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Trapped (PG)

Should I keep writing fan-fics?

  • Yes! I love this story!

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Viper

LOZ:TP player
My first fan-fic. Ok, This is a story with on chapter. Would it be called a one-shot?
Ok, here it is:
I’m a Tyranitar. I live in the Saffron City Zoo. I’m new, and everyone seems to thinks I’m vicious. But I’m not. They point to me and look terrified. They scream at me. They hate me. But all I want is someone to love me. One day, another Tyranitar came to the zoo. A female Tyranitar. She’s in the cage next to me. I spoke to her. She hates me too. I was so mad, I used Hyper beam on the fence. I got out. They were screaming. I attacked them. They all survived, but one was injured so bad, he could never walk again. The keepers came.They tranquilize darted me. I woke up in a small, dark, metal room, chained to the floor. Every day, I’m fed stale bread. I will get out someday. But until that day, I’m trapped.

So, wadda ya guys think? I know its not that good, this is kinda a test for me: Should I keep writing fanfics?
 

katiekitten

The Compromise
...You might want to take a peek at the rules. No story can be under a page long. I understand that it is a test, but still. You either need to put this in the Authors Cafe, (ask a mod to move it) or write more.

I'd advise ya to take a peek at the Advice for Aspiring Authors, too. Your story isn't bad, but it could use some work. =D
 

pathophobe

Well-Known Member
It's an OK summary for a story. You are in despreate need of massive injections of description. The plot seems like it could work though...
 

Yami Ryu

Well-Known Member
I adivise you: Read the rules. Because you are only supposed to post FANFICTION in FANFICTION. Not summaries, ideas, or 'I will post a story in 3 days!' as stated in the rules, threads must contain either a prologue/introduction, or a chapter.

Oh wait, it's not a poorly written summary it's a poorly written drabble. And doesn't help you don't use first person well. Rushed, skimped and probably written up in the reply box. Not only do I advise you to read the rules, but Advice for Aspiring Authors, and as someone once said, come back when you found the other 4,800 words for a chapter.

Sheesh.
 
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