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Umbreona (PG13)

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japala

Zephyr Trainer
Awesome yet sad. Thanks for pming me or else I wouldn't have known it was finished.
 
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Rene Bellosh

Guest
Ahh, it's good to see an author willing to make an ending bittersweet. In retrospect, the humans were quite nasty villians, with none of them having sympathetic qualities at all. :p The Pokemon also had believable and varied personalities, it was good how hatred of the humans varied among each of them. In the end, a good and dark take on the experiences of Pokemon caught for someone's collection. ;)

PS: The Human Race does rule the world. Go us! :D
 
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Dark Latios

Beautiful Tragedy
Reviewing as requested.

Very good fic (and sad ;_;). Your story had me on the edge of my seat, reading intently, and storing everything in my memory forever.

I couldn't help shedding a few tears for Even, Chupi, and all the others that perished in this story... I was hoping Even would live through it all and be with Umbreona. :'(

Anyway, I saw a few minor spelling errors here and there (mostly typos), nothing major though. ^^

Plot was well thought out, very unique indeed. The description was really good too.

Overall nice job. I hope to read more fics like this from you in the future!

*~Dark Latios~*
 
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Encyclopika

The Queen
Thank you, Dark Latios! When I found you at that thread, I knew you'd like it. ^^ Thanks again for you time...it was greatly appreciated! ^^
 
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kapslock

Well-Known Member
It was sad but you off Even! :sulks up in a courner: Anyway... it had a fair amount of description,to make up for it :D And you must have good imagination un Umbreon that changes color with emotion!WOW but i feel that
you forgot about some one... Oh yeah Greta! Steps a few steps to the left,
has Greta tied up to a chair,covers camra with hand, machine gun in other...
Bye-Bye Greta.
 
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Xiang

Well-Known Member
Get your *** outta here, pok*e. If you don't like this fic, butt out, because some people like it. We have opinions too, and I don't like the super happy endings all the time.
 
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Feleena

Guest
I really enjoyed this story. Though sad, it is an excellent tale. Poor Umbreona, Even, and Chupi... ;-; A shiny Umbreon's rings changing colour according to emotion was an original and good idea! My only complaint is how you spelled Even. All the Evans I know are spelled with an A, because with an E it's spelled the same way as even and it can be really confusing (which it was.) Anyway, great fic! *rates five stars*

~Feleena
 
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Encyclopika

The Queen
Wow! Thanks so much for your reply, Feleena! I know...I'm concious of how I spelt "Even's" name. Considering it's a Pokemon's name, the spellings are different. I wanted, in this story, you to pronounce his name as "EE-ven" instead of "EH-van". kk? Glad you liked it. ^^
Pok*e...>.> wow...bad day?
Burakki - thanks for sticking up for me. ^^ you are a good friend. ^^
 
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kapslock

Well-Known Member
yeah bad day Encyclopika :(. Sorry i flamed your fic. I was just mad that you killed "Even" off my favorite character :p. Your a greate autharess,and you really know how to put emotion in a fic,and how to keep a reader thinking.(No i am not sucking up im just telling you all the stuff that i maent to put up instead of a flame.And im sure you'v had a bad day too once in a while :).Sorry Again p.s. you wanna be friends?
Mabye you can teach me how to control my anger :D or you can give me tips on how to type up a good fic. But remember this is only if you want to ;)
 
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Xiang

Well-Known Member
It's alright pok*e, not too mention I forgot my P.E. uniform that day and I had no patience. >.<

It was indeed sad. I would love a sequel, but as long as you keep up Contest Tie I won't complain. ^^
 
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Reycom

Guest
Wow that fic rocked! Especially since you were able to read it to me in person luckily I'm your little brother, Ha ha I get speacial treatmeant lol. I felt so bad when Even died. But atleast he got a proper burial. As an author you did very well letting the people know the character so then when they die it means something. But I was glad that Umber evolved into a flareon my favoite Eve evolution. Awesome fic Encyclopika.
 
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mindripper

Guest
Nice perspective on how the supposedly smbiotic relationship between humans and pokemon is so liable to abuse. It almost seems that a pokemon, even though possessing more latent power, is submissive in nature, and a human would exploit that at times? Nice issues raised there, and I personally am glad for a bittersweet ending.
 
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Encyclopika

The Queen
Thank you for finally reviewing!
 
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mindripper

Guest
Well, I do remember. I just never really had the time to sit down and read through. I did think it was a little short, though. Try to add more chappies next time. You have my support, of course.
 
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Encyclopika

The Queen
It wasn't really supposed to be a great big thing. My "great big" fic is Contest Tie. Stories like this one and now Treehouse Saga, are ones I do off to the side when I need a break. Thanks for the support. ^^
 
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Nicole May

Meh... whatever...
Hmm, I seem to like this fic. It's already finished, but I'm not yet done reading it though... Read only a few chapters, but hey, the fan fic is fun to read.

It seems that this fan fic uses first person, with the mother being the narator and everything. Well, although first persons are amusing, since you get to know what is on that person's mind, the point of view is sometimes limited. It only focuses on what he/she has observed in the environment. Ah well, that's what I just see anyways. Don't mind me... o_O;;;

For now, I enjoyed this fanfic, a mother and sibling relationships! XD
 
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Encyclopika

The Queen
^Oh, boy, you're reading this one! ^^ Hope you enjoy it.
 
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