they did. They didn’t want to do this to the most populated city in Sinnoh, but Rixec was far too important. They had gone down a few more blocks without realizing it.

A man and his son were running and tripped. The man was about mid twenties. His son looked about six. He was about the size of a six year old, but a bit thinner. He had purple hair and hazel eyes. They were standing up when some rubble fell from a building above. The boy tried to stand, but had gotten his foot stuck in a hole.

“Dad!” he yelled but his father was running, abandoning his son. Ronald ran first over the boy and caught the rubble. He held it long enough for Tammy to come over and help the boy out. Mack went to meet his father.

“What were you doing?” Mack asked furious.

“Running for my life,” he panted, “I didn’t want to die!”

“Yet you’re fine with you son dying?”

“He’s just a kid; no one will miss him…”

Mack grabbed him and hurled him into a building. “Despicable. A father’s bond with his son should be strong, and yet you toss him aside at a moment’s notice! You don’t deserve this life.” Mack snapped his fingers.

Even far away, Magmortar knew his Masters snap and he flung the Chimchar aside and fired a Fire Blast from hid gun-arm.

The blast traveled to a building above and a whole bunch of rubble fell and the man screamed at the flaming pieces fell on him, killing him instantly. Mack turned to see the boy they had saved but he was running northwest; no doubt heading to Canalave. Mack, Tammy, and Ronald kept walking and made it to their destination: the hospital.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Elvis had been backed into a corner. Rhyperior took Shinx out instantly and Chimchar was struggling against the three Pokemon. A fissure laid right behind them, so it was either break through or fall.

“Chimchar!” Elvis yelled. “Use…”

Tangrowth unleashed a Stun Spore and Elvis and Chimchar leapt back and fell into the fissure. The Pokemon ran forward but there was no sight. They hadn’t meant to kill him, but they left to rejoin their trainers. Tangrowth stayed behind longest. It had seen the boy before and knew he had gotten stronger. He had a Chimchar, as its mistress did once. The boy was dead, and Tangrowth had tried to kill him before so it shouldn’t have mattered.

But it did. It left wondering what had made it want to kill him before. All of them wanted to kill Gallade when they started, but now…nothing.

Elvis opened his eyes, surprised he wasn’t dead. Something was holding onto him and onto a broken pipe in the side. He looked up and saw Chimchar…no. It looked similar but it wasn’t. It was bigger and its arms were more capable of combat now. It had blue over its eyes and a flame at the end of a long tail.

“Monferno!” it cried. Chimchar had evolved.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*

Joy and Hikari were packing everything that would be of use; they had no idea what would happen so they had to be prepared. “Do you think we’ll need watermelon?” Hikari asked.

“Too heavy,” Joy replied, “we need light food.”

Another earthquake shook and they fell to the floor. “Ow,” Hikari moaned. She looked at Rixec and really wished he’d wake up. This was the worst time for him to be out. And if that wasn’t bad enough, Gallade was farther away from them in an even worse condition. Plus there were three Pokemon here causing the damage, two of which sounded all too familiar, Hikari knew while looking at her arm, a faint scar on it.

“O.K., let’s go!” Joy screeched. They put Rixec into a wheelchair and started pushing it out. As soon they came out the door the elevator opened up at the end of the hall. Three figures exited it and walked into the hallway. They all called out their Pokemon. They were Magmortar, Tangrowth, and Rhyperior. Hikari unconsciously reached for her Pokeballs.

Mack, Tammy, and Ronald faced down the two girls in the hall. “Hello,” Mack said politely, “I am Mack. These are my friends Tammy and Ronald.”

The girls were silent so Ronald said, “It is polite to introduce yourselves.”

“This is Joy, and I’m Hikari,” Hikari replied, she grabbed her Pokeball and released what was inside. “And this is my partner, Piplup!”

Piplup popped out and stood in between everyone. Joy called out her Chansey and Hikari decided to bring out Kricketot because she thought these guys wouldn’t fight fair.

Everyone was silent for a few minutes until Hikari broke the silence. “Why are you doing this? What’s the point of attacking Jubilife?”

“A distraction,” Tammy said. Hikari thought she saw a glimmer of sadness in her eyes but disregarded it.

“A distraction?” Hikari repeated dumbstruck. “For what?”

“For Rixec,” Mack said. Hikari and Joy glanced back at Rixec, unconscious in his wheelchair.

So this is why Rixec said he was trouble, Hikari thought. Those weren’t random attacks, these people were after Rixec.

“Piplup, Bubble,” Hikari commanded. Piplup shot bubbles at them.

“Rhyperior, Rock Blast!” Ronald ordered. Rhyperior fired a bunch of rocks and obliterated the bubbles. “Don’t try it. I know all of Piplup’s attacks, and how to counter them.”

Hikari growled at this. Joy stepped up now. “Chansey, Egg Bomb!” Chansey took out its egg and hurled it at the enemy. Tangrowth threw itself in front and met the attack. The egg exploded on impact. Tangrowth was hurt, but not down.

“Kricketot, Bide,” Hikari said. Kricketot glowed slightly but Mack stepped up.

“Magmortar, Fire Blast,” Mack commanded. Magmortar fired fire from it gun-arm and it went down the hall into Kricketot, fainting it.

“No!” Hikari yelled, or whispered. She didn’t know.

“Power Whip,” Tammy said. Tangrowth’s arm stretched and knocked Piplup to the ground.

“Rhyperior, use Rock Wrecker.” Rhyperior roared and banged the walls and it came tumbling down.

“Chansey, Healing Wish,” Joy said. Chansey ran out and pushed Piplup aside, getting knocked out by the attack.

“Joy, your Pokemon,” Hikari cried but Joy held up her hand.

“Healing Wish Hikari,” she said recalling Chansey. Hikari was appalled for a moment but then remembered; Healing Wish recovers a Pokemon completely, that is, when the Pokemon who used the attack fainted. Hikari turned to Piplup and it was fully healed.

“I’m not letting you touch Rixec,” Hikari told them.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Elvis and Monferno ran down the street, making their way to the hospital. He had to make sure his friends were O.K. It was hard to navigate though, with fire, rock, and plant tearing the city apart. Flaming rocks fell from above and Monferno jumped and punched it at an incredible speed.

“Mach Punch,” Elvis said approvingly. Monferno gaining a sub-fighting type was gonna be useful. Elvis made it to the hospital and made his way to the elevator. But then the cable snapped and it came tumbling down. Elvis and Monferno stared dumbfounded.

“The stairs are better for exercise,” Elvis mumbled, and started running.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Though Piplup had recovered, Hikari was still having a hard time. These three were skilled, and playing with her, she knew. She’s seen what they can do, against Gallade and Rixec; she knew they were going easy. “Piplup,” she said.

“Hammer Arm,” Ronald said. Rhyperior brought its arm down on Piplup and fainted it. They were out of Pokemon. Rixec was theirs. Hikari ran forward swinging her fist. Ronald grabbed her when she got close enough and held her still. Joy ran forward but the Pokemon glancing at her froze her in place.

“You know,” Mack said, “I don’t want to harm you.”

“Why not?” Hikari asked furious.

“I can tell, you’re special to Rixec,” Mack explained. “In the two times I met him in the last week I could tell he held you dear in his heart. Why do you think he nearly killed himself at the warehouse?”

Tammy and Ronald took note of what Mack said. ‘Two times’. He had met Rixec at another time then the warehouse?

“And as for the blond boy, he’s the best human friend Rixec has.

“Hell yeah!” a voice screamed. Right behind them was Elvis with a butt kicking Monferno. “Mach Punch!”

Monferno ran up to Ronald and punched him in the leg, releasing his grip on Hikari. Hikari and Elvis jumped back to Joy and were facing down again.

“Elvis, how many Pokemon are good?” Joy asked.

“Just Monferno; you?”

“All ours are fainted,” Hikari replied. Three vs. one, not good.

Elvis remained silent for a few moments and then said, “What about those two?”

“Huh?” the girls questioned.

“Turtwig and Buizel, Rixec’s other Pokemon,” Elvis said irritably. Hikari and Joy gasped. They had put them back in their balls and on Rixec’s belt. They ran to Rixec and called them out. Turtwig and Buizel looked ready for a smack down.

“Lava Plume!” Mack commanded.

“Rock Blast!” Ronald roared.

“Power Whip!” Tammy shrieked.

“Monferno, Ember!” Elvis shouted. “Turtwig, Razor Leaf! Buizel, Water Gun!”

The attacks collided in midair. Water Gun extinguishing Lava Plume, Razor Leaf slashed the Rock Blast in half, and Ember burn, Tangrowth’s Power Whip.

“This kid knows how to strategize,” Mack noted, seeing the shadow of someone behind the boy, “but at the same time hates it.” Mack couldn’t afford to hold back anymore.

“Get into position,” he whispered to Tammy and Ronald. “Fire Blast!”

“Rock Wrecker!”

The attacks started to destroy the room as they came toward them. Elvis checked the Pokedex real fast. Turtwig knew a new attack, how, he didn’t know, or care. “Buizel, Aqua Jet! Turtwig, Earth Power!”

Buizel shot toward the Fire Blast, covering itself in water while Turtwig summoned its energy and canceled out the Rock Wrecker with the earth.

“Now!” Mack shouted. Tangrowth got right in front of them.

“Sleep Powder!” Tammy yelled. A blue powder came over them and they all started conking out. The Pokemon fell first, then Joy and Elvis. Hikari tried to stay awake. She could not lose Rixec.

She tried standing up, but she could only do it halfway. Mack started walking over and then hugged her. “It’s for his own good,” he whispered. “And I wasn’t lying; I can tell he loves you.”

And with those words in mind Hikari was succumbed by sleep. Mack laid her down and picked Rixec up. He looked so peaceful.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
“NO!” Hikari yelled. She was in a bed, Joy and Elvis next to her. Hikari put her face in her hands; Rixec was gone.

“Oh my, you’re awake!”

Hikari looked up, tears streaming, and saw Nurse Joy. “I found you asleep on the floor of the hospital after the disasters stopped. Oh! You’re in the PC and your Pokemon are recovering.” Nurse Joy closed the door and walked downstairs.

“Not one of our best days,” Elvis said. Hikari turned and saw him and Joy waking up.

“They took Rixec, Elvis. They took him,” Hikari cried.

“I know,” he said with a serious face, “and we’re gonna get him back.” He got up and started for the door but Joy beat him there like before. “Joy…”

“Are you nuts?” she whispered. “They’ll kill you.”

“They could’ve easily done it already. I’ve seen what they can do, so we’ll go after Rixec. Joy, please.”

They looked each other in the eye for five minutes straight. Then Joy stood aside.

“I can’t say no to that face,” she said.

Elvis opened the door and asked, “Coming?” Hikari jumped out of bed and made her way downstairs with Elvis. Nurse Joy wasn’t around so they grabbed their Pokemon and Rixec’s from the machine that heals them. Before they got to the door a voice rang in their heads.

Hikari. Elvis.

They jumped at this, wondering what was happening.

Hikari, Elvis, it’s me…

They didn’t’ know how to respond at first but then Hikari figured it out. Gallade?

Yes, he thought to her.

“Elvis, we need to think what we want to say so Gallade will hear us.”

What’s up G? Elvis asked.

Don’t call me that, Gallade warned. Just come to my room so I can use less energy to communicate with you.

Hikari and Elvis made their way to the back room and saw Gallade, unconscious, and bandaged. Gallade?

I know Rixec has been captured and you intend to go after him…

Of course! Elvis thought. We’re gonna leave now so…

NO YOU WILL NOT! Gallade bellowed through their minds. Hikari and Elvis were shocked he wouldn’t want them to leave right away. What I mean is, he continued, is that you can’t rescue Rixec without knowing the truth.

Suddenly, the room around them disappeared, it became dark, then there was a bright light and they were in a hospital room. They saw a girl a little older then them in a bed and looked in pain She had beautiful skin, short brown hair, and emerald green eyes. There was a Ralts yawning next to her.

Where are we? Elvis thought.

In my memories, Gallade’s voice boomed. Hikari and Elvis jumped at this.

Then that Ralts is…? Hikari thought.

It is me. I am going to show you all that is important, Gallade sent to them. So don’t talk, just watch. Like a day at the movies.

The girl gave a scream and Elvis and Hikari saw a baby come out. The doctor helped take it out. “It’s a boy,” he said.

“Rixec,” she said. “His name will be Rixec Platinum.” The doctor gave her Rixec and she held him in her arms, smiling happily. It became dark again, a new memory forming.

Was that...? Hikari and Elvis asked.

Yes, it is Rixec, and that cute little Ralts was me, like I said before. I was born the same day, just seconds before.

The room reformed and the girl was in the bed sleeping. This took place later that day, Gallade told them. They saw Ralts waiting next to the girl, Rixec’s mother. The doctor came back in holding Rixec. Hikari walked over and saw his eyes, emerald green, like his mother. But there was something else in them.

Rixec’s mother woke up and asked, “How’s my baby?”

“Healthy, but…”

“But?”

But? Hikari and Elvis thought.

“Ms. Platinum, your baby is completely healthy. But he’s been born blind.”

END

Next Time: Chapter 11: Memory Road!
Hikari and Elvis go through Gallade’s memories to learn more about Rixec. Meanwhile, Mack and the others reminisce on their past as they take Rixec back to Sunnyshore.


Hoped you liked my little twist. What do you think?
 
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Rixec

Shadow Trainer
I have returned.;250;

Chapter 11: Memory Road​

Mack, Tammy, and Ronald rushed through Route 203, being careful to cover their tracks as they ran. They knew it would only be a matter of time until the feds figured out where to start looking. The day they attacked Jubilife would be marked down in history forever, and as such if they found out the identities of the attackers it would be a world manhunt.

Mack glanced at the sleeping Rixec in Magmortar’s arms. His time of freedom was over, so what would he do when he was home? Would be try to escape again, or would he realize it was futile without Gallade?

“Ironic, isn’t it?” Ronald laughed.

“What do you mean?” Tammy asked.

Mack was also wondering what he meant. What could possibly be ironic about this situation?

“What I mean is Rixec has become a pretty good battler, so that made it hard to capture him. And we’re the ones who taught him everything.”

Mack smiled slightly at this. It was true, they had taught Rixec everything, and he could’ve been the champ by now if he had a normal childhood. But Mack knew that was impossible. After all, from what they had been informed, Rixec had been sentenced to death at birth.

“Bad news,” Tammy called dreadfully and pointed to the east. Mack and Ronald looked and saw dark clouds forming over Mt. Coronet.

“From the looks of it, it will head toward the west,” Mack said.

“And right at us,” Ronald finished.

“You know we can’t go back,” Tammy sighed. “But neither can we go into the storm.”

“Then we’ll have to wait for it to pass,” Mack said, “in Oreburgh Gate.”

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*

Hikari and Elvis were gaping. Rixec. Blind.

They stared at the paused image of Rixec’s mother with a worried look on her face and the doctor looking grave as well. Blind? Hikari thought softly.

He can’t be, Elvis thought, he’s battled and has looked at things before.

Elvis suddenly remembered what he said to Rixec when they battled the twins. ‘What are you, blind?’ He lowered his head in shame.

That was because of me, Gallade explained. Do you two remember the few times my eyes have turned bright green?

Elvis and Hikari did remember, but they didn’t know what to think of it. What does that have to do with…? Elvis asked.

Psi Bond, Hikari suddenly thought.

Elvis looked right at her with a confused look on his face. Psi Bond?

A psychic bond; it’s rare but some psychic Pokémon can develop a psychic relationship with their trainers. The Pokémon can develop new abilities and the trainer is also affected by it. But I’ve never heard of someone using it to see.

Rixec can’t see really, I’m just sharing part of my sight with him. But that makes it difficult for me to battle because I have to focus and my sight is clouded, Gallade explained.

I got all that more or less, Elvis sighed. But there are still things I don’t understand. And I didn’t question some things before this all started.

Then I shall continue my memory and you shall.

The vision started again and Rixec’s mother was whimpering. She looked down on Rixec who was looking around, unable to see anything with emerald-gray eyes. The door opened again and two adults entered.

One was male, mid-fortyish with graying black hair and deep emerald eyes. He was looking at Rixec and his mother, and looked appalled by the sight. The other, a female, was fortyish and had soft blue eyes and wavy brown hair. She looked ready to barf at the sight. They were Rixec’s grandparents.

“Mary,” his grandfather said, “I am very disappointed.”

“Papa,” she cried.

“You have to let us do it Mary,” her mother said. “Not only did you have sex with some street rat, you had a baby that was blind.”

“He is not a street rat,” Mary whispered violently. “He’s a great trainer and says he’s gonna be a gym leader some day! And as for Rixec…!”

“Consider it lucky you never told that ****head he has a baby. We won’t do anything to him because of the fact he doesn’t know!” her father roared.

Elvis and Hikari were thinking the same thing: ‘We won’t do anything to him.’

“Honey,” her mother said, “the baby must die.”

Gallade paused the memory again and Hikari swore. “What the crap?! Why would they even consider doing that! He’s their grandson, and why was this all so important?!”

The Platinum family is suppose to be perfect, Gallade explained, Rixec was born blind and thus a disgrace. Now watch what happens next…

The memory started again and Mary was holding onto Rixec tightly. The doctor was coming over to take the baby from her but hen he gasped and couldn’t move. Mary looked over and saw Ralts using Disable.

“Annoying little pest,” her father growled. “Porygon-Z!”

A curved blue and pink Pokémon with three limbs and dizzy yellow eyes appeared. “Dark Pulse,” he commanded. Porygon-Z unleashed a pulse of darkness and it knocked Ralts out and the scene went dark too.

What happened? Hikari asked.

I was unconscious for the remainder of the incident. I don’t know what exactly but I think I know the drift.

Gallade’s next memory formed and the sight was gruesome. In the room, they saw Mary holding Rixec, looking relieved and scared, and a Gardevoir stood by her side. Ralts’s mother.

But on the floor lie the bodies of Rixec’s grandparents and Porygon-Z. Blood was splattered against the walls and floor, some of which was on Gardevoir.

As I guarded Rixec, his mother was protected by mine.

Hikari and Elvis now knew what had happened. Mary realized it had to be her baby or her parents. She chose to be a mother over a daughter.

“Gardevoir,” she gasped, “get us out of here.”

Gardevoir teleported them away and they were now in a beautiful bedroom with a chandelier. “What to do, what to do?” Mary bawled.

The only people who know about Rixec are us, the doctor, and your parents. We’re the only ones left, so you’ll have to decide what guards can be trusted to protect him.

“What do you mean Gardevoir?”

Gardevoir smiled and said, The police will wonder about the bodies. I have to do this.

“No,” Mary murmured, scared.

Be good to him son, Gardevoir said to Ralts. He needs you. Goodbye.

And Gardevoir teleported away.

That was the first and last time I saw my mother, Gallade explained.

A new memory formed and they saw a five year old Rixec sitting in a sandbox with Ralts by his side. Rixec tuned over the bucket and a sandcastle he made looked like it was about to crumble. “How does it look Walts?”

’Walts’? Elvis and Hikari asked.

He was five, Gallade defended.

“Walts?” Rixec asked again. But Ralts was looking at the approaching group. Elis and Hikari looked and saw three kids coming, Mack, Tammy and Ronald, they presumed, but it wasn’t.

One boy looked about twelve and had white hair and purple eyes with a Spiritomb by his side. He gave Hikari and Elvis the jitters because there seemed something… malicious about him. There was also a teenaged boy around seventeen they guessed with short silver hair and black eyes; he had a Bronzong. Lastly was an eleven year old girl with long blue hair and pink eyes. She had a Pokeball connected to a bracelet around her wrist.

The original bodyguards, Gallade explained.

Original bodyguards? Elvis asked. Who are the new ones?

Gallade paused the memory and everything went quiet.

Hikari was thinking about everything they had gone through in the last week. The Tangrowth, the warehouse, Jubilife…

You’re not saying those three trainers that attacked us are Rixec’s bodyguards? Hikari asked.

Keep watching, Gallade explained, and we must not talk again until you have seen all I have to show. We can’t afford to give Mack, Tammy, and Ronald more time.

The memory started again and the white haired kid walked up to Rixec. “How ya doin’ Rixec?”

Rixec reacted to his voice and said, “Bobby, April, Ted. I’m fine; just don’t know if my castle is good.”

“It’s sh*t,” April said.

“You should probably go back inside. It’ll be much safer for you.”

“And a lot less fun for us,” Bobby mumbled. April and Ted smiled at him, thinking the same thing.

Bobby glanced up and saw something he didn’t want here. “Spiritomb,” he commanded and it flew away. What happened next horrified Elvis and Hikari.

Rixec heard strange sounds and cries, and they scared him. “What’s going on?” he asked.

Bobby patted his head and said, “Nothing you need to worry about.”

He, April, and ted walked away to do their usual ‘routine’ and Rixec and Ralts were left alone. “What just happened Walts?”

Nothing you need to worry about Master, Ralts replied, but Rixec wasn’t so sure. He hugged Ralts for comfort because he was scared. He was always in the dark in every sense of the word. Ralt’s horn started glowing and Ralts knew Rixec wanted comfort. It hugged Rixec to let him know everything was going to be alright. That day, was the first time it happened.

Rixec gave a yelp and looked around. Then he realized he could see. He saw how beautiful the yellow sun was and the green grass. He saw his castle was falling apart but he was glad, because he could see it falling to pieces.

Rixec looked at Ralts and saw his eyes were glowing green. “Ralts,” he said correctly for the first time.

Master? Ralts called out. My vision, it’s clouded up, I can see partially, but it’s like humans without glasses.

Rixec understood what was happening. “You’re sharing your vision with me. I can see better with your partial version because human eyes are different from a Pokémon’s,” he said and broke into a grin and started jumping around. “I can see I can see I can seeeee!”

Rixec slipped and landed on the ground with a thud. He sat up and looked at his shoe, which had blood on it. He looked to the side ns saw the grass was stained with fresh blood. He also saw a mutilated body of a Chatot. The parrot Pokémon’s blue and yellow feathers had been pulled off and the musical note on its head was ripped off and next to one of its feet.

‘Ralts,” Rixec managed to say, his face turning white. “How did this… why?”

Then he remembered the sounds he had heard. Bobby had done this, and April and Ted had watched. Why? He thought. Why did they do this?

Rixec started crying and his mother rushed out to see what was happening. By the time she appeared, the bond between Rixec and Ralts had broken and Ralts could see clearly. Rixec’s mother was appalled by the sight and picked Rixec up. “It’s ok, it’s ok,” she soothed.

She told Ralts to take Rixec back upstairs and Ralts led him to his room and Rixec immediately fell asleep. Ralts looked out the window and saw Bobby, ted, and April had come back and Rixec’s mother seemed to be shouting at them, but Ralts couldn’t hear clearly with the window closed. He pushed it open and heard Bobby say “Very well” and told Spiritomb to blast her with Torment.

Rixec’s mother was suddenly on the ground holding her head, grunting in pain. Bobby bent down and whispered something and Ralts jumped down to stop him. But Spiritomb used Flash and they disappeared.

Rixec’s mother got up and said, “They sure didn’t take being fired well, but their antics scared Rixec, and I can’t have that. He needs to be strong, despite his damn fault.”

Ralts was surprised; he had never heard Rixec’s mother speak like this before. “I’ll need more guards around, and I’ll need to find three new bodyguards for Rixec. Yes, I’ll inform servants not to help him unless I say. He must be strong…”

And as she walked away, Ralts knew something bad was happening. But he didn’t know what.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*

Mack, Tammy, and Ronald decided to rest in the deepest part of Oreburgh Gate; few trainers would make it that far. They had Rixec tied up with vines from Tangrowth in case he awakened.

Ronald sighed and walked away toward the water. Tammy got up and followed him. “Beautiful, isn’t it?” Tammy spoke up.
“I guess,” Ronald mumbled.

“What’s bothering you?” Tammy asked.

“Everything,” Ronald replied. “Nothing. I don’t know anymore. And you wouldn’t understand.”

“Maybe I would,” Tammy said. “I’ve also felt like things were different since we started this hunt. And they’ve kept changing since we started. When did this start?”


“The day we started our journeys,” Mack declared walking up to them.


7 years ago

A lively ten year old Mack was just leaving his house and heading over to Prof. Rowan’s lab when it was still in Twinleaf. He was finally going to become a trainer, along with two others.

“Tammy! Ronald!” he called out.

Ronald had spiky black hair and lacked the muscles he would later get. He high fived Mack who just basically looked like a smaller version of himself. Tammy, meanwhile, was a bubbly young girl with curly blond hair and a sweet smile. They were all going to become trainers together.

They made their way to the lab and saw Prof. Rowan waiting with three Pokeballs. “Welcome,” he said in a gruff voice.

He went on to explain the fundamentals of being a trainer, and of other paths they could choose with Pokémon. He then showed his starter Pokémon: Turtwig, the grass turtle Pokémon, Chimchar, the fire chimp Pokémon, and Piplup, the water penguin Pokémon.

Mack had taken Turtwig while Ronald took Piplup and Chimchar for Tammy. They were all hugging their new Pokémon (with Piplup trying to get out due to its pride). Prof. Rowan proceeded to give them all Pokedexes and Pokeballs. These would be essential for their journey.

They thanked Prof. Rowan again and they departed. Their hopes were rising at the thought of becoming strong trainers. Sinnoh had the best there were currently, in the land closest to the heavens.

“God,” Mack said all of sudden as they proceeded down Route 201.

“What?” Tammy and Ronald asked.

“Someday, I’d like to challenge a god to a battle. Like the ones in the legends.”

Ronald wolf whistled. “That would be an amazing feat, if they exist.”

“They might,” Tammy spoke up, “the Pokémon had to come from somewhere. And they said things like Mew and Ho-oh were real.”

“If you actually beat one of these gods,” Ronald said, “you’ll be considered one n the eyes of humans.”

The three of them kept talking about this as they continued. Then they noticed a particular sight. A tall man with black hair and a suit, with a strange black Pokémon with a red circle around its neck and smoke-like hair.

Mack started walking but Tammy grabbed him and whispered, “What are you doing?”

“He has an interesting Pokémon,” Mack replied, “and I want to see what it can do in battle.”

“Hey,” I wouldn’t mind seeing it in action as well,” Ronald declared.

Tammy pouted and then sighed. “Let’s go up then.”

They strode up to him and he was surprised to see them come up to him. “What can I do for you?” he asked rudely.

“That’s an extraordinary Pokémon you have,” Mack said. “So I was wondering if you could battle me with it.”

A wicked smile came across the man’s face and he said, “You can all battle against my Pokémon of Nightmares. It’s only fair.”

“You talk big,” Ronald said, “but can you back it up?”

“Watch me,” he said and his Pokémon got into position.

Mack, Tammy, and Ronald called out their Pokémon and the fight began. Mack had Turtwig use Tackle while Tammy and Ronald had Chimchar and Piplup use Leer and Growl to weaken the dark Pokémon’s attack and defense. But the dark Pokémon shrugged it all off.

“Tackle again!” Mack yelled and Turtwig ran forward and hit the dark Pokémon in the chest but it practically did nothing.

“Piplup, Pound!”

“Chimchar use Scratch!”

The two of them ganged up on the dark Pokémon but then its trainer said, “Disable.”

Piplup and Chimchar were frozen in place from the attack. But Turtwig ran forward and hit the dark Pokémon upon command from Mack.

“Ahh to be young,” the man said, “and so naïve.”

“What do you mean?” Mack asked.

“There are good trainers…,” he said and all of a sudden his dark Pokémon used Faint Attack and Turtwig was propelled backwards. “And there are bad trainers.”

His dark Pokémon glided forward and started brutally beating Turtwig with darkness. Mack was horrified by it and Ronald and Tammy sent Piplup and Chimchar up to help. The man saw them coming though and commanded, “Dark Void.”

Suddenly, black spheres appeared and were thrown at Piplup and Chimchar. As soon as they hit they fell into a deep slumber. Mack knew they had to do something but before he could do anything one of the black spheres came around and hit Turtwig, pulling it into slumber land.

“Dream Eater,” the man commanded and Turtwig, Chimchar, and Piplup were stirring in their sleep with pained looks on their faces. The dark Pokémon was recovering from the dreams it ate and its trainer was smiling like a mad man.

Eventually, Turtwig, Chimchar, and Piplup woke up and faced the dark Pokémon. They were not pleased with what had happened and wanted payback. As did their trainers. “How dare he take it this seriously?” Tammy asked.

“Let’s make him pay,” Ronald said.

“Hell yeah,” Mack agreed.

They all commanded an all out team-up and the three Pokémon went running forward using attacks Mack, Tammy and Ronald didn’t know they could do yet but they knew what they were. Absorb, Ember, and Bubble.

“Sucker Punch!” the man commanded and the dark Pokémon ran and pulverized all their attacks. “Now Dark Pulse!”

Dark energy in the form of chains of purplish-black links. The chains were sent forward and hit the three Pokémon, drawing blood from them. Mack, Tammy, and Ronald were startled by this; they had never seen a Pokémon bleed in battle.

“Pursuit,” the man said, “and then Torment.”

His dark Pokémon ran after Turtwig, Chimchar, and Piplup and struck, and they fell to the ground and closed their eyes. “Get up!” they urged but it was no good.

The dark Pokémon use Torment and the Pokémon couldn’t attack even if they wanted too. Eventually, the dark Pokémon stopped and Turtwig, Chimchar, and Piplup were left on the ground, unmoving.

“Get up,” Mack whispered.

“Please,” Tammy cried.

“No,” Ronald said horrified.

They ran up to their Pokémon and cradled them; they were dead. They looked up to the man, anger and sadness rushing into their eyes. Then the man started laughing, amused by this. Then a dark look came into his eyes and he said,” Get them.”

The dark Pokémon came up slowly, wanting to increase the fear in the young trainers. But it never got the chance. Right then and there, a Pokémon not native to this part of Sinnoh attacked the man. It was a Magby, a tiny red Pokémon that was the pre-evolved form of Magmar. It grabbed onto the man’s arm but he swung it off. But just as it hit the ground Magby unleashed Ember right at him and it hit a Pokeball.

The dark Pokémon’s ball. The ball melted into a glob and as it did, a confused look came over the dark Pokémon. It wondered what was happening and then it saw the young trainers and fled. “NO! Come back! He’ll kill me!” the man roared in fury and terror as he chased after the dark Pokémon.

Mack, Tammy, and Ronald gazed at their dead starters. “This isn’t just his fault,” Mack said. “It’s mine. Maybe even more than him.”

“I’m at fault too,” Ronald said.

“And I as well,” Tammy sniffled.

They were overconfident and foolish. They had forced their Pokémon to fight and they had paid with their lives.

The Magby came up to Mack with a worried look in its eyes. “Thanks for your help little guy,” Mack said. He, Tammy, and Ronald then dug graves for their Pokémon and buried them, their still faces haunting them. They didn’t know if they would ever recover from this, but they would always carry it with them. Their worst mistake ever and it turned out to be their first.

Night eventually fell and Mack, Tammy, and Ronald still hadn’t left. They were still praying for their Pokémons’ souls and forgiveness. Mack felt a tug at his pants and saw the Magby. He bent down to see it and then the Magby touched a Pokeball on his belt. Magby went inside and soon the ding was heard. Magby had been captured.

Mack swore he would never let what happened to Turtwig happen to Magby. The journey they had started that day was over, and a new one had begun. But they didn’t know what it was. All they could do for now was move on.

That night, while sleeping, Mack remembered everything that happened during the battle. It pained him to see it happen again, but then it was gone. And a new pain had started. He awoke with a start, sweat beading down him. “Dream Eater,” he whispered. But how? The dark Pokémon was gone. What could have done it?

Present

“Bobby,” Mack said.

“What?” Tammy and Ronald asked.

“Seven years ago a Dream eater was used on me. I didn’t understand but I do now. Bobby used it on me and that is how he knew what attacks to use in our battle.”

“Why do it though?” Ronald asked. “What was the point?”

“Because they’re insane,” Tammy answered.

“Damn,” Mack whispered.

“I never knew that,” a new voice arose. Mack, Tammy, and Ronald turned around and saw that Rixec had awakened. “Sorry, but I heard the whole thing.”

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*

“These are the new bodyguards,” Rixec’s mom said.

Is that really them? Hikari asked.

Yes, those are indeed Mack, Tammy, and Ronald, Gallade answered.

They can’t be any older than eleven! Elvis declared.

But it was true. Mack, with his Magmar beside him was a serious looking eleven year old boy in a dark red sleeveless shirt and torn jeans. Tammy had poise and an unusual smile and short straight blonde hair wearing shorts and a green turtleneck; she was holding a Tangela in her arms. Ronald looked bored but had some muscles coming on which showed through his tight black shirt and tight pants and his hair had been growing by the looks of things; he had a Rhydon with him and it seemed confident.

The seven year old Rixec, who couldn’t see, didn’t know what to think. Although he did seem a little nervous. “Hey,” Mack said.

“’Lo,” Rixec answered back. “You’re not going to tear Pokémon apart are you?”

The three of them seemed surprised by this question, but it was Tammy who answered. “No no,” she crooned, “we’ll do nothing of the sort.”

“Can that Ralts of yours battle?” Ronald asked.

“Well…” Rixec started to say.

“Enough,” his mother said, “Rixec, you should go get ready for dinner.”

Ralts led Rixec away but turned his head and read Ms. Platinum’s lips. She told Mack, Tammy, and Ronald this: “Don’t spoil him.”

The vision flashed forward and Gallade had sent them a few months into the future. Hikari and Elvis saw Mack and Rixec talking.

“…and once you have eight badges you can enter the Pokémon League and face the Elite Four and the Champion,” Mack said.

“Wow,” Rixec said. “All of that, outside these walls. I wish I could participate.”

“Well, your mom worries about you so…” Mack answered.

“I’m not so sure,” Rixec explained. “Things have been different since I was five. There are times she seems to care, but there are times she’s–I don’t know–different. I know Ralts likes me though.”

And he patted Ralts on the head. Mack looked down on them and came up with an idea. “I got it,” he said, “I’ll teach you how to battle and we can make Ralts stronger.”

“Really?!” Rixec asked enthusiastic.

“Sure,” Mack replied. “And Tammy ad Ronald too.”

A strange look came over Rixec and Mack noticed it. “What?”

“Well,” Rixec said, “I know I like you, but I’m not sure about Tammy and Ronald. I don’t hate them, I’m just neutral.”

“Give it time,” Mack told him. “They’re good people. But things have been tough.”

“What?” Rixec asked.

“Nothing,” Mack reacted quickly. “Now let’s start training!”


Another flash forward and they saw Ralts fighting Magmar, who was going easy on them. “Look for all possible openings!” Mack yelled. “But don’t do anything that will put your Pokémon in jeopardy.

Magmar used Ember but Rixec was ready. “Double Team!”

Ralts split into three and Magmar didn’t know which was real. Mack looked impressed. “If he wasn’t blind he could join Sinnoh top trainers in time. But not today. Magmar use Fire Spin!”

Magmar unleashed a tornado of fire which hit all three Ralts. Rixec ran up to Ralts to check on him. “You okay?”

Yes Master, just a little hot that’s all.

“I think that’s enough for today,” Mack said.


Another flash forward, about a year they guessed, and they saw Rixec walking over to Mack and Ralts. “Did you get lost?” Mack asked.

“No, I was talking with Ronald,” Rixec answered. And in a lower voice he said, “’Trainers have to rely on their own skill; you can’t expect to be helped in every situation’.”

“Ready?” Mack asked.

“Always,” Rixec replied.


The void went white now. What’s up? Elvis asked.

When Rixec was nine I was sent to the P.C. because I had gotten sick. During this time Rixec had gotten hurt and fell down the stairs.
Hikari and Elvis looked shocked. But Gallade reassured them it was alright. Mack came around and bandaged him up apparently. I only found out about this from Rixec recently; same night you found us after we left.


The vision started again and they saw Rixec putting up a pretty good battle against Magmortar. Magmar had evolved in this time period. Ralts had been on even footing, though it was given a handicap.

Suddenly, Ralts started to glow and evolved into Kirlia. Kirlia used Confusion and knocked Magmortar to the ground. “Nice!” Mack yelled.

Rixec ran up to Kirlia and started to hug him. Kirlia activated its power and Rixec saw what Kirlia looked like for the first time. “You look like a ballerina,” he said, causing Kirlia to blush.

Hikari and Elvis started laughing at this. It was too good for words. Rixec and Gallade had always been a strong combo, but for Rixec to say he looked like a ballerina, priceless.

This is why I wanted to evolve into a Gallade, Gallade answered. Don’t mean to sound sexist but Gardevoir is better off for females. Come on, would I look good in a gown?

This only caused them to laugh louder and Gallade sent them forward into his memories. They saw Rixec, Kirlia, and Tammy in the backyard. Rixec and Kirlia were playing hide and seek with the Pokémon. She kept wolf whistling as he found them all in seconds. Then she turned over to Kirlia and noticed his eyes.

“Yo Rixec! Can I ask why Kirlia’s eyes are glowing?” she pondered.

Rixec wondered if he should tell, but he remembered Mack-niisan say he should try to trust them so he told her. “Kirlia’s ‘special ability’. When his eyes are glowing green he sends part of his sight to me. Basically I can see perfectly.”

Tammy was shocked; Rixec could see and they never knew. But she regained a calm face, remembering it was when Kirlia’s eyes are glowing.

“But wait, how do you find them when his eyes are normal?” she asked. “Those wild ones aren’t easy to find.”

“Oh, you just have to know how to listen. All Pokemon make sound, whether they are standing still, flying or levitating.”

“Levitating makes sound?”

“Yeah, it sounds like a hum.”

“Interesting.”

Hikari and Elvis noticed a strange look come over her face, and then they were sent forward again.

Rixec was eleven and using a strange stone in a shade of blue on Kirlia. Suddenly, Kirlia started glowing and evolved into the Gallade they all knew and loved.

Gallade’s eyes turned green and Rixec was amazed by Gallade. “Wow. You don’t look like a ballerina anymore.”

Don’t you dare…, Gallade warned Hikari and Elvis.

“Hey Gallade,” Rixec said, “would you mind looking around the house? I’ve always wondered about what happens when I’m not around.”

Yes Master, but are you sure you want to know?

“Yeah. Thanks Gallade,” Rixec said and Gallade teleported away.

Hikari and Elvis watched as Gallade went throughout the house, keeping track of everything he saw. Eventually he saw Mack and Ronald dragging one of the guards. He was yelling and his face was filled with fear.

Gallade pursued and eventually came to the office of Rixec’s mother. Mack and Ronald threw the guard onto the floor and backed away. He was shaking and Rixec’s mother had a stern look on her face.

“Well,” she said. It wasn’t a question.

“I-I-I don’t know,” he stammered. “I don’t know how the kid got out.”

Hikari and Elvis were confused and Gallade said, The day before Rixec had wandered off the grounds and walked around Sunnyshore. I don’t know what happened exactly but I provided sight. Rixec said he found the Dawn Stone while he was out, but he never mentioned how he got it.

“You almost ruined everything,” Rixec’s mother said. “I’m sorry, but I have to do this.”

“NO!” the guard roared. “Not ‘retirement’ please! I beg you for forgiveness!”

Rixec’s mother pressed a button and the floor opened up and the guard fell down. A splash emitted up and then a crunching sound. Rixec’s mother, Mack, and Ronald all had appeased looks on their faces. Gallade was horrified by this and left.

Gallade also noticed the looks on Mack and Ronald. Gallade had known them for years but something had changed. It was like they had been indoctrinated. And this ‘retirement’ that they did…

Gallade wondered if he should tell his Master. He didn’t know how he would react. Or if it would be healthy for him. Gallade decided he would tell his Master, he made a promise.

Gallade returned and told Rixec everything. No emotion came across his face as Gallade spoke. He was surprisingly calm. When Gallade was finished, Rixec said, “Damn that b*tch has issues.”

Rixec stood up and walked over to the door and grabbed the knob. He tried to turn it but it was futile; it had been locked. “It’s never been locked!” Rixec swore. “Something’s changing around here.”

Yes, Gallade agreed.


Everything went white again and Gallade started speaking to them. We spent more than a year preparing and training. I learned all that I could about my attacks and Rixec remembered all that he learned. No surprise since he has an IQ of over 200.

Damn, Elvis said.

What about Mack, Tammy, and Ronald? Hikari asked.

The changes got worse all the time, and because of that Rixec felt alone among humans. I and other Pokémon were there, but he had become a lone wolf really. Until we met you two.

Hikari and Elvis just realized how important they were in Rixec’s life. They also realized that they’ve been terrible to him. Hikari had yelled at him and Elvis remembered when he called Rixec ‘blind’ during their double battle against the twins.

Finally, half an hour before Rixec’s thirteenth birthday, we made our move. A lot of the best guards were away and the gym leader was doing a little electrical work.

Memories swirled up and they saw the grounds of their Platinum household. They never realized how big they were. They saw Rixec, in his old red shirt and blue jeans, with his all too familiar green sunglasses. Gallade was off in the trees, gazing at Rixec. It was late at night, 11:30 they guessed, and all of a sudden, the lights went out. All over the city. “It’s now or never!”

They saw Rixec and Gallade run through the darkness, Houndoom on their trail. “Old friend,” Rixec said, “there are two Houndoom five meters behind us, three three meters to the left, and one a mile ahead. Take them all out with Close Combat.”

Yes Master, Gallade said and took off. They saw Gallade running through the trees and found the first five Houndoom. Gallade ran up to them and the fight began. Gallade took one out immediately but two more jumped for Gallade’s neck. Gallade ducked and they crashed into each other and Gallade finished them off. Two more came up with the same results.

Gallade proceeded to the three on the left and the dog fight began. One jumped over Gallade while the other two went for his legs. Gallade jumped up but the Houndoom in the air knocked him to the ground. Gallade jumped back up and just barely missed the fangs of the Houndoom and finished them off with Close Combat. Using Close Combat so many times was lowering his defense and special defense, but there was only one left.

Gallade ran up a mile and confronted the last one. Gallade ran up and participated in a one on one battle. The Houndoom skidded under his knees and Gallade missed it. The Houndoom ran into the trees and appeared a minute later and bit Gallade. Gallade grunted; normally this wouldn’t hurt much but his defenses had been lowered greatly. Gallade struck and Houndoom and it flew into a tree. Gallade ran up and finished it, destroying the tree while at it.

Gallade then focused and used Substitute. The copy ran off to rejoin Rixec while Gallade kept an eye out. The copy had made it back to Rixec, who knew it was a copy, and they continued running. Just as you said. Gallade was still speaking to Rixec telepathically.

“All right, now comes the hard part.”

Ten minutes later, a startled look came across Rixec’s face and he yelled, “Gah! Psycho Cut at that tree now!”

Gallade controlled its copy and had it use the move on the still tree. A Kecleon came into view and fainted.

I am sorry Master, I didn’t expect... Gallade said to Rixec.

“No, the one at fault was me; I didn’t expect this to happen. I guess this means there are still some good guards here.”

A grim look came across Rixec’s face, because he knew who owned the Kecleon. And so did Gallade.

Aster! We must go back now!

“NO!” Rixec yelled. “This is my only chance in a lifetime to escape, I trust you enough to get me out.”

Can’t we use Teleport? Gallade asked.

“What time is it?”

Gallade thought a moment before he answered. Uh, 11:45 p.m.

“It’s no good; the Alakazam will be out around the city with a psychic barrier to prevent any means of escape.”

But then, why are we still going?

“I’m sorry I didn’t tell you sooner old friend, but that a surprise that will have to wait until midnight.”

You mean…Ugh! Gallade cried. Something was happening to the copy, and Gallade felt it through the bond he had with it. It did have a quarter of his HP.

The Gallade copy was frozen from the inside out. Elvis and Hikari watched Rixec put his guard up, and they saw he was starting to shiver, and ice was starting to appear on the surrounding trees and leaves. A Froslass came out of the frozen Gallade and a middle-aged man with thinning green hair and a mustache appeared from the trees. His black eyes seemed amused.

“You put on quite a show, you and your slave, but it’s over now,” he said.

“Bill, Bill, Bill. First of all, he’s not my slave, he’s my best friend,” Rixec said and snapped his fingers. “And second, I’ve already won.”

Bill just smirked and said, “Kid, despite your faults you’re pretty amazing. But with your Pokemon frozen, possibly dead, you can’t escape.”

“Look again.” Bill turned around and saw the Pokemon inside disappear; The Substitute had died.

“Froslass, above us!” Bill had shouted and the two of them dodge the Psycho Cut in time. “Froslass, use Ominous Wind! Aim at its $#@%%$# heart!” The Froslass took aim but it never got the chance to attack, for Gallade was faster and used Psycho Cut on its back, fainting it. “Ahh!”

“Bill, my friend is faster, so a better move would have been Ice Shard, which always strikes first. If you survive “retirement”, I hope you remember that. Close Combat, send him back 100 feet,” Rixec said smoothly. Gallade obeyed and ran up and punched Bill a lot and then got in one more punch which threw Bill back. And Elvis and Hikari were positive it was 100 feet.

“Ahh, time, now!” Rixec exclaimed.

11:59 p.m. Master

“One more minute.” One more minute until Rixec’s escape from Hell, and to his 13th birthday. When the clock struck twelve it happened. The barrier disappeared.

Master…

“I put Wiki berries in the Alakazam’s food today. So when the clock struck twelve the barrier fell when the fell under the confused status,” Rixec said quite pleased with himself. Gallade chuckled at this, to have thought of such a plan, maybe he would be a great Pokemon Trainer. “Now then, Teleport if you please.” Gallade focused all his power into it and teleported them to a new beginning.

The next sight was Twinleaf Town. It seemed so peaceful at night. “Twinleaf Town looks beautiful, doesn’t it Gallade?” Rixec asked Gallade, whose eyes were glowing green.

Yes Master, Gallade replied.

“Um, Gallade?”

Yes Master?

“Don’t call me ‘Master’, call me by my name. Kay?”

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*

Mack, Tammy, and Ronald gazed at Rixec. “You heard it all?” Tammy asked.

“Yep.”

“I’m going to bed,” she said and walked off, followed by Ronald.

A clap of thunder was heard and Mack said, “Looks like the storm has arrived.”

“Good,” Rixec said.

Mack gave him a confuse look and Rixec explained. “It will give my friends time to catch up to me.”

“After what happened in Jubilife, and with this storm, I doubt it,” Mack said.

“Don’t underestimate them,” Rixec said. “And I am sorry about what happened to you.”

“It’s nothing you need to worry about,” Mack mumbled. “What matters is getting you home.”

“I don’t want to go back,” Rixec declared and Mack shook his head.

“Bobby, Ted, and April are back.”

A look of surprise came over Rixec and he looked down. “Then I’ll just have to face them when they find me.”

“I don’t want them to find you,” Mack said. “That’s why you’re here now.”

“Not for long,” Rixec said.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*

Elvis and Hikari were back in the real world and looking at the unconscious Gallade. They had learned so much about him and Rixec. “We have to get him back,” Hikari said.

“Immediately,” Elvis agreed.

I’ll join you when I can. For now, I must rest. Good luck my friends.

Elvis and Hikari left and walked over to the Pokemart. It was one of the buildings still standing after the siege of Jubilife.

They dug through the wreckage and found what they needed. A Town map. And made by Platinum Industries at that. Elvis activated it and a holographic image appeared of Sinnoh.

“Let’s see,” Elvis examined, “I guess they’ll have to go through Oreburgh gate and continue east on. And it looks like there’s a storm over that way.”

Hikari looked out the window and saw the dark clouds. “Then it should slow them down then,” she said. “They wouldn’t dare run through with Rixec.”

“Yeah,” Elvis said. “But we will.”

“All the way,” Hikari said. “Either we bring Rixec back or we don’t come back.”

END

Next time: Chapter 12: The Retrieval. Hikari and Elvis rush to save Rixec, but can they succeed? Especially when they are being followed?
 

legandlover989

Its now or never
Luv the fic Keep up the good work
 

Breezy

Well-Known Member
Well, like I said, I can't review the entire story just yet, so I'll review the first couple of chapters and build up from there.

Prologue review:

From the very first paragraph, we already have some problems:
Tonight was the night. Volkner was working on his traps at the gym[,] it was the middle of the night, and the best guards were on vacation. It had to be tonight. Just a few more seconds. All of a sudden the lights went out everywhere in the city and the boy ran. “It’s now or never!” A Pokemon suddenly jumped out of nowhere and the two headed toward the gates. The alarm rang and the Houndoom were unleashed.
The bracketed comma is what we call a comma splice error. This means that you're using a comma to connect two complete sentences. You see, a comma isn't strong enough to do this (I.e. you need something stronger to connect, like a period or a semicolon).

Volkner was working on his traps at the gym. It was the middle of the night, and the best guards were on vacation.

That being said, WHY is Volker working on his gym in the middle of the night? Why is there italicized thought? Why are you suddenly jumping to a random boy running? Why is everything just RANDOM and coming seemingly from nowhere? Seriously, this is ridiculously rushed; there's just too much going on for what purpose I don't know.

These Houndoom were trained to catch the anything from the fastest Rapidash to the sneakiest Kecleon, but they weren’t trained for the two of them. The boy thought to himself, Yes, they’ve hidden themselves quite well. Let’s see now… “Old friend, there are two Houndoom five meters behind us, three three meters to the left, and one a mile ahead. Take them all out with Close Combat.”

Yes, Master. The Pokemon took off and returned five minutes later. Just as you said.
Why are you mixing units? Stick to either miles or meters so you don't confuse readers. You also didn't really explain that this pokemon attacked the houndoom either. Just said it left and came back. Some sort of sign, like the houndoom collapsed, or something to show that the dirty deed was done would be nice. I'm also pretty skeptical on this entire “they couldn't catch us!” thing as the metaphor you're using to describe the houndoom are pretty high standards. Rapidash are fast, yet you're saying the houndoom are faster, and the houndoom are able to sniff out nearly invisible kecleon, yet the houndoom, with their good hearing and sense of smell being canines, couldn't smell out some clumsy human?

“All right, now comes the hard part.” The guards started rushing out to catch the boy, if they didn’t, they might be asked to go into “retirement”. Ten minutes later everything was smoothed until… “Gah! Psycho Cut at that tree now!” The Pokemon did so and a well hidden Kecleon fainted.
You can't get away with just saying “It happened!” to explain what happened. >_> Describe it. What happened to the guards? “Everything was smooth” doesn't explain what happened to the guards. I have no idea what psycho cut looks like. Where did random pokemon come from? Does random pokemon have claws – no you don't have to outright SAY what it is if you're trying to hide its identity, but that doesn't mean you can skimp out on detail either.

You mean… Ugh! At that moment the Pokemon was frozen from the inside out. The boy knew what this meant, this icy feeling of death surrounding him like the dementors in Harry Potter.
...Er, was the mention of Harry Potter needed? Believe it or not, a lot of people have not read Harry Potter and would have no idea what you're talking about. Plus it's a snap back to reality – you're trying to submerge your reader into the world you created, and using real-world analogies for no purpose is just ... silly.

“I put Wiki berries in the Alakazam’s food today. So when the clock struck twelve the barrier fell when the fell under the confused status,” the boy said quite pleased with himself. His Pokemon chuckled at this, to have thought of such a plan, maybe he would be a great Pokemon Trainer. “Now then, Teleport if you please.” His Pokemon then teleported them to a new beginning.
”...fell when the fell under ...” ...?

So epic battle with barely any description was for what? Couldn't they just wait until midnight until the barriers fell and teleport then? o_O And why would the barrier end at twelve? It seems to be that the barrier would be up after twelve to prevent people from escaping.

And wait. Slave? How does this boy have a pokemon, and a powerful one from what I'm assuming, if he's been enslaved? How did he have time to train it, let alone keep it? The guards would have taken it away so something like this wouldn't happen.

Why is there no emotion from your characters? Bill had no fear when he had to tell his boss that he failed to capture the boy. The boy himself wasn't scared, cocky. He just ... was ... nothing. There was no adrenaline, no energy, for an escape scene.

Chapter 1 review:

Dawn was the first thing she saw when she woke up. It was the first thing she saw everyday; maybe it had to do with her name. Well, Hikari Diamond intended to get her first Pokemon before that idiot showed up. She was a twelve year old girl with long pink hair and sapphire eyes. She got up and dressed into a white t-shirt and gold shorts and put her hair into a ponytail and left.
Er, do you mean Hikari instead of Dawn in the first sentence? And how is she the first thing she saw when she woke up (not unless she sleeps in front of a mirror)? There is just random information thrown here, too. Why not mention it in an appropriate place, like when she's getting ready? I mean, you could have at least put her description after the “getting ready” sentence so it would make some sort of sense.

“You mean like blowing up a building, hospitalizing two trainers, seven Pokemon and getting us banned from our trainer licenses for two years?,” Hikari answered,” All when you were ten years old.”
Excuse me? o_O After doing HEAVY DAMAGE to people and pokemon, all these two get is suspensions? You've got to be kidding me lol. Hell, logically, if you seriously injured someone and blew up a building, I'm pretty sure these two wouldn't allowed to be become trainers period.

Just then, an explosion happened and the crane crashed into the skyscraper Chunks of the building started falling and everyone ran for cover. Hikari and Elvis ran back to avoid it wondering what had happened. Then a woman screamed, terrified.

“My baby! My baby’s up there!” she had screamed. Everyone looked up and saw a small boy of five or six clinging to life. “I told him not to go there and now…” she whimpered fearing his life. Hikari and Elvis knew they had to do something, but what?
More randomness for no reason (plus you're missing a period here). If the building “exploded” then how is a kid still hanging there? Shouldn't the building should have collapsed or be in shambles or something? And if the mom knows the kid is there, why didn't she go there? Five and six year olds are still too young to wander around by themselves. They're also not that strong; they probably wouldn't be able to hang on at all.

There's a lot of things you need to work on.

Pacing: You write events as, literally, “this happened, causing that to happen.” You want to extend upon it so the reader can properly visualize it. After all, we can't see inside your head. Taking an example I quoted:

Tonight was the night. Volkner was working on his traps at the gym[,] it was the middle of the night, and the best guards were on vacation. It had to be tonight. Just a few more seconds. All of a sudden the lights went out everywhere in the city and the boy ran. “It’s now or never!” A Pokemon suddenly jumped out of nowhere and the two headed toward the gates. The alarm rang and the Houndoom were unleashed.
Like I said earlier, too much with little room to breathe. Simply adding a little more detail slows it down a bit:

Ex) Tonight was the night. All the best guards were on vacation. He was in prime shape. It was close to midnight. And, most importantly of all, Volkner decided to spend the night working on his gym. And him, being a gym leader, not an electrician–

There was a loud crackle, and the all the lights in the city went out with a fizzle.

“It's now or never,” he whispered, standing up, his heart racing. He stepped out the shrubbery he was hiding in and stepped on a twig, making it snap loudly, but it didn't matter. He had bigger issues to worry about, and the shrill sound of the alarm overpowered the snapping twig anyway.

“C'mon,” he said, turning his slightly toward more shrubbery, eyes slightly crinkled at the sides. “I need you.”

There was a ruffling noise as a blur of green jumped out of the bushes and landed next to him. They both nodded at each other before running toward the gates, the boy stamping the grass flat while the pokemon next to him ran on nimble feet, almost like he was levitating instead.

The alarms rung louder as the two came closer to their destination. So close ...

Then the beasts were let out. Snarling beasts with sharp horns, fiery eyes ... Oh, he was ready.


Next would be description. Again, you're skimping out on detail by just using the word. You really can't do that, especially if it's semi-important to the plot:
“All right, now comes the hard part.” The guards started rushing out to catch the boy, if they didn’t, they might be asked to go into “retirement”. Ten minutes later everything was smoothed until… “Gah! Psycho Cut at that tree now!” The Pokemon did so and a well hidden Kecleon fainted.
You need to build on the actual detail:

“All right. Now comes the hard part,” he muttered.

Guards – weak ones, but guards nonetheless – rushed out, waving batons and flashlights at him, some of them grabbing at pokeballs on his belt. Catching him was important to the guards, and the boy knew that; if they didn't, the guards would be forced into “retirement.”

How unlucky for them, then.

[whatever happens to the guards goes here, but since you were vague about it, I can't really elaborate on what happened to them. However, you should write WHAT happened to them as you just seem to skip over them.]

“Cake,” he said with a smirk, not looking back at the fallen guards. “We're almost there, bud–”

There was nothing more embarrassing, especially during an epic escape, then running into a wall and falling flat on your butt. Wait, wall?

Still flat on his bottom, the wet grass soaking through his pants, the boy, with tentative fingers, reached in front of him. His fingers pressed up against something cold and scaly.

“Dammit. Psycho Cut!”

The pokemon was quick to oblige, swinging its blade-like arm in the air. There was a loud ripping noise even though the pokemon didn't actually rip through anything as black energy in crescent shapes spiraled toward the supposed wall that blocked the boy's way to freedom. The familiar screech of a kecleon run through his ears as the kecleon dropped its guard and scurried toward the closest tree.


Next would be believability. While you are in a world filled with magical creatures that can breathe fire, you also should try to use common sense and think logically about events. I pointed a few in my nitpick section. Blowing up a building would probably have a worse punishment then just being suspended for two years. Would five year olds be able to explore skyscrapers by themselves? I doubt it. Etc.

Your characters could also use more emotion. The boy in the prologue had no emotion during his escaping scene. You would think he would be fidgety or energetic with all that adrenaline pumping through his veins because of his attempt to escape. Elvis had potential considering he's the mayor's son; perhaps he feels entitled to everything, in almost a snobbish way. Hikari could also have a bad temper. Try giving your characters set personalities first and then apply it to your story.

You need to work on the basics. =\ Unfortunately, all the things I listed here are the foundations of a good story. Without them, your story could easily fall apart or make no sense.
 
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Rixec

Shadow Trainer
Thanks for the review and I hope you can do the rest soon. If I get the time I'll try to redo those parts. I think you will like the later chapters better. I improved greatly on my writing after taking a creative writing class. And as for the 'slave' comment, that's just the guard's opinion. And how he trained it will be revealed in later chapters when you get there. Oh! And in chapter 1 by 'Dawn' I mean the time of day. Dawn, dusk, twilight, etc.
 
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