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the spirit of the wind

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pisces_beedrill

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sorry, i deleted the last thread accidently/

anyway:


Prologue.

Xam ran, his silver hair kept fling into his face. He was pale with anxiety. No one must see him. He ran faster then usual. The forest was getting darker and darker as he got deeper and deeper into it. Everywhere was silent. All the pokemon were silent. Not a sound could be heard. Today was the moons day. It happened once every generation of human beings, the day when the moon aligned with all the planets.

Soon, he was so deep into the forest; there was no light at all! He couldn’t see anything. He was deep enough. He closed his eyes and let himself free. He closed his eyes and the transformation began. His silver hair became longer and longer until it was floor length. It went from silver to pure white. His light brown skin grew darker until it was a hard wooden brown and his nose grew longer and longer until it was the size of a cucumber.
His arms grew wooden and fans made of leaves appeared in them. He then flew. He jumped into the air, flapped his fans and was airborne. His hair blew around his face and he created the winds.

He was the spirit of the wind. His family had to recreate the wind every generation. There were four spirits. The one of the wind, the one of the water, the one of the earth and the one of the sun.

Each spirit was represented by a pokemon. Each pokemon unique and powerful.

* * *


Rachel dived into the ocean. She couldn’t let anyone catch her. She dived so deep, she should have gotten crushed by the water pressure, but she was no ordinary girl. She was the spirit of water.

She was soon so deep, no pokemon even lived there. She began to transform. Her head grew elongated, a long rope seemed to grow from her forehead and I light bulb-like object grew at the tip. Her legs joined together to form a tailfin and her arms grew shorter, the got flat. Her milky white skin became sea-blue. Her neck became yellow and her eyes grew wider until they were the size of tennis balls.

She then swam towards the surface to replenish the waters of the world. The pokemon became alive. The spirit of water was back.

Her family had to replenish the waters of the world every generation. She was currently swimming around thinking of what the other spirits were doing and who they were.

* * *

Devon was in a bad mood. He hated flying! The way people would stare if they accidentally saw him. The other spirits either ran or swam, but he had to fly. He jumped high into the air and his spiritual powers took over him, he went higher and higher where it became colder and colder until it was so cold, he couldn’t feel his body! He was higher than any creature had ever been. He then began to transform.

His mouth grew pointed like a bird and his eyes grew sharper. Feathers covered his body. Different shaded brown feathers. His hands pushed themselves into his body. Wings then sprouted out. Great soaring wings. His legs shrank and grew yellow, they then talons sprouted from each one.

He then went to the sun to re-energize it. His power was good. He soon was done and got bored. He couldn’t wait to become a human again.

* * *

Francois digging. Using a shovel of course. She was deep into the forest. But she could still see. She dug so deep, that that she felt the heat from the mantle.

She then set herself free. She transformed. Her blonde hair grew longer until it covered her whole body. Then it became part of her pale olive coloured flesh. It became like golden plates. Then the plates popped out to form chocolate-brown spikes. Her hands became yellow and her nails became claws. Then out from her slim buttocks popped a long yellow tail. Her toenails also grew into claws and her skin became a nice yellow colour. She then nourished the earth. So the plants could grow and the earth could smell sweet.

She then joined the rest of the ground pokemon. Diglett, a short brown mole pokemon, nincada, an odd bug pokemon with white skin and onix, a great large rock snake.

* * *

The ninetales smiled. The curse was still alive.

* * *

Xam’s oldest son, Chuk, was not happy. He would be next.
“NO!” he said to himself, “I will brake that curse!”



Chapter 1
“Push, push, push!” a nurse screamed. Her hair was currently in a gigantic mess. She wore a pink plain dress which reached her knees. It had a v-neck and was short sleeved. The words “Charity Hospital” were on the back in red letters. Her messy auburn hair was spewing out of a nurse cap. Shaped like a paper boat and was pink like the dress. She was currently helping a lady give birth. She was pushing the stomach; the doctor was busy with another woman.

“Push!” she screamed. The lady there also screamed. Loudly! The nurse was very tempted to put her hands over her ears. The lady on the bed was a very fat lady. She was as wide as the bed, and the bed was about as wide as a two man chair. The lady was currently wearing a blue gown; her hair was jet black and lay sprawled across the bed. Her legs were wide open and there was a chansey waiting for any signs of a baby. The other nurse that was pushing the stomach pushed even harder. The lady screamed in pain. A little head popped out. The pink pokemon, which was round and egg shaped, had a pouch with an egg in its pouch. It had long pink hair like thing dangling from the top of its head. It took the egg from its pouch and gave it to the lady. The pain stopped. The baby had just come out. The nurse lifted her up. Yes, the baby was a girl. She then showed the baby to the mother, before sending chansey with it to the maternity room with the rest of the babies.

“Well done, a baby girl Mrs. Antanarivo,” the nurse said. She was tired. Up all night, helping Mrs. Antanarivo. “What will you name her?”

“I don’t know Ms …” Mrs. Antanarivo asked.

“Ms. Vuchtenviler,” the nurse replied.

“I think I will name her Lillis,” Mrs. Antanarivo said. The doctor came into the room at that moment. He was a young handsome man, in his thirties; he had black hair which was also, currently in a mess. He wore a long white coat which he buttoned up so you couldn’t see any of his clothes underneath. In his large top pocket was a stethoscope.

“How did your birth go Mrs. Antanarivo?” the doctor asked.

“Perfectly well Mr. Wind. Ms. Vuchtenviler is a great nurse. Thank-you both!” Mrs. Antanarivo said. She was very grateful. Chansey came back with the baby. Washed and dried, ready to be fed.
Mr. Wind and Ms. Vuchtenviler left Mrs. Antanarivo alone with Lillis. Chansey stayed of course. It needed to help Mrs. Antanarivo with her baby. Ms. Vuchtenviler was in need of some sleep! And so was Mr. Wind. They went down the stairs towards the staff room. In the staff room were some beds. Around five beds. Only one was had someone in it. They each chose a bed, and drifted into dream land.

Mr. Wind was having the same dream he had every night. It was of a ninetales laughing and saying he needs a wife to continue his generation. He was tired of that dream, but there was nothing he could do.

Two days later, Mr. Wind is completely drunk in a bar. He had one to many glasses of vodka that night and was in no condition to drive. Ms. Vuchtenviler was also drunk in that same bar. She had a bad day from work. Her stupid boss, Mr. Wind, had made her overwork and had yelled at her, got annoyed. He was a pain!

That same night, she entered a taxi and was with him in the same car. The driver began to drive. Mr. Wind and Ms. Vuchtenviler soon began kissing and cuddling…

When they awoke with their hangovers the next morning, they saw each other in the same bed. They screamed. This was bad! They hated each other! He saw her as a lazy worker and she saw him as an inorganic boss.

The ninetales curse was still working. Each spirit ends up marrying those they hate. They had to marry as the fling had caused pregnancy.

In her house, Ms. Vuchtenviler and her chansey were packing.

“Can you believe it chansey? I have to marry that awful man!” she wimpered. Her house was pretty, pink walls, cozy kitchen and no stairs, she would miss it!

That same day, in the evening, she was in his house. She began to change. She removed her nurses’ uniform and put on a sexy evening gown. It was black and glittering and shimmered in the light. It stopped immediately after her buttocks and started on her chest. Chansey was wearing a little pink dress. She was in the guest room of Mr. Wind’s house. It was a large room with light brown walls and a chandelier. It had a large three person bed which chansey and Ms. Vuchtenviler shared and an ebony wood closet. She was going to the home of the Winds. She was going to meet Mr. Wind’s parents. She was nervous. What if they asked “how did you meet?” or “do you love each other?” because she was not a liar. Chansey saw the panic on her face and offered her, her new egg. Ms. Vuchtenviler accepted graciously. She ate it egg and all her worries just left her. She was at peace.

Mr. Wind entered the room. He looked at her and thought that she looked like a prostitute. I hate this lazy worker. Why ninetales? Why?.

Ms. Vuchtenviler looked at him and thought that he looked like a waiter in a shabby pub because he was wearing thin sexy trousers that dancers use and a white shirt tucked in with feather sleeves. Just like her, he looked very good in his clothes.

“It is time to go,” he said blankly. She picked up her purse and held chansey’s hand as the walked out of the room and into the corridor.

The corridor was well decorated. It was painted blue with arboks painted on the side. Next to Mr. Wind was an ekans. He never took it to work because it wasn’t a good pokemon to have at work.

He opened the door and walked out. She was right behind him. Ekans was on his arm and chansey was holding her hand. It was a warm night. They entered his red BMW and began on their way…




plz comment, DO NOT FLAME!!! thnx ;307;
 

blackemerald

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Hello again...

Everything I said in your prevoius thread for the prologue applies here. You've made no improvments whatsoever.

In chapter one the sentences were a little choppy in my opinion. The bit when Mrs. Antanarivo gave birth seemed rushed to me. The description is fine but the plot sounds like your basic '*Insert charater name here* goes off to break curse' story.
 
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pisces_beedrill

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oh, it isn't original? plz help. anything would be appreciated
 
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