Deep Sky

[Dragon Chimchar]

Hello Dragon Chimchar here with a fan fic that i created when i was bored

Prolouge

The shady limo glided down the street like a cat stalking its prey,with the moon making eerie shadows around it.Then,like a cat suddenly pouncing,it shot into the deserted city square.

The nervous driver slowly and silently emerged from the ominous vehicle,shaking violently,and hurried to the passenger door.As he opened it a large flock of birds fluttered off and a dog stopped barking.Although he was frightfully afraid he grasped the cold doorhandle and slowly hauled it open.

The mysterious,young hooded passenger silently stood up and stepped out into the dark,cold night.

"Thank you Nigel",came the boys horrible,raspy voice,which frightened the already jumpy driver almost to edge of his sanity.

The shady passenger began his long,ardous to the house of his old friend.The friend who got him expelled.The friend who had sent his parents to jail,where they had been driven mad and commited suicide.The friend who was responsible for his sister being sold to child labourers.

Lenard Sky


constructive critisism welcome

 

[Dragon Chimchar]

Chapter 1 Lenard Sky

Lenard Sky was a sly,crafty boy.He was an expert at taking advantage of children who thought he was their friend.He was also very lazy and mischievious and almost all the children at school loathed him.

His only real friend was a foolish,clumbsy boy called Bernald,who followed him like a shadow.Bernald hardly knew anything because he was homeless and lived in Lenards shed.

Both of them sat in the uncomfortable chairs in the school hall,listening to the headmaster,Mr Kentucky,blab on at the school about an escaped prisoner.

"Lucky devil",muttered Lenard.

"Mr Sky!"shouted Kentucky angrily.

"Yes sir?"he said innocently.

"Perhaps you know who the escaped prisoner is?"

"You?"

"No.But since you sent him to jail a year ago,when he was seventeen, I assumed you would know."

"Meville!"whispered Lenard.


Later that day ,as the twelve year olds were let out for break,Lenard and Bernald sat under the gigantic oak tree.

"Lenard,"said Bernald.

"Yes Bern?"

"Whos Meville?"

"Well,Meville Strikes had a poor family but they spent all their money to send him here.He was a loner,old Meville,no one liked him except his sister-Rainbow.
Anyway when we arrived here ,a year ago, he was in his last year.I found out that he had been planning to murder Kentucky and he was expelled and sent to jail.His parents were sent there to but died and ,as for Rainbow, nobody knows where she is."

"Wow!"exclaimed Bernald.


Later,on his way home,Lenard saw a dark cloud of thick black smoke rising from where his house was.Heart pounding,he raced towards the farm,hardly daring to think about Mevilles last words to him.

He reached the top of the hill and collapsed to his knees,tears rolling down his cheeks.He was to late.

 

[Dragon Chimchar]

Chapter 2 Revenge

To Lenard,the screeching fire sirens were distant.All he could hear was Mevilles cruel laughter,echoing around in his head.He continued to lie ,silently crying,in a curled up ball.

Bernald tiptoed over to his miserable friend and tapped him on the shoulder.Slowly he looked up at his clumbsy friend

"It was Meville, Bern,"he said in a quiet,tearful voice.

"But why?"

"I sent him to jail,Bern!He wants me dead!But first he had to make me suffer!So he killed my family.Just like how his family are dead."

Lenard stood up.

"Come on,Bern,unless the fire brigades adopting you."

"But Lenny doesn't anyone care that hes broken out?"

"His familys dead,Bern,no one cares about him except..."

He turned to Bernald with a serious look.

"Rainbow!"Lenard exclaimed."We have to get revenge on Meville for everything.But only Rainbow knows where he is.We need to find her,Bern!Or he'll kill her for telling him that she wasn't her sister,when he was sent to jail.And I know where she is.Shes a child labour worker in Africa in some village called.."

"Tiok village!"shouted Bernald.

"Come on Bern",said Lenard seriously."Lets get our revenge."

"Wait!"cried a voice."WAIT!"

They turned and beamed as they saw Lenards only other friend-Sherman running towards them.

"Come on then.REVENGE!"cried Lenard.

 

[Zephyr Flare]

Have you read the Fanfiction Rules and Advice for Aspiring Authors by any chance? This is a badly formatted rush job that is WAY too short and a mis-understanding of what exactly a Prologue is, seems to be happening a lot of late...

Please go read those two threads then look at your work, bump it up then repost.

Sandra