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uA's "Different Eyes" [Chapter Three]

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by unrepentantAuthor, Apr 18, 2018.

  1. unrepentantAuthor

    unrepentantAuthor A cat who writes stories

    Hello, all. This is a fanfic I've been working on from time to time since 2006. It won Best Story and Best Dark Fic on Bulbagarden in Spring 2012 when I last published any version of it. It's a story about pokémon-human hybrids, personhood, the implications of advanced genetic engineering, pokémon sapience, and personal agency. It's also a story about a cat who wants to be a person, and how she becomes one.

    I hope you enjoy it.

    Updates twice monthly or more frequently. Will contain upsetting scenes of physical and emotional distress, extended sequences of fantasy violence, and the use of profanity by characters.

    Last edited: Jun 1, 2018
  2. unrepentantAuthor

    unrepentantAuthor A cat who writes stories


    Welcome, all. I trust your journeys were pleasant. Now, I understand that you expect greater transparency from the executive management about our research and development programs. This is perfectly reasonable, and so I would like to take some time to tell you the facts as they really are.

    This is the truth you seek:

    A new form of intelligent life has come into existence.

    Permit me a preamble to explain the significance of this, before I disclose our current and future enterprises.

    Until now, there were two kinds of sentient life in the world. The first kind are the mundane beings we call animals, of which humans are the most remarkable species. The second kind are creatures of inscrutable energy, which have been called magical beasts, fae, daemons, kami, and in our generation, 'pokémon.'

    It will soon become clear that a third kind now exists.

    The relationship between humans and pokémon is intimate, despite the difficulty in communication between us. Humans are able to form bonds with pokémon, and thereby unlock their inner potential. Historically, this was done only by exceptional humans, but the mass production of 'capture balls' is changing this relationship. Now that almost any human can legally own a pokémon, they are an irrevocable part of all our lives, everywhere. There is now no symbol more widely recognised in this world than the pokéball.

    Most people believe that only humans are gifted with sophisticated consciousness: abstract thought, creativity and complex language. That pokémon instead have the gift of mysterious energy, with which they wield their incredible powers. Moreover, that our physical forms are fundamentally incompatible, with no likeness between our DNA. This perspective is unsupported by modern research, but it persists nonetheless, perhaps because people are uncomfortable believing otherwise.

    You may have heard rumours that in 1996, a hybrid was created by researchers in the private sector. Using genetic material from an uncatalogued pokémon species retrieved in the Guyanese Amazon, combined with the DNA of humans and other pokémon, a new kind of creature with the intellect of a human and the power of a pokémon was given life, not naturally, but through technology. This being, according to urban legend, soon destroyed its creators, and their research with them, before vanishing forever.

    No significant investigation has been made into these allegations, but the idea of human-pokémon hybrids is now loose in the world as a conspiracy theory, a sci-fi trope, the stuff of children's make-believe. It grips people - the idea of a crossbreed between ourselves and pokémon, the concept of synthetic life, the thought that we might no longer be alone as intelligent beings on our world.

    In truth, we have never been alone.

    Pokémon intelligence aside, the hybrid life-forms, also known as 'pokémorphs,' are the third kind of sentient life, and we now share our world with them. Yes, 'life-forms,' plural. Many have been created, and more are being made even now. Only, they are no longer being cloned from fossilised DNA. They are being made from living, breathing pokémon, transformed through our innovations. It should not be surprising to learn this. There are plenty of volunteers.

    After all, what pokémon wouldn't jump at the chance to become a person?

    -Excerpt from address to the Perihelion board of directors, Q2 2016
  3. unrepentantAuthor

    unrepentantAuthor A cat who writes stories



    Before she was a person, Salem was a cat.

    If only she weren't a cat. If she were a human she would never have been crouched half-starved under a car at night, enduring winter rain and winter cold and winter darkness. She'd have a home, or the money to pay for sanctuary and a voice to ask for it. Instead she was a feline pokémon - a purrloin - and she would have to resort to using a pokémon shelter if she wanted to be somewhere safe and warm. There was a problem with that idea, though. Shelters fed you, but they also tried to get you adopted. And Salem didn't want that. And she never would.

    She wanted food, warmth, a roof above her head, and after that she didn't know. She curled her tail tighter around herself, and glanced anxiously at the various flitting shadows and wind-buffeted leaves that haunted the pavements and the park across the road from her. Eventually she'd be hungry enough to try hunting in the park again, or rummage through someone's trash for scraps of meat. But not yet. Not quite.

    If Salem were human, she'd be well-fed and warm. If she were human, she'd be with Laura.

    Salem first wished to be human many seasons ago, when Laura refused to let Salem come with her to school. College policy didn't permit pokémon on the premises, so when Laura left for her first day back at school after their first summer together, Salem stayed home. And waited. And wished. She'd wished every day since, for so long now that she'd begun to think of herself as pre-human, only a pokémon while she waited for the day she evolved. She would become human when she evolved, she knew. It was destined.

    For now, she was a small, shivering, dark-furred pokémon, and the most human thing about her was her ability - the privilege of all purrloin - to walk short distances on her hind legs. Having their front paws free made purrloin excellent thieves, a skill which Salem was happy to employ to obtain food. It was easy to walk into a shop and walk out with a bag of dried jerky, so long as you never tried it a second time.

    Otherwise, she was typically feline. She had a dappled tortoiseshell coat, (meticulously maintained, even now), a warbling miaow with a quizzical inflection, and the talent of appearing without a sound at the rustling of food packets. Not so useful without a home and a bed and a human carer.

    The memory of such things hurt, and provoked low growls in Salem's throat. These were things she'd had and then lost. It hurt, not just from her discomfort in their absence, but from the memory of their loss. Salem knew, somewhere deep inside her feline brain, that she was here, now, because of that loss. So she allowed herself to remember it - fuzzy as her memories always were - because if she forgot it, she might let herself go home.

    At the time, she remembered only hazy impressions, emotions, desires. Later, of course, her memories came into focus as if adjusted on a camera. Although Salem only clearly recalled these things as a person, they were still buried in her mind as a purrloin.

    Salem would never remember what the weather had been like the morning of that day, not because of her purrloin brain, but because she hadn't looked. It rained later on, but it could have started out sunny or been overcast from the beginning, for all she knew. She would be frustrated forever by this, but it had simply not been part of her routine to sit by a window until after Laura went to school. Cats like routine, and Salem's had been important to her.

    That day began routinely. Her eyes opened at dawn, she stretched luxuriously, and she nudged a reluctant Laura out of bed in hopes of her drowsily squeezing a packet of food into Salem's bowl. Her previous meal of this kind had been chicken in jelly, a favourite of hers, and she'd spent the day before clinging to the memory of how it had tasted.

    She wolfed down her salmon while Laura made herself crumpets. Salem prized her regular meals, but supplemented them with as many stolen or begged treats as possible. She had made the sign for 'food' so many times over many seasons that, even now, she did it on reflex when hungry: tilt head, reach paw above head, curl paw, paw to mouth.

    Laura usually gave her a treat or two for signing this before she left for school, but on this occasion, she took a new bag out of the drawer, and left it there unopened. Perhaps she had been distracted while Salem signed [FOOD] several times. Still, she cuddled Salem goodbye as normal, and called her a sweet cat. Salem purred boisterously and waited until the front door closed to tear open the unsecured bag of treats with her teeth and gorge herself silly.

    Salem spent school days like this waiting for Laura to come home. Laura's parents were usually out most of the day and generally took their pokémon with them, so she had the house to herself. She used this freedom to laze about uninterrupted. She had plenty of naps, mostly spent sprawled out in that one spot on the kitchen counter, where the updraught from the tumble-dryer kept her warm. From there, she watched taillow in flight and dreamed of pokémon battles and of a future with Laura in which they went on grand adventures. Sometimes in Salem's dreams, she was not the pokémon, but the trainer. Human or purrloin, she was always Laura's partner in her dreams. (Later, curled under vehicles and hedges to sleep, Salem's dreams never featured such a partnership, and she was always, always human.)

    Laura didn't come home that day until much later than she was supposed to. This was happening more and more often each moon, and she already came home later than she used to. Salem managed to enjoy her time alone by keeping to a routine and sleeping heavily, but by late afternoon she was restless. Restless Salem would pace through the house in endless loops, groom herself and groom herself again, and scratch doors and furniture over and over until her claws hurt.

    Of course, nobody was around to see her behave like this, and her claw-marks were indistinguishable from years of previous gashes.

    When Laura finally came home, it was early evening. Salem jumped up on the stand by the door, like always, to receive scratches behind her ears, like always.

    "Hello, silly cat," Laura said, like always.

    Salem's habitual reply to this was to turn her left paw pad-upward and curl it inward, approximating a human beckoning gesture, and then brush her own cheek. This was as communicative as she could manage in standard pokésign. She'd signed [WELCOME HOME] as best she could, like always. She was really good at signing that, after years of practice. Other than that and 'food,' her signing was stilted, and her vocabulary painfully limited.

    Laura went straight to heat up a meal for herself, with Salem sprawled on top of the microwave, soaking up the warmth and purring to match the vibrations. Then Laura forked out half a can of food for Salem, and took it to her room so Salem could eat nearby her as usual. Laura found an episode of 'Gotta Catch 'em All' on her laptop and played it while they ate.

    It was Laura's favourite show, so of course it was Salem's too. Laura once spent a moon mimicking the voices of the pokémon characters, who would only speak in their species names rather than realistic sounds or with pokésign. Laura said it was too expensive to animate pokésign, and the show was only a marketing tool to sell pokéballs anyway. Salem had no idea what that meant, but certainly the show taught Laura a great many species names despite being unabashedly fantastical. Salem couldn't have signed [P-I-K-A-C-H-U] if she tried.

    Even more fancifully, the show featured a villainous but endearing meowth, who had taught himself to speak English. At least every other episode, he was shown wearing clothes, working a job, or using tools. Salem thought he was practically human. He didn't have a name, he was just "Meowth," but he was still their favourite character. Laura used to encourage Salem to copy his example, and was only a little disappointed when Salem could only miaow, purr and chirrup. At least her miaows sounded a little like "meowth." Salem persisted in private for several moons, until with much frustration, she gave up on ever speaking a word. She never quite forgot her dream of talking to humans in their own tongue.

    After the show, Salem expected to curl up by Laura's side and listen to her read stories, like she always did. Laura tickled Salem's chin and signed [NO] with her free hand. "Sorry, kitten. I've had a long day and I still have homework to do! There was some big news today, too. Let's just chill, shall we?"


    But Salem's outrage didn't stop Laura from moving her laptop to her desk and getting to work. This would not do. Laura tried to do whatever 'homework' was so important, but Salem kept butting her head against Laura's leg, and miaowed raucously, until her human finally relented. Laura clambered into bed, leaning against the headboard, and opened the anthropology magazine that they'd started reading the night before. Salem manoeuvred her way into the crook of Laura's arm and gazed wide-eyed at the photographs as Laura read the accompanying text.

    Salem spent all day every day waiting for this. Each night, without fail, Laura would read to her about countless subjects, from the natural world, to human history, to pokémon battles. With each bedtime reading, Salem would snatch a new truth, each one more precious than the last. There were great forests across the ocean still untouched by humans and their cities. People had once lived in caves and hunted with sharpened sticks, without microwaves and lamps and books to use. Humans could form bonds with their partners that made them more powerful than any wild pokémon.

    At night, Salem would churn these ideas over and over in the mill of her mind, trying to grasp the big picture, to form a proper understanding of the world, and always having it slip away from her. She hoped that by learning everything Laura could share with her, that, like Meowth, she could teach herself to be more human. Being human meant never having to be bored and alone again.

    Even when Laura became exasperated with her insistence and her questions, like she was now, Salem remained desperate to drink up every word, on any topic. Eventually, of course, Laura tired of reading. It didn't take so long this time.

    "Salem, I'm done. Seriously, I still have way too much to do."

    [WHAT?] signed Salem, cocking her head and chirping uncertainly.

    "Mostly uni applications. Plus my normal work. And I got home late, too, so, just, ugh. Basically ugh."

    That meant nothing to her. She cocked her head the other way and chirped again. If she did that, Laura would know to explain in a way she understood.

    Laura groaned, and spoke with care. "Okay, so it's like this. Uni is school that comes after school. And I have to do a lot of work so that I can go to uni. Because if I go to uni, then when I'm done, I can get a better job."

    Salem kept cocking her head. She didn't know how to ask "but what about our adventure? Why are you doing this and not that?" so she just signed [TRAINER] in desperation, mimicking the overarm throw that humans used to release a pokémon from their ball at range.

    "What? Trainer? No, Salem, sweetheart." Laura brushed her dark hair from her face, which she always did when saying something important, and gently stroked Salem's cheek fur, which she always did when was about to disappoint her. "I'm not going to be a trainer. You need to start young to do that professionally, and have the right support, and I didn't, and I don't." She signed some of the key ideas as she spoke. [NO TRAINER. I CAN'T.]

    [TRAINER!] Salem signed again, harder this time. Her tail thrashed anxiously.

    "No, kitten. I can't just run away and battle with you. I don't have the money. I don't have my parents' permission. I don't want to, really. It's one of those things - kids all play at pokémon training, but barely any of them actually run the League circuit when they turn whatever age. It's like how loads of kids want to be astronauts, but there's only like, two astronauts from the UK. I think. Pokémon training is… I'm not meant for it. Those playground battles we had with other kids never meant we were going to travel the world doing it seriously. I'm going to study finance, cause Mum says I can work anywhere after that…"

    But the words didn't mean anything to Salem. She didn't understand 'money' even after all Laura's previous explanations. She didn't understand 'permission' or 'astronauts' or 'meant for it'. She didn't understand why Laura didn't care, didn't want this, didn't yearn for their shared adventure the way she always had.

    She signed helplessly, every piece of communication a continuous struggle. Her paws and body gave her more range of expression than a serperior, or a lanturn, or worse, a voltorb with no extremities at all, but they were still nothing to a human's hands and face. Her vocabulary was stunted, too; pokésign only accommodated simple ideas. 'Yes, no, over here, I'm hungry, please stop.'

    It was difficult enough to think of what she wanted to say and more difficult still to find a way to say it. Under normal circumstances, she was constantly distracted by the temperature, ambient sounds, loose threads of clothing. Even when focused as she was now, she could never hold more than one, maybe two ideas in her head at once.

    When asking about their future adventures went nowhere, she tried to ask something else - [I COME WITH YOU?] - not difficult to sign, but difficult for her to ask with her hopes so recently discarded.

    "Salem, pokémon aren't allowed in halls, honey. I might have roommates that don't want pokémon around. 'Roommates,' that's like, friends who I live with, I mean. You'll have to stay home. I'm sorry, kitty."

    Roommates. Friends who Laura lived with, instead of Salem. Laura already spent so much time with friends without Salem, now Salem would always be without Laura.

    She tried to ask if she would see Laura - if there would be visits - and miaowed her general distress.


    "What? Oh, of course I'll come see you! Everyone comes home from uni for winter holidays."


    "Every year, yes! Don't worry, I'll come back!"

    But not every day. Not enough to stop Salem pacing and grooming and scratching for days on days on days.

    It was hopeless.

    Laura evidently agreed, because after a few minutes of this, her alarm went off and she said "That's enough. Really. I really have to do my work, so please, please leave me alone." She took off from the bed and threw herself into her desk chair, headphones on, fingers tapping at the keyboard.

    Normally, Salem would have lain down by the laptop's fan for warmth, or batted at Laura's fingers, or walked in front of the screen for attention.


    'Leave me alone,' Laura had said.

    She had never said that before.

    So Salem left her alone.

    She slunk out of the room, went out the flap into the back garden, and left Laura behind. She could never quite explain why, only that she couldn't stay after that, and that she couldn't go back even when she was desperate for tinned food and packets of treats.

    It had been moons since, but the time between then and now was unimportant. The only important day was today. Today Salem would muster up the nerve to go to the pokémon shelter and ask for help. The time spent cold and afraid - that didn't matter. What mattered was no longer being cold or afraid, or hungry, or vulnerable, or tired, or lonely.

    If only she were human.

    Being human meant never being cold and hungry again.
    Last edited: Jun 11, 2018
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  4. Chibi Pika

    Chibi Pika Stay positive

    Hey! I actually think I remember this. Mostly because of the title, because it's calling up memories of a banner with like, a bunch of different Pokemon eyes on it. And also because this was (and still is) the only example I've seen of a Pokemon becoming a morph rather than a human becoming a morph. It's great to see that you've picked it up again! I know how hard it is to start writing after leaving a fic dormant for so long.

    I really like how well you tread the line between making Salem very cat-like, with her wants and behaviors and difficulty understanding things like money and college, and yet very clearly not an animal, with her complex emotions, signing, understanding human speech, and wanting to be a human. It's a nicely grounded approach that feels definitely "Pokemon", as opposed to just a colorful animal or a furry human. It's easy to feel how torn she is, adamantly not wanting to go home because Laura isn't there, but not wanting a new home with new humans instead, not really knowing where to go and not having the agency to do what she really wants, and I feel it's that lack of agency that's at the heart of her desire to be human.

    It'll be interesting to see how she gets caught up in the Pokemorph project, so I'll check back from time to time to see where this goes. And once again, welcome back!

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  5. Marika_CZ

    Marika_CZ Well-Known Member

    Nice! My favorite Pokémon fanfic will be always the one with interesting OC and some sort of new take on the creatures we so love (or the world they inhabit).

    I haven't been reading fanfic for long so I am not familiar with this story, but I sure like it. Especially that Real World spin on being Pokémon trainer. If Pokémon were real, I am fraid many of us would end up like Laura.

    You described the Salem's past and feelings nicely. The first chapter made me root for her. Looking forward to Chapter Two!
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  6. diamondpearl876

    diamondpearl876 → soul sick.

    Yo! So, this is certainly different from the original Different Eyes opener, eh? I remember Salem waking up with amnesia, and either being found by other PokéMorphs just like her or running into them shortly into the chapter. It was almost reminiscent of a PMD setting fic, except it defied all my expectations there. Don't know if I'm off base with my memory, but in any case, this version takes the focus away from the PokéMorph aspect (so far) and the worldbuilding exposition in favor of Salem's character. I dig it.

    It's interesting that you separate animals and Pokémon entirely. Usually, they're depicted as creatures that evolved from animals, just as humans did from animals, but really, categorizing them among more fantastical beings makes sense in comparison. Your take on Pokémon having special "energy" as opposed to humanlike sentience and consciousness makes sense and separates this fic from others. It also only makes the fact that "a third kind" - presumably PokéMorphs, the combination of humans and Pokémon - more interesting, as it implies two very separate creatures are going to play into it rather than two types of creatures with some past evolutionary history.

    Anyway! Onto Salem herself. I love the choice of Purrloin and all the catlike behaviors she displays. So adorable, learning about the quirks she has and how she interacts with Laura. Laura's got some depth herself already without her even being the focus, so kudos there, too. :D Oh, I quoted this part in particular because the writing style was stunning. Flowed well and the language is perfect and it hits you hard by the end. This is exactly how I remember your writing style, haha. It's nice to see it again.

    I wasn't sure what to make of the attempt at explaining Pokémon speaking this way in the anime, but you know what? It works. Tidbits like this are so fun to see in fanfic, haha.

    And I have a feeling Salem's going to be very, very disappointed at some point in the fic. This isn't true at all.

    Never really thought of it this way. Still, breaks my heart to see Salem struggling so hard to communicate, then kind of succeeding but also getting shut down hardcore anyway. And she doesn't even understand how badly she's getting shut down, just knows Laura said no and that sadness ensues. Bah.

    I... don't really have criticism for you, other than perhaps the prelude sounded a tad lecture-y and stiff in comparison to the actual first chapter, except then I saw it was an excerpt from an official speech given by someone. I'd probably not have been offput by it if that explanation was put right at the beginning rather than the end, but could just be me.

    Till next time!
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  7. unrepentantAuthor

    unrepentantAuthor A cat who writes stories

    To all of you, please PM me if you'd like to be added to a subscription list.

    @Chibi Pika Thanks so much for giving this your attention! I checked, and I never replied to your last comment on the old edition - the only review the last chapter got, in fact. I appreciate it! Also, you're right about the distinctive banner, but the same artist has been kind enough to make me this slick new one. What do you reckon? :p I'm glad Salem comes across as being distinctly pokémon, as she is certainly neither animal nor human. I'm also glad you picked up on the agency theme, as that's actually a big deal for the fic and it should already be clear.

    @Marika_CZ Thanks for your review! I hope that my OCs and takes on the setting continue to impress. Don't worry about being familiar with the story, it's a complete rewrite from the ground up, and Salem even changed species somewhere during the design process!

    @diamondpearl876 It certainly is different! I decided that opening the story with Salem already a morph would never be completely satisfactory, and that the whole point is for her to change drastically. So I have to write her as a cat! I can't believe I didn't see this to begin with. I actually have an in-setting reason for the existence of pokémon, but it won't be addressed for a long time yet! Animals have to exist, I feel, to sustain a sensible ecosystem., but they don't need to feature much. I'm glad you love my style! I personally think it's less dry and stilted than it was six years ago, but it's nice that the 'spark' is apparently the same. Salem certainly will be disappointed, don't you worry~ I'm pleased you managed to find something to criticise despite my intensive editing efforts, it makes your glowing praise sound sincere! ;D Cheers, and I truly hope to keep your interest as a regular reader!

    Thanks to you all! New chapter up in a few minutes. I've had a hell of a time the last few weeks, but rest assured I intend to post two updates by the end of each month.
  8. unrepentantAuthor

    unrepentantAuthor A cat who writes stories


    Salem watched the front window of the local pokémon shelter from the scant canopy of leaves she was hiding in - several shrubs clustered in the grassy median beside a small car park. It wasn’t ideal. She had to press herself low to the ground, which was damp, cold, and shared with worms and insects. Her fur was dark and the winter sun was already retiring, so this hiding place would keep her well out of sight. Yet, it hardly felt like safety. The short flights of the winter sun and her ability to hide at its setting were not a nightly reassurance, but a reminder of all the other pokémon that could be stalking her from the same darkness.

    The moon came out from behind the clouds, and briefly lit up the terrain. Salem shrunk back further into the greenery and glowered at it. Its illumination may have been a comforting constant from inside a house, but now it made her visible, and therefore vulnerable. It occurred to her that the moon had lived two full lives since she’d last eaten a proper meal. Slept on furniture. Been petted.

    The moon withdrew behind cloud cover, and darkness returned. The pokémon shelter was brightly lit from inside, which gave her perfect vision of the interior. There was one human inside. A young man. After studying him for a few days, Salem felt she could read him well. He was a calm person, never moving suddenly or crying out. She liked that. She had begun to wait for a time when she was certain that nobody else but him was about. If she approached the shelter with only him present, she’d be less vulnerable. Or maybe she was only waiting because she still needed to work up the nerve.

    The first few nights she’d done this, a silver-tabby glameow tom had come to join her. He’d taken a perch on the wall around the car park, posed like a sphinx, watching her openly from his exposed position without regard to his own concealment, let alone hers. On one of these nights, he seemed to taunt her. A low, strained miaow, certain subtle flicks of his ears and tail. [BAD HUNTER.] An accusation.

    She replied with mirrored gestures and a turn of the head. [NOT HUNTING.]

    A brief, shrill chirrup, a certain blink: [YES, THAT’S IT.] By this he meant, “exactly, a good hunter would be hunting right now.” Perhaps he was actually trying to be helpful, but even so he only managed to raise her hackles.

    Salem focused her attention on the shelter rather than on him, and he seemed to lose interest for a time, only to return not long after with a dead mouse, freshly caught. The glameow offered her the first bite, nudging the morsel towards her with his nose. She looked away. At the time, she hadn’t understood her position. She hadn’t been ready to trade pride for food. He persisted a little while, before finally eating the mouse himself within earshot, punctuating each crunch with small growls of enjoyment that made Salem’s belly growl in kind. As he did this, the shelter lights went out. That was Salem’s cue to leave.

    Every time Salem got up off her haunches to turn away from the shelter, her stomach stabbed at her resolve. When she’d spurned the mouse it had been bearable. Now, she’d been doing this for days and it was a constant gnawing in her gut. There were never enough hunting or scavenging opportunities to keep her strength up. She had made no allies. She had found no home. She wished she had not turned down the glameow tom, for perhaps she would have had several more meals, by now. Food, but also a friend. Sooner or later she would walk through that door and face whatever consequence awaited, or she would give up on ever walking in and eventually meet an unambiguously grim fate.

    Tonight the human in the shelter was doing his peculiar ritual with the machine at the front desk. Soon he would start turning the lights off. Last chance to go to him tonight. Last chance before another cold and hungry sleep. Somewhere in the street, she was sure the eyes of another local feral pokémon were trained on her. Last chance.

    Salem emerged from under the bushes and approached the shelter door, feeling the moon’s light on her fur like teeth. She reached the door and got up on her hind legs to push it open. It shook, but remained closed. She pushed again, and her paws slipped, so she scrabbled at the glass indignantly. The human didn’t notice, so she miaowed; her voice was strained and squeaky in her ears.

    Finally, the human spotted her. He watched her for a second, rubbed one eye, and got up to let her inside. The moment the gap was large enough to accommodate her whiskers, she bounded indoors and up onto the front desk, where she crouched defensively with her chin against her paws. The young man scratched his neck as he appraised her from one angle, then another.

    “Well, you’re an unhappy looking thing,” he said at last.

    Salem made a noise of discomfort and frustration. A tilt of her head and a ‘grabbing’ gesture from above her head down towards her mouth - [FOOD] - communicated her first need in hasty, dramatic pokésign.

    “What’s that? Oh, right.”

    The human set to work finding her a clean bowl and some food. She considered signing not to bother with the bowl, but it would take too long to make herself understood. Instead, she wailed incessantly until the food was ready. Within several breaths, he’d found her some jellied meat chunks, into which she shoved her head to wolf down before he’d even let go.

    “Wow,” he said. “A purrloin, huh? You know, normally when we get new arrivals, they come with a person handing them to us. You’re gonna make my paperwork pretty difficult, friend.”

    She ignored him, paying all her attention to the food. When she was done, she looked up at him with broad pupils, intent on getting more, but he shook his head, smiling. Like most humans, he smiled with his eyes too far open. Laura knew to close her eyes properly.

    “I’ll get you some more food in a minute, Purrloin, but if you eat too much all at once after going hungry, it’ll disagree with you.”

    Salem didn’t quite believe the excuse, but she could wait for more food. She twitched an ear, pushed her head towards him: a gesture which meant, more or less, “Who are you?”

    “Oh, my name’s Jamie. I’m in charge of this place, more or less. You, uh, know what this is, right? You didn’t just turn up at random?”

    A nod, and a paw gesture. [YES.]

    “Oh right, good. Okay. Well, I can let you sleep here and I’ll give you food but first I’ll have to give you a check up, register you as best I can, that sort of thing. You got a microchip?”

    ‘Microchip’? The sounds were familiar. She guessed the answer.


    “Huh. Gotcha. That’s a welcome surprise. I guess you don’t have a pokéball?”

    She shook her head. An awkward movement for her, but humans always understood it.

    Jamie hummed to himself, and fetched some papers from a drawer in his desk. As he sat and wrote on them, he let Salem smell his hand. Jamie smelled of pokémon, mostly. All kinds, but especially feline and canine. Also, food. Soon, Salem had persuaded Jamie to feed her another bowl - fish, this time - and he’d scanned her chip.

    “Salem, huh? Good name for a black cat, I guess. Or black-white-and-tan, close enough. A witch’s cat, named for a town of witches.”
    Salem didn’t really understand, but those were definitely colour words. He was describing her for some reason. She flicked both ears back and forth as she ate. [OKAY.]

    “Looks like you belonged to a Laura Weir. Ring any bells?”

    [YES,] she replied. Her tail flicked in dissatisfaction. [UNHAPPY.]

    “Yikes, okay. I won’t ask. But I still have to do my job, just so you know. I can skip calling up this Laura if you really don’t want me to, but I still have to do my best to get you adopted. I hope you’re okay with that.”

    Her tail kept twitching in protest, but she signed her assent. [OKAY. UNHAPPY.]

    Jamie sighed, but he gave her a closed-mouth smile and blinked slowly at her like he was supposed to. She wasn’t ready return that gesture of trust, but it did make her feel a little better, so she stopped eating long enough to bow her head for a breath’s span: [THANK-YOU.]

    “Hey, no problem. It’s my job to take care of you, after all.”

    When Salem had finished her food, Jamie yawned and put his pen down.

    “I’m too tired for this, Salem. Normally I’d be home by now. Let’s get you to sleep.”

    Jamie’s idea of a nest for her wasn’t a comfortable spot on a bed, but one of the many padded mats in the shared room behind his desk. Most of the mats already had pokémon occupants, generally small mammals, but also some birds and reptiles. She’d never shared a sleeping space with anyone but Laura. She wasn’t ready to be unconscious around other pokémon yet.

    While Salem peeked inside out of simple curiosity, a fluffy white rockruff spotted her, and was immediately wagging their tail and perking their ears. Alert, agitated. A threat display? She backed away, her tail quivering uncertainly.

    “It’s okay, Salem. He’s making friends!”

    Friends? She wasn’t sure Jamie was right. But she could try. She signed friendly intent, or something like it, blinking slowly and holding her tail up. The rockruff let out a couple of muffled ‘woofs’, not barking so loud as to wake any sleeping pokémon, but loud enough to startle her.

    She growled her disapproval, and nimbly darted out of Jamie’s potential reach, hissing sharply when he approached. After a round of ineffective persuasion and cajoling from the human and insistent, defensive pokésign from her, he relented. He sighed, his hands on his hips.

    “Look, I’m not taking you home with me, no matter how much fuss you make. So I’m going to let you stay in the storefront with some water and a basket, but only if you promise not to mess with anything until I’m back tomorrow, alright?”

    That was too many words. She tilted her head to make Jamie explain.

    He did, carefully: “You can stay here. In this room. But you have to promise to behave. Okay?”

    She tried to remember the movements she needed. Hesitantly, she tried them out. Paw to her mouth, then down to her chest. [PROMISE.]

    Of course, a promise made like that didn’t count for anything.

    She was given a spot for her sleeping mat on the front desk. Jamie’s gaze lingered on her when he locked the door, his non-feline expression difficult for her to interpret. She met his stare evenly until he turned away, climbed into his car, and left. She had the night to herself at last, it seemed.

    A soft chirruping call from behind her sent her whirling into a fierce stance, hackles raised. Her would-be opponent made no such aggressive overtures. Salem was facing a long, lithe creature with cream and violet fur, alert eyes, prominent whiskers. Long, flowing fur hanging down from the forelegs like over-sized sleeves. Female scent, and the scent of Jamie. Salem backed down. The mienshao waved one of her limp ‘sleeves’ at Salem and briefly rolled on the ground in a show of friendliness, and Salem acknowledged the gesture with a peaceable slow blink.

    Mienshao’s pokésign was extraordinary. Dextrous movements with her paws, subtle movements of ears and tail, easy mastery of accent-signs using whips of her fur sleeves. It was stunningly complex, hard to follow, and made Salem deeply envious. As Mienshao signed, she also vocalised in an eager chatter which Salem had almost no understanding of whatsoever.

    [I watch this place - I do this at night - at night humans are absent - I must care for pokémon - new pokémon like you who are here.]

    Salem could take care of herself from here. She tried signing back, ears flattening in concentration.


    [It is okay! - I will help you!]


    [This way - this way!]

    Either her articulation was more crude than she’d realised, or Mienshao was just oblivious.

    Not for the first time, Salem felt that even if she had a mienshao’s body, it still wouldn’t be enough for her. She did her best with what she had, but the thoughts in her head were more than she knew how to say even with pokésign as fluent as that. She was smart for a feline pokémon, or she thought so, but really she was only smart enough to realise how much was beyond her grasp. She had to strain to understand almost all of what humans said to her, living on best-guesses and uncertain interpretations. She tried all the time. Tried so hard to understand. And this mienshao probably understood so much more than she did without really trying.

    While Salem was staring into space, tail twitching in bitter exasperation, Mienshao had carried a small, cushioned basket into the storefront, and now offered it to Salem. It smelled offensively of mienshao musk, but it was still more comfortable than the mat. Salem supposed Mienshao must have a nocturnal routine, not that it mattered. She seized the gift, kneading the cushioning eagerly. Mienshao chirruped her delight and went on to bring her a water bowl and litter tray. She hadn’t used a tray in seasons; Laura’s family had a garden she’d usually gone in. Given the peculiar smell, she could figure out the idea.

    A couple of the other pokémon in the shelter tried to get her attention by vocalising or signing things to her through the doorway, but she turned away, curling up tight. They could wait. She didn’t want to talk, only to rest, and let the warmth of the shelter sink into her bones a little. There were some aches in her body she hadn’t even noticed were there until they’d already begun to subside. In Mienshao’s basket, Salem drifted off within a few short breaths.

    She had shallow, fitful dreams, interrupted frequently by the sounds of traffic or of other pokémon, and filled with distorted memories, running, and hiding. When she woke from a dream about a fight - not a battle for fun, but for survival - she did not return to sleep. It was the deep night, what Laura had always called the witching hour.

    Salem soon found herself sat at the front window, staring out at the moon, thinking that it, at least, was constant and sincere. She felt as if she were not truly experiencing that moment in person, but simply recalling some extraordinarily vivid memory. The moon shone as if to seek out her eyes alone, and her eyes welcomed it. No matter how her life changed, she would always have the moon.

    But she only had the moon until dawn, even the late dawn of the winter sun.
    Last edited: May 19, 2018
  9. Marika_CZ

    Marika_CZ Well-Known Member

    Aw, nice character devolepment. I feel a bit sorry for Laura. I can see why Salem is disillusioned, but her human partner must have been worried sick.

    This chapter nicely sets up the fact that Salem is really not happy with her life as a Pokemon and explains how come she is heading to such a drastical change that was forshadowed in the very first sentence of Ch1.

    I agree. I wonder how is @unrepentantAuthor going to explore that, and where they take it after we get to the part where transformation actually happens.

    Great job so far and looking forward to Ch3!
  10. unrepentantAuthor

    unrepentantAuthor A cat who writes stories

    Sorry for the last-minute update, I've been having a hell of a time. I might have to reduce the update frequency to once a month if things don't improve, but I'll continue to do the best I can. Enjoy, and as always, feedback of any kind, however critical or however brief, is most welcome.


    Salem woke from another dream in which she had been a human, only to find she was still a purrloin, for now.

    In this dream, she had been unable to speak, only to sign falteringly as she already did. She distracted herself from the memory of it by searching by scent for the mienshao, who she found curled up on a shelf between pokémon products, napping soundly. She considered curling up there as well, but she didn’t know how well Mienshao was likely to take it.

    When Jamie returned in the morning, Salem was waiting on the front desk, grooming herself. Her swishing tail betrayed her restlessness, but it perked up as he approached. He acknowledged her cheerfully, and when he reached out to stroke her head she did not shrink back, hoping for the first gentle scratching around her ears in moons. Instead, he tickled her chin - this was new, it was different, most of all it wasn’t as good! She tensed up around her shoulders as she warily accepted his peculiar affection.

    It was still good to be petted again.

    “We’ve got some visitors later on,” he told her, “so don’t be surprised by them! People who work here, people dropping off strays like yourself, maybe guests who might want to take you home with them.”

    She growled at this.

    “One weird one too,” he continued unabashed. “There’s this woman who booked a slot for later today who says she’s interested in taking on as many pokémon as volunteer for her project, whatever it is. Something about pokémon research, I didn’t understand it. I’d rather get you back home, or else find you a new home, but maybe you’ll be interested in her, huh?”

    Salem couldn’t answer. How could she know if she’d be interested? She hadn’t met this human yet.

    Jamie went on, rubbing her flank in a way that was only slightly preferable to the chin-tickling thing. “Actually, lemme think. It was research, yeah. For sure. She’s trying to improve communication with pokémon, maybe even to find better ways for pokémon to live with humans. Working together outside of battling, I mean. That’s about the size of it anyway.”

    A pulse of anticipation shook her body. Had he said what she’d thought he said? She decided at once to pay careful attention once this person arrived. She couldn’t stay here, she knew that already. Staying here meant being pressured to let someone adopt her. That meant being left at home all day, obviously. This - she didn’t know what it sounded like, but it sounded better.

    Much better.

    At this point, she was still perfectly ignorant of the choice she was soon to make.

    The sun was still young when Salem finished her morning meal. Its lives were shorter each day. This winter dawn was feeble, not quite able to illuminate the trees and buildings visible from her spot on the reception desk. Clouds overhead threatened to stifle it further. To Salem, it was a sun struggling to be born. Struggling to change.

    Jamie soon released the other pokémon into a spacious yard behind the shelter to do as they pleased, but Salem stayed in the front room, as if by refusing to enter any other space in the shelter she could avoid committing herself being adopted, while still receiving the food and warmth which Jamie provided. At least until the person Jamie had mentioned arrived. Instead, she tailed him around the store and watched him work. He did a little to open the shelter’s storefront, but mostly he sat at his computer typing. Salem wished that she could read. It was a familiar wish, which flowed readily over the grooves in her brain where it had run before. Every time she wished to read, she wished harder. The grooves deepened. But she did not become literate.

    Jamie mistook her spying for friendliness at first, but realised she was wasn’t looking for attention when she batted his hand away with her paw so she could keep her eyes on his work as his fingers clattered away at the keys. She reached out and pressed a paw to the keyboard just to see what it felt like. Clack! Interesting. He smiled at her and shook his head.

    “What am I going to do with you, huh?”

    She made no sound, no sign. The shelter wasn’t quite real yet, but every word she heard from Jamie made it more so. Whenever he spoke, it was more familiar, more comforting. She didn’t know where she wanted to end up, but it wasn’t in another domestic home. It wasn’t here.

    “You know, I’m sure your owner would love to see you again.”

    She hissed at Jamie, baring her teeth for long enough to send a message.

    “Right, right. Fair enough.” Thus chided, Jamie went back to his work.

    More humans arrived sooner than Salem was ready for. She liked Jamie! Jamie was becoming familiar. These ones were all new and crowded around in the same space! When she lived with Laura she had avoided being around more than two humans at once - it was too many for her. She couldn’t do that now, so, she waited behind Jamie’s desk until they separated. Soon, the first was sent by Jamie to tend to the pokémon in the shared room, and the other to unpack and distribute new supplies and merchandise for the shelter.

    Salem followed the second human around as she stacked shelves, watching her work and studying her behaviour. She was more like Laura’s mother than like Laura, taller and stronger and more deliberate in her movements. She spotted Salem after a few minutes, and cooed her adoration, stopping to pet her. And this time - an ear scratching! Yes! Perfect! Salem leaned into it, purring like a motor.

    “Aw, Jamie, who’s this? What are they, a glameow?” called the human girl.

    “She’s a purrloin, Kelly! You can tell by the tail, she’s got that hook at the tip. Glameow have spiral tails.”

    “Ah, gotcha! Who’s a sweet little purrloin? Huh? You’re so pretty!”

    So, this human female was going to talk to her like that. That wasn’t ideal at all. Salem signed her objection: [STOP - LISTEN!]

    The girl turned to Jamie, frowning. “Hey, she’s signing now. What’s she signing?”

    Oh. This one couldn’t understand sign.

    “Can’t see from here! Don’t get distracted, Kelly.”

    “Oh, okay!”

    Never mind then. Wait, what was-

    The girl scooped Salem up without so much as a warning, and lifted the cat onto her shoulder. Unacceptable! Salem gave a shrill growl and leapt down, pushing off hard from her arm. She cried out in surprise, but did not pursue. Salem left her at a pace, already fretting that the other human might do something similarly startling.

    The boy who’d gone to tend to the other pokémon was coming back into the storefront now, apparently in search of Jamie. He looked much older to Salem - greying hair was a sign of ageing in humans, she knew that much - and when she sniffed at his feet she detected wet soil, and the pungent smell of garden fertiliser. She miaowed for his attention, and he looked down at her with his eyes narrowed.

    “James, one of the pokémon is in here. Is that allowed?” he asked, the deepness of his voice surprising Salem.

    “Sure! You can say hello if you like.”

    He stooped to hold out a hand for her to sniff, which was the proper way to do things. He stroked her head, not too hard. Good. This one was okay. She liked this one already.

    “Alright, pussycat, I’d best be on my way,” he said. And then he stood back up and headed off to the back yard.

    That was it?



    She could handle positive relations with Jamie, she decided. He was the reasonable one. The leader, rightly so. The others, his coworkers? Less familiar, unpredictable, likely to do something objectionable. All the more reason to keep to Jamie’s side. To this end, she allowed him to pet her chin occasionally, and did not bite him when it tickled. Sadly, he didn’t get the hint when she tried head-butting his fingers.

    More staff came to filter in past Jamie into the rest of the shelter. She signed to the ones with reassuring body language, and a white-coated vet even signed back for a minute, and signed well! But she was busy, and couldn’t stay. Jamie narrated some of what he and his colleagues did to Salem, as if he were compelled by the power of her curiosity alone to think aloud in her presence.

    “You know, we’ve got a lot of larger pokémon in the sheds out back. Biggest one is the mudsdale. We call him Clayton. He’s a big boy, he needs plenty of room. We don’t like to keep you guys in balls too much if we can help it. It’s not healthy, you know.”

    ‘You know,’ he kept saying. She did not know. She knew very little, in fact.

    “Salem, you really should stop pestering people with jobs to do. Go outside, there’s lots of friends to make out there!”

    No, she wasn’t ready for that. Humans were hard enough. Pokémon besides other cats would be even harder. But Jamie kept encouraging her to go out back and socialise, and she kept refusing. Eventually, he went that way himself, hoping she would follow him. She resolved not to. She washed herself. She glared suspiciously at the girl stacking shelves. She quickly became bored. And finally, she relented.

    There were a few pokémon still in the indoor commons, some sleeping, some watching from high perches, the rockruff chewing privately on his favourite toy. He looked up from his treat and whined plaintively at Salem, tail wagging. She wondered whether he actually knew any pokésign. Perhaps he was only a pup and hadn’t learnt any yet. He was very small after all. The thought that he might not know any sign was still somehow upsetting - how could she make herself understood to him? How would humans manage to interpret his needs?

    [FRIENDLY,] she signed.

    The rockruff just cocked his head, clueless. The other pokémon here were uninterested in interaction, it seemed. They didn’t respond to her miaows or signs, as a rule. A large, beige-scaled lizard - a helioptile, maybe? - signed a crude [SLEEP] at her before closing their eyes and drifting off again beneath a heat lamp. Maybe all the sociable pokémon went outside during the day.

    Salem gave up on them and walked past the rockruff pup to the yard. There, she saw a multitude of pokémon running, playing, grooming each other. A furret was chasing an aipom around the circumference of the grass, apparently for the sheer joy of it. She realised at once that she hadn’t the faintest idea how to approach any of them. She knew how humans worked, she knew how battles worked, she even vaguely knew how territory disputes worked, more or less. But this was completely unfamiliar to her.

    She began by approaching another dog pokémon as he finished lapping water from a bowl just outside (she wasn’t sure of the species) and signing her friendly intent. He wagged his tail fervently and hunched up with his head against the ground, signing for playtime with his ears. Salem boxed his head lightly, experimenting, and he responded with mock-snaps near her head.

    They continued like this for a minute, their styles of play-fighting not quite matching up, before the dog - a herdier, that was the species! - gave up and rolled over, presumably in submission.
    Salem licked his head in peaceable fashion, but she knew she wouldn’t get any proper conversation out of him. What she really wanted was someone who would talk to her and even groom together (since getting a human to read something to her seemed impossible right now). But she didn’t see any other cats that were otherwise unoccupied. This could be a frustrating day, she realised.

    She checked for Jamie - he was grooming a piloswine with a fine comb. He’d be there a while, then. Good. Salem scanned the yard in hopes of finding another pokémon like mienshao. One who was more human-like in form and behaviour and therefore likely to know plenty of pokésign. She found one in the shelter of a barn at the far end of the yard, signing stories to a small audience of attentive pokémon huddled together against the massive flank of Clayton the mudsdale.

    The storyteller was a throh: a squat, stout, brick-red humanoid clothed in a white martial arts gi, something throh supposedly hand-crafted themselves. On his shoulder perched a chatot, a small and colourful bird, who alternately whistled accompanying tunes and voiced the narration in human words. The pronunciation was terrible, but Salem was awed. The throh grunted expressively as he signed, sometimes laughed at the reactions of his audience, and scratched illustrations in the dirt with his stubby fingers, his prodigious black brow furrowing with concentration. A couple of times he managed short human words, or approximations of them, but the chatot did most of the spoken work.

    Salem joined the crowd a little way off, and listened. She was hearing the tail-end of a story about how humans learnt how to make ‘strong stone’ from a tribe of conkeldurr many, many years ago. They must have meant concrete! The throh’s signing was not as elegant as Mienshao’s, but it was more careful, more articulate: [Afterwards, humans began to use strong stone to build a city, and then there were many cities, and then there were many humans to live there, now because of this the forest became smaller, and the pokémon did not thrive the way humans thrived.]

    The chatot chirped their rough translation, adding their own spin as the story continued. “What’s that? What’s that? Conkeldurr don’t like it, gonna tell ‘em off, naughty people, naughty people! People wanna have a cake and eat! Say, no no no! Don’t tell me what to do! Conkeldurr boss, he says, please be nice now! Gave you strong stone! People say, you conkeldurr boss, not the boss of me! Forgetting strong stone gift!”

    Just then, another shelter volunteer called to Jamie from the building - there was a particular visitor at the front door. He walked back inside and Salem ran back to follow him, unwilling to be left alone with the other pokémon just yet and eager to see this visitor, surely the one Jamie had told her about earlier.

    The visitor was indeed much different to the others. She carried herself differently, dressed differently - although Salem could not at the time quite pick up on exactly how. Alisha was young, female, and smelled mostly - almost entirely in fact - of pokémon, but also of things that Salem couldn’t place. She dressed very differently to humans Salem was used to, although at the time she didn’t consider that useful information. She had much, much longer hair and darker skin than the humans Salem was familiar with, too. There was something else, something not quite perceptible, in her eyes and her movement that Salem was sure was unique to her among humans. When she entered the shelter, she slow-blinked at Salem before talking to Jamie. Feeling immediately reassured, Salem returned the gesture. There could have been no better introduction for her.

    Salem couldn’t follow the human conversation perfectly. Jamie spoke clearly and simply enough for her to catch the gist, but Alisha talked fast and used words Salem had never heard before. She could make a stab at some of them, if she tried hard. She concentrated, and gleaned knowledge scrap by scrap: Alisha wanted pokémon who were different. Ones who should be somewhere other than here, who couldn’t be domestic pets or journey with a trainer. ‘Re-homing’ wasn’t quite ‘home’ and Salem only knew ‘work’ as Laura’s school books, but she knew ‘misfits’.

    Misfits was her.

    Jamie showed Alisha the pokémon outside, talking all the while, and Salem watched from the door as this unfamiliar human went forward to meet them. Alisha went from one, then to another, examining and speaking carefully to each of them in turn. She spent longer with the ones who signed back, and longest with the throh and chatot pair. Salem wanted to run over and be the next to sign to her - but she waited her turn to communicate with this human who took the time to use sign with pokémon.

    Once Alisha had spoken with all the pokémon that caught her interest she selected a few, calling to each of them to follow her. Salem sat with her tail at attention, quivering with anticipation as this strange human approached.

    “What about that one? The tortie purrloin,” Alisha asked.

    “Oh, that’s Salem,” replied Jamie. “She turned up last night all on her own. Nobody with her.”

    “Salem, huh? I’ve got a good feeling about her. How about it?”

    “I don’t know, I can’t really let you have her so soon, I haven’t given her a proper checkup or finished registering her or anything yet.”

    “We’ve got veterinary staff, so we’re fine for checkups.”

    “Still. Procedure. Actually, I’ve already emailed her previous owner earlier today and I’m waiting for a reply. Almost everyone wants their missing pokémon back, naturally, but I guess if I haven’t heard back in a week, it’d be okay to write them off and you could take her then.”

    “Can I at least ask, uh, Salem if she wants to come?”

    “I could be in trouble if her owner finds I’ve let her pokémon walk out the door, sorry. She stays. All the best to you, though!”

    “Same to you.”

    Salem felt as if she’d swallowed a gallbladder whole, bitter bile and all. Jamie had already contacted Laura. He wouldn’t let Alisha make her an offer. He wouldn’t let her go. Her lip pulled back to snarl at Jamie, but she stopped herself. It wouldn’t help her to scold him. She had a better idea. The idea was this: Alisha was surely soon to leave, and Salem could go with her, with or without Jamie’s permission. To ‘re-homing’ and ‘work’ and ‘misfits’. It wouldn’t be easy, though.

    The problem was this: Jamie wanted to keep her here for Laura to find. If she tried to follow Alisha out through the door, Jamie would certainly try to stop her. And Alisha might even help him, even while meaning well, because humans were just like that. They always, always chose what other humans wanted instead of what pokémon wanted. But if Salem could escape Jamie’s notice, maybe Alisha would take her with her. Salem needed another route to whatever life Alisha was offering, one that avoided Jamie entirely, and she had one. She’d studied the shelter carefully, and Jamie too. She knew how humans moved and perceived. She could do this. She began to make a plan.

    As she did so, Jamie fetched paper for Alisha to write on, and collected her chosen few in their balls and gave them to her along with a bag of supplies and more paper. Once Alisha was done writing, she said something quietly to the pokéballs, and blew on each of them lightly. The pokémon inside wouldn’t know she’d done that, but maybe the gesture was for her own benefit rather than for theirs. Then the humans kept talking, making light conversation in the way that humans did when they made their extended farewells. Salem had her plan now, fixed in her mind.

    The plan was this: The fence around the outdoor commons was high, but she had more determination than the fence had height. She could run silently through the indoor commons and out into the back yard, then vault the fence into the car park while Alisha was still loading her things into her car.

    Salem did all this without feeling Jamie’s attention on her, scarcely even being noticed by the other pokémon, and landing softly on the tarmac out front without a graze. She looked at the car, almost expecting to see it leaving the parking lot. Her breath caught. Alisha had left a window open. She leapt for the gap, paws clutching the rim of the car door, anxious with every second taken to pull herself up that Jamie might rush out and retrieve her.

    Jamie raised his voice. Did he see-?

    Salem tumbled into the car, ducked down out of sight. Winded. Alert. Her ears pricked for his approach.

    Nothing. Just laughter and human conversation.

    Minutes later, when Alisha drove away from the shelter, Salem was pressed flat against the floor of the car with her claws gripping the surface and her jaw tightly shut. Beneath her growing nausea, continuing stress, and the noise of the road, Salem thought about how Alisha had wanted to ask her to come. Ask, not demand. Someone like that would talk to her. Listen to her. Even treat her like a person. Whatever Alisha’s ‘work’ turned out to be, it would be worth toughing out the car ride just for that.

    She didn’t know it yet, but very soon, Salem would indeed be a person.
    Last edited: Jun 1, 2018
  11. Marika_CZ

    Marika_CZ Well-Known Member

    So - this is going to be a short review, because most of my feelings characters and plot wise are already summarized in my previous one(s). You are moving your pieces to the position hinted at in the first sentence of Ch1. We get more details on why Salem would end up doing something drastic (her personality, feeling like a misfit, running away from her past). Now it is just a matter of time and being given the final push.

    There is a new character emerging (at least I think; so far Alisha looks more like a plot device but I assume this is going to change once we get to know her more in future chapters), but can't comment on her since we know almost nothing about her - yet.

    So instead I will comment on two interesting points (that might or might not become more important later on):

    1. Laura - not sure if this is intentional (if so, well done!) or not. She has been barely mentioned since Ch1, which ironically makes it more chilling. What that girl must have gone through. First the disappearance, then when she finally is about to find Salem she will be too late. She must be heartbroken, scared, tired and possibly angry (I would be). None of this is mentioned, there is just this subtle reminder in one or two sentences per chapter that Laura still exists and therefore we will likely meet her again in the future (I will be seriously disappointed if we don't).

    2. Throh & Chatot's story - unless it was just a bit of worldbuilding, mind you. To me it read like a foreshadowing of a conflict between humas and Pokemon (especially since the story is about a pokemon who would rather be human or hybrid). It will be interesting to see how that ties into Salem's personal journey.

    Enjoying the story so far, looking forward to Ch4 :)
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  12. unrepentantAuthor

    unrepentantAuthor A cat who writes stories

    @Marika_CZ, thanks for reviewing! Short comments are still very much appreciated.

    The final push is coming soon and it's Alisha that gives it. She's a supporting character, but she'll stay relevant for a long time.

    Salem doesn't really have the cognitive capacity right now to mentally model that Laura is going to come to the shelter and discover her childhood partner pokémon has fled her once again. I chose to have Jamie contact her against Salem's wishes partly because Salem will realise this in hindsight, and because whether Salem meets Laura again or not, her former carer is going to cast a long shadow over her path to personhood.

    Many chapters in the future, they will meet again.

    Throh and Chatot will turn up again! I didn't specify that Alisha took them with her, but she totally did. The story about concrete is more of a folk tale based on a pokédex entry than anything in order to demonstrate that pokémon are capable of maintaining culture, but human impact on the environment and on pokémon will become a major theme of the story, yes.

    Thanks again, I hope to have the next chapter up soon!
  13. Chibi Pika

    Chibi Pika Stay positive

    Caught up now! And I gotta say, I am absolutely loving your approach to writing Poke-POV. It's so wonderfully inhuman, yet clever and relatable at the same time, with plenty of judgements and reasonings that wouldn't work if you were just writing an actual irl cat.

    I also appreciate the fact that while you have a protagonist that, until the end of chapter 3, didn't really have much of an idea of what she was doing or where she was going, she's still a very active character who's not content to let things merely happen to her. It was a lot of fun to see Salem interacting with other Pokemon, and the different ways that communication can get muddied across species lines. I especially liked the bit with Throh acting as storyteller and Chatot translating it into humanspeak.

    Looks like Salem is on her way to encountering the plot very soon! Here's where things are about to get real interesting...

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  14. unrepentantAuthor

    unrepentantAuthor A cat who writes stories

    Thank you for your feedback, @Chibi Pika! I'm thrilled to hear that you're enjoying the story so much, particularly parts which I especially enjoyed writing. (Throh and Chatot seem to be popular, which delights me.) Glad to hear that poké-POV and the communication theme are good - you're the first person to praise Salem's activeness as a protagonist, which is something of a relief to hear. The plot is on its way, don't worry - see you next update!
  15. unrepentantAuthor

    unrepentantAuthor A cat who writes stories

    Feral Salem doodle by @canisaries added to Chapter One. Thanks, mate!

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