Urban Legends (The Short Stories) (Rated R)

[Kitt Kat]

These are Urban Legends that I have heard/made up, and written in more detailed story form with my own characters.

This is a work of fiction. All characters portrayed in this work are fictional and any resemblance to real people is purely coincidental. All websites, streets, etc. are not real, and do not exist.

Do not duplicate these stories without my premission. You may print them out, but you may not submit them as your own or to another forum.

All of these stories of oneshots, which mean the all characters will not be in the all the stories.

Enjoy.

Stories:

1: Hidden Needle
2: The Poodle

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Here is the first stort, 1: Hidden Needle

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Maria booted up her laptop, and went to a search engine. ‘movie listings’ She clicked the link, www.movielist.com.
“Could you hurry up?!” shouted Sally, Maria’s best friend.
“I’m going!” Maria yelled back. “You know, we don’t have the fastest internet…”

“Aha, here we go.” Maria said, touching the screen. “Nightmare Graveyard, 7 o’clock”
Maria looked at the clock. “It’s six thirty, we better go.” She shut off the computer and grabbed her purse. “Well, it’s about time!” said Sally sarcastically.

By the time they were at the theater it was six fifty. “Go get the popcorn.” Sally demanded as she walked to the claw machine. Maria made a sound of protest but stopped. She walked over to the refreshment stand.

Sally put fifty cents in the machine. She tried to grab a stuffed cat. It grabbed a hold of it, barely. “Yes!” she beamed. Then, it dropped. “No!” she yelled and kicked the machine. “Please try again, please try again.” The machine said in a robotic voice. “Try this.” She kicked it once more.

Maria walked up to Sally and said “Let’s go.”
“Yay!” Sally said happily as she grabbed her drink from Maria.

“This movie is going to be awesome.” Said Maria.
“I heard reviews, it was crappy.” Sally glared, then smiled.
“Here are good seats.” Sally said and pushed in front of Maria to get the seat she wants.
As soon as Sally sat down she yelped “Ouch!” She quickly stood up.
“What’s wrong?” Maria asked.
Sally looked mortified as she stared at the seat, saying nothing.
“What is it?” she asked looking at the seat closer.
She saw a note, with a needle sticking out, that said “Welcome to the HIV club.”

 

[Flaming Lip]

Hmmm... Interesting idea, though I'm afraid the delivery was lacking.

First off, its much to short. It has to be longer than 1 page on Word. But a good length for a chapter or one-shot is about 5-6 pages.

The writing style is a bit stingy. We need more description, what does Maria look like? What does Sally look like? Where did the first scene take place? And what does that place look like? What does the Movie Theater look like?

The ending was a bit strange. Not quite what I'd expect. Then again, Urban Legends tend to be a bit supprising. Or odd.

Anyway, I'm sure with effort, you can improve. G'luck! ^_^

 

[Kitt Kat]

Hmmm... Interesting idea, though I'm afraid the delivery was lacking.

First off, its much to short. It has to be longer than 1 page on Word. But a good length for a chapter or one-shot is about 5-6 pages.

The writing style is a bit stingy. We need more description, what does Maria look like? What does Sally look like? Where did the first scene take place? And what does that place look like? What does the Movie Theater look like?

The ending was a bit strange. Not quite what I'd expect. Then again, Urban Legends tend to be a bit supprising. Or odd.

Anyway, I'm sure with effort, you can improve. G'luck! ^_^

Oh, thank you.

This next story I think will be better.

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2: The Poodle


A white-haired, elderly woman, was walking her white poodle, Princess though the neighborhood. It was the day after a heavy rain, and she had thought things dried up. “Princess,” she said, tugging lightly on the white leash. “Wh—“

All of a sudden, an orange truck drives by and splatters mud, all over Rachel’s blue dress and Princess.
Princess, saturated in heavy mud, barked loudly at the truck.
“I’m sure it was an accident.” Rachel told her dog.
Princess kept barking, and Rachel slowly took out her dog whistle. Grinning, she blew into it.
The white dog yelped loudly. “Heh, heh. That’s better.”
“We better get home and clean this off.” She said, looking at the mud on herself.

Rachel ran a bath. She put bubble soap into it. She also let Princess stay in the bathroom. Rachel locked the door.
The bathroom wasn’t that great. It has, of course, a white sink, a white toilet, and a white bathtub. There was mold growing at the ceiling above the tub.

Rachel got into the tub and sighed. The water was very warm. She wets her short hair and gasps to see Princess on the ledge of the bathtub. “Get down, Princess! You migh—“
Rachel laughed as Princess fell into the bathtub.
She barked, wanting to get out. “Well, I might as well give you a bath right now.”

Rachel grabbed the shampoo bottle that said: Ocean Lily. She squirted it in her hair, not noticing the ‘Not tested on animals’ label, she squirted some on Princess.

First, she scrubbed Princess’s fur, knowing she might wash it off. Rachel scrubbed her body and her tail first, but then she noticed Princess tilting her head to the side, wanting her to scrub her ears. “Oh, I see.” She noticed and scrubbed her ears. Then, she rinsed the shampoo off. The mud came off nicely.

Next, Rachel washed her hair and body. They were ready to get out. Rachel first got out and grabbed a towel. She dried herself off and put on a white nightgown. Then, she got the puppy out.

She didn’t feel like drying her off, ‘Time is precious, it cannot be wasted.” That was her motto, so she walked out into the dull living room, looking for anything she might be able to use. Princess was leaking water off her fur, getting the floor wet. Finding nothing she groaned and went into the kitchen and her eyes brightened. “There we go.” She said, walking over to the black microwave. She pressed the open button and the door popped, putting Princess inside. “Umm… Okay, now….” She looked at the numbers. Rachel punched in five minutes and pressed enter. She went into the living room and sat on the couch.

After about a minute she heard a loud, ‘KAPOP!’ type of noise. She wondered into the kitchen and fainted.

After a minute on the microwave, the dog had exploded.

A week later, the woman went to court and sued the microwave company— and won, because the microwave did not have a label saying ‘Do not put pets inside’.

Now, this is why all microwaves have that label.

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I know it five or six pages long, but I think I did better.

 

[FusionSonicX]

Damn Rachael was stupid... I thought that would be common sense not to put a dog in the microwave. Oh well...

This is interesting... keep it up...!

 

[lucarioXD]

urban legend is kinda intersting

 

[Yami Ryu]

Actually this sounded retarded. I mean it could have been drawn out to something, but no, it was basically three paragraphs. And even I know that's too short to be a chapter. And by normal standards it'd be too short to be a one shot. There was already a movie called Urban Legends btw.

The first: Short, scripty, descriptionless, need to read Advice for Aspiring Authors.

And your second ... is just pathetic :/ not that a woman would be stupid enough to do so- but I mean you describe her doing her previous hair, yet not what she saw.

HM. Still short, scripty, and rushed and description is disappearing where it's needed.

 

[nashie1]

During the poodle you switched tenses briefly... Good concept just not executed properly. Its too short.