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Velkyn Valley *LSU accepted*

Kawaii Kyuubi Kitsune

Kawai Nogitsune
This is not my best RPG, so don't expect the plot to be very good at all. I just hadn't made an PG for a while thus felt the need to.

Velkyn Valley

The hidden valley of Velkyn. Discovered by the two young dragons (Dragonair to be precise), Quarth and Sanye, them being brother and sister. As they found it, there was little special about the over grown landscape apart from it being devoid of humans, or even other pokemon, and the nature of it existing outside the normal laws of space... But that was more than enough to keep their interest. They were the kind of dragon that lusts for peace, the kind that often forced peace upon others. With no others there peace was ensured.

They gave little thought at first to the way the valley existed outside the normal rules. Over time they spent more and more time together in it, tending to the land and changing it as they desired. They had no reason to be in the outside world apart from to find mates, but that looked more and more impossible given the way humans hunted down their kind.

They both grew into magnificent Dragonite there, alone and isolated from the rest of the world. Hundreds of years past, perhaps even thousands, they didn't care for the exact number of years. The scenery developed from its old overgrown greenery, to massive fields of carefully arranged flowers, laid out so there would be a magnificent display anytime of the year as well as more than enough berries to feed an army, let alone the two dragons. It became easy to maintain, though they were never happy with the way the single valleys river ran or the positions of the lakes no matter how much they changed the two, easy enough for them to have plenty of time to think about how the valley could exist.

It was easy to find the basic reasons the place was hidden. It looked from the inside to be accessible by air, but that was an illusion. Powerful, unpredictable winds made it impossible for even a dragonite to fly out, and from the outside it would appear the valley didn't even exist where it should of. In fact the entrance the dragons came in through was via a deep underground cave network that, calculating from how far they traveled, should of led them out in to an actual human settlement. Defining how two very different places can exist in the same location is much easier for dragons than humans, they see it as rare instead of weird, but never say why to anyone else.

With all figured out, and nothing to do but shift the course of a river, plus creating lakes, it is understandable that Quarth and Sanye started to get bored. They started spending time back in the cave network, widening tunnels and making new ones, all the time trying to not think about what they knew they would do next. The joy of keeping the peace can only be had if there were obstacles hindering it. They knew they would just be asking for trouble.

They sent out the word about the secret of the valley of Velkyn far and wide, inviting all whom wish to have a new home to come, with only the rule that those who come must live with honor. It was cruel of them not to give the specifics of what they meant by honor, but they couldn't of said if they wanted to. Details like that can be made up on the spot. Even in good times the offer of a land with plenty of food and no predators would attract many of the pokemon who usually are prey to others, but with the pressures of expanding human settlements turning up such an offer is almost unthinkable. Of course the invite was also sent to those pokemon that hunted others too...

The long perilous journey to Velkyn certainly would put off those who didn't have a good reason to go. Herds that tried tended to only have a couple of member make it all the way, but the offer of freedom from predators was good enough to attract them anyway. For the predatory pokemon the decision to go is a much tougher one, those in packs tend to already have decent enough territory to take a risk by going on the word of two dragons, but still there are always some who'd take such risks. The honor thing certainly sounds like a potential problem.

Quarth and Sanye wait in anticipation for the chaos to start, feuds between gangs of herbivorous pokemon are fun to stop, but forcing any form of honor into the predator/prey system... Well, it depends on who the system benefits, and that'll be decided by whom deserves the most.

Uncertainty awaits those who come, is the risk worth it for you?

Sign up Form:
Name: (Creative and unique names are a good idea, but not needed)
Gender: (If applicable)
Species: (Species of pokemon)
Description: (Usually this section only covers appearance of a character, but think of other distinguishing features pokemon would pick up on. Scent, fur/skin texture, etc...)
Personality: (How your character acts)
History: (Optional unless told otherwise)
Other: (Anything else of importance that doesn't fit in other sections)

Sample RPG: (Only if you want to make it easier for me. If you don't do it, I'll have to search the forum for your posts)
Note:
*Quarth and Sanye are not player characters, do not request to use them. Playing other dragon type pokemon is acceptable but please think carefully before doing so.
*Quarth and Sanye are powerful dragons, they would have to be to even consider doing what they are doing. This does not mean they are wise, intellegent, cunning, or unbeatable. It just means you should expect to have an extremely difficult time against them with a normal sort of advantage (Like type advantage), while you'd realistically need a very unfair advantage to beat them.
*Multiple characters are allowed, but if they are of different evolution chains you will need to write a history.
*In the world of this RPG carnivorous pokemon hunt other pokemon for food, forming a decent food chain. It is thus important to think carefully on how your characters normally fit into this food chain. There are no non-pokemon animals, at least in Velkyn Valley, except the rare fish in the rivers and lakes... though of course fishing would be poor due to how harsh the dragons were in changing the river and lake locations, killing most fish and water plants each time. In time though, the fish population should naturally increase if the dragons settle with things the way they are.
*If you consider romances between characters, please think of how appropriate love relationships are, considering not just the egg groups as just because it's possible doesn't mean it's appropriate or even happens without human intervention (Unless the pokemon is a little twisted).
*I do not hold the belief that all pokemon lay eggs. This should not come up, at least in much detail, in this RPG, but even if it does I will not enforce it in anyway because it is wrong for me to force my views on others. Just don't be surprised if my characters hold my views, though due to having to role play the character's correctly they are likely to be less stubborn and sure on the matter as I would be.

How bunnying is to be handled in this RPG
I do not like my character's to be bunnyed beyond reactions that are certain (Instinctual reactions for example). If you want to bunny someone else's character beyond instinctual, and other such unhelpable reactions, then you'll need to ask them for permission first via PM. This will make traditional battles between pokemon difficult, but I see such battles as very unlikely in this RPG anyway. In nature creatures have methods for avoiding the sort of conflicts that would escalate into long battles like that, thus it is logical pokemon would use similar methods when not dealing with humans.
Try to think of how much energy would be wasted on a full out battle, avoiding powerplaying to give character's unrealistic limits, and how bad it would be to be exhausted and helpless from too much fighting. When against something of about equal power, it'd make more sense to have a quick mock show of strength instead of a full out battle, or to back off till a situation where you have a major advantage that'd allow a quick and easy win.
Character deaths may be unavoidable in such situations if the conflict is caused by predator/prey relationships between pokemon species, though my characters' personalities would make it extremely unlikely that any deaths will be caused by me.

Example Sign up
Name: Kitsune
Gender: Female
Species: Ninetales
Description: Silky soft snow white fur compliments Kitsune's sleek ninetales body, no impurity from her muzzle to the tips of her nine tails at all. The fur goes great with her teeth, the white fangs that are so easy to flourish in any lighting condition just to remind everyone that she has them and that they are sharp. Her pale blue eyes, which always look as though they are gazing through solid objects and into everyone she glances upon their very soul, and her black nose (Plus the black pads on the bottom of her feet, if one gets to see them) are the only things that stand out visually against her fur. If it wasn't for her eyes and teeth she'd look cute and cuddly, but her eyes make other hesitate about even thinking those things.
Her fur may be soft, but underneath, though her shape is normal, her muscles are firm and strong. A slight oder of smoke hangs around her, the smell created when she burns her fur clean, along with a pungent scent the goes with any ninetales, produced so others can recognize her as what she is by scent alone.
Personality: Deceitful and sly, one would think a fox had no sense of morals or honor. But as usual, this gives the wrong impression of Kitsune. Sure she lies, and tricks others to get whatever she wants. Sure she doesn't care if others hate her, or even wish her dead, such things mean nothing for a free spirit like her. The thing is she does have morals, ones she never goes against even if she wants to. She will never kill someone she's toyed with unless they stop being fun. She'll never leave someone crippled. She'll never go against her word.
Often her way of life leads her to be lonely, and she hates nothing more than to see someone betray a friend. Her loneliness is incurable, she takes too much pleasure in being sadistic to make many friends or even keep them long. Her vanity and pride never help matters either, and those things often leads her into violent revenge... even if she prefers to humiliate enemies rather than kill them.
Other: Kitsune can't breath fire. Swallowing too much water has damaged her flame ducts beyond repair and weakened the eternal flame that resides deep within her, the flame that all vulpix and ninetales have that can never go out. She does love the water, and acts as though she's over come her weakness to it. She's deceiving even herself, with her weakened eternal flame and a fire pokemon's need to have a higher internal temperature, she's weaker than ever of ending up with hypothermia if she stays in water too long. Luckily she can still create will-o-wisp by rubbing her tails together, though that only works while they are dry.
Her strength and speed are extremely surprising for a ninetales, as she had to adapt to living without a flame to breath and her other non-physical abilities failed to develop well either. Physical power was the only thing she could train for. Iron tail was the obvious technique to learn for this, and she's mastered many uses for it.

Sample RPG:
Silver flowers gleaming in the light of the full moon, their air born pollen glistening in the crisp night time air. It would have been impossible to walk through the field without walking on the flowers, but the white ninetales, who's light blue eyes glowed in the low light conditions, wouldn't of tried even if it was possible. The flowers felt so nice and soft as they were crushed under her paws.

So this is the Velkyn valley. Nothing too special about it, I'm just glad I ate something decent recently as there looks to be little to eat here at the moment except berries. I really would hate to resort to eating those... perhaps tomorrow more victims will move in to this death trap with so little cover to hide in whatsoever, but for now the night is nearly over and it is time to rest.

As she yawned, the moon light caught her fangs. They looked as if they glowed more than her eyes, though only for a moment. Instinctively she took laying down slowly, even if there were no twigs or anything that could break and make a sound beneath her or anyone around who would care if they did. Soon she was completely on the ground and her eyes slowly closed. Curling up for a more snuggly position, to conserve her high temperature, ripped some flowers from the ground and broke the steams of others. Not that it mattered, being so much hotter than most pokemon, laying there would make the flowers around her wilt anyway, especially when so far from the river.
 
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GoldenHouou

antagoonist
I'll be signing up for this, and I've almost finished my Sign Up, (personality isn't written down but I know what kind of it will be) but... but first I wanted to ask are we allowed to have second characters? If we are, then I'll post the Sign Up for the first one soon, and the other one a bit later. If we aren't, it will take a while while I decide what kind of charcter to use and post the Sign Up a bit later.

At any rate, could you reserve me a spot?
 

Kawaii Kyuubi Kitsune

Kawai Nogitsune
GoldenHouou: Yes, multiple characters are allowed. It is recomended for them to be of the same evolution chain, otherwise you will have to write a history of why they are together. Reserving spots is a bit pointless in RPGs that accept LSU, but I'll reserve you a spot anyway.
 

GoldenHouou

antagoonist
I wrote a history for my character anyway, so it doesn't matter :p And eh, you're right, it is a bit pointless, but I didn't notice the "LSU accepted" in the title. Well I did at some point, but had forgotten it when I posted >_> Anyway, I will be Editing this post with the Sign Ups during this day.
 

Shadowfaith

Shinigami...
Sign up Form 1:

Name: Kali

Gender: Female

Species: Houndoom

Description: Kali looks like any other Houndoom, the usual rack of bones rowing her back, and bone collar encircling her throat. Nothing is really out of the ordinary about this Houndoom, though she does have her unique characteristics, such as emerald green eyes and a coat that shines silver in the moon light. By night she is a silver wonder, by day, your regular Houndoom.

Personality: Kali knows for a fact that to survive, she has to eat meat. But in truth, she despises eating live Pokemon, so settles for eating fish instead of catching land Pokemon. She’s a gentle being, but not at all easy to get along with, she is protective of her friends and territory, and though she hates to kill, she would do so gladly to save those who she loves, expecially her little friend Tiki the Natu.

Other: N/A

Sign up Form 2:

Name: Tiki

Gender: Male

Species: Natu

Description: Tiki, unlike the average Natu, has a bizarre colouring to his feathers, instead of the usual green; he appears to be stark black, excluding the red and yellow patterns and tail feathers. He says that this is because he was saved by Kali, but he was young when she had found him, and Kali lets him think that this is the reason, in truth she had found him as he was, and his odd colouring goes unknown to even her.

Personality: Childish and naïve, Tiki is just a child in his Pokemon year and would believe almost anything he is told. He is forever asking questions about his and Kali’s past as well as odd things such as ‘what happens when things don’t work’, of course he is asking, what happens to things when they die. He doesn’t understand the world and its many mysteries, and so depends on Kali to answer them for him.

History: (Kali and Tiki)

Kali had been wandering the forest when she first came across Tiki, battered and bruised lying upon the blood drenched floor of the forest. It seems he had fallen from his nest atop a tree or perhaps something had thrown him for the perch, but Kali was sure that the damage had been a result of the fall. She took him in and nursed him back to health as best she could, but as much as she tried to find the parents of Tiki, she failed in her attempts and was forced to allow him to stay with her.

After hearing about this hidden valley, Kali thought it a wonderful opportunity for herself and Tiki to start a new life together. They had much in common, the most important being that they were both abandoned at a very young age by their parents. Kali didn’t know why her parents had left her for dead in the deep forest, but she had never found them again, and never really wanted to.

Tiki had been taken in by this gentle Houndoom for the mere fact that they share dthis sad history.

Other: N/A
 

Kawaii Kyuubi Kitsune

Kawai Nogitsune
Ookami: Nice to see you signing up. Accepted.
 

mewga

Volcano Trainer
Name: Marina

Gender: Female

Species: Milotic

Description: Marina is a shiny, otherwise a normal average Milotic. A blinding shine comes from her body whenever she breaks the surface of the water, which she does occasionally, despite how shy she is. Her skin is soft and smooth despite her being anphibious. She smells like perfume, and it is extremely hard for her newer friends to beleive that she evolved from a shabby, ugly, and incredibly stupid little pink feebas.

Personality: Highly intellegent, and can figure out a complicated math question in her head in about thirty seconds. No alakazam, but faster than most humans *cougheinsteincough*. Unlike most Milotics, who are over-proud and are braggers, Marin, who is arguably the most beautiful of all of them, is shy and only comes close to true friends, which is really hard to do, unless you want to dive in to the water and go to her underwater cave hideaway, where there is a large collection of valuable jewels that Marina doesn't care about.


Other: N/A
 
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Sign up Form:
Name: Grandy

Gender: male

Species: Charmeleon

Description: Grandy is your average Charmeleon except for a few color alterations. His scales have a reddish shine to them, except for his right arm which is coal black. This comes from saving an old friend from a lava pit. His eyes are full of compassion, they are a robin's egg blue. He doesn't like to kill the innocent, so he keeps his claws unsharpened. His tail flame is coal blackk like his arm, but it was like that from birth.

Personality: Grandy is very nieve and childish when you first meet him. He is very curious, so he often wanders to places he shouldn't and hear things he shouldn't. This doesn't seem to bother him much though, because, as long as it isnt about him, he blocks out what he heard.

After you get to know Grandy, however, there is a switch in his personality. He suddenly becomes very caring, protective, and lyoal. It is outside of his ablity to betray his friends, so he couldn't do it if he wanted to. This is how he got the burned arm, from his loyality.

History: Grandy was outcast from his family when he was born because of his black flames. When he left, a Pidgey name Ricardo became friends with him. The two traveled through the regions together. They were at a volcanoe, Mt. Chimney (sp?) to be exact, when something bad happened. Ricardo, who had a broken wing from flying into a tree, fell off of Grandy's head and into the lava. Grandy, still a Charmander, tried to pull him out. He was unable to at the time because he wasn't strong enough. It was during this period that his arm got singed black. Anyways, to get Ricardo out of the lava, Grandy evolved into a Charmeleon and pulled him out.

Grandy attempted to nurse Ricardo back to health, but he died. About 6 months later, the message for Velkyn Valley came and he desided that that is what Ricardo would of wanted and went.

Other: Grandy breathes black fire.

Sample RPG: (I'll be using first person POV.)
"I wondor what will happen today." I said to myself as I wandered through the flower fields. As I continued along, I soon found something strange. It was a Ninetales laying in a field of flowers. I walked up to her and started talking to it. "Whats your name?" I asked her, I could tell by her body structure that she was a female, first as I prepared to sit down.

"..." she didn't reply. I couldn't tell that she was sleeping.

"Ok, you don't have to answer that. Can I pet your fur, it looks so soft?" I asked her next. I was looking like an idiot, but I didn't know that.

"..." once more, she didn't reply.

"I'll take it as a yes." I said as I gently stroked her fur a few times before asking another question. "Hey, can you talk?" I finally asked. I mover around to attempt to face her. I then noticed that her eyes were closed. "Oh, your sleeping. Sorry for bothering you. Goodbye." I said standing up and walking away, trying to find who to play with next.

(I hope I wasn't bunnying. The "..."s represented your sleeping, and you said SLEEPING in a flower field.)
 
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Makenzie

Guest
Sign up Form:
Name:
Yuzuki
Gender: Female
Species: Kirlia
Description: Being a shiny pokemon, her blue skin shines in the daylight. Staring at Yuzuki from a distance will seem like she isnt there, for she has mastered the techniques of a ninja. Usually eating berries or meditating, strong psykonetic wave can be sense from over five miles away depending on Yuzuki mood. Nice, kind, thoughtful, she dances galliantly across the flower field for its the only thing that can soothe stress to her. Just watching Yuzuki as the sun ray beat slowly over her is one amazing sight no one will ever imagine a Kirlia would look. Yuzuki one day wish to evolve.
Personality: Yuzuki is usually kind and usually carefree when it comes to just dancing across a flower field, but when taunted or outraged, using her psykonetic energy can be devastating. Cunning and wise, when it comes to problems or battle, Yuzuki always finds her way around things and sometimes turns the table around for her advantage.
Other: Despising trainers for the destruction of her family since she was a ralts, she wonders restlessly in the flower field in search of a way that will make her stronger. When in contact with a trainer, she will attack or flee. The memory of her family being destroyed by trainers will scar her forever.
 

Diljabar

Life sucks, man.
Sign up Form:
Name: Frozone

Gender: Male

Species: Snorunt

Description: Frozone is the coolest of all Snorunt, pun intended. Not only is he popular, his body temperature is 15 degrees below that of most Snorunt. His parka, which is green, he wears tight around his body. His teeth are whiter than the whitest snow and his eyes are as green as grass. However, he knows evolution will come soon; he feels it in his bones...

Personality: Frozone is probably the nicest Pokémon you'll ever meet. Glad to lend a hand, he gives aid to any Pokémon who ask for it. His intelligence is through the roof, but he processes it a bit too slowly to be much good. He once was nearly killed by an angry Delibird and he didn't realize that he could use Mist and run away; he just stood there like a deer in the headlights. Only when a friendly Graveler showed up did Frozone realize that he could get away, but the Graveler was able to scare away the Delibird with Rock Throw before Frozone could react. He hasn't seen the Graveler since.

History: Although Frozone's lived in the mountains just south of Velkyn Valley all his life, he never knew it was there until now. His curiosity got the better of him and he decided to find this hidden valley, no matter the perils. His slowness in intelligent processing may be dangerous, though…

Other: His low body temperature may be a good opportunity for Kitsune to rekindle the fire within her, ice's weakness to fire being the perfect candidate for some training…

Other RPs: Essence of the Elementals, the seemingly failed Vulpix's Steam Café.
 
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Name: Sapphire
Gender: female
Species: Eevee
Description: Has light brown and white fur, a scruffy textue to it around her tail and tips of her ears. One of Sappire's eyes is a deep blue color, whole the other is pitch black. Sapphire's tail and both of her ears are chipped.
Personality:Sapphire is not your typical friendly, outgoing Eevee. She is, for the most part, very shy and quiet. Day in and day out she keeps to herself, trying her hardest not to come in contact with any other Pokemon. If she does ever spot a Pokemon in the same area as she was in, then she would either hide, or just run away.
History: Sapphire grew up alone by herself in the Viridian Forest, after she lost her family to a forest fire. Usually this would put a dent in a Pokemon's life, but it only bothered her for a couple of days. Later on she just shook it off and reminded herself that her family would want her to live in happiness. So she started making friends, and lots of them. Almost everybody she met would instantly become her friend, except for one. A Mightyena she met in the forest. As soon as the Mightyena noticed her, he attacked. Sapphire managed to escape with only a chipped tail and chipped ears for physical. But her mental condition was much worse. After that she had gone into her den and stayed there up until now. She was afraid at any Pokemon that would come near her, and either attacked them out of fear, or hid deeper within her den.
Other: Sapphire owns a silver cresent moon necklece charm that she wears and never takes it off. She had found it on night when she wandered off from her family, when she was only two weeks own. She had stumbled ontop of a large boulder on a hill and came upon the cresent moon there, glowing in the full moon above. She also heard a voice from the charm, in which shes never told anybody before. It told her to take the crsent moon and always wear, never taking it off, and, one day, she would become a strong, bold, Umbreon.


Ok there it is. I hope I'm accpeted. If there is something wrong with my sign-up, then please tell me, just don't yell at me like the last person did, please.
 
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Kawaii Kyuubi Kitsune

Kawai Nogitsune
I feel I should make certain details about this RPG clearer, and these points will be also added in the notes section of the plot post. In the world of this RPG carnivorous pokemon hunt other pokemon for food, forming a decent food chain. It is thus important to think carefully on how your characters normally fit into this food chain. There are no non-pokemon animals, at least in Velkyn Valley, except the occasional fish in the rivers and lakes... though of course fishing would be poor due to how harsh the dragons were in changing the river and lake locations, killing most fish and water plants each time. In time though, the fish population should naturally increase if the dragons settle with things the way they are.
Also everyone should think of how appropriate love relationships are, considering not just the egg groups as just because it's possible doesn't mean it's appropriate or even happens without human intervention (Unless the pokemon is a little twisted). Finally I don't believe all pokemon species would lay eggs like they do in the games, though this point is unlikely to come up in this RPG and I will not force it upon others... merely Kitsune will likely argue her view, which is similar to mine, if the subject is mentioned around her.

Mewga: Sorry, your sign up is rejected. Your character's personality is basically a Mary Sue type and your past RPGing has been far below par.

Damian the Duck: Your skill at RPGing is below what is required for this RPG. Your sign up is also short and lacks detail. Sorry, you are not accepted.

Makenzie: Looking through the few posts you have made RPGing in the past and looking at your sign up, I have found that you do occasionally make a grammar error and that some things you write could be worded a little better. I assume you are only beginning at RPGing, if so you are certainly doing well so far. You are accepted, and I compliment you on using a name I have no idea the meaning of, thus can't comment on it's relevance to the character.

Diljabar: Sorry, your sign up makes little sense in some parts (Like I can't understand how an ice type can rekindle the flames within Kitsune), it lacks detail in the sections, and your skill at RPGing is of a questionable quality. You are rejected.

Tottoko Hamutaro: Since you have not RPGed on these forums before I will have to ask you for a sample RPG. I would also suggest you work on improving certain details in your character's personality and description. I'd like you to better explain what you meant in your description by 'chipped', and though your description does still look short, it is understandable considering the fact you are describing a pokemon. I can't justify forcing you to describe scent or fur texture, let alone use more complex descriptive terms, even if it would look much better if you did. As for your personality, it's a bit clumsy describing what your character used to act like and now acts like, and I'd suggest cutting out past behavior altogether and just extending current personality with an explanation of her inner thinking that causes her to act as she does.
I have a good feeling that you will be a good RPGer, but since I have make a judgment on whether you are accepted or not on what I see in the sign up, not gut instinct, you will have to edit before I can accept you. Sorry if I've piled a lot on you to do, but there is plenty of time to do it in.

Note: Those who have been rejected may still edit their sign ups to try to get in. Those who I don't believe can RPG well enough should do a sample post of their character seeing Kitsune curled up, sleeping, in the middle of a field of flowers and their reaction to that. Remember, I do not like bunnying beyond simple instinctual reactions and other such things a character can't help in RPGs I am in. I shall work on how battles should be handled in an RPG with those restrictions and edit those details into a new section in the plot post tomorrow.
 
Thats what I get for trying to do it in half an hour before school. I'll go back and edit it.
 
Ok I am going back to edit mine too. (later on though, like 4:30 or 6)

Oh, and heres one of my rp samples from PC:

RunningPaw gazed at the dart like object he had just taken out of Myuu and placed on the grass. It had a tube attached to another tube with a handle like object on it. 'This is..'


"Now RunningPaw, today is the day I am going to teach you about humans and the objects they posses."

"Cool cool!!" RunningPaw bounced up and down and pounded the ground eagerly with his front paws.

Winder laughed "Yes, yes. We just have to make sure we are very careful" Thye both were currently in a clearing just outside of Viridian City. RunningPaw was peaking out of the bushes eagerly while Winder sniffed the area around them. "Ok RunningPaw, now follow me" Winder slipped silently along the dark alley ways while RunningPaw followed, his paws thumping almost silently against the hard stone ground. After a while of trotting silently along, they reached a huge white builder. It was almost of oval shape and had a huge white and red ball ontop of it. "Ok RunningPaw, this is the first place to know. This is where the sick or injured Pokemon go to get better."

"Oooo" RunningPaw gzed up in awe at the huge building.

"Now follow me" Winder said quietly while he and RunningPaw trotted to the side of the white building. Another building was next to it, making a medium sized alley way from them to walk through. Winder stopped shortly in the middle of the alley and sniffed the air. "Over here" Winder whispered as he motioned toward a cardboard box that was on its side and opened. RunningPaw eagerly ran over to where Winder was and stopped beside him.

"Whats inside?? Whats inside??" RunningPaw asked with curiousity. Winder flicked his tail once to silence him and then he stuck his head into the box. A few moments later, Winder's head came out of the box. In between his teeth was a tube like object. "Oo! What is it??" RunningPaw asked, thumping his front paws on the ground in anticipation.

"This..is a syringe" Winder said while still holding the syringe in between his teeth. "It an do as much as save a Pokemon's life with the right kinda junk in it, or whatever the humans use..But...." Winder placed the syringe down at his paws and held his head up, his seriosu gaze locking onto RunningPaw's curious one. "If used in the wrong way...it can be deadly"


RunningPaw continued to gaze in shock at the Myuu. "I-I don't know..." RunningPaw stuttered to Vanyx. "B-but I.....I think we have to.....arrRRG!!" RunningPaw yolwed out in frustration. He really had a hard time doing this, let along going through with such a dangerous mission with Myuu, the legendary, and his crush, if she even accepted. RunningPaw crouched down on his stomach and put his front paws over his face. His tail and ears drooped. "I-I think we have to...have to go to....the human land in order to save her Vanyx.."


It was a post about the past of my Umbreon chracter, RunningPaw, learning about the ways of the humans from his mentor, Winder.

And sorry my sign up sucks >.> They always do anyways. Its like something is holding me back in making them and I just can't describe what it is...
 

Diljabar

Life sucks, man.
I made some improvements to mine. My EofE sign-up was my best and I play RPs better than I sign-up for them.
 

Kawaii Kyuubi Kitsune

Kawai Nogitsune
Damian the Duck: Nice to see that you are willing to try again. You've managed to improve the details of your sign up a lot, though now the only problem is with your sign up. You should work on having more detail in your posts, also you should be careful about you assumptions as for all you know Kitsune could have been a very light sleeper and woke up at your character's first word, even a moderately light sleeper would of woken up and bit your character's hand if stroked. You are not accepted, but not technically rejected either, you are boarder line and will be accepted only if this RPG doesn't get ample sign ups better than yours.

Tottoko Hamutaro: Your sample might look decent in length, but you rely on two character's talk with each other, which will be impossible for you to do with only one character in this RPG. You either need to sign up a second character or work heavily on improving describing things in more detail. Either way, I would suggest you start writing a sample RPG from scratch.

Diljabar: ... using most of the personality section describing an event in your character's past is really a bad idea. I should of pointed out earlier that the last sentence in your character's description is also out of place, as well as the fact your other section seems like a suck up thing. I never looked at your previous sign ups to determine your skill at RPGing, I searched for rthe RPGs and you didn't do too well in those.

I've decided I probably should do a sample RPG myself, as it is hardly fair for me to be asking it of everyone else when I haven't done one.
 

Diljabar

Life sucks, man.
What should I do to improve? The RPs I've signed up in were by newer people with no prior experience creating RPs, so I've never been in one by a seasoned professional, like enflamedsteelix or something. Can you train me to improve?
 

Kawaii Kyuubi Kitsune

Kawai Nogitsune
Diljabar: Asking for training to improve is a very unusual step, though not a wrong one, but I might be the wrong person to ask to train you due to how impatient I am. Still, I have nothing better to do at the moment, so if you contact me over AIM I can try.
 

E-102 Gamma

MUHAHAH!!!!
1st Character

Name:Iron

Gender:Male

Species:Aron

Description:

Iron eyes are a deeper blue than the normal light blue eyes of an Aron,he has a slightly smaller head with a shard of the frame missing from the right side of his head.
The usual rounded spike on his back is missing,leaving a small,volcano shaped,jagged circle instead.
He has a more greyish colour to him,and he has a pale grey mark on his forehead.
His underside has more scales (well,I think thats what they are,tell me if I'm wrong) than a normal Aron would have.

He has a long white stripe running along his back,which makes him mistaken for a mutaint.

Personality:Iron is very grumpy and stubborn at times,showing nothing but pain and anger in his heart,and it would make you think he's a bit mean.
But,that's just a veil to hide his sadness underneath,really,he's just a big old softie with no purpose in life. (well,that's what he claims to have XD)
Being mistaken for a mutant,nobody really comes near him and the only pokemon to actually get a rare smile out of him is Kaos.

History:Iron has basically no past to tell of,he doesin't like to say,exept meeting Kaos when he was a bit younger.
He was walking in the woods when he heard some sobs and sniffles,checking to see who it was,he found a small Shiny Trapinch sobbing,whimpering and crying like no tommorow.
It turned out that the Trapinch had lost his mother and stayed with her while the small group of Flygons,Vibrava and Trapinch,he'd tried to follow the footsteps but lost his way.
Trying to comfort the poor insect-like creature,Iron felt sorry for what happened and decided to take him in as an older brother.
Once the two heard of Velkyn Valley,they relised that perhaps this was the only chance they had to search for the one place they'd been searching for:paridise,and the vowed that noting would stop them from getting there.

Other:N/A

2nd Character

Name:Kaos

Gender:Male

Species:Trapinch

Description:As he's a Shiny Trapinch,Kaos is a lovley aquamarine colour,but,the pupils in his eyes are a duckling yellow,which clashes with his stunning colour.
He has a slightly bigger head than your average Trapinch,and he has one tooth missing from his jaw,a black streak goes across his shell and his underside is red.
A scar in the shape of a "V" is on his forehead and his legs are slightly shorter than normal,one of his eyes is a pink-rosy colour and he has a small part of his shell missing from it's place in a jagged line.

Personality:Unlike a Trapinch,Kaos is a peace colonist,and refuses to let Iron teach him how to fight,basically,he is the opposite of Iron,he's a bit of a soppy young guy,and he acts younger than his appropriate age,making himself seem like an imbarrisment to be with other pokemon.(exept Iron and maybe Jagged)
He's very open minded and likes to be nosy,and will often get into fights.

History:He was born in the desert (as most Trapinch are) alongside his real brothers,but because of his unusal colour and soppy attitude his family called him:'El Loser de Soppy'.
It was usually his dad that gave him a hard time,because of being a bit nicer than other Trapinches he was given a bash on the back for letting prey go. (hence the jagged shard missing from his shell)
On the first winter on his life,the whole family decided to migrate to a different desert only a few days away from their home,and ignored the fact that Kaos's mother was very ill.
Halfway there,Kaos's mother died,and reluctdantly,Kaos stayed behind,because she was the only one of his family who was nice.
Later,he'd left her to rot peacefully,but lost his way,slumping down,he burst into some sobs and sniffs,and a Aron came to find out what the noise was.
Ever since then,the two have become more of a duo than brothers.

Other:N/A

3rd Character

Name:Jagged

Gender:Female

Species:Gengar

Description:Jagged is a big,about the height of a small tree stump Gengar with the usual,pearly-white teeth,but she has a slightly darker tail with bright,blood red eyes.
She has a slightly mishevous look to her face with kind and frendly pupils in her eyes,unlike a Gengar,she has small,soft tufts of purple Gengar hair instead of spikes,indicating that she's a girl.
She has a slightly unseeable,tone of grey skin that goes around her arm like a bracelet and she has a grey scar on one of her ears.

Personality:Jagged is a very mischevous little ghost that loves to play with pepole,but gets sad when they run away,resulting in a sad look in her eyes.
She is a kind hearted soul,but is very stern towards enimies,and will attack them only if the opponent attacks first.
She has a fake voice and an angry giant look to make pepole laugh,but when she relises that she made someone unhappy,the real voice kicks in and she becomes the kind and caring gentle giant again and that's when pepole begin to find out what's behind the book cover.
She is very polite and even will offer you a bit of help.

History:When you ask her about her past she simply says "I am a Wanderer with no purpose in life" like as if it's the sincere truth,but what she's hiding is much more saddening that can be imagened.
She found out about the valley and decided to leave her days of trying to make freinds to show something she could see,the one purpose she really wanted:Was to find friends and live peacefully in paridise.
Other:N/A

RPG sample:

(For Iron,Kaos and Jagged)

Iron sighed and using his mouth,tased the dirt,he knew this place,himself and Kaos had been here an hour ago.

"I knew we should have taken a left back at that lake..." He muttered silentley.

Kaos was on the verege of bursting into tears,his eyes slowly welled up tears and he sniffed a little bit before stopping.
Iron grumbled in Aron language so that Kaos couldin't understand what he was saying,and they were words that shouldin't be used in public.

"I-I-Iron,it's g-g-getting c-c-c-cold--" Kaos stuttered and let out a sneeze.

Iron sighed.

"We'd better find somewhere to rest,you might come down with a cold!" He murmured softly to his little brother.

"B-b-but I'm fine,look at you,you're not coming down with a cold!!!" Kaos protested trying to hold a cough,only to let out a splutter.Iron sighed again and replied.

"No,I'm used to the cold,I lived in a dark cave and I can go on for a long time without getting sick,you on the other hand,lived in the desert,you're not adapted to this type of weather,I don't want to lose you!"

Kaos whimpered,but nodded silently and the two decided to rest beneath a Chesto Berry plant nearby.
A few hours later,Kaos woke up to see two,blood red eyes and a mischevous grin in his face.

"Hello!" The grin hissed happily.

Tailows fluttered away as Kaos let out an ear-piercing scream.
Iron jerked awake to see Kaos,screaming his head off while a Gengar was looking at him in shock with a sad look on it's face.
Iron looked at the Gengar angrily,but the Gengar said something before he did.

"I didin't mean to scare him,I was just saying hello!" A girl's voice came out of the sad mouth.

Iron looked at the Gengar in disbelif,usually the Gengars he knew disappeared without a trace,but this one looked sincere and with a polite voice she asked.

"I'm sorry,will you acept my apoligy?" She asked the now shaken Kaos,the fear in his eyes had gone,and he looked at the Gengar in bewilderment.

"Don't worry,we're not used to seeing a Gengar be so nice,sorry about my little bro,he's just a bit shy,my name is Iron,what's yours?" Iron gave her a rare smile to show his honesty.

"My name is Jagged,and I'm heading towards the valley that so many pokemon are talking about" Jagged saw both eyes widen in Iron and Kaos's eyes.

"We were just heading there as well,your pretty nice,Iron can she join us?" Kaos happily answered.

"Well,just as long as it's okay with Jagged" he turned to Jagged and gave her a wink,she understood.

"I would be delighed to join you!"Jagged winked back,and the tree of them,set out on the narrow path.
 
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Writing an rp sample by scratch? What do you mean by that? And um... I have other rp samples I can give you from my other rps I post in that don't have two characters interacting...
 
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