Time Will Tell (one-shot)

[Literate]

Well, I'm deciding to post a one-shot this time. It's in first person, the type I like the most to write in. Hope you enjoy it! ^_^

Code: ','- First person thinking; ','- Someone else thinking.

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Time Will Tell
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‘Burning….’

‘They were always burning…’

‘Always burning…’

I flew around the trees silently, trying to make no trails. In and out… in and out… I wandered aimlessly.

The leaves rustled in the winds and reminded me constantly of my thought. The moon shined down upon me, and yet I brushed it off. The soft noises of the night cooed, infiltrating my mind. The wind surrounded me, and I was lured into its embracing arms yet again.

I floated there immobile, unwilling to let go….

‘Hook...’

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I sat on a tree branch, my small hands wrapped around a bright red berry I had just plucked off a tree. It was fairly large and round, so I bit into a small part of it, and started to chew. The taste was sweet and its insides were moist, and thus I extracted more juices.

The wind played with the leaves, and they tickled me to the point of laughter. The branches shook from the force as well, and I was nearly tipped off. I held the wood tightly, and tried not to fall off when the next wind has hit.

The sun filtered through the branches, each ray touching my skin lightly. The warmth from it heated me from the chills of nighttime.

‘Here,’ I had thought. ‘I am safe…’

‘Line…’

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‘Burning…’

‘Burning…’

‘The forest…’

‘It’s burning.’

I immediately wrenched myself from memory’s grasp. I flew in circles, looking for any signs of life. None.

The full moon was blocked from view, the trees moving to the winds. The aura of night had faded and its wonders disappeared.

I turned around and around, in all directions. A faint orange spark caught my attention. I stared wide-eyed in shock. It grew bigger and bigger, consuming all in its way. The flames licked every surface it touched, growing ever massive as it came towards me. I panicked. Towards me.

Turning around, I shot through the forest near light-speed. In and out of trees, over rocks, and through vines, I tried to keep ahead of the fire.

My strength slowly melted to nothing, and the blaze was catching up. I fell down towards the soft grass, resting and tried to replenish my stamina.

The huge inferno closed in on me; I could feel the heat at my back. Perspiring, I mustered all my energy into the one move that could get me out of this predicament. Drops of sweat rolled down my tiny body, and my eyes grew dark violet. A black hole opened and I jumped in.

‘And sinker…’

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I flew out of the portal and headfirst into the grass. Senses tell me that this was one thousand years before the fire. I laid on the soft grass and closed my eyes and dropped into a deep sleep.

‘Got you.’

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There’s nothing that causes me to hop threads, but time itself. And when the scenario comes again….Only Time will tell.

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Oh, and if anyone wonders, the underlined thoughts... is a mystery. ^_^ Guess that.

 

[Bay]

Very good one shot litestars! A little short, but still good! I guess the Pokemon's POV is [SPOIL]Celebi[/SPOIL] because of a few of the time references. For instance:

I flew out of the portal and headfirst into the grass. Senses tell me that this was one thousand years before the fire. I laid on the soft grass and closed my eyes and dropped into a deep sleep.

If it's not the Pokemon I guessed, then correct me.
The underlined parts? Not sure. Sorry about that. I am not good at guessing things. Anyways, good work and hope you have more works coming!

 

[Literate]

Yay! ^_^ A review! And yes, it was Celebi.

And the underlined parts added together... "Hook, line, and sinker... Got you.'

Well, I thought that could give it away.

CLUE! It's one of the other characters in the one-shot. You can't see it though.

 

[Kutie Pie]

Ooh... I liked this! *hugs*

I thought it was Mew at first until the portal came. And the person who said "Hook, line and sinker... Got you" caused the fire I bet. And the person's part of Team Rocket I'm sure... THE IRON MASK MAURADER! AAIIIEEE! *guns down*

^^; Heh. Sorry. I'm sure it's him. Otherwise it's Mewtwo. Those are my two guesses, though I'm certain it's the Iron Mask Maurader. I mean, he's always after Celebi. [SPOIL]At least until he was captured, ha ha ha![/SPOIL] I love guessing.

(Do this to my brother and he'll throw a fit and attack you. I'm serious!) Well, anyway, good job litestars! Enjoyed it, I did! *hands chocolate bunny and hugs*

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♥Kutie Pie♥ Please be kind to midgets!

 

[Literate]

I thought it was Mew at first until the portal came. And the person who said "Hook, line and sinker... Got you" caused the fire I bet. And the person's part of Team Rocket I'm sure... THE IRON MASK MAURADER! AAIIIEEE! *guns down*

^^; Heh. Sorry. I'm sure it's him. Otherwise it's Mewtwo. Those are my two guesses, though I'm certain it's the Iron Mask Maurader. I mean, he's always after Celebi. [SPOIL]At least until he was captured, ha ha ha![/SPOIL] I love guessing.

Actually no.... It wasn't. And it wasn't the one who caused the fire. Sorry to confuse you.

~PEACE~

 

[Silentvibrava]

Let me quote a couple of things that you should do more often.

The sun filtered through the branches, each ray touching my skin lightly. The warmth from it heated me from the chills of nighttime.

Loved those lines. Like I always say, "Description is the icing on the cake. Too little will displease, and too much is unhealthy."

The full moon was blocked from view, the trees moving to the winds. The aura of night had faded and its wonders disappeared.

Very deep, to me.
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Now the plot was moderate, but I have no idea who Celebi's enemy is. I'm still trying to guess. I'm guessing Team Rocket, because who else would want Celebi?

I found some mistakes, but they aren't big enough to worth mentioning. You just missed a couple of commas in some places, but maybe it's just me and my writting style.

 

[Literate]

Loved those lines. Like I always say, "Description is the icing on the cake. Too little will displease, and too much is unhealthy."

I don't know what I was thinking when I wrote this. I.. forgot. I just didn't want to repeat things. Besides this is a one-shot so I put a good deal of effort into it. I like that line too. And I like cake.

Now the plot was moderate, but I have no idea who Celebi's enemy is. I'm still trying to guess. I'm guessing Team Rocket, because who else would want Celebi?

There... was no plot. I tend to write no plot things. I only can focus on one thing at a time. So the description got the attention that was supposed to be for plot. And Celebi had no enemy. I portrayed it wrong. Let me explain the lines in thoughts:

‘Burning….’

‘They were always burning…’

‘Always burning…’

Celebi is saying to 'it'self that the forests were burning. They were 'always' burning throughout time. 'It' remembers that there was no way to stop the fires, caused by humans or nature.

‘Burning…’

‘Burning…’

‘The forest…’

‘It’s burning.’

This was to snap Celebi out of its dream. So it could run away. Just a reminder to oneself.

And the underlined thoughts, they just repeat the process over and over. 'Hook' refers to its dream of the forest's tranquility. 'Line' refers to taking it out of fantasy and back into reality. 'Sinker' refers to the portal of time. In my head it makes perfect sense. But if you're confused tell me so I can explain it.

~PEACE~

 

[Silentvibrava]

Every story has a plot. In this story the plot was about Celebi. It depends on what a person thinks a 'plot' is. I think of it as an idea that can be made into any piece of writting. Different writters have different perspectives.

 

[Luckmage]

Absolutely scrumpa-licious! ^__^ I luff it.

Especially the "Hook, line, and sinker... Got you." parts. Oh yes!

It somehow adds a more...mysterious tone to it.

Although I'd found one or two odd parts:

It was fairly large and round, so I bit into a small part of it, and started to chew it.

The part where the Pokemon started to chew the berry. The last "it" sounds sort of repeated to me. xD

I couldn't really guess what the Pokemon was after I read this, but all became clear when I read the others' guesses and your replies. -is a total lackwit at guessing- X_x''

Although to me, it was sort of short of description, but it's probably a pet peeve of mine-neh. XD And I thought it could have used some extra commas here and there, but not a biggie. ^^''

Okiee: -rounds off with giving litestars some cake- There ya go. =D Good work! -for making me actually use my brain for reviewing- xD

 

[Saffire Persian]

Interesting POV from a Celebi, and I guess with it's time hopping powers it would want to do that. XD No good to see the forest burning. The HOok, line, and sinker parts were cool, too. And I have idea who the one who says the underlined words is. Sorry. ^^

 

[Timid Kyogre]

I just woke up, and I seriously can't think well I'm sort of in a OMFGREADANDREVIEWFICSNOWLOOOOOOL mood so yeah This fic caught my attention.

Though it was short, I loved the mystery! *Points at your posts at Rolling Away by The Cheshire Cat* XD This fic is lovely, and it was nice how you wanted us to think who was who etc. etc. but I seriously don't know who is the one in the underlined sentences

Good job ^_^

~Timid Kyogre

 

[Literate]

Wow. *counts in head* Three new reviewers! Yay!

Let me reply now. Ahem.

lightkeeper:

Every story has a plot. In this story the plot was about Celebi. It depends on what a person thinks a 'plot' is. I think of it as an idea that can be made into any piece of writting. Different writters have different perspectives.

Well, I think a plot is something that drives the story. Something that moves it along. Oh, and I think writing and writers have only one 't'.

Luckmage:

Absolutely scrumpa-licious! ^__^ I luff it.

Especially the "Hook, line, and sinker... Got you." parts. Oh yes!

It somehow adds a more...mysterious tone to it.

Maybe. I forgot what I was thinking when I wrote that. I didn't even know where I came up with it. I was running back and forth from the computer and TV. *Note: They are in different rooms*

The part where the Pokemon started to chew the berry. The last "it" sounds sort of repeated to me. xD

It threw it off? I dunno. I guess I could get rid of the second 'it'...

I couldn't really guess what the Pokemon was after I read this, but all became clear when I read the others' guesses and your replies. -is a total lackwit at guessing- X_x''

I thought it would've been crystal clear. Time travel ring a bell?

Although to me, it was sort of short of description, but it's probably a pet peeve of mine-neh. XD And I thought it could have used some extra commas here and there, but not a biggie. ^^''

Okiee: -rounds off with giving litestars some cake- There ya go. =D Good work! -for making me actually use my brain for reviewing- xD

Cake! *eats it* I totally suck when it comes to description. And I think I over done it with periods. Maybe. Really? Using your brain for reviewing?

Saffire Persian:

Interesting POV from a Celebi, and I guess with it's time hopping powers it would want to do that. XD No good to see the forest burning. The HOok, line, and sinker parts were cool, too. And I have idea who the one who says the underlined words is. Sorry. ^^

You do? I didn't think I gave enough clues. But in my head, it connects. I don't know where I got the idea for forest burning. I was just like, "Hey, I wanna do a one-shot! What about? Celebi!" Whatcha sorry about?

Timid Kyogre:

Though it was short, I loved the mystery! (*Points at your posts at Rolling Away by The Cheshire Cat*) XD This fic is lovely, and it was nice how you wanted us to think who was who etc. etc. but I seriously don't know who is the one in the underlined sentences

I know it's short. But it took me half an hour to write this, not including the time I spent watching "Realm of the Yeti" that took two hours. I just wanted someone to guess. I wanted to see it they got it. That's all. I guess most of the reviewers are stumped. ^_^

Shall I put another clue? This should give it away: It's the only word in the entire one-shot that has the first letter captalized and is not the start of a sentence. Yeah, this should close it.

~PEACE~

 

[Astinus]

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So it has something to do with [SPOIL]time?[/SPOIL] *can't think* It's like, four in the morning, my knee hurts, and so my mind is fuzzed out.

Your ficcie had no grammatical mistakes, which is exactly what I expected from you, litestars! Now, I must sleep... Yeah right. I still have to write my own fic.

It was obvious to me that it was Celebi. It was the berry scene that tipped me off. (I'm a weird one.) Celebi and berries go hand-in-hand for me.

I put my answer in spoilers, just incase you wanted the other readers to figure it out for themselves, but you seriously have to explain your thought process on the whole Hook, Line, and Sinker thing.

 

[Literate]

Yay! Another reviewer!

Hanako Tabris:

So it has something to do with [SPOIL]time?[/SPOIL] *can't think* It's like, four in the morning, my knee hurts, and so my mind is fuzzed out.

Yes, it does. I will say no more.

Your ficcie had no grammatical mistakes, which is exactly what I expected from you, litestars!

I guess that's pretty much because you saw some of my reviews. I know that. You always post either before or after me. I always check.

It was obvious to me that it was Celebi. It was the berry scene that tipped me off. (I'm a weird one.) Celebi and berries go hand-in-hand for me.

Yeah, but the real give-away was the fact that Celebi could sense the change in time. Yeah, and the berry part, I was 'inspired' with Pokemon 4ever's Celebi's eating of the berries.

I put my answer in spoilers, just incase you wanted the other readers to figure it out for themselves, but you seriously have to explain your thought process on the whole Hook, Line, and Sinker thing.

Yes, I do, don't I?

Okay, the first is Hook. Hook tells: Celebi was taken back into the memories of its time in the forest. (I don't like calling pokemon it.) It remembers the time it had with the forest, because it knew it'll have to leave it behind, again. Line tells: The longing to escape from the very likelyhood of being burned alive. So it takes Celebi out of the realm of memories and back into the burning forest. Sinker tells: When escaping, Celebi is pulled into time. Basically, it is a desire to get out of there, I mean the burning forest.

Hope that clear some things up.

~PEACE~

 

[Silentvibrava]

Well, I think a plot is something that drives the story. Something that moves it along. Oh, and I think writing and writers have only one 't'.

It depends where you live, and which one in the new dictionary you want to use. Yes, there is another way to spell "writing" now. At least in my school dictionary there is.

I hope your new story comes out soon. PM me when it comes, please. I'm looking forward to it.

 

[Literate]

It depends where you live, and which one in the new dictionary you want to use. Yes, there is another way to spell "writing" now. At least in my school dictionary there is.

I hope your new story comes out soon. PM me when it comes, please. I'm looking forward to it.

There is? O_O It just kind of defies a rule in grammar. Like when turning 'write' into a verb, "you drop the 'e' and add 'ing'." That's how I was taught in first/second grade.

Well, I've got to write the first draft, and hopefully not forget and/or abandon the story. It'll come out in either August, September, October, or November. Depends on how much time I have to write it in the summer and how much time I have in fall.

~PEACE~