The way you go.....poem

[One Charmed Dude]

The Way You Go

The way to go is the way your heart flows.
Your heart will never lead you wrong,
it follws only love's song....

You couldn't run if you tried,
your heart can't be defied.
You will always know the way to go
if you see what's inside you and me.

You can't stop yourself from loving the way
your heart takes you every day.
Even if that way seems to suck,
your heart won't run amuck.

You can't stop the pull of it,
your heart will keep one candle lit.
It will always be clear to you,
if you keep close who's dear to you.

The only way to go..
is the way you feel your heart flow.
Your mind cannot stop
your heart from tying you in an emotional knot...


You hear your mind scream,
this horrible world can't be a dream!
But your heart pulls you the way you need to go.
So let your mind scream all it wants, it can't do anything at all
You heart just uses you as a puppet or a doll.

Your body and mind can't see why your heart
always seems to cry.
It's like a boulder banging at your head,
you can do nothing to stop the misery and dread.

But after a long time
you can figure out your not mine.
You find yourself when you can't sleep,
all you're able to do is cry and weep.

Thoughts spining 'round your screaming mind,
you just need only one person to be kind.
Then the thoutghts finally clear,
you're not the only one who ended up here.

You've finally won the fight,
your head clears, it's no longer night.
Now you know what we all feel,
most of us have the same ordeal.​

 

[Flarey-Chan]

I really like it.. what's it about?

But

You can't stop yourself from loving the way

Is it supposed to say 'Loving' or 'Leading'? Just because I'm couriouse.

Also:

Your body and mind can't why your heart

Where it says 'can't' it probably should say 'isn't' Ok

.Other than that I really didn't really see anything else wrong.

 

[One Charmed Dude]

loving is right and the other was a typo......but thanks I hoe MORE peoples post!!!lol thanks..


WOULD SOME ONE PLEASE REPLY????????????????????

 

[chrisivy]

This has some kind of flow that wants to grab you...I can't explain it.

 

[One Charmed Dude]

thanks it took a while...

 

[Flaming Lip]

Even if that way seems to suck,
your heart won't run amuck.

I'm sorry but that is just a terribily silly line.

And, why did you make the text red? It just makes it hard to read.
It sounds like you're trying to describe how bizzare a crush or something can be, mostly in how it makes almost no sense. You got that across in less stanzas then you needed. So the poem extends longer than neccesary.

Over all, okay, nothing special.

 

[One Charmed Dude]

well I think it's great but then again I wrote it lol and I send things like amuck in there to keep you on your toes and as for the red text, I was just feeling depressed that day so I put it in red lol!!!