The Untitled Poem. (My First Poem.)

[pokeplayer984]

This is my first poem. I'm not to sure what title to give it, but I'm sure I'll come up with one. For those of you who are fans of Final Battle Saga, I'm sure you know who it's about.

The Untitled Poem

People say that no one is born with an evil mind
That only the things we experience in our life is what makes us evil
That no one being has the mind of sin from when they are born
And only what we do shows the evil within us

Sadly, that is not true
I was the one born with the mind of sin
From the start I planned to do the greatest of sins
Go against that of the great creator

I committed the greatest of sins
Murder upon the guardin of the forest
Rape upon the great creator of the world
All at the cost of wanting to rule everything in this world
I did the wrong for my selfish needs

I now take the justification of my sins
To only be let out at a time commited
To only be let out when I'm supposed to be
Only appear to those who will lead me down the right path

Sadly, my justification has gone on too long
I have learned from the errors of my ways
And yet, I am not free
I learned what I did was wrong
And yet, I am a slave to everyone I meet

I want to be free from the pain
I feel the only way to be free is to take my life
Sadly, as a steel type, that is a difficult task
One that I can never accomplish

I want the death to be swift and painless
Sadly, I can only die by breaking my justification
And the death would be slow and painful
Not how I want to end my life

The only thing I can do now is hope that one frees me
One that has the heart to love someone like me
One that can see past my evil mind
And let me be part of the family that they hold

Though who could love me?
Who could possibly love the one who commited the greatest of sins?
Who could love me enough to see past every wrong I did?
Who could possibly love a monster like me?

Whoever you are, I hope you free me soon
For I feel that if you don't, I shall destroy this world
Though it will not be my intention
For whoever I am a slave to, will make me do that

Whoever you are, whatever you are, I hope you can stop the evil
I hope you can love me
I hope you can free me
I hope you don't see me for who I was and for who I am

Wherever you are, please love me
Love the monster who will soon destroy this world
For it is the only way to free the monster
For only the monster can save the world.

~ End

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Well, what do you think?

No flaming please.

All improvement tips welcome.

 

[~*Ratiosu*~]

Why would we flame? It's wonderful! First reviewer:

I feel so stupid...I can't figure out which Pokemon it is...it's probably so obvious too. Anyway, you could use a bit more feel, and the "sadly as a steel type this is diffucult" or whatever seemed a bit unnecessary. But I'm not asking you to take it out...it helps us with the clues...

So what was the Pokemon?

 

[pokeplayer984]

X Kazemon: Maybe if you read the story it's connected to, you might figure it out better. Anyways, thanks for the tips.

I'm not going to answer until someone guesses it.

Come on! I need more guesses. Also, more tips would be helpful.

Well, I'll see ya later.

EDIT: Please send guess by PM. This is now going to Completed Fics Section.