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Dark Light

So, as my first fic, I wrote an Aron fic. What do you expect?

So this is my first fic, Dark Light, which I've just started writing. This is the torn-apart life story of a carefree female Aron called Coronet, from babyhood to adulthood. The light-hearted material of this story is mainly at the beginning, but it becomes darker with every chapter. Although human characters still play an important part, Pokémon are all the main characters.

Keep in mind that when I start my next fic, I will be updating this one less often.

And just to say, I'm not a professional at writing. If I was, the fic would be much better. I just want to tell the story of Coronet.

DISCLAIMER: Luxray_Masta_211 does not own Pokémon or anything else related to it. This is just a fanfic.

Contents
Prologue - A Diamond in the rough​

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Prologue

A Diamond in the Rough​

Deep into the murky depths of the Kanto region's Rock Tunnel, away from any sign of life, lay a world undiscovered to nearly all. It was the Steel Chasm, a paradise for Steel Pokémon. The entrance was so small humans or bigger predatory Pokémon couldn't get in, and not many Pokémon dared to enter.

The world was almost always quiet, and anything which made any noise quickly quietened down. Any noise could attract the world's biggest land predatory Pokémon, Steelix, which could knock down the entrance and destroy the cave.

The Steel Pokémon that managed to survive there were all very aware of this and so silently got on. At that moment, no quieter could it have gotten to an Aggron named Eisenpower, silently sitting on a heavy boulder on the west side of the cavern. She seemed to be waiting for something.

A few yards away, in front of her, was a grey egg patterned with black and white spots. Sometimes it shook a little, while Eisenpower was watching it carefully.

Then it shook again, this time more violently. A small crack, too faint to see with the naked eye, appeared on its side. Eisenpower gently shoved another Aggron called Acero, presumably to wake him up.

"Wake up," Eisenpower whispered to Acero, "The egg is hatching."

Acero shook his metal head and slowly got onto his hind feet. No sooner had he done that when a Crack! was heard. In the middle of the mess of eggshells there was a tiny, grey Aron, obvisiously female, kneeling on his four little feet. She gave out a small grunt, and stood up.

"Come here," Eisenpower gently called to the Aron, placing a hand forward. "Come to mommy."

The Aron rushed forward and jumped onto the Aggron's clawed hand.

"Speedy little one, aren't ya?" Eisenpower asked, petting the Aron happily. "Your name will be... Coronet."

Please R&R!
 
Well it's a little toos hort, even for a prologue IMO, however, it's good, and theres no errors that I can pick up.
Keep it up

xxxo.
 
At that moment, no quieter could it have gotten to an Aggron named Eisenpower, silently sitting on a heavy boulder on the west side of the cavern
This part sounds weird, it could do without the "no quieter could it had gotten" part.

For you description, you did good, but try to describe the Pokemon more. Other than the shortness, everything else is good.
 
Thanks for the comments! Right now I'm writing Chapter 1, and it should be up by next week.
 
It was very very short. But still good.
 
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