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Twlight Crew: Sins Past, Present and Future

Eternal Daydreamer

Surrender to the Sea
Yes, I'm finally writing a Twilight Crew story. This is set in Ledian_X's super hero universe. Yes, a bunch of people will be showing up in spandex later. Ledian came up with the name too.

Have you ever wondered what wonders a single store can hold? I never really gave much thought to it. Boy, I sure payed for it later! Who am I? Well, I’m not a super hero. I’m just a kid. No, not a member of the Crew. I wish.

No, instead, I’m sad to say, I was the reason this whole story started. Why? My mother made me go into an antique shop.

Now, I will say what happened. I was younger then, of course....


“Jake, come on!” Jake’s mother was a large woman with curly hair that was always sticking out in every which way. Jake, a thin lanky boy of about thirteen years, shuffled along with a steady look of boredom upon his face. He did not like going antique shopping with his mother, not one bit. Jake’s mother knew this, mothers always know these things, but she kept on insisting that he would go shopping with her.

“Ancient Curios” was a boring store to be in. For a young boy, at least. A thin layer of dust covered the tall shelves and various items within them. Jake was not very interested in old things, new things were more interesting to him. Give him a modern X-Box over these ancient “curios” anytime.

Though... He did like to collect baseball cards. Lots of them, so much that his mother would complain loudly. Jake was searching the shelves for possible collector items for his collection. His friends would be jealous if he found that “McGyver Martiniez” card he was looking for. It was a very rare card that no one he knew had one.

Then, something caught his eye. Glancing to find his mother, Jake found her looking through ancient looking books. Without a thought, he raced to a nearby shelf. It was littered with books with withering covers but between two of them was a box. This was what had drawn him there.

The box seemed to be made out of some dark material and from his current position, Jake thought he could see designs on it. Shoving the books aside roughly, the teenager took the box from the shelf to look closer. The box’s design was odd indeed. It seemed to be showing a cow, a bear, a frog, a goat, a horse, dog, and a pig in various positions all over the box. Faded spots of paint dotted the eloquent designs.

‘Probably an old cigar box,’ thought Jake. ‘It might be worth keeping for something to put my cards in.’

“Jake! Get over here!” It was his mother again, Jake sighed and carried his luggage over to her. She glanced at the box, gave it a quick inspection, glanced at Jake, shrugged, and put it on the counter to purchase it. She was a fairly straight forward woman.

That was my mistake you know. No, wait. That wasn’t it. It was what was coming up. If only I didn’t want to show off my cards...

You know, some people would wonder why a box would be so dangerous. Now that I look back on it, I wonder why I didn’t bring that thing back...
 

Ledian_X

Don Ledianni
Excellent proluge, Carlotta! I can't wait to see what happens next. Soon, we'll be introduced to the crew and yes, there's going to be connection to the Starbolts story already going on. In the meantime, glad you're working on the story. Nice to have ya aboard!

LX
 

katiekitten

The Compromise
Nice, Eternal! Very interesting, a nice prologue...

The reminiscing writing in bold is quite effective, it catches my attention. It leaves you wanting to know what happened, which is in actual effect a cliff hanger. Nice!

The 'finding something in an antique shop' is an idea I've seen before but not recently. It is quite a good idea, which is why it has been used before, and it should pan out well depending on how you write it. As it is the prologue, I can't say much, but it is looking good so far. It possibly could use some more description in places, but I can't really tell. I'll take a look next chappy. :)

The characters are looking good at the moment, but, as I said before, this is only the prologue. I'll get back to you on that next chapter. :)

Wells, that's all from me. Keep up the good work!

Nice website, by the way. :)
 

Eternal Daydreamer

Surrender to the Sea
The reminiscing writing in bold is quite effective, it catches my attention. It leaves you wanting to know what happened, which is in actual effect a cliff hanger. Nice!
Thanks. I was goin' for that.

Ledian of course knows a lot about this fic. He is gonna write some of the parts with the 'Bolts. Real dramatic stuff is comin' up. Watch and wait!
 

Eternal Daydreamer

Surrender to the Sea
Here's chapter one! This is sort of slow still but, hey! I'm still settin' the scene!

Chapter One

You know something, high school is....Odd. That’s best to describe it, I think. However, it’s been a while since I walked in Maxiville High School’s hallowed halls. Though, I have good reason. I believe not to go back to that school. Albeit, I’m getting ahead of myself, aren’t I? Continuing...

High school. The bane of all teenagers. Jake was one of the few thirteen year olds to go to this high school. However, he had a small group of friends. Who just happened to love baseball cards as much as he. Jake knew his friends would be here, in the library.

With his heavy backpack in tow, Jake calmly waltzed to his group of friends that was gathered around a table. There was three there already. Tough and solid Mark, sly and smart Billy, and Billy’s nerdy big brother, Sam. Sam seemed to be pouring over a “How to Get Girls” book.

Mark raised a hand in greeting while leaning back in his chair. Billy gave a sly smile and chuckled slightly at some unknown joke. Sam didn’t give any notice to Jake as the freshman slipped into a chair. With a thud, the backpack landed by the chair.

Mark like Jake had cropped short mouse brown hair that flopped around. His green eyes were always glaring over his large nose. Billy was smaller and his clothes seemed to drape over his skinny frame. Unlike Mark and Jake, Billy and his brother had black hair. Billy’s was cut to the shoulder but Sam always wore his in a nerdy ponytail. It just didn’t seem to fit him.

“So, got any cards today, squirt?” Mark gruffly asked. Billy smiled again. He knew better than to say anything. Jake, however, mumbled something as he rummaged through the backpack. With a small gasp of triumph, the freshman pulled out the ancient box his mother had bought the day before.

“Take that as a yes,” Billy supplied. He always had a knack for words. Sam mumbled something about girls and was ignored. Mark glanced at the carvings on the box. He obviously disliked it already, it was simple to figure him out.

Jake gently took off the lid and proudly showed his collection of baseball cards. Mark took a card, looked at it, growled, and sat the card down. “Jonathan Smitie,” he said. “What’d you want for it?”

Jake shrugged and Billy leaned forward. “I’d give you two “Sharp-Eye” Johnsons for it,” Billy said in a wheedling tone. Mark growled deep in his throat. “I’ll give you my Stephen “Mad” Kristoff for it.”

Jake scratched his chin. “Alright Mark,” he began. “I wanted a Kristoff for a while. Sorry, Bill. Got seven Johnsons already.”

Billy smiled slyly. “I know, after all Johnson cards are the most common. Anyways, what’d else do you have?”

After the trade was finished, Jake promptly turned the box upside down on the table. Sam took a moment from his book and looked inside the box. “Jake,” the nerd asked turning his head to the side. “D’you know the box seems to be very shallow.”

Jake sighed. “Yeah, I noticed. I think it’s a false bottom. Can ya help me with the-?”

The sophomore cut him off with a wave. Sam was already at work prying off the false bottom. A creaky sound was emitted as Sam tore off the piece of wood. “Aha!” cried Sam. “I’ve got it. What the? It looks like you got some big jewels!”

Mark scoffed and Billy glanced inside the box. Jake shrugged off what could have been a snide comment and took a look inside the box. There was seven big round jewels in some sort of crystal. Each one a different color: either red, orange, blue, green, yellow, purple, and light blue.

Sam seemed to be staring at the blue jewel. “Freshman,” he seriously addressed Jake. “I would like that one.”

Jake did not want to give up the jewel. His face was creased with thought. “I dunno that-”

Sam had taken the blue jewel and stuck it into his pocket. Mark had scrambled up to his feet. The big freshman had a terrible temper and glared at the nerd. Sam knew he was being taunted and did not back down. The jewel was his, that’s all that mattered.

“Now, Sam, Mark,” Billy began, addressing both boys. “Just let this-“ He was about to say go when Mark swiped the box off the table. Jake tried to get the box when it hit the floor. The remaining six jewels started rolling away in different directions, as if they could think for themselves.

Jake glared at Mark. It was his fault, after all. Now the old man who was the librarian was coming to scold them.

***

Maria was a meek junior. Small and slender, the seventeen year old could have easily passed for a freshman. Although, the Chinese girl was too honest and good hearted to play such a part. If there was still nobility in the world, Maria was a part of it.

The four boys at the other side of the library were annoying at worst. Although Maria was too soft-hearted to bear any long term grudge against anyone. Bridget, the head cheerleader, was the only person she might have born any ill will against. That and all the dictators and villains in the world. But almost no one in Maxiville High School was the center of any long term hate.

The junior shifted her weight in her chair and adjusted the purse at her side. The text book in front of Maria was about her worst subject, history, but she continued studying. Even after something touched her foot.

Maria glanced down and was surprised to see what was there. A small gasp came from her lips. A bright red jewel, almost surely ruby, was laying there at her feet! She picked it up carefully, her long fingernails almost scratching the surface.

Maria was not really that greedy but seeing that treasure was just too much. An image began to form on the surface of the jewel, mesmerizing the junior. It was one of a great bear fighting many armies; the bear cut down the army men like a scythe. Maria let herself a little smile. Somehow, this vision pleased her far beyond what her calm demeanor would allow.

Glancing around the library to make sure none were watching her, Maria put the jewel inside her purse.

***

Bridget dislike the library greatly. It was only because of her best friend needed study time that she was here. Every flick of her blonde hair was a sign of annoyance. Her blonde eyes fixed upon Maria, her rival.

Bridget was a true blue cheerleader. Tough, vain, athletic, not that smart, and had anorexia nervosa, a serious eating disorder. So she didn’t really have anorexia but she was walking a fine line.

Her friend sat across from her, head down engrossed in some writing assignment. Bridget sighed noisily and started to text message someone on her cell phone. She didn’t really care WHO she sent a message to at the moment.

The other cheerleader glanced up from her work. “Oh come on, gloomy lips,” she began. “You act like Jonathan broke up with you.”

Bridget gave her a glare. “He might! If I continue hanging around the library, that is!”

Bridget’s friend gave a sigh and continued working; she knew better than to argue with Bridget. The head cheerleader was paying attention to an orange jewel that seemed to be rolling towards her on the floor. No one else seemed to notice it and Bridget did love jewels....

The cheerleader picked it up and shoved it into her purse. A sudden craving for a nice cool ice cream sundae came to her. Lucky she had a pass which allowed her to go somewhere for lunch!

***


Jonathan was a runner on the track team. One of the popular boys, although it never really went to his head. Jonathan was the “boyfriend” of Bridget, the head cheerleader, although he had to admit the senior wasn’t really his type.

Bridget’s vanity conflicted with his natural humility. It wasn’t that he had low self esteem, no! Jonathan was not a depressed person by nature. Although the other teenagers he hang around him seemed much prouder than he.

Jonathan looked like the typical teenage babe magnet. Floppy blonde hair, a sleepiness to him, a “coolness” that other boys tried to imitate and failed every time.

The senior sighed as he leaned on the brick wall outside the library. Jonathan didn’t want to wait for Bridget but being the good boyfriend he was, that’s exactly what he did. Several freshmen girls were in a tight huddle taking nervous glances at him. It happened all the time and it didn’t matter much to him.

A salty breeze started to blow, not surprising since Maxiville was a coastal town. The high school had a pretty good view of the sound. Jonathan couldn’t see the sound where he was but it didn’t really matter.

A group of four teenage boys came shoving their way through the doorway. Jonathan just moved carelessly out of the way in a sleepy manner. It seemed the group was arguing about being “thrown out of the library”. Jonathan sighed again and wished to heaven that Bridget would just hurry up. Although he wasn’t very vain, Jonathan felt libraries were “beneath” him. That and girls tended to stare at him more in that place. He did have feelings you know.

A lavender jewel came rolling out of the library. It was out of place and Jonathan hurriedly picked it up. A calming image of a horse galloping through a field shown clearly on the surface. Jonathan had a fondness for horses and checked on the group of teenage girls. They were still gossiping and not paying attention to him. The jock shoved the jewel inside his varsity jacket.

***

Angela Garvie didn’t really belong in the high school setting but was there anyways. The woman just was different and it showed. There was a distinct lupine look about her. From her matted brown hair to golden-green eyes, Angela just didn’t “fit in” with a normal human look. The semi-pointed ears and fangs didn’t help any.

Although her looks were different, the woman could make a comfortable living in Maxiville. Why? The answer was simple: the woman was commonly known to be working in the Twilight Crew under the name “She-Wolf”. That and the fact the infamous Garukingou of the Starbolts was her boyfriend. Angela Garvie didn’t have to hide her looks anymore since the Crew started to work for the “greater good”.

It would take days to fully explain Angela’s condition but for our purposes we can call her a “werewolf”. The woman was at the high school as a guest speaker in a physical education class. Why? Being a former Olympic athlete, Angela was a good choice for a guest speaker.

A few students had come in late for the first period class. It did not help a steady headache that started forming that the students were arguing over what looked like a large marble. Angela knew the teacher was taking a break in the teacher’s lounge so it was up to her to reprimand and take the offending “toy”.

The boys were trying to take the marble away from each other and hadn’t noticed the lupine woman behind them. In fact, they were so occupied that they just noticed Angela when she forcefully TOOK the marble from their hands. The first teenager looked up and growled, “Give it back, teach!”

Angela rolled her eyes and shoved the marble (it was a bluish color) into her pocket. “Not today, punk,” she said. “It’s time for the WHOLE class to warm up anyways. I just can’t abide laziness!”

***

By the time she got to the base at the end of the day, Angela was really worn out. Why or how was a mystery, maybe the teenagers were too active now a days. Maybe she just was out of shape. Angela didn’t know, nor did she care much.

She shoved herself into the headquarters of the Twilight Crew. It was just a large mansion-like house in the rich end of Maxiville. Helen Atlas (A.K.A. Velvet) was the owner of the mansion mainly because she was a rich heiress. That and Prime Gun (the leader of the Crew) was VERY forceful when he wanted to be.

Angela knew most of the Crew was probably around town doing the normal errands and such. Although Slowfire was of course lounging in the living room, which happened to be very close to her bedroom. The dwarfish man’s skin was always crackling with cold fire, a reminder of the punishment for his early in life lethargy.

Slowfire most of the time was slow moving, although his mind was as sharp as ever. The dwarf glanced up at Angela through the doorway, a magazine laying upon his flaming (yet never burning) lap. “I....see.....you......look....tired...Are...you...going....to....bed?”

Slowfire’s speech was always slow and steady. The man was a sharp and clever man, always, although his speech and slow ways may have given a different impression. Angela gave a great yawn, another form of yes.

“I’ll....tell....the....others...when....they....get....back...then...”

Angela shuffled tiredly off to bed. Man, she was tired as if she ran ten miles.

****

Katie was an energetic little girl. Her aunt, Buffy Johnson (more commonly known as Valentine), was always chiding her for trying to go on missions with the Crew. Katie was a bundle of energy and always wanted to play.

The brown haired seven year old girl was sort of scared of the darkened room. Although, her aunt Val did ask her to get Angela for dinner. The old fashioned aunt liked “family” dinners together, after all.

The girl slunk to the sleeping woman’s bed. As always, the bright purple pajamas shown like a light through the thin covers. Angela always got hot and sweaty at night, so she wore light blankets. Katie gave the woman a light shove to get her up.

Angela didn’t respond. Katie gulped and tried again. The same result. Perhaps it was a little girl’s inexperience or maybe something....bad....happened to the sleeping woman. Katie knew just one thing to do in this situation: cry for her aunt.

“AUNTIE VAL!” Katie screamed. “I THINK ANGIE’S DEAD!!!”

You know, sometimes I shake my head at these memories. Or at least the ones I was part of. Really, I am sorry for buying that box now...Sorry.
 

Ledian_X

Don Ledianni
Ahh finally, Chapter 1. It's nice and short but that's okay. I understand you'll be making the chapters longer as we go on. Grammar's okay. But, I already told you about that and description. But, perhaps it'd be best to have someone beta read, too. That'd be a good idea, I think.

I can't wait for the next chapter because well..I know what's going to happen for one scene. Twlight Crew makes a fine addition to the fanfic universe. But, I'm wondering if we're going to see some backstory. Like how Shewolf met TK and the like. But, I guess you and I can talk about it and fit it in somewhere. Either way, you're off to a good start. Work on grammar and description. Dialog, descrption and emotion is key to a story like ours. I know you know this. Just reminding ya!

LX
 

katiekitten

The Compromise
Nice Eternal!

Sorry, I'm not in a reviewy mood today, so I can't help you much. There were a few bits of static description, but that is easily sorted out. When you were describing people, you tended to list a bit. But that is ok. :)

I like how this story is developing! I quite like Katie, (especially the name! XD) and the ohers. Bridget doesn't seem like my type, but I like her never the less. :) Keep up the good work!
 

Eternal Daydreamer

Surrender to the Sea
Alright! Here's chapter two! Ledian wrote the parts with the 'Bolts, so I can't take credit about those parts.

Chapter 2

Little kids. The bane of humanity sometimes. Don’t get me wrong, Katie was (or should I say, IS) a nice girl. Although at that age, they tend to....overreact.

Buffy was a pretty woman in general. From her floppy brown hair that seemed to be always in a ponytail in the back, to her soft hazel eyes, to the charming smile that seemed to be always on her face. She was what we would call a natural beauty, although she never relished in false admiration. Her favorite romps were with a good book not a handsome man; not like her twin, who was the mother of little Katie.

Holly was the sister of Buffy and was no less beautiful. Though when it comes to wit and restraint, Holly came in last. She was what Buffy liked to call a “lost cause”. For the knowledgeable person, Holly was like Crystal Arronfeld of the Starbolts used to be. They were of a like occupation; both were heroes and well, just leave it at that. Crystal however did not start out selling herself unlike Buffy’s twin sister.

Katie herself seemed to inherit the brown hair and hazel eyes from her mother, Holly, although whether her temperance came from her unknown father was not yet tested. Buffy wished with all her might that the girl would not follow the path of....Brothel girls. The careful aunt just did not want to lose her niece like how she lost her twin those years ago.

Buffy sighed as she heard the cries of her niece. The fretful girl had interrupted her reading. Katie meant well but little children often got the wrong impression; Buffy knew this but....The woman had been curled up in the comfy armchair with a copy of Gaston Leroux’s “Phantom of the Opera”. The light on the night stand was just so, just right for late night reading.

Although now, Buffy highly doubted that Katie would let her be. The girl would yell and yell ‘till she got her way. Katie’s aunt knew the girl was excited and worried, but the aunt herself felt no anxiety. Little children of Katie’s age tended to do that.

“Auntie! Auntie!”

Katie was a bundle of energy, aimed right at her aunt. The seven year old’s mind was set on one thing: panic! It was true some girls were calm at that age, but oh no! Not Katie! The girl would panic ‘till doomsday if Buffy did not do something!

“Katie,” the aunt with the frazzled nerves said. “Please be a dear and be quiet for a moment so I can think.”

Katie, however, would not calm down. Buffy’s head sank down to her rather large chest in defeat. She would check on Angela just to shut up Katie.

***

There’s something about chess...It’s about strategy, not beating your opponent senseless. This lesson I’ve learned many times....

The room was cold and dark. A single light shone on a map on the rough wooden table. The map seemed to be a map of a great city. Every building seemed to be drawn exactly to some unknown plan.

There should have been more than seven pieces on that map, but there wasn’t. It just made it more empty. A vast map with only seven pieces... Why just seven? There was not a plausible answer.

Each figure was different, each a model of a human being. Was this some sign of the future? Or maybe a game board of a cosmic being?

A hand, wrinkled with age, moved a piece into a building. It was a female figure, the hand laid it down on it’s side.

“Heh. They don’t know what’s wrong with you Acedia, eh? It’s odd, ain’t it? Heh, my game’s not done, Acedia. Hehehe.”

The hand moved towards another figure. “And you, Ira! Ha! You want to taste blood, eh? Well! You will, heh. You will, Ira.”

The voice was cracked and withered. It did not seem to belong to any one person. Who was the game master of this “game”?

***

Angela’s breathing was shallow. Buffy knew this when she leaned down over the woman. Katie yelped from the doorway. Buffy glared at her niece, this was no time for her childish whimpers.

“Angie” was clearly NOT dead but...Something was still odd about this. The awake woman leaned in close, putting an ear close to the mouth of the other woman. To check Angela’s breathing, of course. It was shallow but there. The pulse was erratic, there but it was not Buffy had suspected. It was odd and frightening.

“Katie, go to your room and stay there. I’ll be there in a moment.”

Katie glanced at her aunt nervously. She would do this, why? Mainly because little girls didn’t know very much and got frightened easily. “Why, Auntie Val?”

Buffy did not answer but just straightened up. She would not say, it was just too weird. The woman had little medical knowledge but she was sure that the pulse of a sleeping person was not that erratic.

“Katie, just do it. I believe the ‘Bolts need to be called.”

“The ‘Bolts? But Auntie Val...Prime won’t like it.”

“He’ll live.”

“Auntie Val...He’ll kill us all.”

“No...That’s M’anta who will kill us all.” Val replied sarcastically.

“He will? Is that blue skinned frog evil?”

“No.”

“Velvet says he is.”

“Katie....Velvet hates the Starbolts.”

“Why?”

“Because Velvet hates Jenna.”

“Why?”

“How should I know?”

“I don’t know, Auntie Val.”

“Oh, shut up will ya? I’m tryin’ to sleep!” Angela moaned.

“Ah! Angie’s back from the dead!”

With this comment, Katie ran screaming from the room. Buffy sighed. Katie just didn’t know her aunt could throw her voice. Good thing too, although the woman loved her niece, little girls could be so tiresome.

Valentine made her way to her room, almost running into Slowfire in the process and quickly sat at a videophone, a gift from the Starbolts that the Twilight Crew could use to maintain contact with the various heroes of Earth. After a quick dial, a blonde woman wearing a navy blue uniform with gold trim and a distinctive golden star-like insignia on her chest appeared on the screen flanked by a few of her teammates.

“Val?” The young woman asked. “What--?”

“Jenna, where’s Tk?” Valentine asked with a concerned tone in her voice. “Something…odd happened to Angela. We don’t know what’s wrong!”

“All right, calm down a sec. Tk, can you come here a second?” The Starbolts’ leader motioned off screen and soon a tall Japanese youth appeared.

“What’s going on?” Tk started. “Buffy, if Prime Gun has hurt Angela…so help me I’ll-“

“He doesn’t know I’m calling.” Buffy shook her head. “In fact, he and a few of the others are out. Angela was substitute teaching and when she came home, she went straight to bed.”

“How’s that odd?” Tk asked. “She probably-“

“Takashi, there was something erratic with her pulse.” Buffy interrupted. “It’s almost too slow. You and Kevin should get here quick because we don’t have the medical gear you have there. She’s become unbearably lethargic.”

Tk’s brow furrowed with concern as he looked to Jenna for a possible solution to the problem and in response, she smiled with compassion as she turned from him to Buffy. Jenna knew that the Twilighters were a good group despite being lead by a wrathful man and she decided that she’d send a few members of the team to Maxiville and tend to Angela Garvie.

“I’ll be sending Tk and Kevin to see if they can help.” Jenna began. “We’ll be in touch and hopefully Angela’ll come out of whatever’s causing her slowness.”

“Thanks, Jenna.” Buffy smiled as she ended the transmission.

***

After the transmission ended, Jenna turned to Tk once again, who was joined by a brown haired man with red ocular implants named Kevin, a man with a large pair of blue and white wings named Mateo and his wife, Aquita. Aquita, unlike the others was an alien with light-blue skin, webbed hands and emerald hair. She was the princess of her world, Aquarius and she and Mateo had just returned from their honeymoon.

“Jenna, give us the fastest shuttle you can find.” Tk clenched his fists. “We need to get to Maxiville!”

“Tk, it’s going to be all right.” Kevin reassured his friend.

“We’ll get one of the jets ready but I’m thinking you and Kevin should take back up.” Jenna explained. “If the situation worsens, we’ll need someone else to help the Twilighters.”

“So, who’s going to go?” Mateo asked. “I mean ‘Quita and I just got back from our honeymoon and all.”

“Angela still needs our help and some of the others are on a mission with M’anta.” Aquita explained. “If it’s okay, maybe the two of us should go with Tk and Kevin.”

“’Quita, you’re gonna have to take it easy.” Mateo explained. “I mean, you could lay the egg soon.”

“I know but I should be okay.” Aquita rubbed her belly. “Little Sirak’ll be just fine for a while. Besides, what could happen in Maxiville?”

“I guess you’re right, but I’m going with you to provide back up if needed.” Mateo hugged his wife.

“Then it’s settled, Agents.” Jenna nodded. “Get to Maxiville and help the Twilighters with Angela.”

“Angela better be okay.” Tk’s fists tensed.

The quartet made their way from the war room of their headquarters to an elevator, which lead to the hangar and soon the four heroes would arrive in Maxiville to see what the trouble with Angela was. As Kevin prepared to launch the jet, Tk thought about his girlfriend as he took the window seat. The small four person craft would reach the city within hours but for Takashi, that was too long.

***

Jonathan usually didn’t hang around football players. They weren’t his type, normally. But the two broad shouldered twins at the booth were special. They were called Leon and Phillip Kringe. Both of them had the distinct floppy brown hair cut to their shoulders, strong jutting chin and lazy green eyes.

Phillip had glanced up at the track star; Leon was too busy playing with some loose change to notice. The glance soon turned into a glare. Jonathan shrugged it off and sat down beside his friends. This was their normal meeting place, the local ice cream parlor.

“So glad you could come,” growled Phillip as his eyes roved around the parlor. Jonathan shrugged, he was feeling too good to get down. Leon finally noticed Jonathan and stopped playing with the money.

“I’m not paying,” said Leon in a matter of fact tone. “I’d rather keep my money today.”

Jonathan raised his hands to his face in a shrugging gesture. “Don’t worry fellas,” he said. “I got it all planned. Leon wants a chocolate cone, Phillip wants a vanilla, and I get the butterscotch sundae. Like normal. I pay.”

Leon nodded, it was always the same. Been the same since their freshman year. “Nah,” interrupted Phillip. “Today I WANT a butterscotch. See those two over there? They have one. I want one. No, I NEED one!”

Leon sighed deeply. He didn’t want to pay the extra but his twin would insist. “Hey, pal,” Leon said to Jonathan. “We can get the extra if you pay. I...want to save my money.”

Jonathan shrugged his shoulders. “Fine with me. Right, Phillip?”

Phillip was glaring at a couple across the parlor. His skin had a slight greenish tint to it but the other boys either didn’t notice or just didn’t care..


***

“So lemme get it straight. Angie goes in, slips into some sort of COMA, then you call the idiotic “Starbolts”. Does no one ask me?!!! I own the place and I can kick you all out!”

Buffy sighed. Helen Atlas (A.K.A. Velvet) was a strong woman alright. Same age as Jenna (leader of the Starbolts), Helen was the complete opposite.

Helen looked older than she was, actually. Her face, once unmarked in her teenage days, was lined with sharp edges. Her brow was more furrowed with long contained hatred of the two people she hated most: Jenna and herself. The long black hair that normally was hanging loose was kept in a tight ponytail, Helen’s emerald green eyes were glaring at Buffy, her elegant eyebrows tightened in her frustration.

Buffy had calmly explained to Helen the situation at hand. Helen, as usual, overreacted. “Helen, calm down. They ought to be here in a couple hours. Gun might come in here anyways.”

Buffy’s response made Helen even more angry. She went for the watch that she always wore underneath the sleeve of her shirt. “I think that wouldn’t be a good idea, fighting that is.”

It was Prime Gun, the slightly insane leader of the Twilight Crew. He was a tall man with the grace of a large cat. His rust colored hair always covered his cold hazel eyes; a rust colored goatee covered his chin. Gun always dressed like a cowboy for his own reasons. Today it was a red flannel shirt and blue jeans.

“Helen,” he said in his calculating voice. “We all know of your hatred of the ‘Bolts. Angela is the problem.” Gun sighed and leaned against the wall, running a hand through his hair. “A coma is serious stuff. I haven’t heard of anything like this, I haven’t done anything medical so how would I know?”

Helen growled and stomped out of the living room. Buffy glanced at Gun. The man shrugged his skinny shoulders. The woman slumped into a couch. “Gun...You know it’s not just some coma. Angela is in fit condition.”

The leader nodded. “You can read people like books, can’t you? You are indeed clever, Buffy.”

Buffy blushed slightly. She didn’t know Gun to give comments out like that. “You old windbag, don’t get my hopes up!”

***

(Earlier)

The line for lunch was very long that day. Maria was in the back of it, carrying her purse. The other teenagers in front of her were talking annoyingly. Maria was small boned and many people jostled her out of their way.


One teenager, a rather brash wide shouldered senior, shoved her aside roughly. Maria turned around to face him. “Broad,” the senior said warning her. “Ah don’t wanna hurt ya but if that’s what it takes, I swear, I will hurt ya. Bad.”

This teenager had a reputation as a bully. Maria could feel her heart beating fast. “I don’t want to fight,” she said softly. “Please, forgive me.”

The teenager harshly laughed, he didn’t care about this little girl that much. Maria gripped her purse tight, ready to swing it. By now a small crowd of students had surrounded them.

Maria gulped. Then felt angry. Really angry. More angry than she felt before, it scared her. “No,” she growled. “You want a fight? Then you got one!”

It was really out of character for what she did next. The purse connected to the bully’s cheek; he stumbled back into the crowd and regained his balance. He moved a hand over where the purse hit him. “That’s it, broad. Ya gonna get it now! HURUGH!”

The fight would have continued if the rather large lunch lady hadn’t stepped in-between the two teenagers. Maria gave a little smirk but she was still angry. And she didn’t know why.

***

“Really, I’m like so hungry!”

That was what Bridget had said when the freshman cheerleader asked her why she grabbed the sundae so fast. An older cheerleader shut up the freshman with a glare. They would not argue with the HEAD cheerleader.

The cheerleaders had gathered in the local ice cream parlor after school. Bridget’s treat for a good game the week before. A red headed sophmore cheerleader rubbed a bit of cream from her cheek. “Really Bridget,” she said disgusted. “Chew with your mouth CLOSED! Like, that’s totally gross, anyways!”

“Daniel’s got a point,” piped up the freshman who asked before. “Like, totally! Chew with your mouth shut!”

Bridget did stop eating. The head cheerleader set her spoon carefully down and glared at the two other cheerleaders. “No. I am, like, terribly hungry! G-E-T-Y-O-U-R-O-W-N!”

The two rowdy cheerleaders backed down and went to another booth quickly. They would not face the angry head cheerleader when she was eating. Whoever said all cheerleaders were dumb didn’t meet these two.

***

Sam had watched the fight between Maria and the bully with mild interest as he ate his lunch. Billy, as always, was right there with him. “Maria sure got an arm on her,” piped up Billy.

The sophmore ignored him and continued watching the fight. More correct, he was watching Maria’s lower region. Sam didn’t know why he did, but...It just felt right watching that butt. And when the lunch lady broke it up...Sam caught him staring right at her chest area.

Billy did a boyish giggle and the older brother glared at him. He had far more important things to do. Like have fantasies about women. And girls. And any female around him. A cheerleader who was passing by caught his attention. This one had the reputation of wearing the lowest cut shirts aloud.

“Bro,” Billy said disgustedly. “You are drooling over my lunch!”

So that’s where this chapter ends of this tale. What happens next, you ask. Just wait. Let me catch my breath.
 
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whit19

Fire boy
guess I'm the first to review chapter 2. :p Anyway, I really like where the story is goin. I ain't sure what the jewels do but I think they affectin the people that picked them up. Ah, the legendary Starbolts appear, I wasn't expectin them to actually be in the story.

I like all the characters you introduced and you gave us a good background history for them. I wonder who the evil man playin 'chess' was and what did those names mean...


Also, I wonder where Jake and Mark was when the fight in the lunchroom was goin on.

I saw a few errors.


Twilighers were a good group despite being lead by a wrathful man and she decided that she’d send a few members of the team to Maxiville and tend to Angela Garvie.

Should be Twilighters, right?

“Angela still needs our help and some of the others are on a mission with M’anta.” Aquta explained.

Aquita?

“So lemme get it straight. Angie goes in, slips into some sort of COMA

coma should be lower case, right?

Also, I dont think you need the () when you wanna give us extra info on someone. Instead of goin Jenna(leader of the Starbolts) you could just go Jenna, the leader of the Starbolts,

Anyway, I liked the prologue and the two chapters, keep it up. :)
 
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Ledian_X

Don Ledianni
Sorry it took me a while to review this but ya, this chapter's pretty good like I told you on MSN a while back. Looking forward to working with you on more Starbolts stuff in this story. But, keep in mind that it may be a good idea to go into some more detail later on. It helps to nt have a rushed feeling. But, of courrse I'll be here to help ya along.

LX
 
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